One Minute (Chapter 13, two days in a row!)

[zay05ohayou]

Woah.. Ai's pretty distant huh.. I would've panicked if my ice cream even dripped.. Risa was about to confess too and Ai had no idea.. 
So Miki's watching Ai... what did i miss?? Why is she doing this again..? And im really curious about Aya's story.. very curious..

[Sukoshi]

Poor Ai chan...Miki so has the wrong impression of Ai chan...even if she is always spacey..

thanks for the fast update...I instantly need more

[tito]

So Aya was Miki's 'tutor' after all? I like the way you write about TakaGaki..very soothing..Poor Risa, she must be having a hard time trying to understand what happened to Ai at home.. It wasn't wrong of Ai not to tell Risa about it, I mean, it is quite personal. Maybe the confession should come before understanding and all.. *stands up and cheers, "CONFESS RISA!" Ai, you don't look like a monkey!  Updates, updates!!

[peti-chan]

Argh! Somehow Ai-chan blindness is pissing me off Wake up! or at least tell us what's up with Aika and your mom  Poor Gaki not only she had to handle spacey Ai but also she had to see how Eri and Sayu had fun together...

So Aya was the sensei and Miki questions her job, huh? Well... I just hope we will get more details with the next chapter....

[strawb3rrykream]

Aww, poor Gaki-san. I think she's in love with Ai-chan! (DUH!) But she's scared to tell her because Ai-chan is, well, Ai-chan. Oh man, and Miki's watching them! NOOOOO! There has to be another way! Hmmm, and when Aya was Miki and Yossy's senpai, she tried to teach them to be kind and sensitive. But why would Miki say she shouldn't have had the option?

[takagakifan]

Miki never quiet understood how Aya had ended up as one of them in the first place. She shouldn’t have even been presented with the choice.

wait what? huh?!?!? WHHAATTTT!!!! they choose to be interfectors what the H man!!

first I was all sad because of Ai being so clueless to Gaki's feelings and withdrawing so much away from her... I mean given the situation I guess I kinda understand Ai but sometimes you need to rely on someone to support you, be strong for you and if she would OPEN HER EYES she would SEE Risa would be the perfect person to do that *sighs*
but then I read the last part.... and I start having more questions.... and I'm going crazy..... dude! what's going on just when i thought i had it somewhat figured out PLOP! there goes a wrench

guess i kinda patient eventually everything will be worked out and figured out...  I hope 

[poets]

I really like this story... it gives that consistent want of knowing what is going to happen. Gotta say my favourite character is Aya so  far... and she hasn't even really made an appearance.

The biggest question right now though is.... why Ai?

I have this huge theory on the story though.... the two people at the beginning... one of them is Fujimoto. That's my current bet.

Another big question I also got flying around is.. what happends if you don't do your job?

BTW, am i the only who gets a "death note" / "Dead like me" feeling when I read this story? ^^;

[Yukari]

“What we’re saying before I dropped that?” Ai asked innocently.

Gaki shook her head, “It’s nothing.” She had made up her mind to just, for now, not saying anything about either subject.

poor gaki-san 

“Look who else is here,” Ai suddenly said as she pointed over and across the zoo.

Gaki looked over and was surprised to see none other than there Kamei Eri holding one Michishige Sayumi from behind and playfully whispering something into her ear. They laughed and Eri kissed Sayumi lightly on the cheek. They were so carefree and happy as they linked their fingers together and walked away.

Ai smiled, “So cute. It makes you wish that you were also in a loved like that, doesn’t it?”

“Yea,” Gaki sighed and got up from the wall.

yay sayu and eri rabu rabu  , but gaki isn't in the mood anymore 

They began to walk away from the monkey exhibit when Gaki suddenly commented, “You know, you look a lot like those monkeys.”

