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Re: More Than One Story... [That's When I Love You]
« Reply #160 on: August 14, 2008, 02:30:14 AM »
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Random TakaGaki raburabu moments!
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Re: More Than One Story... [That's When I Love You]
« Reply #161 on: August 14, 2008, 03:14:37 AM »
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@KonaKage: Haha yes, things are kinda complicated at the moment. Love polygon, that’s a good term. Maybe you could write a fic based on that title. Can you tell I’m hinting for you to write something soon :P
You'll be happy to know that I'm posting a new story then :D It's not the Love Polygon but I might write that some other time  :dunno:

I colpletely agree with JFC on this story.  :oops:
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Re: More Than One Story... [That's When I Love You]
« Reply #162 on: August 16, 2008, 02:01:43 AM »
I finally got my laptop back from repairs *huggles it to death... but not to much cause she doesnt want it break again ;_;*

hamz the last two stories you've written have been nothing short of awesome and amazing. 

You're latest one "Thats When I Love You" is proof enough that you are the true winner! Man you're awesome! I really liked it... i think it might be my fave story from you thus far. Awww Takagaki Raburabu... gotta love it man... gotta love it... gotta love you! The way it's expressed an everything... it's all  :wub: :wub: :wub: :wub: :wub: :wub:

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Re: More Than One Story... [That's When I Love You]
« Reply #163 on: August 18, 2008, 05:01:34 AM »
WTH!.. i wasnt able to read it earlier..  :OMG:

well anyway. i love this~ wootwoot!  :mon blowhorn:
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Re: More Than One Story... [That's When I Love You]
« Reply #164 on: August 29, 2008, 07:41:04 AM »
I have never tried writing this pairing so I’m not confident about portraying them well. If you liked this, thank stefy since she suggested it. If you don’t like it…urm…blame her too. Just kidding! :mon evillaff: When she brought up the possibility of these 2, I realized they could look cute together. In fact they are. So yep, here it is.


Sky Blue
 
 
I ignored what was going on around me and concentrated on retrieving a book from my rather deep locker. Being somewhat vertically challenged, it wasn't an easy task reaching all the way into the back of the metal cupboard positioned slightly above my eye level. I remained oblivious to my surroundings until the shrill and jarring voices of two people penetrated my eardrums even with my head almost completely buried.
 
"Did you hear?!"
 
Bingo! Dumping the bulky textbook into my backpack, I spied from the corner of my eye, the animal print umbrella collecting dust at the edge of the boxy compartment. Grabbing it on a whim, I dropped it in after the paperback. Slinging the heavy bag over my shoulder, I checked the schedule stuck on the inside of my locker door for the venue of my next class. Unsurprisingly, the same annoying voices drifted into my ears yet again.
 
"Of course, it's like only the biggest news around at lunch."
 
The gossiping carried on as the pair of girls wearing flamboyant cheerleading outfits rambled on about the latest rumors flying about the campus of the middle school. Letting my finger run along the brightly highlighted timetable, I squinted intently to locate 'Great Ideas in Contemporary Physics.' It wasn't a popular subject, and it definitely wasn't well-liked. Nonetheless, I took it voluntarily and even enjoyed it tremendously. Although I didn't wear a pair of thick owl-rimmed spectacles, the lack of it didn't prevent me from getting labeled as a geek. On the outside, I could have easily passed off as any ordinary student in the 1,100 population country school. However, there was one other thing that contributed to me gaining that title - my ability of not forgetting anything after seeing it just once. 
 
"They threw out all the stuff from her locker. It was really a hilarious sight seeing her scramble to get everything back."
 
My fore finger stopped moving horizontally and my entire body froze when I overheard the conversation. No names were mentioned but I knew there was only one person who was regularly subjected to this sort of harsh treatment. Disregarding the classroom issue for a second, I slammed the open locker door shut forcefully. The clang of metal on metal resonated deafeningly throughout the noisy hallway and the commotion caused some of the students scattered about the corridor to stare in my direction. The two girls previously engrossed in their little discussion were abruptly jolted. When they realized that I was the cause of the thunderous noise, they hushed their voices and slinked away hastily, all the while wary of my killer stares. They were smart to remove their ugly faces in the nick of time. Or I would have subjected them to a fate too gruesome to be put in words. 
 
