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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 12 - Spellbound (05/01) ]
« Reply #120 on: January 13, 2010, 07:16:34 PM »
@cogi_yoshi:
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'silent-but-deadly' type
- Indeed she is~! Sometimes.... I don't really know how to portrait Ai-chan... cause.... she can be anything.. lol.. Anything is possible to be thrown into her character... She just manages to pull off sexy + cute + innocent + shy all at the same time..  ;)

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Hey, where's my grave? I'm already dead..  :mon angel:
- Noooo! Don't fly away~! *Ties string to cogi's legs and flies her(you are also a her right?  :?) along with Chloe into the thunder cloud*

@ Chloe: You wouldn't die.. don't worry... ~  :twisted:

ohhh~ Which series of the game are you referring about?  :?

Does Rei have purple hair or something? i remember she had black hair.. Lol~

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I knew it.
- you sound so negative :(

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Why am I dragged into this?
- XD isn't it cute?! *say YES!*

@aussie: Here you go! This chapter is something close to what you asked for isn't it? :) Enjoy~

@The rest of the comments!: It's somewhere up there! I'm so sorry!


Chapter 13
Chase 3

If you happen to pass by the royal garden pavilion now, you will certainly not miss that sugary grin that was plastered on the sole occupant’s face. Maybe a little frightening as well with the occasional giggles seeing that it is only almost dawn.

Our lucky brat definitely did lose some sleep the previous night but is not showing even a single down syndromes to it. In fact, from that little sleep that she had, she is considerably energetic this morning.

Of course like the perfect date, if you considers them as dating just in the Princess very own backyard, she offered to walk the girl back and since they were already in the Princess’s residential area, inevitably the destination would her chamber.

A separated compound from the main palace ground, the royal chambers rather than a structure of its own, it is an extensive area that consists of several standalone houses for each individual. Unfenced it may be and only guarded by merely two guards at the Torii gate, the area is strictly out of bound. Protected magically, other then the resident, the area is only accessible to those invited or given special clearances.

No woo ha that she did not receive an invitation. It would be rather shocking if she had actually gotten one from her shy girl. Alright. Maybe not very shy. The ultimate surprise for the night happens to be that Ai was the one that stepped up to her for a goodnight kiss. Did anyone mention that there were guards?

“You’re sparkling.”

“Ya……” she basically replied without processing the information

“I mean… literally” her girl was eyeing at something on her shoulder amazingly

“Oh… that…” with a nervous chuckle, she waved off the tiny firework show over her shoulder.

“Sorry… can’t help it…” smiling sheepishly, she continued as Ai giggled.


Coincidentally, on her way back, she saw Reina making her way back to Ai. The air surrounding the kitten was charged up so high that they were cracking into tiny electrical sparks. Much like her own tiny firework show, they were just some insuppressible energy due to high emotional levels. Reina stopped in her track when she noticed her, maybe still a little shaken by the previous encounter. As she walks passed the unmoving kitten, she raised her hand to ruffle the girl’s hair a little before softly wishing her a good night with a grin. If the big meanie is reduced to a sparkling softie, her dorky puppy probably is glowing mad like a slivery sun. And…she was right. It was so bright that she had to cover her eyes when she got to her room the night before.

Talking about restlessness, apparently she is not the only one. Despite awakening even before daybreak, her pup was already not in the room.

Risa relaxes to the peaceful surrounding as she watches the first rays of sun appeared over a distant. Sunrise and sunset, everlasting cycles it may be, but it never ceases to take her breath away whenever she finds herself caught in the moment.

A soft smile made its way onto her face the instant a familiar flora scent filled her sense. It was not long before a pair of arm encircled her neck loosely and felt her captor leaned down to press the side of her cheek against hers, locking her in an endearing embrace from behind as they watched the orangey globes chase the darkness away slowly. Regrettably, their bodies were separated by the low wall of the pavilion.


“Beautiful…isn’t it?”

“Am I beautiful?”

“HA! I knew that was coming.”

“Not the reply I was looking for but at least you’re not ignoring me. Am I becoming too predictable or what?” the brunette pouted exaggeratedly.

“Maybe.” Ai grinned as she pats the little brat’s head like a kid.

“Come over here… you have been standing for some time now.”

Even though Risa is very much enjoying being trapped by the Princess but standing in that position for a prolong period can be pretty uncomfortable.

The Princess was making her way to her usual spot when the brat pouted cutely and invited her silently for a cuddle with open arms. Of course Risa is not going to exchange the previous closeness for something lesser.