Ai laughed, “I guess so.”

mauajajajajajajjajajaaj omg 

It was kind of surprising that Yossui didn’t question it anymore. It was something Aya had tried to teach them to do… Miki never quiet understood how Aya had ended up as one of them in the first place. She shouldn’t have even been presented with the choice.

wow good to know 

waiting next chapter!!

[takagakifan]

poets i am definitly getting the "dead like me" vibe

[heyyouhiya]

Ok so now I'm curious because I know what Death Note is...and I don't think its going to be like that at all. But then again I've only seen the first like 10 episodes

But what is "dead like me"? *goes to google*

EDIT: Ahhh okay
I can see why you two would be getting that vibe
Phew...I'm glad my story is going to be much different =]
(I think...)

[JFC]

“I’m so sorry,” Ai bowed again and then began to try and explain that she was late because her dog had hidden her other shoe.

Bad doggie!

Miki watched the two girls for a while as they talked, laughed and went into the zoo together arm in arm. She felt a ting of longing to be so carefree before her emotions were interrupted by her thoughts. She needed to focus and watch her prey to figure out when was going to be the best time for her to carry out her mission without raising too many eyebrows at her.

Something that many people probably don't realize is just how emotionally difficult it is to do Miki's job, especially when she has to watch her target for an extended period of time to keep the eventual event from arousing too many suspicions.  It would be much, much easier if she could just go ahead and take care of business the first time she sees the target/the first chance she gets. However, by having to observe the target, one gets to know them, and as such, one runs the risk of possibly feeling a connection/actually getting to know the person.

But all the while Miki observed that Ai would space out a lot and basically ignore her friend.

“Maybe that’s why…” Miki mumbled to herself.

Huh? "Maybe that's why"...what? It almost sounds like there's a specific reason why Aichan has to be the next one.

...

Is there? 

Gaki wasn’t even sure what she was about to say. Part of her wanted to tell Ai exactly how she felt towards her.

Oh crud. Of course this would have to happen now. 

Gaki looked over and was surprised to see none other than there Kamei Eri holding one Michishige Sayumi from behind and playfully whispering something into her ear. They laughed and Eri kissed Sayumi lightly on the cheek. They were so carefree and happy as they linked their fingers together and walked away.

Awwwwwwwwwwwww...

Ai smiled, “So cute. It makes you wish that you were also in a loved like that, doesn’t it?”

“Yea,” Gaki sighed and got up from the wall. “Shall we finish looking at the rest of the animals?”

Poor Aichan...as usual not only is she spacing out, but she's also completely clueless. 

They began to walk away from the monkey exhibit when Gaki suddenly commented, “You know, you look a lot like those monkeys.”

Ai laughed, “I guess so.”

UKIIIIIIIII~!!!

Miki sighed, she was probably the only one concerned with their actions anyways. Most of the other Interfectors she knew just did their job without questioning it at all.

So Miki's the only free-thinker amongst the Interfectors?

It was kind of surprising that Yossui didn’t question it anymore. It was something Aya had tried to teach them to do… Miki never quiet understood how Aya had ended up as one of them in the first place. She shouldn’t have even been presented with the choice.

So Aya mentored Yossi as well?

[sweeety]

lol, I was the first to mention the dead like me vibe so you're not the only two! I think I said it on the first page..unless I said it in a PM.. either way, the answer then was "no" ... actually it was "What the hell is thatt? dead like me" What are you talking about? Are you saying you're .....d-d-d-d-dead!!! Aaah a ghost!!!!!!!! *smacks with fly swatter*"
"Hey that really hurt! Ima put the sheeny curse on you fool!"
"NOOO NOT THE SHEENY CRSE!!"
"Yes, the sheeny curse! Should've thought twice about swatting me fool!"

and so on.

C'mon! Poooooost!~

[heyyouhiya]

Woah.. Ai's pretty distant huh.. I would've panicked if my ice cream even dripped.. Risa was about to confess too and Ai had no idea.. 
So Miki's watching Ai... what did i miss?? Why is she doing this again..? And im really curious about Aya's story.. very curious..

