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Shinra Bansho [Chapter 15]
« on: August 17, 2007, 07:57:47 PM »
I wanted to try a first person story. So here's something I wrote to pass time while having writer's block for Scapegoat.
For your information, the main character's is an original and written from my point of view (I'll probably..shamelessly name the character after myself lol) Also, the rest of the cast this time is bigger. Well, not the whole of H!P but more than two people anyway.

I'm pretty sure the prologue doesn't reveal much about the narrator and there's lots of loopholes. Those would be covered in later chapters. It's the past being told in the present, as if the narrator's story telling. There will be character deaths, so be warned.

---- Prologue (revised) ----

Any form of luster and vigor once in existence had became nothing but a mere memory.

The first attack began 8 years ago in incognito. It took everyone by surprise when death tolls went up at an insane rate within weeks.  Authorities had no way to prevent the gruesome murders happening across the land. They were unable to find the culprit. Yet when they did, even weapons of mass destruction were unable to resolve the issue, but rather it destroyed the city, leaving a majority of the land in ruins. The entire city was in chaos and panic. All who had the chance to escape did just that. And those who stayed were the unfortunate and abandoned.

Prior to the battle, the Earth had already been on the edge of ending. A period finally came when natural disasters swept across the planet, burning down homes, burying countries in land and sea, and leaving craters where cities used to be. The existing government then was determined to come up with a solution for this catastrophe. The remaining survivors were moved into a city within a dome built above the largest piece of land left on the planet, containing even the skies. Technology was advanced; hovercrafts, holograms, you name it. Settling the citizens into their new abode was a breeze, but the officials were ambitious fools when they insisted on finding a way to evolve the human body. They wish to make it possible for humans to become immune to any chances in the ecosystem. But was it possible, to still exist if Mother Nature were to completely abandon us? It was uncertain yet the politicians and scientists were bent on challenging what is deem as impossible. A research organization was then born regardless of strong protests.

The project went on quietly for 9 years. During the first quarter, citywide searches for anyone involved in medicine and science were carried out. The willing and unwilling were dragged into the project and sleepless nights were spent researching on any feasible method of altering a person’s immune system, DNA or even reconstruct the internal structure of the body. Hundreds of experiments were done yet only a handful was proved significant. By the end of the 9th year, there was a breakthrough. The team came to a conclusion for their first phase of the research. Tests were run on apes by sending chemicals and toxins through their blood stream. Many died instantly, but some were able to survive far longer than expected. Those who failed the test were disposed of and the remaining batch was put through more analysis. The experiment was mostly trial and error until a finalized solution was concocted. A new group of test subjects were later called for.

A hundred infants were adopted into the organization in the following year and claimed to be the last batch. Failure was forbidden. Upon the children’s arrival, they were each implanted with a blood red chip into their forearms and later injected with the finalized formula. The red chip glowed occasionally and marked each individual subject as organization’s property. The infants stayed for 2 years before they were released into society to develop. Each child grew up like any other under the care of foster families who were a part of the organization as well. The children however, were oblivious of these facts. Memories of their first 2 years were forgotten as they grew.

15 years later, bizarre killings began. Also dubbed as the first attack. Bodies were found littered across the city; sometimes in masses, sometimes alone. Within a month, there were at least 50 corpses discovered. It was a disturbing sight to find the carcasses. Most of them were horribly severed beyond recognition. Some were torn into pieces with organs left over. No one knew whom or what did the crime, but everyone was terrified of being next. The attacks went on for months but there were no leads to the monstrosity. The city’s population began to fall drastically due to both the dead rate and citizens evacuating the dome to a safer island on the outside.

It did not take long before the perpetrator made their existence known to people. They started hunting even in broad daylight, and soon they were roaming the streets constantly. The military were unable to destroy them completely. They regenerated quickly and any forms of explosives were only able to stun them.

Seeing as it was a lost case to continue fighting, the organization abandoned the research and gathered their test subjects as a last resort. The subjects now being teenagers were kept within a quarantine area. There were at least 60 of them left in the group. Confused and scared, soldiers shot each of them to death. The organization and military were the last to evacuate the city after the massacre, sealing the main exit of the dome after them. The dome now serves as a cage for those who remained in the city who were too late in escaping.

A new civilization had begun, and we are at the bottom of the food chain.
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« Reply #1 on: August 18, 2007, 05:50:32 PM »
Chapter 1 – 化物じゃない!