"I have to find her soon."
 
The lesson seemed never-ending and the minutes dragged on like centuries whilst I kept my eyes on the ticking hand of the hanging wall clock. Narrowing my eyes, I willed it to move faster without success. As soon as the melodious tone of the school bell chimed signaling the end of the day, I bolted from my chair and sprinted straight out of the classroom. My earlier plans of staying behind to request for extra assignments clean forgotten as I headed straight for the deserted side staircase where I knew she would be. Upon arrival, I indeed saw her sitting on the third lowest step of the dusty stairs. Hidden in a far corner of the school building, the place was typically deserted and it became our usual meeting place before and after school. It was also her refuge whenever she needed some time alone. Studying her, I noticed she wasn't pounding fervently on the keypads of her pink Nintendo DS, her usual routine while waiting for my class to end. Tapping her on the shoulder, I gave her a friendly grin. She glanced at me, returning the gesture. Except today, the smile didn't reach her eyes.   
 
Maybe it was because we lived close by, or perhaps it was because she was bored but she always made it a point to hang around after school so we could go home together. Sliding open the umbrella I had strangely decided to bring, I raised it into the air and held it above, shielding our bodies from the onslaught of the ceaseless rain. We walked for the distance of two streets before I decided to speak.
 
"Did anything happen today?"
 
"No, what could?"
 
She responded in her usual genki voice, her tone effectively hiding the fact that she was feeling unhappy. In the two years that I've known her, I have never seen her looking despondent. Still, having to endure on a daily basis the sniping remarks and mocking jeers of the rest of the cheerleading squad had to be difficult. Ever since the coach placed her in central position and showered her with compliments of having both the talent and looks to become a cheerleading star of the future, she had become the target of ostracism. The bullying and taunting would have been unbearable for the majority yet she hung on, determined to make it through. "I want to succeed, I want to BE the miracle." I applauded her determination, I admired her courage but most of all, I wanted to tell her that even if no one else believed, I would. I would be the one she could lean on, the person she could trust.
 
"Look."
 
The weather has been consecutively gloomy and on some days, the nonstop rain dampened my spirits. Though at this moment, I couldn't be more thankful for the rainwater which will soon serve my unanticipated purpose. Tilting the umbrella at an angle, I pointed my finger up to the foggy sky. She followed my actions and lifted her large almond shaped eyes to gaze at the wide expense of gray heavens.
 
"Yeah?"
 
"The sky, it isn't blue."
 
Looking down at the shorter me, she cocked her head, delicate brows wrinkling in confusion.
 
"Because it's raining?"
 
"Exactly, the sky does it too."
 
The words said were little but the message conveyed was immense. Realization dawned on her when my speech sank in, and I knew she understood its meaning. "The sky does it too." Uttering the sentence softly, she paused in her steps and closed her eyes. The few cars on the road disappeared one by one into the distance leaving the entire street void of all movement. A comforting peacefulness descended upon us and in that instant, a single tear escaped from beneath her long lashes and proceeded to glide down her cheek. Griping tightly onto the wooden handle in my hand, I watched, my heart aching at seeing her tear.
 
29th August 2008 was a date I would remember eternally. For today, I was much more than Mitsui Aika the geek or the one with the amazing memory. I was by her side, on the day Kusumi Koharu learnt it was okay to cry.


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Re: More Than One Story... [Sky Blue]
« Reply #165 on: August 29, 2008, 08:21:22 AM »
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Sky Blue
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww...:oops:

In a way, it's sort of reflective of real life, considering how much more "level-headed" Aika seems to be than Koharu (not to mention that the latter seems to have a thing where people either love her or despise her).

