Author Topic: Inside the Turtle's Shell (One-shot Collection) [Special: Soba ni Iru ne] (Read 68169 times)

JFC · « **Reply #160 on:** May 17, 2009, 03:18:53 AM »

#11. PIN

BUNNY SENSES!! KEITAI DETECTIVES!!! FREAKING OUT RISA!!!

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Risa’s eyes darted towards the elevators again. “Didn’t…Kame give you her phone to put in your bag? She left hers…at…home…”

Pause.

…

Extended pause.

“…Oooooooh…”

“…God dammit Sayu. You suck.” Reina cursed, shoving her friend’s shoulder. “Gaki-san thanks…Huh? She’s gone.”

Aw sunnovabitch!

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PIN: 122388_

ACCESS GRANTED

“We’re in!”

“Wait, how’d you know the last numbers?”

“Eri was born in ’88. What else would she put for the rest of the code?”

“…”

Well, Eri did say that she had more numbers...doesn't mean though that other people (especially the other members) wouldn' t be able to figure them out.

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“ERI’S DATING SOMEONE!” Sayumi screeched, dropping the phone as she inspected one of the new photos.

“Shh!!!” Reina ran over to the bunny’s side, snatching Eri’s phone from the table. “Are you sure?”

“Just look!!”

“…Wow, I didn’t know Eri was into the shorter ones. He’s got good hair, though.”

AH! SOU KA!!!

* JFC looks up and sees a lit lightbulb above his head.

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*REINA FIGURES IT OUT*

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“Eri?” Sayumi stared at the door as it opened, revealing the head of a disheveled turtle who just had Reina run into her full force. “Eri…hi.”

“Heya, Sayu!” Eri grinned. “What’s up with Reina? She just rammed into me and ran outta here like the devil saw her or somethin’.”

“…Eri, your shirt is buttoned up all wrong.”

“Eh?” Eri looked down at herself. “Oh no, not again! I swear, buttons are all against me…”

“And your fly is open.”

“EEEEEH!?!?!” Eri shouted, diverting her attention to her jeans. “Oh my god, Sayu, thank you… God that’s embarrassing…”

Hey, has anyone seen Aichan recently?

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*ERI'S REAL CODE AND KEITAI WP*

OSNAP!!! SECRET CODE!!!

That's actually quite ingenious. I mean, having a decoy WP and set of pics? Niiiiiiiiiiiiice.

Obvious that Eri's secret code is the Konami "universal" code...but the "5, 7, 3" part doesn't ring a bell.

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Sayumi wandered the numerous hallways of the company’s building, mulling over the conversation she had with Eri mere moments ago. Then something struck her that made her eyes go wide and her breath catch in her throat.

“I’m sorry that I didn’t tell you about…”

“HER!?”

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**I wonder how many of you recognized the code as the Konami code? (Cellphone variation of it, I think.)Yes, I'm a geek like that.

Variation? Heeeeeeeeeeeeeeeh...first I've heard of it.

* JFC shrugs

lil_hamz · « **Reply #161 on:** May 17, 2009, 07:27:36 AM »

Shiichan *GASPS* I need to hug you, like NOW!! Even though this wasn't KameMame and Risa was in a blink-and-you'll-miss moment

I truly enjoyed this immensely. You're such an awesome writer and you really improved by leaps and bounds. Reading your humor fics always brings a smile to my face.

TanaShige was totally the icing on an already incredible fic. *Sighs in contentment* You've made my day all better with this fic.

Sukoshi · « **Reply #162 on:** May 20, 2009, 01:47:09 PM »

BRILLIANT!

I read this in the middle of the night yesterday and couldn't stop laughing like a madman

lol I guessed the pairing right off the bat....my Sukoshi senses were tingling

But it was still loads of fun cause I got to sit back and see how it played out

Though I must admit I secretly wished that when Sayu unlocked the phone, she'd find pictures of herself (cute sleeping pictures to boot..that Eri took while they roomed together). lol sorry...let me set my kameshige brain on manner mode

*flips switch*

*ahem* where was I? oh right! Brilliant! Not so much Sayu and Reina...cause they weren't the brightest light bubs

but you certainly are.

lol love the crazy devil bunny..and I love how Reina's the good friend that gets poorly abused

oh so many things I love about this fic! It's definitely one of my favourite fics of the month!

