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Re: One Minute (Chapter 7.5)
« Reply #120 on: June 17, 2008, 02:58:30 PM »
Kameshige  :wub: I just love this couple , so cute together.
Also i liked Eri's protectiveness over Sayu(lol seme Kame  :lol: ), and the turtle and bunny stuffed animals was adorable.  :heart:
keep this going  :yep:

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Re: One Minute (Chapter 7.5)
« Reply #121 on: June 17, 2008, 03:06:38 PM »
Oh.. KameShige~ :luvluv1:
so..cuteeee...  :shy2: :shy2:

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Re: One Minute (Chapter 7.5)
« Reply #122 on: June 17, 2008, 06:53:47 PM »
Kameshige  super cute :tama-heart: :tama-laff: :tama-apeshit:
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Re: One Minute (Chapter 7.5)
« Reply #123 on: June 18, 2008, 05:47:13 PM »
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Sayu joined in the blushing fest as she hugged the turtle still not really sure what this was all about. “Okay.”

I just find it funny  XD

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Re: One Minute (Chapter 7.5)
« Reply #124 on: June 18, 2008, 05:54:03 PM »
Love this! Kameshige are so fluffy! :wub: I find it adorable that Sayu was afraid of the tigers and lions.
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Re: One Minute (Chapter 7.5)
« Reply #125 on: June 19, 2008, 12:59:46 AM »
Chapter 7.5 (side story): The turtle and the bunny

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Kamei Eri paced around her room in utter disbelief that she had actually said yes. She shook her head, “I must be dreaming.” Eri had been so wrapped up in her thoughts that she forgot to turn back around to continue her pacing and ended up running smack into her wall. She stumbled back a little and tripped over a pile of books she had in the middle of her messy floor making her land back on her butt. “Ow, okay so it’s not a dream.”
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At nine o’ clock sharp Eri arrived at the entrance to the Zoo. It had only opened just then so there weren’t many people around yet. And okay, she was supposed to meet Michishige at nine thirty, but she wanted to be early for…who knows what reason.
Eri? Early???

...

Now I KNOW that this has got to be an AU story. XD



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She jumped when someone tapped on her shoulder. Looking over she was Michishige smiling with a confused look on her face. “What are you doing here so early?”

Eri immediately stood up and bowed deeply, “I’m sorry Michishige-san. I-“

“Just call me Sayu. No need for formalities.” She smiled.
Ah, so here they're more of casual acquaintances and not BFF? (man, I can't believe I just used "BFF" :P )



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Eri blushed, “Okay…Sayu. I just wanted to be early.”

“You can be so strange.”

Eri then looked up at the clock on top of the zoo. “Hey, but you’re twenty minutes early!”

It was now Sayus turn to blush as she tapped her fingers together while she tried to think of a good excuse. But there were none, “I just wanted to be early too I guess,” she said almost inaudibly.
Oooooooooooooooo...:oops:



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“So shall we go in?” Hesitantly, she held out her hand for the other girl. She wasn’t sure if it was too early to hold hands.

Luckily Sayu smiled widely and took Eris hand in her own, “Okay.”
Awwwwwwwwwww...
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Then the tiger let out a yawn and Sayu immediately jumped back from the cage releasing Eris arm. As she stepped back she slipped slightly and was about to fall backwards when Eri stepped behind her and grabbed her around the waist so she wouldn’t hit the pavement below.

They both blushed slightly at the intimate position they were now in. Eri leaned close to Sayus ear and with all the courage she had whispered, “I’ll protect you.”

Sayu blushed and then was surprised when she felt Eris lips against her cheek. She turned her head to the side a little so she could look into Eris eyes before grabbing her hand again and pulling her along to the next exhibit.
:shy1:



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Which to Eris delight happened to be Lions.
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The couple had managed to spend a total of nine hours at the zoo without becoming bored.
Holy crap.  :rofl:



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The two stood awkwardly in front of Sayus door as the sun was beginning to set. Eri bit her lip trying to think of something to say. “I had fun today,” she kicked herself, how lame.

Sayu giggled and turned towards her door. “Call me later…” she whispered as she began to turn the handle.