It’s against logic to claim that someone could come back from the dead. It was ridiculous, farfetched, and impossible! But it happened. It happened to the group of children who were executed, and I was a part of the group.
 
I felt a pulsing sensation run through me when the triggers were pulled. I should have been in pain because I saw blood. Blood stained the marble floor, spilled out of the others who were in the room with me. I saw blood running down between my eyes. All that within split seconds before I lost consciousness, or technically speaking, died. They shot me through the forehead. It was impossible to survive that, right?

Wrong.

I did not know how, but I woke up eventually. I thought it had all been a nightmare after too many sweets at night, but I couldn’t be anymore mistaken. I sat up from where I fell, feeling at my forehead. There’s blood but it had already dried. How long have I been unconscious? I'm not sure. What surprised me was, there’s no wound there, not even a scar. I had no idea what was going on.

I looked around the room. Many corpses lay around me, their clothes soaked in red. Some still had a stupefied expression on their faces. It was too disturbing to look on further. I quickly got up and hurried to the door. Fortunately, it was unlocked. Blindly running out, I failed to notice that the room had a significant number of people missing compared to when we first arrived.

Knowing that I was safely away from the quarantine room, I slowed my pace. The corridor I found myself wandering in had hardly any light. I walked on in the dark, leaning against the wall as a guide. I was beginning to feel that there’s no end to this passage until I felt my shoulder hit a ledge and I stumbled into another room. I heard a gasp when I fell, but it was probably my imagination. I pushed myself up and scanned the room. The computers were still turned on, and so were the table lamps. Seems like whoever used the room was in a hurry to leave. I moved over to one of the stations and took a good look at the files. Under the ‘archives’ folder, I opened a document titled ‘March 11th, 2023’. I took the nearest chair and got comfortable.

The infants had just been sent out to the staffs’ families. The test is going as planned and we’re hoping to see success by the end of the observation period. A detailed copy of the formula would be delivered to you within the next 3 days.

The document ended like that. It is a backup of an e-mail apparently, but that did not answer my doubts about what’s happening. I scrolled down and opened a more recent file. ‘July 9th, 2036’.

We called back for one of our subjects yesterday, with hopes of coming across anything substantial. The subject was close to puberty and we suspect that it might cause a reaction to the chemicals in him. Our speculations were correct, but what happened were the least expected.

There appears to be a mutation in his cells, but we could be wrong. We will continue to observe any changes.


I felt a little uneasy under the impression of mutations. (Video games taught me that mutations were ugly.) Then it struck me. I have been too preoccupied with what happened within the last few hours.. or days even and had forgotten about what had been going on outside. The last I remember, there had been man-eating creatures outside. I’m not sure if they had been gotten rid of but instincts tell me that this building I am in may not be safe anymore. I must get out of here, but first I had to save the files somewhere. They might answer my questions. I started rummaging through the drawers in search of a blank disc. That was when I heard a click.

“Don’t move!”

I heard someone call out, it sounded like a girl. I dropped whatever I was doing and turned towards the voice. It was indeed a girl and she seemed slightly older than me. She held a gun in her hand. I could tell that she was an outsider with her punk like street clothes and even under the dimmed lights and her intense glare, there was something unique about her eyes. They were fierce but unfocused.

“You’re one of them!”

I snapped out of my thoughts. What was she saying? One of what? I tried to take a step forward.

“I said, don’t move!”

She shouted again, arms stretched out with the gun held steadily in her hands. She had no qualms about pulling the trigger at all, I was sure. She was determined to shoot if I attempted to even blink.

“One of whom?” I finally asked, not wanting to die  (again) without some answers.

“Those monsters, that’s what you are!”

She really should stop shouting. The ‘monsters’ may just come because of that. Anyway, I’m not a monster! I was really confused with what she was saying now. I was afraid too. I’m not even 17 yet and already I’ve died once, this was all too scary but I had to live. I’m not going to risk being shot again so I obeyed her previous demand and stayed still on the spot.

“I’m not a monster.” I answered confidently, loud enough for only those in the room to hear which is the two of us.

“Don’t lie! You have the same red glow as them on the arm.”

Red glow? I looked at myself, pretty sure there’s no red glow on me. But I saw it after all. Underneath the fabric of my shirt, the glow was flashing prominently. I rolled up my sleeves and it’s true. Right under my skin was that same glow. I’ve always thought it was just a rash or sore.. but I guess not. I looked up at the girl again.

“That does not mean anything. And I’m human, look! No claws, no fangs!”