ShikyoxYaiba · « **Reply #163 on:** June 14, 2009, 03:31:25 AM »

#12. Poolside Happenings

[12.1] Watery Confusion

[STORY HERE]

ShikyoxYaiba · « **Reply #164 on:** June 14, 2009, 04:01:47 AM »

EGADS, I forgot to reply to comments!!

@KK - AiEri just is <3.
@Estrea - OMG, WAIT. Estrea?! You visit my thread!?

Well thanks. I'm actually trying to write a continuation/parallel type of thing, but it's not coming as naturally as I'd like it to... So I'm kinda hesitant. :-x But yeah, AiEri's my favorite oddball pairing.

@rev2hd - There's never enough, but looking at your sig... -drool-
@kream - Glad I started off your morning well! ^__^
@JFC -

Eri's smarter than she looks. ...Wiki said that it was an alternate cellphone code. :-x
@hammy - Aww, yay! Glad I brightened your day, too! I wasn't sure how humor-filled it was, so I'm glad most of you liked it. :3
@Sukoshi - Thankies~ <3 I hope you didn't wake anyone with your laughing. XP

KonaKaga · « **Reply #165 on:** June 14, 2009, 04:21:29 AM »

I could not stop laughing throughout this fic, even if this is the 5th time I've read it

I have to admit that my favourite part is:

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“Mou!” I cried. “Don’t treat me like a kid! I’m only a year younger than you!”

“Wow, it’s usually me saying that.”

“’Scuze me?”

I sense some GakiKame~

Sorry Reina, but Kamei-san is already taken

MOAR PLOX

kRisZ · « **Reply #166 on:** June 14, 2009, 05:39:17 PM »

PIN

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“I’m sorry that I didn’t tell you about…”

“HER!?”

Watery Confusion

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This is going to be the longest four weeks of my life.

and hottest

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Yeah, so I wrote this just to see what it'd be like to make Reina the lovestruck one. xD Next up is either that AiEri continuation/parallel (I'm still hesitating on part of it since it's not coming naturally) or a GakiKame. Or maybe even a prequel to this one. (Explaining why Sayu was there.)

AiEri would be great

JFC · « **Reply #167 on:** June 15, 2009, 12:26:51 AM »

#12. Watery Confusion

As soon as I saw that Reina was the protagonist, my immediate first thought was "But cats don't like water".

And of course, you had to toss Sayu in there too for the LULZ.

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Btw, my mental image of Eri when writing this:
http://i442.photobucket.com/albums/qq142/ShikyoxYaiba/Fics/146.jpg?t=1245018236

Mental images FTMFW.

strawb3rrykream · « **Reply #168 on:** June 15, 2009, 06:24:01 PM »

OMG Reina is so cute~~ Even when she's swearing and mad and gonna kick ppl's asses...actually, I think that's kinda hot.....

And Eri as the swim instructor=

Mmm, AiEri~

lil_hamz · « **Reply #169 on:** June 18, 2009, 09:24:48 AM »

I'm with KK on that. Eri is already taken by a particular bean

I love this fic Shiichan! You always manage to infuse so much humour! I'm getting a nosebleed just imagining Eri as a swim instructor. I'll gladly fake not being able to swim so I could get some lessons with her

ShikyoxYaiba · « **Reply #170 on:** June 20, 2009, 10:52:42 PM »

#12. Poolside Happenings

[12.2] Advantageous Inconvenience

[STORY HERE]

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Anyone realize what I was playing on? Reina's always said that Eri's the cutest in MM, and Sayu says she loves Eri because she's just herself, and Sayu kinda looks up to that. She's all full of human kindness...or something like that.

12.3 coming very soon.

Extra note #1: There are no definite pairings in #12. Pick what you like. :3
Extra note #2: I tried to write that AiEri continuation, but every time I started, I couldn't. It just didn't come naturally, and I can't stand my writing when I feel uncomfortable with it. To those of you looking forward to it, I'm sorry. D:

KonaKaga · « **Reply #171 on:** June 20, 2009, 11:35:34 PM »

I read that while listening to that Trish song you sent me (the first one) and I felt like crying lol?
Well, at the end part

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The desk worker looked up at me from with a hint of amusement in her brown eyes. People like me probably don’t come often. Her plush lips formed into a friendly smile before she sat up from her hunched over position, twirling her pen between her fingers.

