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Re: Inside the Turtle's Shell (One-shot Collections) [#4. Beneficial Disaster]
« Reply #60 on: November 27, 2008, 03:35:19 AM »
Oh gosh, I got a lot of comments this time... I feel happy. :nya: So then...reply time!

@hammy I'm glad you liked it! ^^ Ack...7 fics? I don't know if I have enough imagination to crank out that many with what time I have left. I still haven't touched my Thanksgiving schoolwork either...oops. :sweatdrop:
@Sukoshi YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!!! I'm glad you liked it. <3 TAXI AGAIN! Lol... Oh gosh, you too? I wonder how many fics I really CAN crank out... I'm not so sure...
@Yuuyami LE GASP YUU HAS VISITED MY THREAD. I feel blessed. xD And well, here's your wish. It's the opening to Ai-chan's part of the fic. ;)
@kream I was hoping the texts would make you laugh. If not that, then Sayu's water logic. XD
@writerjunkie Thank you! ^^ KameiShige, the greatest classic.  Believe it or not, they ranked as the third most popular shipping among fans... (This is according to a thread over at Hello! Online, and the sources are pretty reliable. Send me a PM if you wanna know about it.)
@shadowolf8 The little Pocket Morning fact I used was when they asked who's the first/last to fall asleep.  Half of the members said Junjun would be the last to sleep... And I'm glad that you like it!
@ringo-hime It's Sayu's Ecomoni logic! xD
@stefy Gaki-san's lecture would have killed the KameiShige moment, though... So I left it out. Poor Gaki-san got no luff... or did she? Kekeke...
@JFC WHOA. IT'S ONE OF YOUR FAMOUS LONG REVIEWS!!! I'm glad you liked it! Sayu logic + Eri texts ftw! :cow:
@Fenrir Lol, the Miki one came to me really randomly... Perhaps another one like it will invade my head some day.

Wow, ten reviews. That's a lot for me! XD Well...here's the start of Ai-chan's version.  Keep in mind that it's the opening, so there's not too much happening...yet.  I'll try to get the next part(s) up as soon as I can. Enjoy~

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Re: Inside the Turtle's Shell (One-shot Collections) [#4. Beneficial Disaster]
« Reply #61 on: November 27, 2008, 03:48:33 AM »
#5. Lights, Camera, Action!!

[5.1] Lights

[STORY HERE]

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Sorry about it mostly being conversation - the next part will be better...
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xD!!! Well that's a first time in a while since I've seen someone react like that to my de-lurking comment. Actually I've always been stalking your thread since your debut, I was just too lazy to comment, haha.

I love how Reina's all rawr D< in this chapter, it's Very Reina! -bricked- Aichan was just epic win. Gotta love her obliviousness and Reina's reactions xDDD

Their chemistry is always so amusing, the angry cat and the bemused tiger. I  adore the portrayal of that relationship in your chapter! ¦D

Despite being conversation, it's still executed well and made me laugh a lot with their interactions with each other xDD. Favorite part was when Aichan managed to be the one to kick Reina out instead of the other way around xDDDD!!!

Can't wait for the next part!  :heart: :heart: :heart:

And...

Something I forgot before...

-gives you a hardhat to protect from writer's blocks-  :heart: :heart: :heart:

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YAY new fic!!! You work kinda fast, which is always a good thing. Well, it's one down and 6 more to go :P

I liked this chapter. The interaction between Ai and Reina is awesome. You can tell they are comfortable around each other. You made me laugh like crazy at the part where Reina's plan backfired and she got locked out instead :lol: I think a certain kitty cat likes the slow moving turtle! I'm right aren't I? Can't wait for the next update. DO IT SOON~~~!!!

Ku...ku...ku....ku....~~~ <--- Know which song I'm quoting from?  XD


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Hahaha~~ I feel a little bit bad at laughing at Ai-chan but there was so much humor mixed in with the angst that I can't not laugh. :rofl: Reina made me LOL so bad. It's kinda sad that she was trying to lock her out but then Ai-chan left willingly. XD Jeez, don't you think Ai-chan should know by now that Gaki only has eyes for her?! :P
You do work fast! Me likey~ :heart:

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yay~ another one~ <3
moi lalabs yer.  :P

hehe, Reina and Ai conversation is fun~!!
cnt wait for the next one...