I raised my hands and opened my jaws. She was cautious at first, but she lowered her gun and advanced towards me. She grabbed my chin and started inspecting my face, pulling my head side to side and honestly, that fucking hurts. She was about to say something when we both heard heavy footsteps and a low grunt coming from outside.

Naturally, the first thing I thought of was to hide. I quickly grabbed the girl’s wrist and pulled her down behind a desk, covering her mouth with my hands. I released her when she agreed not to shout or shoot. Good thing she had common sense. We slowed down our breathing and restrained our movements as best as we could.

What ever it was outside, it was now in the room and in search of something.
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Re: Shinra Banshou [Chapter 1 : I'm no monster!]
« Reply #2 on: August 18, 2007, 07:05:06 PM »
Ah so the formula that they tested on those infants has caused them to mutate into these monsters. I wonder what it was originally meant to do?

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Re: Shinra Banshou [Chapter 1 : I'm no monster!]
« Reply #3 on: August 18, 2007, 07:08:45 PM »
Have them adapt to and survive climate changes..etc..etc.. basically become a superhuman, in a sense. Too bad it screwed up. Would've been nice if it work, but then there'll be no story to write  :lol:

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« Reply #4 on: August 18, 2007, 07:34:48 PM »
^ True. :lol:

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Re: Shinra Banshou [Chapter 1 : I'm no monster!]
« Reply #5 on: August 18, 2007, 08:03:15 PM »
I wonder if anyone realized who the girl was.

and I wonder who actually read this because I see the number rise but there's no comment ;_; Doesn't matter.. I'll still keep writing it >_>

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Re: Shinra Banshou [Chapter 1 : I'm no monster!]
« Reply #6 on: August 18, 2007, 08:24:18 PM »
I'm guessing the girl is either Miki or Reina, what with the clothes and the glare.

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« Reply #7 on: August 18, 2007, 09:21:11 PM »
Hmmm..

Chapter 2

There goes that nerve wrecking grunt again. It’s like the creature’s mocking me. Laughing at me because I know I’m nothing against it. It was ten times stronger, faster and larger than me. Not to mention ugly. Of course, I have not the slightest of envy towards its ugliness. It even made me slightly nauseas. I’m not sure how much time has passed, but my body’s starting to cramp up. I involuntarily shifted.

Before I knew it, a shadow loomed over us. Us? Oh right, I’ve almost forgotten about the girl who tried to rip my chin off. Anyway, there’s that shadow shaped as a human. But it was definitely no human from what was reflected on the window in front of us.

It had a pair of ominous silver eyes, stood 2 meters tall and hunched over like an ape. Its body appeared to have lost any form of hair and some skin was hanging loosely to the muscles. Its limbs were huge, probably as hard as steel too. It had pronounced fangs instead of teeth and claws. Both were as big as an adult lion’s. Seems like it had the necessary ‘equipments’ of a predator. But from my point of view, it looked like a gorilla went bathing in acid, but that’s really just me.

I felt a tap on my shoulder. It was that girl again. I was too focused on the creature that I kept forgetting she existed. I looked at her, trying to figure out what she wanted. She looked at me as well, then at the creature and placed her gun in my hands. Did she want me to shoot it?! As if she read me mind, she started motioning for me to just run out and pump the humanoid with bullets. I knew it! She was out of her mind. I shook my head and tossed the gun back to her.

She glared at me like a mother to her disobedient child. I wanted to whimper. Smacking me over the head, she turned away from me and held the gun steadily. I inwardly reminded myself that I would attend her funeral if I do make it out alive after this. Just as expected, she jumped out from our hiding spot and started pressing the trigger rapidly. I was watching the entire show from the corner of the table and noticed that all the creature did was stumble backward, stunned. The gun had already run out of bullets by now but the creature was still unharmed. She dropped her gun and stared at the twitching figure.

“It’s not dying!”

She glanced at me with fear in her eyes, nothing like the glare she gave me when she threatened to blow my head to pieces. I looked back at her, equally scared. The creature was still stunned, and the only thing I could think of was to run. Taking this chance, I leaped to my feet and ran, pulling the older girl along. We sped past the creature before it had the chance to recover and sprinted down the dark corridor. I didn’t care if it felt like I was running through an abyss, as long as I didn’t have to be in the same place as that animal, I’m contended.

“Where are we going?”