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Re: More Than One Story... [Sky Blue]
« Reply #166 on: August 29, 2008, 02:54:29 PM »
I loved that story :D
To be honest, when I first became addicted(XD) Momusu I didn't really like Koharu, but once I watched her Dokyu thing I warmed up to her. This story made me warm up to her even more. It was really sweet, but with some sadness.
Good job :hee: Oh and a thanks to stefy! :)


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Re: More Than One Story... [Sky Blue]
« Reply #167 on: August 29, 2008, 09:34:18 PM »
^Eh.. your welcome?

Ahh... not exactly what I had in mind for the two of them but close enough. ~I'm too lazy to write about them on my own anyways~ (Not like I write much). SEEE they ARE damn cute together! Don't really like Koha (you know it) but when she's with Aika.. it's a totally different story.

I like how Aika tries to cheer Koharu up.. or sld I say make Koharu cry instead? But I was expecting a more dense reply from Koharu, since she's quite an airhead sometimes heh.  But still.. NICE ONEEE!

There I've commented.. happy? XDD

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Re: More Than One Story... [Sky Blue]
« Reply #168 on: August 29, 2008, 10:29:43 PM »
Awww, that was so cute :heart:
I like how protective Mittsi is of Koha that despite her little frame and geekiness, people know not to mess with her friend coz it means missing with her  :mon zoom: :mon XD:

I love school based fics too, the make me all giggly and sit up straight while reading XD
I could actually picture Koha standing there like that and the one tear creeping out, awww :cry:
"The sky does it too." That it does :o I'm gonna remember that from now on and use it when needed :heart: :wub:
That was all around sweet and cute, despite the bullying!

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Re: More Than One Story... [Sky Blue]
« Reply #169 on: August 30, 2008, 12:03:12 AM »
Wow, I didn't even imagine it could be those two. And when I found out in the end, I kinda liked it. The plot and the writing is great, as usual. The pairing is new, but hey, it's cute  :lol:

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Re: More Than One Story... [Sky Blue]
« Reply #170 on: August 30, 2008, 12:35:31 AM »
Aww, that was adorable!! Love how Koharu is so determined and strong. And Mittsi sounds pretty genius! Neither of them are very high on my list but I think I like then just a little bit more now. So thanks for that! :lol:

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Re: More Than One Story... [Sky Blue]
« Reply #171 on: August 30, 2008, 08:12:24 PM »
so cute~ XD
but Koha as cheerleader.. orsm. XD
hmm..this makes me wanna try this pairing too! omg.

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again, i was pretty late..gomen  :banghead:

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Re: More Than One Story... [Sky Blue]
« Reply #172 on: September 03, 2008, 03:19:51 PM »
I was just wondering....is there going to be another chapter for GA?
I'm still waiting in that dark corner with cookies and pervs XD


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Re: More Than One Story... [Sky Blue]
« Reply #173 on: September 03, 2008, 11:42:02 PM »
^ Ohh, I back the idea of another much needed chapter!  :w00t:
I'm going to join you in that corner :twisted:

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Re: More Than One Story... [Sky Blue]
« Reply #174 on: September 04, 2008, 08:33:44 AM »
I was just wondering....is there going to be another chapter for GA?
I'm still waiting in that dark corner with cookies and pervs XD

Yes there will be. Gomenei for not posting it yet. But with school and the endless tutorials and assignments, I never seem to have enough time :dozing: Plus, I tend to get sidetracked by random one-shots :mon sweat: I was working on the next chapter of "Glass Slipper" but I could put it aside and start on GA instead if that's what you readers want. Just let me know :mon huh2:

^ Ohh, I back the idea of another much needed chapter!  :w00t:
I'm going to join you in that corner :twisted:

Speaking of corners, this one is really cute :on cloudeye: You're welcome to join in by the way. I should start stocking up on snacks and a nice mat or something to get us all comfortable in the holy corner :mon mischief:

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Re: More Than One Story... [Sky Blue]
« Reply #175 on: September 04, 2008, 11:58:39 AM »
ahhh such a hard decision....GS Vs GA!  so hard....you should never give your wishy washy readers choices!
hmmmm....I'll have to simplify this for my brain....to side with blood lose from overheating :on bleed: or possible dehydration from crying :farofflook: 

ummmm.......dehydration it is!....it's less messy that way XD  (though only if you feel like writing the next chap that is...if you are more into GS then by all means =D....I better stop here because the wishy washiness is coming back XD)



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Re: More Than One Story... [Sky Blue]
« Reply #176 on: September 08, 2008, 11:13:14 AM »
Guardian Angel: Chapter 4 - In Another Time

 
The female dressed in a long overcoat dashed diagonally across the street whist avoiding the puddles of water collected within the potholes of the uneven road. Twisting her body to steer herself between the clusters of people also navigating the busy traffic junction, she barely reached the other side before the light turned green again. Now standing beneath the sheltered walkway of the nearest building, she began dusting her leather coat off with one hand, flicking away the droplets of rain which had gathered as she journeyed from the supermarket. During this process, she struggled to balance in her other arm the paper bag of groceries which was filled precariously to the brim. Satisfied with the result of a somewhat neater and dryer appearance, she began walking along the covered walkway back home which was in the form of a tall apartment complex two streets away. As she strolled, her mind wandering aimlessly till the blaring noise emitted from one of the many electrical shops lining the area attracted her attention. Stopping in her tracks, she let her eyes trail up to a television screen behind a glass panel. Playing on the latest model of a Korean plasma television set was the most up to date episode of a popular entertainment news program.
 
"One of Japan's most popular female idol groups will be arriving in Korea to stage a nation wide tour. Here is a short video and interview with the leader, Tanaka Reina."
 
The host spoke in rapid Korean but the words were not lost on her for she too was conversant in the language. Understanding the simple phrases used, her eyes glazed over with a distant pride as she recognized more than a few of the pretty girls dancing on a magnificent stage to the tune of energetic music.
 
"Anyoung ha se yo, this is Tanaka Reina. Morning Musume will be coming to Korea soon. We are very grateful for the unwavering support that the Korean fans have shown us. We promise to stage a wondrous concert starting from the 6th of June. Please do look out for us. Sarang hae yo!"
 
After the brief interview ended, the viewer of the clip lingered on outside the shop as the tide of passersby swiftly brushed past. A small smile revealed itself when the ends of her lips tugged upwards presenting a drastic change in expression from her earlier vacant features.
 
"You've done well, Tanakacchi."
 
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It was late evening and the sun had long disappeared from the sky encompassing over Tokyo city. Pulling down the metal shutters outside the small flower shop, its proprietor bent down to secure the dual padlocks of the shutters after setting her belongings on the ground. It had been another uneventful day for the young lady boss and it was finally time to pack up and go home.
 
"Chotto matte kudasai!"
 
Whirling to face the sudden interruption, she saw an elderly lady hurrying breathlessly up the few steps to where she stood.
 
"Am I too late to purchase some flowers?"
 
"We are closed for the day. Would you mind coming back tomorrow?"
 
The disappointed look which surfaced on the wrinkled face of the woman was not overlooked by the soft-hearted girl. Pleading pitifully, the late customer begged for her help.
 
"Could you please make an exception? I'm visiting a dear friend in the hospital and she loves white lilies, just like those."
 
She didn't know it but her short explanation after noticing the bouquet of white flowers on the doorstep had changed the boss's mind almost as soon as she heard about the hospitalized friend’s fondness for white lilies. Nodding to accede to the request, she reopened the doors once more and switched on the lights which submerged the cozy space with illumination.
 
"Would you like them in a bouquet? The lilies I mean."
 
"Yes, please. I could not show up without the flowers."
 
Tiptoeing in her beige sandals to pick out the freshest looking white blossoms, she then made her way over to the workstation and proceeded to arrange the stalks in a natural and artistic manner to create a presentable bouquet. As she laid the finishing touches on the spray with a pink satin ribbon, the elderly customer came to stand by her side. Pointing to the photo frame on the far end of the table, she asked.
 
"Are those your sister and best friend? They are both very pretty."
 