Ai pretended to give a thought about the invitation while eyeing the growing frown on little kid’s face. She smirked as an idea came up. The raven girl shrugged and continued to her seat. Risa now pretty much had a face that looked like she was being abandoned. Deciding she had enough fun torturing the girl, Ai opened her arms with a warm smile and giggled as the previously dejected girl brightens up instantly and made her way swiftly into her arms.

“Meanie.” the brunette stuck her tongue out before snuggled back closer to the Princess.

“You still got what you want anyway.” Ai replied as she wraps an arm around the slender waist from behind and pulled the brat’s chubby cheek with her free hand.

“Actually…It’s even better.” her voice a little muffled by her stretched cheek.

“Why are you up so early anyway?” Risa continued, sounding more normal after Ai had released her hold on her now slightly redden cheek.

“Why are you up so early too?”

“I’m always earlier than you.”

“True…I’m already starting to think that maybe you camped here to wait.”

“You make me sound like a stalker…how about……fate brought us together?”

“I might need to rethink about my faith then.”

“Meanie.” even so, the girl was smiling into the Princess’s neck.

Ai pretty much still had the grin right from the start.


THEN…

There came that familiar rustling sound from those very same bushes again.

“Reina or Eri”

“I’m going for my kitten.”

“If my puppy comes out first you are going to owe me a kiss.”

“Deal.”

The bet is on.


Eyeing the bush intensively, both girls waited.

Three…Two…One……………

Two screaming and giggling semi-human cuties dashes out of the bushes almost at the same time followed by a polar bear cub and at last place, a black bear cub. Unexpectedly, they had four contestants and maybe a draw but if you looked closely, Reina was slightly in the lead.

“We have a winner!” Ai cheered.

Even though Risa was pretty disappointed by the results but was distracted by the current commotion.

The two girls had their hands linked and had a brush on their free hands as they ran around giggling hysterically. Chasing them was the polar bear. The black bear was basically just observing them interestingly from the pavilion too.

“You have a polar and a black bear here too?” Risa mused.

“Arr…actually… they are pandas… the agitated white one is probably Jun and this one is probably Lin…Reina kinda like to paint them up whenever they are hibernating” Ai smiled sheepishly as Risa laughed out loud.

It was not long that the two girls were forced to split up as the white panda gain on them. Unfortunately, Eri, being the slower one of the pair, got targeted. Seeing that the ferocious panda was gaining up on her fast, she screamed and rounded the corner sharply before running up toward where the kitten was.

“REINA!”

Dropping the brush, the kitten immediately charged up to the screaming pup, closing the distance in milliseconds with a trail of purple static behind. Hauling the pup up from the ground with just one arm around her waist, Reina brings her free arm up close to her chest.

“Legs up!” seeing that action, Ai yelled and Risa compelled without questioning. Even the black panda had jumped up on the seat frantically.

With a cool backswing, a bolt of purple lightning shot out and hits the ground before spreading out across the whole area.

Risa’s eyes widened a little as the strong electrical charges pass through the pavilion ground in a purplish flash. Not life threatening but you definitely would not like to get caught in it.

In an instant, the commotion died down.

Placing her legs back down only when she saw Ai doing so, Risa turned to where all the action had taken place.

1.   Reina is still frozen in her cool pose
2.   Eri is still hauled off the ground by Reina, directing an admiring look at her savior
3.   Jun is stilled with her back flat on the ground and paws facing the sky

“Nana…” a displeased voice was all that broke the moment.

“Sorry!” a squeaky apology that broke number 1’s coolness and number 2’s attention. Number 3 remains.

The brunette got off the Princess lap obediently when she releases her hold on her to get up. Risa was just trailing compliantly behind Ai as she walks up to the trio.

As they approached them, Risa was sure she had a face that screams “You are in deep trouble! Haha!” for Reina was half between trying to scowl at her and cowering from her master’s stern glares.

“You can put her down now.” displeased voice still. Apparently, Reina was still holding onto Eri unknowingly all this while.

Reina shoved Eri gently behind her after she had placed her down carefully and turned to her disappointed master with her eyes downcast.

“Your Highness!” Reina’s eyes widen in shock as Eri suddenly stood up in between she and her master.

Eri knew it was inappropriate to meddle with the whole master and pet affair but…Reina was actually trembling which would have gone off unnoticed if not for that she had one of her hand linked with the kitten still. Eri could not help but squirmed under those watchful emeralds. However, her façade lifted significantly into a sincerely determined look after she saw her master had both her fists clenched near her chest with the “Go pup!” look.