The girl shouted behind me, trying hard to catch up. I have to admit, she’s a horrible runner. I did not know where we were going either so I chose to ignore her. I tightened my grip around her wrist and continued moving. Suddenly, I heard her scream. You know, I really hated screamers. I turned my head back, thinking that she nearly tripped or something. Yet what I saw only made me push my legs faster. Two silver orbs illuminated in the dark behind us and it seemed to be getting bigger, nearer. I felt like I was in a really twisted Jurassic Park movie. Anyway, I saw an opening in front of us and dodged into it, shutting the twin doors behind us. It seemed like a fire escape. The flight of stairs going down had been blocked by rubbles, probably from an explosion during the assault from the military. The only route now was up, so that’s where we’ll be heading. It was a good thing I didn’t know how many stories the building had.

It took us forever before we reached the rooftop, panting like dogs. The coast is clear, for now. I knelt down on the ground, trying to catch my breath. The girl I had with me looked like she was dying. We were relieved a little too soon, because not long after we had finally calmed down, the door flew open. That animal sure was persistent, and there were two of them this time. They looked like they were hungry. I didn’t have to guess, but the main course were definitely two teenagers served raw. There’s no way in hell that I was going to let that happen though, as terrified as I may be.

One of them kept a close watch on me, but the other was too impatient. Just like an animal, it pounced towards the girl. The heroin in me awoken and I jumped in front of her, taking a direct blow from the creature. And what a blow it was. Instantly, I felt pain surge through my body and I was on my knees in a pool of blood, clutching onto my shoulder. I gritted my teeth and looked to the side. The girl was shocked and stunned by my random act of heroism. I turned and looked back at the two monsters. One of them was chewing on something. Was that my wristband? Under the stress of the injury, I tried to squint my eyes for a better look.

My eyes would’ve fallen off if it were humanly possible to do so. That was my arm it was feasting on! I felt sick again. This was too much for a kid to stomach. It’s not the time to freeze from shock though so I’m just going to tell myself that it’s all a bad dream and I would wake up with limbs again. That didn’t work when the pain wouldn’t go away. Well, escaping from reality was worth a try anyway.

I was slowly growing weak, the world was starting to spin but then it stopped gradually. My right shoulder started to feel numb instead and I was beginning to think that the same thing that happened previously when I was shot was taking place again. But I didn’t have the time to wait and see if my arm would grow back. I tried to get up on my feet again with the help of one arm and it was freaking difficult. The girl snapped out of her petrified state and rushed in to help me up. I led us towards the edge of the rooftop while the two animals were busy playing with my severed arm. I will miss that arm.

“What’s your name?” I looked at the girl that had been with me all this while.

“Now’s not the-“ She attempted to scold me, but I cut her off.

“What is your name?” I repeated my question.

“Reina. Tanaka Reina.” She answered, obviously thinking I’m crazy. Maybe I just am.

“That’s a nice name..” I replied as though the next few seconds were to be my last.

“Do you trust me, Reina?” I continued, trying to look as serious as I could because I was close to determining my sanity. I felt like laughing.

“No.” That wasn’t what I expected to hear in a life and death situation.

“Well, you’d better.” I replied her anyway, taking hold of her wrist with my remaining hand. Before she could ask why, I had already jumped off the ledge and pulling her down with me.

It is official. I am insane.
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« Reply #8 on: August 18, 2007, 11:35:04 PM »
Ahhh she was Reina!!!!
But the other girl?

just another question
all the girls are going to appear?

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« Reply #9 on: August 19, 2007, 12:47:33 AM »
I wonder if anyone realized who the girl was.

and I wonder who actually read this because I see the number rise but there's no comment ;_; Doesn't matter.. I'll still keep writing it >_>
Well, after reading this part:
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there was something unique about her eyes. They were fierce but unfocused.
I figured it was probably Reina. And since she said that "the girl" looked older than her, our protagonist must either be Aika, Linlin or one of the H!P Kids (I'm peronally betting on Aika).

Oh and there are people reading it, obviously, but unfortunately most of them don't post comments.



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It had a pair of ominous silver eyes, stood 2 meters tall and hunched over like an ape. Its body appeared to have lost any form of hair and some skin was hanging loosely to the muscles. Its limbs were huge, probably as hard as steel too. It had pronounced fangs instead of teeth and claws. Both were as big as an adult lion’s. Seems like it had the necessary ‘equipments’ of a predator. But from my point of view, it looked like a gorilla went bathing in acid, but that’s really just me.
Damn that IS ugly.  :bleed eyes:


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I felt a tap on my shoulder. It was that girl again.

...