The reason why she is doing this is to figure out when to kill her...but Miki has a different agenda then most Interfectors when she watches someone (which has yet to be really reviled. I hinted at it a little.)

Poor Ai chan...Miki so has the wrong impression of Ai chan...even if she is always spacey..

Misunderstandings play important parts in most plots =]

So Aya was Miki's 'tutor' after all? I like the way you write about TakaGaki..very soothing..

Thank you =] I actually had a lot of fun writing this chapter

Argh! Somehow Ai-chan blindness is pissing me off Wake up! or at least tell us what's up with Aika and your mom 

Good, it did its job.

Aww, poor Gaki-san. I think she's in love with Ai-chan! (DUH!) But she's scared to tell her because Ai-chan is, well, Ai-chan. Oh man, and Miki's watching them! NOOOOO! There has to be another way! Hmmm, and when Aya was Miki and Yossy's senpai, she tried to teach them to be kind and sensitive. But why would Miki say she shouldn't have had the option?

Ahhh the questions yet to be answered
Hmm another way? *ponders* maybe *reviews notes*

wait what? huh?!?!? WHHAATTTT!!!! they choose to be interfectors what the H man!!

first I was all sad because of Ai being so clueless to Gaki's feelings and withdrawing so much away from her... I mean given the situation I guess I kinda understand Ai but sometimes you need to rely on someone to support you, be strong for you and if she would OPEN HER EYES she would SEE Risa would be the perfect person to do that *sighs*
but then I read the last part.... and I start having more questions.... and I'm going crazy..... dude! what's going on just when i thought i had it somewhat figured out PLOP! there goes a wrench

I love endings to chapters that leave people going "WHHAATTTT!!!!"

Sometimes people want to try and deal with things themselves though...but its not a good thing to keep your thoughts and feelings inside AI (lol I love commenting like I have no idea what is going to happen either hehehe...)

I really like this story... it gives that consistent want of knowing what is going to happen. Gotta say my favourite character is Aya so  far... and she hasn't even really made an appearance.

The biggest question right now though is.... why Ai?

I have this huge theory on the story though.... the two people at the beginning... one of them is Fujimoto. That's my current bet.

Yea Ayas pretty cool...even though we have no real knowledge about her so far

Hmm yes why Ai? Thats revealed MUCH later on

I would be interested in hearing your theory! ^^

poor gaki-san 

yay sayu and eri rabu rabu  , but gaki isn't in the mood anymore 

Gaki =[

I love putting random lovey things in my storys! Yay ErixSayu!

Something that many people probably don't realize is just how emotionally difficult it is to do Miki's job, especially when she has to watch her target for an extended period of time to keep the eventual event from arousing too many suspicions.  It would be much, much easier if she could just go ahead and take care of business the first time she sees the target/the first chance she gets. However, by having to observe the target, one gets to know them, and as such, one runs the risk of possibly feeling a connection/actually getting to know the person.



Huh? "Maybe that's why"...what? It almost sounds like there's a specific reason why Aichan has to be the next one.

...

Is there? 



So Miki's the only free-thinker amongst the Interfectors?



So Aya mentored Yossi as well?

Yea it would be easier
but in my next chapter I'm clarifying some things about how other Interfectors "watch there prey"

on the "maybe thats why" thing. I actually hinted a lot to this in a previous chapter (I think enough that you can figure out what Miki is talking about)

Free thinker...ish

Yes Aya did. They were a Menage a Trois *but not really<--- French fraise I learned today
Means: threesome

lol, I was the first to mention the dead like me vibe so you're not the only two! I think I said it on the first page..unless I said it in a PM.. either way, the answer then was "no" ... actually it was "What the hell is thatt? dead like me" What are you talking about? Are you saying you're .....d-d-d-d-dead!!! Aaah a ghost!!!!!!!! *smacks with fly swatter*"
"Hey that really hurt! Ima put the sheeny curse on you fool!"
"NOOO NOT THE SHEENY CRSE!!"
"Yes, the sheeny curse! Should've thought twice about swatting me fool!"

and so on.