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lol  I was wonder what Reina's brilliant plan was going to be..but instead she gets locked out XD
oh well I'll just have to wait impatiently for her to be brilliant next chapter XD

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Re: Inside the Turtle's Shell (One-shot Collections) [#4. Beneficial Disaster]
« Reply #67 on: November 27, 2008, 11:04:03 AM »
This looks like the "other half" of Stress and Relief...I think? If it is I'm curious to know what Reina's got up her sleeve to convince Ai to make her move.

I've been lurking around in this thread for a while, too. Keep the stories coming, you're doing great :)

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Weeee~!!!  Ai's POV! :heart:

Leave it to Reina to get kicked out of her own room. XD I'm curious to see what Reina did to get Ai-chan to confess to Gaki-san. XD

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[5.1] Lights

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Ai sat up in her bed and stared down at the floor.  There was no denying it – Risa’s choice to room with a certain turtle irked her.
Aichan's eyes suddenly as green as a turtle's shell? :P



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I wonder just what those two are up to… An image of Eri and Risa together flew through Ai’s mind.  They were laughing…hugging…joking…kissing… WAIT WHAT!?
Aichan = :o



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I don’t even know if she feels the same…

“I’m sure she does, Ai-chan.”

“Eh?” Ai lifted her head and looked over at Reina confusedly. “I didn’t happen to say that out loud…did I?”

“No, but your face said it for you.”  Reina took a seat on her own bed and faced Ai. “Then again, it’s not like I didn’t know.  You did tell me after all.”

“And it’s going to stay that way, Reina.  You’re the only one that knows, and I plan on keeping it that way.  It was just a slip of the tongue…”

“But it was a really important one, Ai-chan.  Now you just have to do it again…in front of Gaki-san.”
Aichan hasn't confessed her raburabu to Risa!??!? :O



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“Hey, Reina…  I hate to be blunt but…”

“Hm?” Reina nodded at Ai, still drinking her water.

“…Do you think there’s anything going on between those two? Gaki-san and Kamei-chan?”

“PPPFFFTHHH!!!” Reina half spat out her drink as Ai’s words processed through her mind.  She covered her now dripping mouth and stared back incredulously at Ai. “THE HELL!?”
Aichan = :mon huh2:
Reina = :mon spit:

Question now is, does Reina feel for Eri the same way that Aichan feels for Risa? ;D



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“Psh, Eri with Gaki-san is better than Eri with Sayu.  Now that’s a problem.  You’ve got nothing to worry about Ai-chan.”
Lesser of two evils? :lol:



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“Ne, Ai-chan… What do you think about telling Gaki-san…today?”

“Reina, I just told you that I wouldn’t tell her.” Ai grumbled, her face buried in a pillow.

“…NOT IF REINA CAN HELP IT!!”
Hmmmmmm...Reina has a plan? :?



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Reina jumped off of her bed and yanked her taller companion right off of her bed.  Startled, Ai put up no fight as her junior pulled her towards the exit of their room.  The younger yankii managed to drag her taller friend over to the door, but that was as far as she got.  At that point, Ai understood just what Reina was attempting to do.  There’s no way you’re locking me out, Reina.  Due to Reina’s smaller size and lack of muscle, the situation was immediately reversed, and Reina soon found herself staring at the white door of her room…from the outside.
OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOH!!! It's gotta be! It's the Aichan side of when Risa gets locked out by Eri! :w00t:


BTW, Reina getting locked out = :on lol:

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@Yuuyami The hat seems to be working well. :) Very, very well... *cough cough* (That'll make more sense at the end of this post.) I hope you have fun with this. ^^
@hammy I couldn't finish seven. :cry: Perhaps I can make it up some time? I'm still trying to piece together the pieces of my head that school just gnawed off. D: And of course I know that song... It put me to sleep the other night! (In the good way.)
@kream Leave willingly? Oh I'm not too sure about that... *nudge nudge*
@ringo-hime And here it is! Enjoy. =D
@Sukoshi Oh Reina's a lot more of a sly kitty cat than you think. ;)
@rev2hd Well now you'll find out! xD And thank you for lurking my thread. ...Or coming out of lurking. Ish. ...I think I just confused myself. xD
@Fenrir Reina is a kitty cat...and sly kitty cats always find a way to get what they want. xD Or at least, in her case they do.
@JFC Yup.  These events take place at the same time...almost.