“Wait!” Eri quickly brought the bag out from behind her and pulled out two very small stuffed animals. One was a pink bunny and the other a turtle. “I want you to have this turtle I bought you.”

“Huh?” Sayu looked puzzled as she was handed the small stuffed turtle.

Eri wasn’t sure how to exactly explain this, so she didn’t. “Just take it please? I want you to remember me when I’m not around.” Eri was very red by now, “and I want to keep this bunny so I can always feel like you’re with me.”

Sayu joined in the blushing fest as she hugged the turtle still not really sure what this was all about. “Okay.”

Eri smiled and then quickly leaned in planting a very light kiss on Sayus lips. The two looked at each other in awe for a moment about their first kiss before Eri turned around and practically sprinted away.

Sayu bit her lip and looked at the turtle in her hand, “Kamei…”
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Re: One Minute (Chapter 7.5)
« Reply #126 on: June 27, 2008, 02:10:50 AM »
So I know I should have written a new chapter by now...but instead I made another trailer XD
Although it does give away a couple more things I guess...so its like (well yea a trailer) but it reveals a little bit...
Btw: if I don't have a new chapter by lets say...next thursday (so a week) you all have permission to hurt me =] and I promise to post more often because now I should have Some more free time

http://www.youtube.com/v/iJvg8wJo9pA&hl=en

and the description I put on youtube:
The second trailer I made
hmm doesn't give Thhhaaat much away
okay so it gives away a little about Aya that hasn't been revealed yet (I think?) and if you actually pay attention you see a new character that is to be added much later in the story...

BTW: The colors of the text indicate if they go together like "Feelingless...or not", "Promises, broken" etc

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Re: One Minute (sorry no new chapter...but a new trailer! ^^;)
« Reply #127 on: June 27, 2008, 02:37:25 AM »
OoOoO i like!! :lol: i love the little part where yossi take the sword and swings it!  why must you tease us with an intense trailer!?! :(
i'm really looking forward to see what happens!!
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Re: One Minute (sorry no new chapter...but a new trailer! ^^;)
« Reply #128 on: June 27, 2008, 06:51:37 AM »
I like it! You're really good! I love the beginning where Miki is looking all tough and then the "or not" makes her look all vulnerable and sad. I like my Miki both ways. And all the little snippits make it seem like a real trailer in a movie.
And the new character is Reina, right? I saw the tiny flash of her.
Anyway, I'll be awaiting your chapter update. But hey, a trailer is better than nothing.

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Re: One Minute (sorry no new chapter...but a new trailer! ^^;)
« Reply #129 on: June 27, 2008, 07:35:52 AM »
wojojoooo i love it  :cow:

i want a update~~  :wub:

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Re: One Minute (sorry no new chapter...but a new trailer! ^^;)
« Reply #130 on: June 27, 2008, 10:59:33 AM »
Wow~ That was very interesting! I love the Miki scenes! It makes me very curious about the way the story is going!
Can't wait for the update!  :w00t:

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Re: One Minute (sorry no new chapter...but a new trailer! ^^;)
« Reply #131 on: June 27, 2008, 11:39:53 AM »
that was hot...

... it gave me goosebumps... the clips were perfect... even the song...

i'm sooooo looking forward to what you're whipping up...

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Re: One Minute (sorry no new chapter...but a new trailer! ^^;)
« Reply #132 on: June 27, 2008, 10:12:51 PM »
Hello!!!
It's been a long since my last post XD Sorry, It just that lazyness can be SO powerful you know? XD
Well, I have been reading your story and I like it a lot, supernatural things are MY thing.
Miki is a very interesting character in this story, Yossy always cool, Takahashi the melancholic one and Aya is full of mystery
This whole bond between Miki, Aya and Yossy is killing me :tantrum: I wanna know more

Oh... and about the trailer. First I love that song, although I don't know who sing it :dunno:
there was this part that call my atention, when Aya was laughing and then Yossy with the sword... mmm it give me a bad feeling and the part about loyalty doesn't help either... Yossy what are you on?  :err: 
Mmm... Reinana will take part in this story? Cool. I wonder is she will be an Interfector or maybe just a human or maybe something else :glasses:
My mind is beginning to create theories but I need more info so the best to do is wait for more chapters :hee:

btw...  hahaha I thought my room was a big mess but after see yours :whistle:
Waiting for the next chapter :hee:


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Re: One Minute (sorry no new chapter...but a new trailer! ^^;)
« Reply #133 on: June 27, 2008, 10:50:35 PM »
I love your trailers they get me all the more excited for the next chapters :ding:
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Re: One Minute (sorry no new chapter...but a new trailer! ^^;)
« Reply #134 on: June 28, 2008, 02:06:13 AM »
After watching the trailer, I have quite a bit of theories about where the story is going to. I hope it's not what i think it is. :(

Damn, I got to watch it a few times before I started deciphering it because Miki is too hot in there! :heart:

EDIT: Oh crap, you have it in your hands to break my heart...I'm certain of it...
« Last Edit: June 28, 2008, 03:45:54 AM by tito »

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Re: One Minute (sorry no new chapter...but a new trailer! ^^;)
« Reply #135 on: July 03, 2008, 02:52:04 AM »
So it's not a very good chapter
and I think it just makes more questions rather than asking them
But yea...

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Chapter 8: Strangers

“Hey you dropped this!” Miki yelled as she leaned down to pick up a little green wallet that one of the three girls, who were now walking away, had dropped. None of them seemed to hear her as she stood there with it in her hand. “HEY!” she yelled again finally causing one of them to glance around behind her to see Miki standing there waving the wallet in her right hand. The one who had finally noticed Miki poked the one who had dropped it in the shoulder so she turned around as well.

“Oh thanks!” she yelled as Miki walked over and handed it to her. “I can be so spacey.” The girl laughed a little before shoving it back into her pocket and patting it.

Miki shrugged, “it’s alright. Just be careful.”

“Yea be careful Kamei,” The one who had noticed Miki first scolded; before laughing a little and punching Kamei in the shoulder. “Oh well that will never happen.” Miki then recognized her as the one both this Kamei Eri and Takahashi Ai called Gaki. I think her name is really Niigaki Risa…

Kamei puffed out her cheeks, “I am careful.”

Gaki rolled her eyes, “sure you are.”

Finally Ai cut in, “You two always argue.” She pretended to grab at both of there ears. “Do I have to be a babysitter?” The three laughed and then Gaki suddenly stopped, noticing that Miki was still standing there.

She bowed a little, “thank you again for returning Kamei-sans wallet.”

“Uhh, yea no problem,” Miki bowed as well but kept one eye on Ai who was now looking at her strangely…like she recognized her. That can’t be good. “Just try not to lose it again,” and before any of them could say anything further Miki turned and walked away back to the bench she had been sitting on.

She sat down and looked over at the three girls who had now resumed walking home. It wouldn’t surprise Miki that Ai had recognized her. She had sat at this bench every day for the past four days just waiting for them to walk by so she could continue watching Ai. Miki hadn’t been as careful as she normally would have been when stalking her next target, but Ai had seemed so distant she hadn’t though she would be recognized. Sighing slightly Miki leaned back, “I’m going to have to switch up where I watch her from. Jeez, what a pain.”

“What’s a pain?”

Now a normal person would have jumped at this sudden intrusion from above. However, Miki had been aware for the past hour that someone had been sitting in the tree above her staring down; watching her.

“Nothing Yossui,” Miki replied to the blonde who was now sitting next to her with a couple of leafs hanging out of her hair from the tree above.

Yossui put her hands behind her head and leaned back. Miki looked over at her, but then glanced past as she saw Ai take her normal turn off from the other two and into her home. She watched as Ai struggled while searching through her school bag for her key. She could just use the spare one Miki had come across while snooping around her house trying to find the best place to hide while still keeping the most windows in view so she could see Ai at most times. Turns out that hiding place is a tree in there backyard that was very simple to climb, but had so many leaves no one would even see you in there. She must have been watching for too long because suddenly Yossuis face was right in front of Mikis and looking at her oddly. “What’s up?” she asked nonchalantly.