She looked at me as well, then at the creature and placed her gun in my hands. Did she want me to shoot it?! As if she read me mind, she started motioning for me to just run out and pump the humanoid with bullets. I knew it! She was out of her mind. I shook my head and tossed the gun back to her.

...

she jumped out from our hiding spot and started pressing the trigger rapidly. I was watching the entire show from the corner of the table and noticed that all the creature did was stumble backward, stunned. The gun had already run out of bullets by now but the creature was still unharmed. She dropped her gun and stared at the twitching figure.

“It’s not dying!”
Damn, it's skin must be super thick/tough to be able to withstand getting shot like that. Either they need a more powerful gun or something bladed/pointed to be able to hurt it.



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The creature was still stunned, and the only thing I could think of was to run. Taking this chance, I leaped to my feet and ran, pulling the older girl along.
Considering they don't have any more weapons right now, this is the best course of action since the creature's still stunned.  It won't do them any good to remain in that lab where the creature basically has them cornered.



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“Where are we going?”

The girl shouted behind me, trying hard to catch up. I have to admit, she’s a horrible runner.
Okay, that's definitley Reina. :lol:



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Suddenly, I heard her scream. You know, I really hated screamers. I turned my head back, thinking that she nearly tripped or something. Yet what I saw only made me push my legs faster. Two silver orbs illuminated in the dark behind us and it seemed to be getting bigger, nearer.
Shit, the creature's chasing them! :scared:


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The only route now was up, so that’s where we’ll be heading. It was a good thing I didn’t know how many stories the building had.

It took us forever before we reached the rooftop, panting like dogs.
If the creature follows them there, maybe the girls be able to lure it over the edge of the building.


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That animal sure was persistent, and there were two of them this time. They looked like they were hungry.
TWO??? Crap.


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Just like an animal, it pounced towards the girl. The heroin in me awoken and I jumped in front of her, taking a direct blow from the creature. And what a blow it was. Instantly, I felt pain surge through my body and I was on my knees in a pool of blood, clutching onto my shoulder. I gritted my teeth and looked to the side. The girl was shocked and stunned by my random act of heroism. I turned and looked back at the two monsters. One of them was chewing on something. Was that my wristband? Under the stress of the injury, I tried to squint my eyes for a better look.

My eyes would’ve fallen off if it were humanly possible to do so. That was my arm it was feasting on!
OMGASS! IT RIPPED OFF HER ARM?!?!?  :OMG: :OMG: :OMG:


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I didn’t have the time to wait and see if my arm would grow back.
It'd be a really interesting twist if it did. :yep:



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I led us towards the edge of the rooftop while the two animals were busy playing with my severed arm. I will miss that arm.

“What’s your name?” I looked at the girl that had been with me all this while.

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“Reina. Tanaka Reina.” She answered, obviously thinking I’m crazy. Maybe I just am.

...

“Do you trust me, Reina?” I continued, trying to look as serious as I could because I was close to determining my sanity. I felt like laughing.

“No.” That wasn’t what I expected to hear in a life and death situation.

“Well, you’d better.” I replied her anyway, taking hold of her wrist with my remaining hand. Before she could ask why, I had already jumped off the ledge and pulling her down with me.

It is official. I am insane.
Maybe by some sort of instinct she knows that they'll be okay from the jump (due to whatever those chemicals did to her). If not, then yeah, she's nuts. :lol:

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Re: Shinra Banshou [Chapter 2: I will miss you]
« Reply #10 on: August 19, 2007, 02:13:14 AM »
Oooh, story. XD

Interesting, yay genetic mutations. I suppose the true perpetrators of the mass killings were those ape-ish freakazoids that were the result of early test experiments on apes, NOT the human test subjects. Because, like the protagonist said, they didn't feel particularly different despite the ability to regenerate insanely. XD

Mhm, I can't wait to see what happens. Essentially, they are now more or less alone in a huge dome city with a bunch of murderous, hungry ape creatures who want to chow down on them. There might be a few other people lurking around, I think, so it's interesting to see how you're going to deal with the story. ^_^

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Re: Shinra Banshou [Chapter 2: I will miss you]
« Reply #11 on: August 19, 2007, 02:52:57 AM »
From the ape, I kept thinking Dragon Ball. :O  Then the domed habitat they were living in as Ergo Proxy(anime).  Reading the first few chapters, I feel very worried, seems like there's no hope. :cry:

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Re: Shinra Banshou [Chapter 2: I will miss you]
« Reply #12 on: August 19, 2007, 04:36:42 AM »
@Kreuz_Asakura: Protagonist's an Original, I've mentioned that. :) Because you know, I'm not that cruel to put the girls through tests and have them turn into butt-ugly monsters. XD

Yes, the other girls will make an appearance one by one, or in groups eventually. I don't want to handle too many people at once. The story spans out for a few years actually, and the protagonist would kill herself if she had to face Reina's smacking for a decade Lol.