So yeah, part of the dialog is the same... Sorry.  But it makes one look back...ish. Somewhat. But a lot of you seemed like you were hoping for some fun stuff for this chapter.  So I've done my best with that. ;) And I'm sorry for not being able to describe kissing scenes. It just doesn't come naturally for me, I guess. :(

Okay, I need you all to READ THIS!!  I'm taking a mini poll at the moment, because I can't decide what to do.  After this fic, do you want me to:

A) Finish part three. Yes, there is a part three to this.  If so, you must pick between Reina and Eri.  Make sure to let me know which.

B) Start a new oneshot.  I've already gotten part of it written...I just need to rewrite that part and complete it.

C) Start a few FIC!! Aka...chapter fic. I'll do my best to stay updated with both this thread and my chapter fic once I do start it...

I can't pick which to do first.  I WILL get around to doing all of them...I just can't decide the order. :sweatdrop: I need some help here, guys!

So without further adieu... (or maybe just a bit as I edit the post) here is the next installment! :) (Oh, and I'm sorry if Aichan is a bit OOC here. It was harder to fit myself into her shoes than I thought.)
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#5.  Lights, Camera, Action!!

[5.2] Action

[STORY HERE]

End

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Don't forget to vote!! :)
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Too tired to do the usual multi-quote-comment thing I do, but rest assured I read it, and it's AWESOME! :rockon:

I read the AichanxReina texting convo, and I was all "SWEET!!!"  XD

And in particular, Reina's last text to Aichan...epic in wisdom. :yep:

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Hehe that was so cute~
Good going ninja Reina! 

naturally I'd pick C but I think I want a quick fix so....

B) Start a new oneshot.  =D

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LOL!!! SxY you are so cute and funny! I love the way you wrote this. It's too hilarious. I think you've succeeded in keeping me in good spirits for the rest of the day :)

You managed to make the different "locked outside the room gig" refreshing in their own ways. Not to mention very adorable *sigh* Contented now :D

I can't decide between the 3 options. Hmmmm *ponders* Is (B) the angsty fic? If yes I'm soooo going for that. I love good angsty fics. Especially by you :heart:
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lol

Sneaky Reina, reading Ai's journal, but it worked! Yay! :D Love the text messages. Ai-chan cursing XD

Hmm, I vote B.

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That was :wub: Reina is such a....I don't even know. :lol: She's good at what she does though. Swearing Ai-chan is hot~ :drool: I love this!!! :heart: :heart: :heart:
Oh and I vote....A. They were all tempting but I wanna see more of this.

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That was so cute! 

The ending was so SWEET!  :wub: And Ai and Reina's conversation was so awesome! Cursing Ai is  :rockon:

I vote B. Looking forward to more fics!  :D

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@JFC Wise kitty cat, ne? xD
@Sukoshi Looks like we'll end up two one shots instead. xD
@hammy I'm still working on the angsty fic... There are a couple kinks in it that need...de-kinking. o-o
@Fenrir The thought of Ai-chan cursing is an interesting one...
@kream More will have to come later. :sweatdrop: Looks like everyone voted B instead...
@H2Overdose You everyone else seem to like option B. xD

Okay, okay. I know most of you guys voted B, and want the oneshot I've been working on, but that'll have to come later. Because right now... I've got a birthday oneshot for Eri. <3 It's a day late if you count the time in Japan, but where I'm from, it's still (barely) the 23rd. That's my excuse, anyway. The idea didn't turn out as well as I had hoped, and the writing this time around isn't so great. Yes, I am aware the writing really goes everywhere in this. I normally don't enjoy writing in 3rd person either... Gah. Sorry guys. I wish I could have written this better. It worked out so much nicer in my head...  :( Still, I hope you enjoy it. (Oh, and look at the title - I'm so damn unoriginal. :doh:)

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#6. 20 Dreams

[STORY HERE]
Owari~


...Please excuse the bad writing. :banghead: I'm working on that other one-shot as well...
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