"Eh?"
 
Realizing what the woman was talking about, her eyes flickered up to glance at the silver frame and the photos it contained before going back to her work. She appeared to be in deep concentration, adjusting the delicate ribbon when she was really trying to avoid answering the question. It was only when the woman persisted did she finally react.
 
"They are my friends."
 
"Oh? Which of them is your best friend?"
 
"They both are."
 
"But that cannot be. One can have many good friends but only one best friend. Which of them do you hold dearer to your heart?"
 
"There is no rule that says we can have only one best friend. I have two. Two!"
 
Startled by her agitated reaction, the woman ceased in her idle small talk and dug into her straw bag to hunt for her purse. Fishing out the required payment, she accepted the carefully completed bouquet and handed over the money.
 
"I apologize if I had said things I should not have. Thank you for doing my business. Have a good day."
 
Offering a deep bow, the last customer of the day exited the dainty store through the glass door. As the store quieted down with the ceased chiming of the little bells hanging above the door and the absence of activity, the owner stay put, fixated in her original position whilst she pondered over the elder's casual words
 
"I should only have one best friend. Who is more important to me?"
 
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The rose wood cabinet was stocked full of various wines, a somewhat considerable collection for a woman her age. Scanning her dark brown eyes over the length of the second row, she picked out a Pinot Noir with a bittersweet palate. The taste complemented her reminiscing mood this evening. Living a boring life revolving mostly around work, home and the occasional shopping trip to town made her look forward to the times when her flat mate was home. She looked repeatedly at the clock as she waited for the expected company to return.
 
Pouring herself a glass of the dark velvet fluid, she padded over to the cushy couch in her fluffy green bedroom slippers and flopped down heavily in the middle portion of the long settee. Grabbing the Hi-fi remote off the side table, she pressed down on the 'play' button and leaned back with her neck resting on the back of the sofa. With her head tilted upwards, she closed her eyes and waited for the music to play. The glamorous Bang & Olufsen system stirred to life and the preset shuffle function kicked in putting a random CD onto the needle. Swirling the wine glass in hand and feeling the liquid splash against the walls of the glass, she had no idea of what to anticipate from the costly amplifiers.
 
 
Woah...

Mimi kara hanarenu
Sono koe
Doushite sonna ni
Nureteru no?

Denwa de hanashiteru koe mo
Mayoko de kiku koe mo ah~

Onnaji SERIFU wo
Mane shite mo
Anata no koe mitai ni
Setsunaku naranai

Muda ni GYAGU to ka
Shinai hito
Tatoebanashi ga myou ni
Settoryoku aru no

PAPA mo onaji you na
Koto wo itteta kedo



Hearing the familiar opening melody, she squeezed her eyes tightly to try and block out the strange and unsettling emotions that the song was inducing within her. Nonetheless the lyrics of the song materialized in her mind instantaneously. It had been two years but she had not forgotten which concert the piece was from or the person whom she had sung it with. The memories, both beautiful and agonizing came rushing back to her mind. She found herself gripping tighter on the stem of the glass, increasing the pressure on it and hence cracking the delicate piece. The detached bowl fell from the portion still in her hand onto the marble floor and landed with an ear splitting crash. The destroyed glass spilled every drop of its expensive contents onto the white marble floor of the living room. The picture of dark ruby red on pure white immediately brought back to mind more horrible memories previously sealed deep inside her mind. The swerving vehicle, the plummet down the ravine, the body crashing through the windscreen and the image of her pale body lying devoid of any movement. Everything, everything came flooding back.

No, no. It's a lie! None of those things happened!
 
It was at this moment when a key was inserted into the lock and turned. Pushing open the door was the distinct figure of her friend and confidant who at once spotted the curled up position of the person in the photo. Instinctively, she hurried indoors and practically threw her possessions aside onto the dining table. Forgetting to close the door in her anxiety, her only concern was to calm the distressed girl. Holding the shivering girl into a tight embrace, she rubbed the damp back of the terrified girl in gentle calming motions in an attempt to sooth her disturbed frame of mind. Her simple action brought her out of her trance and she managed to slowly bring down the trembling hands gripping onto her reddening ears. It wasn't the first time this had happened and hence she knew exactly how to remedy the nervous situation. Placing her lips onto the tense cheek of the wounded party, she whispered into her ear.
 