If the military can't hurt those things, I don't think blades could ;_;

I do hope it's the apes left behind that have been mutating and eating people, but.. that's no fun. Details of the research will be revealed throughout the story. Would be bad if the protagonist mutated, huh? I wonder if Reina is safe even if she survives the freefall.  :shocked:

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« Reply #13 on: August 19, 2007, 04:10:23 PM »
I forgot what I was going to say..

Chapter 3 – 九死一生

There was nowhere to run, so our only other escape was to jump. It was a moment of impulse, really. Whether or not I had considered surviving this, that’s a whole different story. But let’s just keep this little information to ourselves, shall we? Great.

I could feel the wind in my hair and throbbing in my ears. She’s at it again, screaming her head off. But I can’t blame her, who could? We were free falling off a 50 story high building. Since I had the time to think about why the hell there had to be 50 floors, might as well think fast. We were plummeting at an intense rate. Despite being in mid-air, I pulled Reina down to waist level and had her hold on to my body so that I had my arm free. She did just that, squeezing the life out of me at the same time.

Thankfully, this building had balconies on every level. I reached out with my one and only arm and tried to grab onto the ledge of the balcony. I missed the first time. The second. Third. My hand was starting to bruise at the impact. I really wished I had wings now, and it wouldn’t even surprise me if I did. I finally managed to grab hold of the balcony railings, but holding on was harder than I thought. It only took a few seconds before I started losing grip. My fingers were slipping.

Too late.

We were falling again and it was my turn to scream.

. . .

. . .

* Tap tap tap *

I could hear someone typing.

Wait. Typing? Where am I? I stayed still on whatever I was laying on, replaying the previous events in my head. I could feel my leg suffering now from the running before. I remember having my arm torn off, and then we jumped. We didn’t managed to land anywhere and just kept falling.. then I hit something hard and passed out. So shouldn’t we be dead already?

“她醒来了!” (1)

“什么? 我正在忙!” (2)

“那女孩醒了啦,笨蛋! 快来!” (3)

I could hear a commotion going on in the room. Were they speaking Chinese?  I couldn’t really figure it out. I tried opening my eyes, white light flooded my vision and it hurts. Suddenly I was pushed down and had blood drawn from me through a syringe. What the heck?

“What are you doing to me?” I tried to shout, but my voice only came out as a whisper.

“别紧张,抽点血来 研究而已” (4) One of them spoke up when she was done, she sounded a little too happy to me.

“Huh?” So they were speaking Chinese after all. That I could handle. They left me alone after that, so I was able to sit up. There were two girls, both in lab coats but they did not seem like professionals. I noticed that the room resembled a science laboratory, and there were at least half a dozen monitors lined up against the wall.

“<i>Test?</i>“ I replied in the same tongue.

“<i>Oh, you speak Chinese. Yes, tests. We want to know why you’re different from those genetic failures.</i>” Lovely, more confusion.

<i>”Genetic failures?”</i> I asked.

<i>”Ugly man eating things”</i> The other of the two replied, she seemed a little intimidating.

<i>”But I’m not-“</i> Now that I think of it, no point arguing when everyone’s convinced that I’m one of these ‘failure’. At least I’m not held at gun point this time.

<i>”Never mind. Why am I here?”</i> One of the two questions that had been bugging me ever since I regained consciousness. This time I must get some answers.

<i>”Why?”</i> That was not what I wanted to hear.

<i>”Simple! We were cruising along...”</i> Wait, cruising? At a time like this?

“<i>… the city in our hovercraft and doing some surveillance at the same time when suddenly two bodies, you and your friend, fell out from the sky and dented our vehicle. We would’ve thrown you off but we saw that red patch on your arm.</i>” There’s the story with the glow again! This is too unreal. It was like a really bad joke. I ignored the last part of their explanation.

“<i>Two bodies..? Then, where’s the other girl?</i>”  I was on my feet now, eager to know what happened to Reina. The girls didn’t answer me, but shrugged instead.