“Pardon me, Your Highness. I know it’s unrefined of me to interfere but it would be unbecoming of me if I do not step up for the one that protects me.  I mean no disrespect but I’m willing to take the full responsibility.”

Eri squeezed her eyes shut preparing for whatever punishment when Ai swiftly raised her hand up.

“Eh?” her eyes shot open when she felt the hand scratching the back of her ear, surprised to find the Princess’s previously sternness replaced by the usual gentleness.

“Brave puppy……” the pup giggled as Ai ruffled up her hair.

Moving closer to the pup, the raven girl leans up to brush her lip lightly on her cheek.

“You can call me Ai” the girl said as she moved back.

As for Reina, she is currently really having a hard time deciding whether she should be more jealous of her master kissing her pup… or her pup receiving a kiss from her master. So much so that she had her cheeks puffed out cutely with a frown on her face.

“Awwww… don’t be sad… I’ll give you a kiss too” Risa teased as she holds Reina in a death grip and attempted to kiss her. The kitten screams as she tried to keep that mocking pervert’s lips away from hers.

Both Ai and Eri laughed at the hilarious scene. Reina now had both her hands pulling Risa cheeks as she leans back as far as possible from those lips that almost resembled the mouth of a goldfish out of water.

“How long more do you intend to stay like this? Determined, ain’t you?” Ai mused.

“You kissed my pup so…it’s only fair if I kiss your kitten too…don’t you think so?” came the muffled voice from the overly stretched mouth.

Catching the quick wink from Risa, Ai decided to play along.

“Hmmm………” the Princess pretended to take the suggestion into consideration causing her kitten to panic.

“True… and since she has been misbehaving………” The poor kitten was almost on the verge of tearing up. Once the order is out, she will have to oblige to it.

“Come on kitty…be good… it will be over in a second!” Risa said as she doubled up her effort to get the kitten.

“Gaki-san! Let go…Let go… Let go!” Eri palmed her master in the forehead so much so that Risa had to face upward as she tries to pry off her hands away from the kitten.

The raven girl almost laughed out loud seeing that Risa’s face was being distorted in a hilarious way from all the pulling and pushing. It was interesting to watch but Ai decided to step in when she picked up the incoherent meowing directed straight to her mind.

“Come on…break it up babies…” Risa pouts. She was having a lot of fun.

“Stop teasing her already. Come here Nana…” And so, the brunette reluctantly let go of her new toy. Almost immediately, her kitten hides into her embrace.

“I’m sorry Ai-chan…I will be more careful next time” Reina knew her master had no problem with her playing pranks and stuff but she just need to have better control over her power.

“I’ll get Risa to kiss you for real the next time you attempt to electrocute me.”

Reina nods vigorously.

After instructing the two cuties to clear the mess before joining them, the two masters went ahead for their morning walk.

“Is my kiss really THAT bad?” Risa nudged the Princess lightly with their linked hand

“Yup”

“HEY!”

The grin on the Princess’s face was totally swiped out when the brat abruptly pulled her to the off the main trail and moved in swiftly for a kiss, passionately. Bit by bit, Risa pushed gently until she found herself backed up against a tree.

Since the Princess declared her previous kisses as bad, then…it’s time for lesson two.

Risa nudged lightly on the innocent girl’s lips with hers before sucking tenderly at the bottom half of the slightly opened one and felt a wisp of hot air blew against her face as the girl exhaled deeply.

Gingerly, Risa brushes her tongue against the entrapped lip, drawing a shuddering deep breath from Ai before the girl granted entry unsteadily. Ai unconsciously pushes up against her captor and felt an odd whimper rising from her throat as the delicate softness passes through into her mouth and began to feel hers

Risa almost wanted to lose herself into the kiss when that sweet softness started to caress uncertainly against hers but this was not about her. It was about her girl. She patiently allowed the girl to get familiar and more confident to their unique dance before withdrawing her tongue little by little, seducing the other into her mouth.

The kiss was unhurried, undemanding, experimental even but utterly arousing.

Pulling apart, Risa presses their foreheads together and watches as her girl catches her breath. Risa smiled sweetly as the girl opened her eyes lazily.

“It wasn’t that bad…was it?” 

“That’s cheating you know” Ai pouts cutely, her voice still slightly unstable.

“What?” Risa like always, faked ignorant.

“I won~”

“Yaaaa……but you see… If I win, you owe me a kiss and it is only right that I owe you one too when you win…… I’m super fair… don’t you think so?”