"It's fine now, everything will be okay Gaki-san."
 
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The hallways were empty and the sparsely spread out ceiling lights failed to eradicate the gloomy atmosphere. One could almost feel the dreariness just by walking through the corridors. It was late, hours pass the authorized visitation hours. However, the lone figure walking in with her knee high boots had a faultless reason to be there. As a prominent celebrity in the entertainment industry, she had received special permission to be on the premise after dark. This precaution was to prevent mass hysterical if she were to be recognized by overzealous fans or the nosey media. She was extremely thankful for the arrangement since she wasn't one who performed well in the unmediated spotlight. Her footsteps stopped echoing when she halted outside a particular door, her sole destination in all her days of visitation. Swinging open the entry to the darkened room, she stepped inside and closed the door behind noiselessly, wary to not wake its resting occupant. Except that the person who warranted her considerate behavior could not be woken.
 
"Hey."
 
Setting down her branded bag on the coffee table in the first class ward, she threw her jacket haphazardly onto the leather sofa. Checking to ensure the room temperature wasn't too chilly, she busied herself making sure that all other aspects of the place was appropriate before settling down to sit in the plastic armchair by the bed. Taking hold of the deathly pale hand belonging to the figure lying on the ashen sheets, she stroked it tenderly, massaging her flesh in the hope of regaining some sensation to the lifeless limp.
 
"I won't be able to visit you for the next one month. Morning Musume are going on a concert tour to Korea. I'll ask the nurses to pay special attention to you. In the meantime, don't be naughty."
 
She smiled at the object of her affections, though the receiver made no effort to reciprocate. Nevertheless the normally headstrong and outright woman didn't take it to heart. She knew it wasn't on purpose that her feelings were ignored. The doctors have given their diagnosis and the outlook wasn't bright. Even so, she wasn't the type to throw in the towel that easily. Her temperament was one of hating to lose and in this case, she would do anything to ensure victory. Giving her heart to someone wasn't an easy task for her and now that she did, she wasn't going to take it back.
 
"It's been two years and I'm still waiting. I'll keep waiting until you wake up Sayumi."
 
She became aware of a scratching noise behind her and assuming it to be coming from the shoes of the nurse going on her regular rounds about the designated wards on the level, the tiny woman rose from her seat with the intention of leaving the nurse on duty some important instructions regarding the patient. As she turned around, she came face to face with a long time friend whom she has known for almost seven years. Clad in a conservative cardigan and with beige sandals strapped on her feet, she smiled at the visitor who had arrived earlier. Cradled in her arms close to her chest, was a bunch of snow white lilies.


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@JFC: I was thinking about that too! I imagined this would be Koharu’s predicament if she went to a school like that :onioncheer:

@KonaKaga: In the beginning I wasn't really a fan. But after I realized what an infectious and endless ball of energy the girl has, I started to like her more :on GJ:
 
@stefy: Hee hee, yes happy now. Dakara! HAPPY!!~~ :mon fyeah:

@lollipopgirl: That lines is useful isn’t it? I love school based fics too. Pity I’m stuck on “Please Take Care of My Club.” I would like to continue that someday :mon pray2:

@Grisours: Thanks so much! I was apprehensive at first about writing a pairing based on these two. I’m glad the story kept you wondering who it was and finally liking it at the end :mon squee:

@strawb3rrykream: Being able to influence more love for Koharu and Aika is awesome news to me :gmon twirl:

@ringo-hime: To me Koha is pretty enough to be a cheerleader :shy2: Really? Please do try. There are too few fics on them.