I love your comments sweety
so hilarious
but yea I had like no freaking idea what Dead Like Me was...



Soo instead of updating (and I've barley been commenting on  other stories)
I've either been sitting on my ass or well cleaning out my room because its ridiculous...
and when I clean out stuff...that means you take everything out and sort them in piles so my room is currently:


(look a Yoshizawa Tour shirt...)


(see that notepad and all the papers on the desk? all of those are like notes about this fic and yes that is H!O on my screen in that shot...)

Anyways, I am also trying to put this story into an immensely detailed outline just so I don't mess anything up
Cuz that would be hard to explain later
I can just seem myself: "oh and you might want to reread chapter 15 because I changed it because it got messed up."
As you can see I'm working hard *points to papers on desk* literally all notes and such for this fic
(because I'm dreaming big and want to edit it sooo much (and obviously change names and genders) and get it actually published. But that will probably never happen I can dream right?)

[Sukoshi]

O M G!  This is what Eri's room must look like! 

It's gonna be awesome when you become a big shot!  We'd try to convince people that we knew you before you became all famous and that we have pictures of your room! 

[takagakifan]

Wow that's a um pretty intense room you got there yeah so um lost my train of thought but um yeah i feel a WHOLE lot better about how messy i thought my room to be

[heyyouhiya]

My room was a success and is now clean...but it probably won't stay that way
Anyway, I didn't get around to writing an actual "chapter"
But I did say I would update by now...so its like a side story
that I wrote literally right now...haven't even edited or went over it and probably never will because its completely unessential to the plot.
oh and yea I'm going out of town on thursday and so idk when I will update next ^^;

(original title I know...)
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Chapter 7.5 (side story): The turtle and the bunny

Kamei Eri paced around her room in utter disbelief that she had actually said yes. She shook her head, “I must be dreaming.” Eri had been so wrapped up in her thoughts that she forgot to turn back around to continue her pacing and ended up running smack into her wall. She stumbled back a little and tripped over a pile of books she had in the middle of her messy floor making her land back on her butt. “Ow, okay so it’s not a dream.” She glanced around her messy room before immediately springing up from the floor and shouting, “It’s not a dream!” and pointed her finger up into the air in triumph.

“What’s that Eri dear?” She heard her mother call from the other room.

Eri looked around panicking as to how she was going to explain this. “It’s not a…what’s for dinner mom?” she yelled trying to change the subject.

* * * * *

At nine o’ clock sharp Eri arrived at the entrance to the Zoo. It had only opened just then so there weren’t many people around yet. And okay, she was supposed to meet Michishige at nine thirty, but she wanted to be early for…who knows what reason. Eri had a seat on a nearby bench and looked up the sky and started to drift off into alien world.

She jumped when someone tapped on her shoulder. Looking over she was Michishige smiling with a confused look on her face. “What are you doing here so early?”

Eri immediately stood up and bowed deeply, “I’m sorry Michishige-san. I-“

“Just call me Sayu. No need for formalities.” She smiled.

Eri blushed, “Okay…Sayu. I just wanted to be early.”

“You can be so strange.”

Eri then looked up at the clock on top of the zoo. “Hey, but you’re twenty minutes early!”

It was now Sayus turn to blush as she tapped her fingers together while she tried to think of a good excuse. But there were none, “I just wanted to be early too I guess,” she said almost inaudibly.

They both stood there at the entrance to the zoo looking down at the floor blushing for a couple of minutes before Eri finally got the courage to speak again. “So shall we go in?” Hesitantly, she held out her hand for the other girl. She wasn’t sure if it was too early to hold hands.

Luckily Sayu smiled widely and took Eris hand in her own, “Okay.”