“I hate you”

“You know you don’t mean that….” For your information, Ai’s hands are still tightly wrapped around her neck as she leans in again but not quite yet touching those lips, teasing the Princess. Risa smirked into the kiss when she successfully got Ai to bridge the distance and willingly submits herself to the sweet kiss the innocent Princess was giving her, which tells her a totally different story from the girl’s previous words.


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CHEERS! For once Reina is not being mentioned as the slowest runner ever.... LOL~ I guess many were like "EH?! the slower runner.. Eri!?!?" but since.... I had Reina's element as lightning..... She have to be fast! Isn't it cute that Reina manages to outrun Eri for once? :P


How come i'm starting to feel that my Ai-chan is getting so complicated? Even i'm getting a little confused by her actions.... <- The horrifying fact coming from a blur writer...

Probably Gaki-san had awaken something she might not be able to handle later on... Seeing that she is slowly losing her teasing battle already..... XD

I hope Ai-chan is not too weird for you guys~ XD

 :mon bat:

ps: I realized kissing scene is a pain in the ass to write... LOL!

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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #121 on: January 13, 2010, 08:27:43 PM »
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You wouldn't die.. don't worry... ~  :twisted: 
That's sooo not reassuring!

The Heroes of Might and Magic one, it got similar name as Might and Magic but it's different.

In the anime her hair is black and in manga there's only so much color. I can't remember exactly what's with her tied with amethyst, it's been long.

LOL sorry. I didn't mean to sound so negative about it, but you're the author and I'm the reader. I don't know what will happen next, and seeing you haven't dropped the bomb....?

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-  isn't it cute?! *say YES!*
:roll: YES! Happy?

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Did anyone mention that there were guards?
Meh, guards mean nothing to TakaGaki love.

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her girl
So...her girl, eh?

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she waved off the tiny firework show over her shoulder.
XD

Panda Lin and Jun! So cute!

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Dropping the brush, the kitten immediately charged up to the screaming pup, closing the distance in milliseconds with a trail of purple static behind. Hauling the pup up from the ground with just one arm around her waist, Reina brings her free arm up close to her chest.
:wub:

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1.   Reina is still frozen in her cool pose
2.   Eri is still hauled off the ground by Reina, directing an admiring look at her savior
:wub: :wub:

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Number 3 remains
:lol:

I would end up quoting too much for the TanaKame moments but you know I :heart: it.

:rofl: The whole Risa wants to Kiss Reina fiasco is too hilarious!!

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Isn't it cute that Reina manages to outrun Eri for once?
:yep:

:grin: :grin: :grin: ---> is what I did after reading this.

Right now, I really envy your fluff writing skill.

ps: yeah


TakaSemaru  :heart:

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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #122 on: January 13, 2010, 08:58:16 PM »
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Placing her legs back down only when she saw Ai doing so, Risa turned to where all the action had taken place.

1.   Reina is still frozen in her cool pose
2.   Eri is still hauled off the ground by Reina, directing an admiring look at her savior
3.   Jun is stilled with her back flat on the ground and paws facing the sky

 :lol:

Oh well Pandas! Yay
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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #123 on: January 14, 2010, 02:48:28 AM »
Awesome as usual. I was kept in stitches throughout most, until the end, where I was totally :drool:

Now, some fav lines.
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“Oh… that…” with a nervous chuckle, she waved off the tiny firework show over her shoulder.

“Sorry… can’t help it…”
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“You have a polar and a black bear here too?” Risa mused.

“Arr…actually… they are pandas… the agitated white one is probably Jun and this one is probably Lin…Reina kinda like to paint them up whenever they are hibernating” Ai smiled sheepishly as Risa laughed out loud.
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3.   Jun is stilled with her back flat on the ground and paws facing the sky
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“Brave puppy……” the pup giggled as Ai ruffled up her hair.

Moving closer to the pup, the raven girl leans up to brush her lip lightly on her cheek.
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“Awwww… don’t be sad… I’ll give you a kiss too” Risa teased as she holds Reina in a death grip and attempted to kiss her. The kitten screams as she tried to keep that mocking pervert’s lips away from hers.
The whole mini battle of Reina, Risa, and Eri made me giggle. :lol: :lol:

Takagaki is hot and I can't wait for another chapter!