@Sukoshi: You got your wish. GA it is! Did you like this chapter? :mon lurk:

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Re: More Than One Story... [Guardian Angel: Chapter 4 - In Another Time]
« Reply #177 on: September 08, 2008, 01:27:20 PM »
I like, I like  :gmon tears:

 *runs to hammy san*  I need a hug!  :mon nwei: (erm...ignore the part that says wo bu xD) 

The chapter was sad...but kind of fun in a twisted way because I spent my time trying to correct my guesses as to whose who.

part 1...my initial guess was that it was Gaki san since she called Reina, Tanakacchi but now (after reading the 3rd part) I think it's Ai chan since she likes leather coats and spacing out
part 2 it must be Eri!
part 3...I thought it was Ai chan...until the roomie called her Gaki san xD....well I guess the options were really only 50/50 since the hint was Koe...I wonder if the roomie is Ai chan since she was on her way home...but then that would be too painful for the both of them right?  My guesses have almost all been wrong tonight so I'm gonna randomly say the roomie is Reina just cause it's so unlikely XD
part 4 Reina, Sayu, Eri (I'll cry if I get this wrong XD)  If the last person is indeed Eri...I'll be happy...cause at least she knows now!  I hope there's a lot of flashbacks to come

part 1 was so heartrending....to think enough time passed for Reina to become leader and they are still in a lot of pain  :k-sad: 
part 2 it's so sad to see that they've all gone their separate ways....I'm not good with change  :k-sad:  x2
part 3 gaaaaaaaaki san :farofflook: noooooO! Gaki san with the drinky drinky and the gloom.  I was close to tears at this part. 
part 4 I really love Reina in this...I love her devotion and how much she cares.  I want to give her a hug so bad.

I don't know who I feel more sorry for....Sayu whose still in a coma  :k-sad: or forever traumatized Gaki san...

a random thought just occurred to me while writing the last sentence.  So far the stories I've read where one of the girls are in a coma....well...they never end well for the coma patient...like code pink....Everything's Really Insane (that still brings me to tears...poor Sayu...)...The Art of Stealing a Girl's First Kiss..... :mon duh: I don't like this precedence *fear*  :OMG:

looks at hammy :gmon tears:   I love GA~! 



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Re: More Than One Story... [Guardian Angel: Chapter 4 - In Another Time]
« Reply #178 on: September 08, 2008, 03:45:31 PM »
Yay, update for GA!!! :muffin:
Part 1: I feel kinda confused, like Sukoshi. I think the narrator is Gaki-san because of the obvious "Tanakacchi" as well as some details in part 3. (We'll get to that)
Part 2: Definitely Eri!!! XD What an annoying old lady!! You can't just barge in to ppl's lives while making them work a little late for you. :sweatdrop:
Part 3: OK, to me, this is Ai-chan. She drinks wine and is all cool and stuff. But wait, the dialog makes it sound like Gaki.... :? Confuzzled!!
Part 4: God damn, Reina is so cute here! :lol: Wake up, Sayu!!! Please!! :cry: Aww, Eri came too!!!! :inlove:

Can't wait for more!! :otomerika:

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Re: More Than One Story... [Guardian Angel: Chapter 4 - In Another Time]
« Reply #179 on: September 09, 2008, 12:34:28 AM »
I'd be an asshat if I don't leave a reply after reading through your stories.
Hammie, I am floored by your writing lately. They're beautiful, and I must say I enjoyed every single story you've written.
Thank you, that was one hell of a marvelous ride.





That's When I Love You -
I enjoyed this so much, getting to see the bits and pieces of the ever so adorable Takahashi Ai through the lenses of Niigaki.
And usually, I'm not quite a fan of songfics, I don't know why. But this one flowed so well, so, so well.


Sky Blue -
KohaMitsui kitaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!! *bounces up and down*
In a weird way, these two have a hint of GAKIKAME in them, if you know what I mean.
One's always happy and airheaded, at least on the outside, and the other, more calm and collected.
I don't know, but the last line totally made me melt. Your turned me into a puddle of goo! <3


The Cinderella Series -
GLASS SLIPPER = GENIUS. GO GO PRINCEXPORTIA. ROFL.
I love Morning Musuko! (Wha?)




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