Speak of the devil; Reina came in the moment I asked about her. She was busy stuffing herself with fried noodles or something. I really couldn’t say anything but stare at her.

“<i>She wouldn’t shut up when she woke up.</i>” The taller of the ‘scientists’ started talking.

“<i>Not until we gave her some food.</i>” Her partner added, pointing at the bowl that Reina held possessively.

“<i>Yeah, there goes 2 days supply of beef!</i>” The two started an argument of their own about groceries and I really couldn’t bother being involved. I turned back to Reina.

“What were they saying?” She just had to ask, didn’t she?

“Wish I knew.” I avoided eye contact, hopefully she didn’t see through my lie.

“...” She pushed past me and sat down on the foldable bed.

“How’s your right arm?” She looked up at me, more curious than concerned. I wanted to say ‘fine’ but I could hardly feel the presence of my arm anymore. I wanted to cry, but I just couldn’t. This girl was definitely messing with me.

“Oh I don’t know. I don’t have a right arm anymore!” I think we were enemies in our previous lives. No, scratch that. I am pretty sure we were enemies.

“Heh.. You’re lucky I’m just pissing you off instead of shooting you right now.” She was smiling. I don’t see anything funny about pissing off a handicap.

“You jumped a building suddenly and almost had me killed! What were you thinking?! ” Okay, She hold grudges and now she just looks plain scary when mad. I don’t do so well when being scolded. I had to back up a little.

“You’re yelling at someone who saved your life...” I muttered to myself, but damn her hearing was sharp.

“You? Save my life? You don’t try to suicide and pull someone down with you and call it ‘saving’” She really isn’t getting it. I hated to be blamed when it is not completely my fault, so time to be brave.

“Really? Just who was it that decided to shoot those things and catch their attention?” I spoke louder than usual, trying to remind her of earlier, which I suspect that she’d forgotten.

“And who was it that I lost my arm for, huh?” I glared at Reina, clutching my right shoulder to make a point. I could see her lowering her head and looking away. I hope she’s feeling guilty, because she should. I would not allow my confidence to falter now.

“Tch..I-I’m getting out of here!” That’s it? She’s running away? I wanted to say some more but one of our saviors beat me to it.

“You can’t leave.” She said sternly, grabbing Reina by the shoulders.

“And why not?” That stubborn girl spat, her patience was running low.

“Because we’re surrounded.” The taller one replied, pointing at one of the monitors on the wall.

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1 - "She's awake!"
2 - "What? I'm busy!"
3 - "That girl's awake, stupid! Come here!"
4 - "Relax, just drawing some blood for tests."

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Re: Shinra Banshou [Chapter 3: Brink of death]
« Reply #14 on: August 19, 2007, 10:17:21 PM »
Cool. I was lack for words when I started reading it. Very deep and interesting. Please keep this one up.  :D

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Re: Shinra Banshou [Chapter 3: Brink of death]
« Reply #15 on: August 20, 2007, 06:09:36 AM »
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There was nowhere to run, so our only other escape was to jump. It was a moment of impulse, really. Whether or not I had considered surviving this, that’s a whole different story.
Ok, that seals it. Nuts it is. No choice or not, it's still nuts.  :yep:


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Thankfully, this building had balconies on every level. I reached out with my one and only arm and tried to grab onto the ledge of the balcony. I missed the first time. The second. Third. My hand was starting to bruise at the impact. I really wished I had wings now, and it wouldn’t even surprise me if I did. I finally managed to grab hold of the balcony railings, but holding on was harder than I thought. It only took a few seconds before I started losing grip. My fingers were slipping.

Too late.
I'm surprised that she didn't mess up her (remaining) shoulder grabbing onto the balcony like that. :o



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* Tap tap tap *

I could hear someone typing.

Wait. Typing? Where am I? I stayed still on whatever I was laying on, replaying the previous events in my head. I could feel my leg suffering now from the running before. I remember having my arm torn off, and then we jumped. We didn’t managed to land anywhere and just kept falling.. then I hit something hard and passed out. So shouldn’t we be dead already?
WTF? She should be dead, assuming that they didn't hit anything else that would have broken their fall. So what's the deal then?


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“她醒来了!” (1)

“什么? 我正在忙!” (2)

“那女孩醒了啦,笨蛋! 快来!” (3)
From the translations, it sounds like she (whoever this is, I'm still guessing it's Aika) is in some type of hospital or laboratory. From the dialogue, it's probably the latter, and she's the subject of some type of study.