Gaki-san!

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“Oh… One moment.” She turned around in her swivel chair with a hand held up to the side of her mouth. “Oi, Kame! She’s here for you!”

Sounds very friendly

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*SayuEri cuteness*

*mush*

strawb3rrykream · « **Reply #172 on:** June 21, 2009, 02:15:34 AM »

Wow, so Sayu finally decided to kick the habit of being not physical?

Gaki=absolute win!

I can see her just snorting at Sayu's profile thing. I thought the awkward silence was kinda funny~

Aww, Sayu makes her reasons sound so cute. LOL
Ah, SxY, I love your writing!!! Perfect balance of humor and seriousness, mixed with descriptions that I love.

ShikyoxYaiba · « **Reply #173 on:** June 21, 2009, 08:33:36 AM »

#12. Poolside Happenings

[12.3] Steady Instruction

[STORY HERE]

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I tried to end it on a cute note.

If you imagine it like a tv show, imagine it kind of just fading into white. ^^; 12.4 (final part) will be up soon.

Btw, to clear things up... [12.1] happens after [12.2] and [12.3], which pretty much happen at the same time. (: [12.4] will take place at the same time as [12.1]. Sounds confusing, but it shouldn't be when I actually post the chapter.

peti-chan · « **Reply #174 on:** June 21, 2009, 02:13:40 PM »

OK, since it's my first post here the first thing I want to say is that I absolutely love your writing style

It's so neat and clean and like str8k said it's perfectly balanced

The second is...shame there won't be more PIN

I enjoy reading about AiEri and that story was awesome

and about the Poolside Happenings. Well, you've chosen a great setting

Pool+swimsuits =

Reina afraid of water was hilarious as well as the "unsporty" Sayu

and lol at Eri's scribbles

Can't wait what will happen in the fourth part

KonaKaga · « **Reply #175 on:** June 21, 2009, 03:25:43 PM »

Another awesome chapter!
Eri and her doodles

Looks like Ai-chan got over her dislike fo water

Well, if Risa was in the water waiting for me, I would dive straight in

strawb3rrykream · « **Reply #176 on:** June 22, 2009, 12:37:46 AM »

I should have known Eri wasn't writing anything important when she was talking to Sayu.

TAKAGAKI!!!

It's so cute that Ai-chan doesn't want anyone but Gaki to help her. OUCH at Ai-chan swimming into things, but it's still kinda funny~

JunJun's cameo=

I

this story!!! Too bad it's almost over...

lil_hamz · « **Reply #177 on:** June 22, 2009, 09:41:27 AM »

I like how you made 12.2 and 12.3 happen at the same time. Writing a fic like that takes skill! *nods* It was refreshing to see Sayu as the girl who is too scared to go to the gym while Eri is the take charge one

TakaGaki was really cute though and I would do anything to see Risa as a lifeguard dressed in a red swim suit. Baywatch anyone?

Sukoshi · « **Reply #178 on:** June 22, 2009, 01:02:05 PM »

Just read all 3 parts!

instructor Eri is like the Erified version of player Ai chan. Her smoothness cracks me up

Angry kitty is awesome!

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It goes against the laws of the social norm! Working out just isn’t for girls who look good without doing anything!

lol narcissism at it's finest

awww Sayu wrote Eri's name on her palm! So Cute!

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She jumped off of the machine and wiped at her forehead with the towel she had stolen from me earlier.

lol poor Gaki...it's Reina's now, isn't it?

I think after the 4th part most of your readers will feel this crazy urge to sign up for swimming lessons even though they may already know how to swim

lol I felt that urge...then I remember that I did take lessons before...no turtle sightings

JFC · « **Reply #179 on:** June 24, 2009, 02:16:47 AM »

#12. Poolside Happenings

[12.2] Advantageous Inconvenience

Sayu too? Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww...

#12. Poolside Happenings

[12.3] Steady Instruction

Osnap! It's Risa!

Oh Eri and her miscellaneous scribblings.

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww...Aichan wants to go so Risa can still be her instructor...

And Junjun's there too!