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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #124 on: January 14, 2010, 12:20:41 PM »
Update! Yay!  :cow:

Will read on Sat or Monday  :)  I don't want to rush read one of my most fave fanfic  :D

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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #125 on: January 16, 2010, 04:15:29 AM »
 :lol: at teasing Risa~ Poor kitty, at least Eri and her master intervened in time to avoid the impending 'disaster' XD
Also found it cute how the kitten was having trouble trying to distinguish who she was jealous of that much more, her pup or her master with that smooch XD I just find it amusing how jealousy is a common trait in fanfics as a part of Reina's personality :lol:



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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #126 on: January 16, 2010, 02:09:35 PM »
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she offered to walk the girl back and since they were already in the Princess’s residential area, inevitably the destination would her chamber

 :twisted:


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“True…I’m already starting to think that maybe you camped here to wait.”

 :lol: Good one Ai  :lol:


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Unfortunately, Eri, being the slower one of the pair, got targeted.

Oh


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Legs up!” seeing that action, Ai yelled and Risa compelled without questioning.

I love this one, I don't know why


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With a cool backswing, a bolt of purple lightning shot out and hits the ground before spreading out across the whole area.

Whoa!


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Jun is stilled with her back flat on the ground and paws facing the sky

Funny to imagine  XD


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“Sorry!” a squeaky apology that broke number 1’s coolness and number 2’s attention. Number 3 remains.

 :lol:  :twothumbs


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Reina shoved Eri gently behind her after she had placed her down carefully and turned to her disappointed master with her eyes downcast.

Protective girl  :heart:


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However, her façade lifted significantly into a sincerely determined look after she saw her master had both her fists clenched near her chest with the “Go pup!” look.

Yay!


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“Awwww… don’t be sad… I’ll give you a kiss too” Risa teased as she holds Reina in a death grip and attempted to kiss her. The kitten screams as she tried to keep that mocking pervert’s lips away from hers.

OMG  :rofl:  :rofl:  :rofl:


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“Gaki-san! Let go…Let go… Let go!” Eri palmed her master in the forehead so much so that Risa had to face upward as she tries to pry off her hands away from the kitten.

 :lol:  :lol:  :lol:


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“Is my kiss really THAT bad?” Risa nudged the Princess lightly with their linked hand

 XD


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The kiss was unhurried, undemanding, experimental even but utterly arousing.

Indeed  :drool:  :on bleed:


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“Yaaaa……but you see… If I win, you owe me a kiss and it is only right that I owe you one too when you win…… I’m super fair… don’t you think so?”

 :yep: Just like having tow heads on a single coin  :lol:  super fair  XD


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ps: I realized kissing scene is a pain in the ass to write... LOL!

 :lol:





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Why am I dragged into this? XD

Because you are dragable just like you are flyable?    :D   :k-thrilled:

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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #127 on: January 16, 2010, 03:59:55 PM »
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1.   Reina is still frozen in her cool pose
2.   Eri is still hauled off the ground by Reina, directing an admiring look at her savior
3.   Jun is stilled with her back flat on the ground and paws facing the sky

XD

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Reina shoved Eri gently behind her after she had placed her down carefully and turned to her disappointed master with her eyes downcast.

Protective Reina is cute :P
 
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For your information, Ai’s hands are still tightly wrapped around her neck as she leans in again but not quite yet touching those lips, teasing the Princess.

XD How mean~~~

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I hope Ai-chan is not too weird for you guys~ XD

Nah, not really, we all love Ai-chan in all the ways XD :on gay:

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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #128 on: January 17, 2010, 09:08:17 AM »
ive seen this fic but doesnt have a chance to read hmm...... :hehehe: :hehehe: :hehehe:
actually, its been soooo long since ive read a fic here! glad i checked since i like this TaGaki fic.... :luvluv2: :luvluv2: :luvluv2:

i just read all the chapters, were the characters base from  Mai-hime? Natsuki and Shizuru? Natsuki is Ai-chan and Shizuru is Gaki-san?  :dunno: though Shizuru has a crimson eyes not sapphire!

haha, normally, Ai-chan would suit as Shizuru since she's the older, but i like it when Gaki takes control! haha  :ding: :ding: :ding:

soooo mushy author-san.... :luvluv1: :luvluv1: :luvluv1:

but i like it, keep it up.....update soon~ :kneelbow: :kneelbow: :kneelbow:




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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #129 on: January 17, 2010, 05:28:34 PM »
Sorry for the late comment. Finally can comment on this chapter :cow:

Now that TanaKame are together, we can expect all hell to break loose especially since kitty Reina is bringing pup Eri to the "dark side". Okay that was a huge exaggeration but Eri is now turning from a sweet pup to a mischievious one :twisted: But I'd say, I want more! XD