As they walked up to the counter and were about to pay they both pulled out their wallets but Eri quickly grabbed Sayus away from her. “My treat.” The other girl was about to protest when it was too late. Sayu puffed out her cheeks in annoyance and glared at Eri, to which she just laughed.

* * * * *

There day at the zoo was going well as they walked hand in hand around the park admiring all the animals. Three or four hours had passed, but neither one took note as they were having too much fun. Eri had even pushed aside her shy side because she just felt too comfortable and natural around the other girl.

Then they stood in front of the tiger exibit and Eri noted that Sayu was clinging to her arm, even though it was just sleeping behind the steel bars of the cage. “Are you scared?” she asked giggling a little.

“N-no,” Sayu stuttered just making Eri giggle more.

“You are scared.”

“No I’m not…”

“It’s not going to hurt you.” Eri laughed smiling at the obviously scared girl.

“I told you I’m not scared.”

Then the tiger let out a yawn and Sayu immediately jumped back from the cage releasing Eris arm. As she stepped back she slipped slightly and was about to fall backwards when Eri stepped behind her and grabbed her around the waist so she wouldn’t hit the pavement below.

They both blushed slightly at the intimate position they were now in. Eri leaned close to Sayus ear and with all the courage she had whispered, “I’ll protect you.”

Sayu blushed and then was surprised when she felt Eris lips against her cheek. She turned her head to the side a little so she could look into Eris eyes before grabbing her hand again and pulling her along to the next exhibit. Which to Eris delight happened to be Lions.

* * * * *

The couple had managed to spend a total of nine hours at the zoo without becoming bored. They had wandered around it twice even, but both didn’t want to leave. It was about to close so they headed into the gift shop where the exit was.

“Before we leave I need to use the restroom,” Sayu said to which Eri just nodded and then waited inside the shop for her return. Then something caught Eris eye as she remembered something Gaki had said to her a while ago. Smiling she used up the rest of the money she had left, which wasn’t much considering she hadn’t let Sayu pay for anything all day, on two stuffed animals.

Sayu came out of the bathroom a couple of minutes later and Eri did her best to keep the shopping bag out of Sayus view as they walked home.

* * * * *

The two stood awkwardly in front of Sayus door as the sun was beginning to set. Eri bit her lip trying to think of something to say. “I had fun today,” she kicked herself, how lame.

Sayu giggled and turned towards her door. “Call me later…” she whispered as she began to turn the handle.

“Wait!” Eri quickly brought the bag out from behind her and pulled out two very small stuffed animals. One was a pink bunny and the other a turtle. “I want you to have this turtle I bought you.”

“Huh?” Sayu looked puzzled as she was handed the small stuffed turtle.

Eri wasn’t sure how to exactly explain this, so she didn’t. “Just take it please? I want you to remember me when I’m not around.” Eri was very red by now, “and I want to keep this bunny so I can always feel like you’re with me.”

Sayu joined in the blushing fest as she hugged the turtle still not really sure what this was all about. “Okay.”

Eri smiled and then quickly leaned in planting a very light kiss on Sayus lips. The two looked at each other in awe for a moment about their first kiss before Eri turned around and practically sprinted away.

Sayu bit her lip and looked at the turtle in her hand, “Kamei…”

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Hope this is enough to hold you all over until I make a real update =]

[Yukari]

so sweeeeeeeeeet

the turtle and the bunny LOL it remember me something... LOL

9 hours?? WTH!! how can they-- well, they enjoy to be with the other i think

i'll wait for a 'real' update, even i think it was a great chapter!

[lonewind]

  awww that was soo cute!!! lol Eri is the sweetest! 

[Sukoshi]

aww nothing beats reading super cute kameshige This will hold me over for sometime 

[peti-chan]

Aww KameShige~~ It was sooo cute and Eri whispering to Sayu "I'll protect you"... Really awesome side story