Miki pulled away a little and leaned back into the bench. “Nothing, just watching my next assignment. You know, the norm for us.” She avoided eye contact with Yossui because she new she was about to be scolded again.

“You know we’re never supposed to approach an assignment unless it is as a stranger.” Yossui sighed and ran one hand through her short hair.

Miki rolled her eyes at the taller girl, “yea and?”

“What was that just then?”

“I was returning a wallet,” Miki snapped at her. “There is nothing wrong with that. It wasn’t even my assignments wallet. I barley said ten words to them.”

“Okay well then answer my next question.”

There was silence as Yossui stared at Miki like she was trying to see right through her eyes and to her very thoughts to get the answer without even having to say the question. Like, she didn’t really want to ask the question. “Which is?” Miki asked annoyed now at the slight interrogation she was getting from Yossui.

“Why are you watching this close?”

“What do you mean?” Miki glared at her annoyed.

Yossui sighed and stood up, motioning with her hand for Miki to follow her as they began to walk down the street. “You know exactly what I mean.”

“No I don’t. We’re supposed to watch them.”

“No this close Miki.” She said with particular emphasis on the word “this.” “We are supposed to watch them just enough that we know a time when they are alone so we can fulfill our mission. That’s it. Nothing more. Nothing less.”

“What makes you think I’m doing more than that?” Miki looked down and began to count the cracks they passed in the sidewalk. She and Yossui have had a similar conversation to this last time.

Yossui stopped and made Miki look her in the eyes. “Because I know you Miki.”

“Yea, and I thought I knew you,” Miki said quietly.

The taller girl held her breath for a moment mildly shocked by her statement. “What?” she finally breathed out.

Miki shook her head, “It’s nothing.”

“No its not.”

“Since Aya has been gone you’ve been different. I thought we were always on the same side. But now you’re always following me without me asking and scolding me about things Aya had always told us to do. It’s weird.” Miki felt relief that she was actually able to say this.

Now it was Yossuis turn to avoid eye contact. “What Aya taught us was…it’s just too much.”

“Aya taught us to be human…” Miki glared at Yossui who took a step back.

“When were we not human?”

“Oh like you don’t understand. We we’re never human when we first lived. You know this. They took the humanity right out of us and made us hateful…”

“And then we got another chance.” Yossui said smiling, thinking Miki was calming down.

Miki sighed, “what other chance? Yea, we sometimes get time to ourselves. But its not like we can really live again.”

“You want to die again?”

Miki was shocked at this question. Did she want to die? She looked down at the floor. As much as she hated herself sometimes, she didn’t want to die. She loved being able to live forever. She loved the fact that she had all this power. She was selfish. She would always be selfish…it was there fault.

“No, I don’t.” Miki finally said with a very strong voice.

Yossui kept smiling, but it was a more peaceful smile than before. “Then why are you so determined to make sure that they deserve to die? We aren’t supposed to do that. Its just Aya who thought that.”

“What’s wrong with being skeptical?”

“For us…everything. You have to trust these assignments. I’m only trying to protect you.” She dropped her voice; “You know it’s not good to break the rules created by someone as powerful as the devil.”

Miki nodded her head, “yea I know. But Aya said-“

“Aya isn’t here anymore. So just forget it. Complete your assignment and move on to the next. Live your life.”

“What life,” Miki said to herself so that Yossui couldn’t hear. They resumed walking in silence for a while as Miki tried to let go. But she couldn’t, what Aya had taught her to do was to check. But never get so close that you get in trouble…she had forgotten about that warning. As much as Aya seemed to care about the people she killed, she never let that interfere with keeping her own life. Miki silently scoffed, that was the problem with being an Interfector. They are all so selfish.

“Listen, I know you still have more than seven weeks to go on this assignment. And I know it’s going to be an easy kill because she seems to spend quiet a bit of time alone, so do you want to take a break? I’ve got an assignment up in Italy for the next two weeks. You want to come up for one?” It was then that Yossui pulled out an envelope and handed it to Miki. “Even if you don’t I still got you the ticket. It’s for tomorrow, Friday. So I hope you come out, we should spend more time together.”