So we finally know what Reina's expertise is. I've always wonder about that :) But then again, she's always been electrifying cute (okay bad joke :lol:) The part where Gaki tried to kiss Reina totally crack me up :twothumbs

The pandas make an appearance here :cow: (shucks, no panda emote :lol:)

TakaGaki has gone on to lesson 2 :shakeit: It's only a matter of time that they will move on to the other important lessons? Risa did promise to teach Ai on how to make babies :twisted:

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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #130 on: January 22, 2010, 05:53:24 AM »
@All: Been a busy busy week and a more busy busy week for next! I manage to fall and got myself a scar on the leg... and i'm down with cough again.... HOW WEAK! :( Have not finish my next chapter yet still  :( Working on it though..but i'll reply some comment first..~ XD

EDIT: AND YA..... yesterday..i could not get in to the whole JphIp site at all.. I can load any other single page but just this.. so i though maybe the site got shut down or something.... *ROAR* so i decided to comment~ XD

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That's sooo not reassuring!
- Don't worry...wun bear to let you die XD *Release more string to fly Chloe into a Tornado*

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I don't know what will happen next, and seeing you haven't dropped the bomb....?
- Seriously..i'm wondering too when i'm gonna drop it.. cause i always does not want to spoil the fluff of the chapter... SOB *headache*

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So...her girl, eh?
- where where where? :)

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ps: yeah
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I was :D after reading the comments too... thanks lot!

@Kuro-kun: Haha.. all of them are somewhere in the story.. but i just can't seem to put them in somewhere in the main plot cause it will just be too complicated XD

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I was kept in stitches throughout most
:wub: Scrump..Scrump!

XD thanks!

@aussie:
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Also found it cute how the kitten was having trouble trying to distinguish who she was jealous of that much more, her pup or her master with that smooch
- the little kitten with her cute thoughts...~ :) Plus..no one was giving her any attention..so probably she felt jealous due to that too... Reina is a kitty afterall :D Like any other kitty...they always like to be close to someone..  :P

Reina just look cuter when she is jealous~ haha.... I don't know why.. but it seems to be hit into me by something~ Just a meanie with a jello heart...~ She is protective but not over protective~ so probably she looks all sweet and cute when she is jealous..plus her little height... makes is more.. adorable.. haha

@Little kRisZ:

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“Legs up!” seeing that action, Ai yelled and Risa compelled without questioning.
I love this one, I don't know why
- When i first thought of it.. i was grinning too~ by myself..how scary~ LOL~

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:yep: Just like having tow heads on a single coin   :lol:  super fair  XD
- yup! super fair.. cause! i'm the writer! LOL~ Gaki-san is sneaky! but Ai-chan is learn fast.........................  :P

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Because you are dragable just like you are flyable?
- LOL~ *pulls lil kRisZ dead body from the grave... ties some string to her legs... and fly her along with Chloe!* In case you are wondering where Chloe is heading... she is on the way to a tornado.. LOL!

@Trey-trey: Reina is cute even she just stands there XD With her height.. i just wanna go there and hug her! LOL~

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XD How mean~~~
- Anyway.... Ai-chan is a fast learner.............. *prays for Gaki-san*

@Mum~: Haha~ the puppy can be very very playful at times too~ Utterly sweet no doubt... but..... mischievous.. of course..look who have she been with all the time.. she probably pick up a thing or two.. LOL~

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electrifying cute
- her wonky eyes have her power.. LOL!

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It's only a matter of time that they will move on to the other important lessons?
- Oh god..... stresss.................................. :(


@ayase909: Hello there! :) A new reader! Thanks lots!

Hmmm... only two of them were base on Mai-hime character from the start.. the story was originally mend Natsuki and Shizuru but it have already gone away from what i have intended... Indeed Ai-chan is Natsuki and Gaki-san is Shizuru.. but :) They have grown into their own character already... they had stray pretty far away from them...don't you think so? :D

I first thought of Ai-chan for Shizuru too....... but after much thought.... i think she is more suitable for Natsuki..she is always quiet and doesn't express herself much... (not that we don't like it...) but... It kinda links that little to Natsuki... As for Gaki-san.... LOL~ i made her a pure big big big flirt~ Like you say~ i kinda like to see Gaki-san make fun of Ai-chan instead of the other way round XD

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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #131 on: January 22, 2010, 07:21:08 AM »
JunLin are bears? Somehow the image of 2 pandas lazing in their enclosure in the zoo came to my mind :D

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1.   Reina is still frozen in her cool pose
2.   Eri is still hauled off the ground by Reina, directing an admiring look at her savior
3.   Jun is stilled with her back flat on the ground and paws facing the sky

1. :twothumbs
2.  :lol:
3. XD

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“Nana…” a displeased voice was all that broke the moment.
“True… and since she has been misbehaving………” The poor kitten was almost on the verge of tearing up. Once the order is out, she will have to oblige to it.