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They left me alone after that, so I was able to sit up. There were two girls, both in lab coats but they did not seem like professionals. I noticed that the room resembled a science laboratory, and there were at least half a dozen monitors lined up against the wall.

“Test?“ I replied in the same tongue.

“Oh, you speak Chinese. Yes, tests. We want to know why you’re different from those genetic failures.” Lovely, more confusion.

”Genetic failures?” I asked.

”Ugly man eating things” The other of the two replied, she seemed a little intimidating.

”But I’m not-“ Now that I think of it, no point arguing when everyone’s convinced that I’m one of these ‘failure’.
Failure? But wouldn't that mean that she was SUPPOSED to turn into one of those creatures, or do these people just expect her to turn into one because some others did?

It still doesn't explain how she survived the fall. And where's Reina?



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”Never mind. Why am I here?”

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”Simple! We were cruising along...” Wait, cruising? At a time like this?

“… the city in our hovercraft and doing some surveillance at the same time when suddenly two bodies, you and your friend, fell out from the sky and dented our vehicle. We would’ve thrown you off but we saw that red patch on your arm.”
Oooooooooooooookay. So they're falling off a building...and these Chinese girls (maybe Junjun and Linlin) are "cruising" around in their hovercraft (why the hell would you be cruising in an area that had been previously closed off because of the "creature" infestation anyway)... which happens to break their fall and keep them from dying. And now they're in some lab being studied. :dunno:


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“Two bodies..? Then, where’s the other girl?”  I was on my feet now, eager to know what happened to Reina. The girls didn’t answer me, but shrugged instead.

Speak of the devil; Reina came in the moment I asked about her. She was busy stuffing herself with fried noodles or something. I really couldn’t say anything but stare at her.

“She wouldn’t shut up when she woke up.” The taller of the ‘scientists’ started talking.

“Not until we gave her some food.” Her partner added, pointing at the bowl that Reina held possessively.

“Yeah, there goes 2 days supply of beef!”
2 days supply? Nice one Reina. :lol:



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“Tch..I-I’m getting out of here!” That’s it? She’s running away? I wanted to say some more but one of our saviors beat me to it.

“You can’t leave.” She said sternly, grabbing Reina by the shoulders.

“And why not?” That stubborn girl spat, her patience was running low.

“Because we’re surrounded.” The taller one replied, pointing at one of the monitors on the wall.
Wait, the lab is still in the area where these creatures are? Why the hell didn't these scientists evacuate??? :OMG:

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Re: Shinra Banshou [Chapter 3: Brink of death]
« Reply #16 on: August 20, 2007, 06:30:38 AM »
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This chapter probably confused the hell out of you, eh? :D Me too   :angry:

To clear things up, lets say.. there's two mad scientists that are interested in the mutants, left to survey the city's conditions and by pure chance and luck picked up Reina and friend. Stuff like that. Oh god, I hate chapter 3.

And it's not Aika D: Not! >_< lol

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Re: Shinra Banshou [Chapter 3: Brink of death]
« Reply #17 on: August 20, 2007, 07:29:57 AM »
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To clear things up, lets say.. there's two mad scientists that are interested in the mutants, left to survey the city's conditions and by pure chance and luck picked up Reina and friend.
Well, they'd HAVE to be mad to deliberately stay in a situation like this. Hopefully they've got means to protect themselves.


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Oh god, I hate chapter 3.
Meh, don't worry too much about it. It wasn't that bad. Not as confusing as other stories that have been posted here in the past.


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And it's not Aika D: Not! >_< lol
EHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH?!?!?!? :OMG: :OMG: :OMG:

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Koharu?

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Re: Shinra Banshou [Chapter 3: Brink of death]
« Reply #18 on: August 20, 2007, 09:09:23 AM »
First..
1. They're not really scientists, at least not (ex-)government hired scientists.
2. The city's been abandoned so technically once the city is sealed, it's possible for anyone still trapped within to venture anywhere.
3. They are failures because they have turned into those fugly things. The protagonist is different from these failures as mentioned, because she's not YET turned.

Second~
No, not Koharu. I don't think I'll put Koharu or Aika in this fic.. they seem too hyper/happy to be thrown into a world like this ;_; But I don't know.. this is only a Reina Arc, so there's still LOTS of time to decide which characters to add in the future.
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Re: Shinra Banshou [Chapter 3: Brink of death]
« Reply #19 on: August 21, 2007, 01:39:09 AM »
So then the protagonist might not even be an H!P girl? That's a bit of a twist.

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