Miki smiled, yea just because Aya is gone doesn’t mean we have to split up. Yossui smiled back and then jumped up and into the nearest tree. Leaving Miki standing there with a smirk on her face. That was Yossui, she just shows up whenever she pleases, and leaves whenever as well.

Staring down at the envelope she opened it up to see the plane ticket Yossui had bought her to Italy. She looked up to see that they had stopped walking right in front of Ais house. Yossui was right; it was going to be a very easy kill. But…Miki still didn’t think she was a bad person…she was actually quiet nice. Miki sighed again, “This is all too much. Maybe a vacation will be good for me.”

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Re: One Minute (Chapter 8)
« Reply #136 on: July 03, 2008, 03:03:24 AM »
You're right in the sense that this creates more questions but wrong in the sense that it's a bad chapter. Far from it. I enjoyed it. I  :lol: when Kame didn't even notice she dropped her wallet. So typical. Maybe Ai's getting a bit suspicious that this woman has been in the same place for the past 4 days. Then again, we are talking about Ai-chan so maybe not. I wonder why she is supposed to be killed. So Aya taught them to study their assignments closely, but not close enough to let it get in the way of their own lives. I'm curious as to what happened to Aya and why she's gone. And these interfectors are immortal? Like they're dead but not at the same time. Interesting. I wanna see what's gonna happen in Italy! Maybe some more loving, perhaps? :grin:

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Re: One Minute (Chapter 8)
« Reply #137 on: July 03, 2008, 03:16:47 AM »
Totally slipped my mind to reply to comments
OoOoO i like!! :lol: i love the little part where yossi take the sword and swings it!  why must you tease us with an intense trailer!?! :(
i'm really looking forward to see what happens!!
 :cow: *sees Reina!*  :cow:

I really am just a tease then aren't I XD
But I love making things with videos so I'll probably have at least one more trailer by the time this is done with ...

haha....yes...Reina...hmm...when will she appear? muahaha
I like it! You're really good! I love the beginning where Miki is looking all tough and then the "or not" makes her look all vulnerable and sad. I like my Miki both ways. And all the little snippits make it seem like a real trailer in a movie.

Thanks =]
Miki is any way is just sooo likable...
that was hot...

... it gave me goosebumps... the clips were perfect... even the song...

i'm sooooo looking forward to what you're whipping up...
I would have to say...yes I think its hot too...the part where Miki glares...ahhh~
but thanks =]
me too because I finally got my outline all the way up so it should make for quicker updates =]

 
Hello!!!
It's been a long since my last post XD Sorry, It just that lazyness can be SO powerful you know? XD
Well, I have been reading your story and I like it a lot, supernatural things are MY thing.
Miki is a very interesting character in this story, Yossy always cool, Takahashi the melancholic one and Aya is full of mystery
This whole bond between Miki, Aya and Yossy is killing me :tantrum: I wanna know more

Oh... and about the trailer. First I love that song, although I don't know who sing it :dunno:

Yes oh do I know lazyness all too well XD
I think the bond is probably my favorite part of this story...and it def causes some drama =P

I'm pretty sure the artist is Portishead (if you wanted to know)
I love your trailers they get me all the more excited for the next chapters :ding:
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ahhh please don't faint or die waiting
because then you might not be around to read when I do update
Plus Look! I did update! all your waiting paid off =]
Oh crap, you have it in your hands to break my heart...I'm certain of it...

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but...I might...


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Re: One Minute (Chapter 8)
« Reply #138 on: July 03, 2008, 10:56:54 AM »
Aya taught them to be human,huh? :mon dunno: It's kinda surprising that it's Miki who has moral dilemmas as she normally is the most immoral one  XD but again, if it was Aya who told her that she definitely must have reconsidered some things :) Can't wait to see how things will go in Italy (if she will go there of course...  :roll: )

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Re: One Minute (Chapter 8)
« Reply #139 on: July 04, 2008, 01:16:43 AM »
So they've already died, but were "brought back" as part of some deal with the devil, yet they CAN die again. 

...

Makes one wonder even more about what happened to Aya. :O

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