It can’t be that bad kissing Gaki-san :wub:

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Pulling apart, Risa presses their foreheads together and watches as her girl catches her breath.

I needed to catch my breath too. woooo~  :oops: That was hawt, but in an ultra sweet way.

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“I hate you”

She doesn't really mean that *nudge*

Oh noes, you’re sick?? Again?? Bad germs, Bad! *scolds virus that are happily partying on Ame*

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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #132 on: January 22, 2010, 02:00:03 PM »
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Been a busy busy week and a more busy busy week for next! I manage to fall and got myself a scar on the leg... and i'm down with cough again.... HOW WEAK! :(
scar on the leg, were you wearing a short skirt?  :twisted:  oh god I don't want to sound so ebil  XD  GET WELL BISHOP  :) why not use the pup to heal you  :D

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- LOL~ *pulls lil kRisZ dead body from the grave... ties some string to her legs... and fly her along with Chloe!* In case you are wondering where Chloe is heading... she is on the way to a tornado.. LOL!
Thanks god I'm dead in there I wont feel a thing  :lol:


Get well and take an extra care will you  :)

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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #133 on: January 22, 2010, 04:37:18 PM »
Get better baby girl! :otomerika: :yossi:

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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #134 on: January 22, 2010, 06:47:45 PM »
Oh dear!

Baby Tree! I replied your comment.. but i realized i accidentally colored your name in white.. LOL~ Did you find it?

@ Lil kRisZ: Nope...I was wearing jean :P so i fell and scrap my leg on something :( If only i had puppy Eri......~ LOL~

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Thanks god I'm dead in there I wont feel a thing :lol:
- Probably there is a camel or two inside and they will munch on your body!

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I needed to catch my breath too. woooo~  :oops: That was hawt, but in an ultra sweet way.
- If you sees this and sees me tml... please don't mention it.. i will hide under the table cloth! LOL  XD

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*scolds virus that are happily partying on Ame*
- They have been partying in me for weeks... :( I need go get to the doc for a stronger medicine this time round  :(


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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #135 on: January 23, 2010, 03:27:01 AM »
I had to search the post a couple more times, but I found it. XD

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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #136 on: January 25, 2010, 04:54:44 PM »
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- Don't worry...wun bear to let you die XD *Release more string to fly Chloe into a Tornado*
:on blackhole:

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- Seriously..i'm wondering too when i'm gonna drop it.. cause i always does not want to spoil the fluff of the chapter... SOB *headache*
Let the fluff prevail then! XD

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:?

I was agreeing your ps comment.

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I was :D after reading the comments too... thanks lot!
Right back at ya!  ;)

Get well soon Bishop NI!!

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-Flying Chloe from Little kRisZ grave XD
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Why am I dragged into this? XD

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Because you are dragable just like you are flyable?    :D   :k-thrilled:
Now you too kRisZ :lol:



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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 13 - Chase 3 (13/01) ]
« Reply #137 on: January 25, 2010, 06:18:41 PM »
@All: Hello People! I guess this is the longest time i go without posting an update... and I'm sure it wun be the the last.... :P Sorry!  Oh well...You might see alot alot alot of repeated words and vocab... weird sentences structure... I'm just bad at my languages~ I'm a Science person! If you ask me something like why does glass breaks and the cracks propagate, i could probably explain up to the molecules level....  XD and if i make a mistake somewhere that is weird or funny.. feel free to laugh.. I've been laughing at myself....others too.. LOL! Sorry! But there is where we learn!

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Chapter 14
Clean Ups


“Seriously…” Risa sighed

“You two were told to clear the mess……and ends up… you two became the mess…that we now have to clear.” the girl continued as she scoops more water up with her hand and scrubbed her puppy’s fur. Totally unaffected by her grumbling master, the pet-form puppy just lifted her head, requesting a scrub under her neck as well.

“You little brat…” Risa snorted and holds the puppy’s mouth close with her hand on her muzzle gently before she flicked her finger on the puppy’s head.

Upon release, the puppy immediate tried to snap her jaw on those fingers but only manage to get the air instead. The grinning girl had already knowingly withdrawn both her hands from the range of attack.

“Ya…ya… I’m the big brat…” Risa rolled her eyes and pulled her barking puppy to her and started scrubbing the underside of her neck. From beside, the Princess watches the whole exchange with slight amusement as she washes the paint away from her purring kitten’s paws.

Since Ai was quite use to washing her kitten up after each and every of her prank plays, so she was not as surprised as Risa when a Dalmatian and a white-spotted kitten manages to catch up with them at the waterfall.

Apparently, not only Reina was messy with her clean ups.

“Finally!” the brunette exhaled deeply as she held Eri by her fore legs before soaking her in the water as if like she was rinsing a piece of cloth.

“Nice and clean!” Risa chuckled at the sight of her totally drenched puppy.

“Hey! Stop that….!” the brunette shrieked as she held the puppy away as far as possible when Eri shakes off the water that was on her furry coat.

Satisfied with her current dryness, the puppy barked shamelessly for her now, slightly drenched master to brush her fuzzy coat which makes her look like a small polar bear cub.

“NO…! Dream on~” Risa glared and placed the puppy back on the dry grounds as she walks away from her barking pup.

It was only when Eri suddenly stop barking for some time that she finally turned back to check, finding the puppy eyeing her playfully with her tail swinging lazily from side to side.

Risa frowned when the puppy bowed her head till she was just only about an inch away from the ground before tilting a little to face it with the side of her cheek. The brunette scowled when her puppy teased her with a rubbing action as if attempting to brush her cleaned fur against the dirt ground.

As for the Princess, she was done with cleaning and brushing her kitten for quite some time since Reina is so much smaller than Eri in pet-form. Sitting under the shade of a tree, Ai hugged her kitten to her chest and rested her chin on top of kitty-Reina’s head as they enjoy the little show. Ai just smirked at how smart and monstrous the puppy actually is at bending her master’s will to comply with her request. Nevertheless, who can blame the puppy for being this way since her master was no way better anyway. The Princess was glad her Reina is quite an obedient kitten…in a way.

Risa clenched her fist when her puppy rubbed her face against the ground. Seeing that her master is still refusing to give in, Eri flipped to lay her back flat against the dust filled ground before tilting her head backwards to eye her master upside down, innocently or mischievously, it was really hard to tell unless you are Risa. The puppy is this good.

Ai could not help but laughed at the irony of the situation. Should the brunette be proud or regretful that her puppy, apparently had managed to master something that she herself is pretty good at and was now subjected to it.

After a short game of staring, Eri got tired of it when her persistent master still refuses to budge and resorted to use her triumph card. Much to Risa dismay, her puppy started to wriggle her whole back against the ground. That was the last straw. Risa clicked her tongue before storming forward and lifted Eri straight up.

“You little rascal…! I had just CLEANED you up! Feel lucky that there ain’t any washboard here or you’ll be sooooo dead.” the brunette almost growled as she dusted and patted her puppy like a floor mat, in a considerably gentle way though.

“Oh my……Reina…look what have you got for yourself.” Ai chuckled as she pats her wide-eyed kitten.

Risa was done with dusting her puppy when she sat beside the grinning Princess under the shade and was starting to brush her puppy’s fur.

But even as she does so, her puppy was still shifting and moving around restlessly as she tried to tap on Ai’s arm with her paw, asking for the kitten. As the Princess lowered her kitten to the puppy, Eri nuzzled up to the side of Reina’s face causing the kitten to close both her eyes and purred contently.

“Brushing or kitty. Choose one.” Risa stop brushing half-way through and folded her arms.

Without thinking, Eri picked Reina up with her mouth by the back of the kitten’s neck and trots away from her master. Ai grinned at the little black cotton ball that was dangling from the white fur ball’s mouth. This was the first time her kitten had ever submissively let anyone other than her to carry her around this way, except, of course she does not use her mouth like the puppy does but her hand instead. She had to admit that the helpless kitty look that always appear on Reina’s face when she is carried around this way is really adorable but had never mentioned it though…it will be a rather huge blow to the kitten’s ego.

“I’m gonna burn all your precious fur one of these days… I swear…” Risa mumbled the threat half-heartedly which only got a brief look from her pup before she continued to carry the kitten to another shady spot.

Upon reaching the going-to-be their spot, Eri placed Reina lightly on the ground before changing to semi-human form and squats down to poke the kitten.

“Reina…you are really so tiny…” Eri giggled as Reina tried to push her finger away gently with her little paw.

“How cute……..” the girl tried to scoop the kitty up but Reina managed to get away before bending her forelegs and pounded onto the girl while transforming into her semi-human form, successfully tackling the unwary girl flat on her back.

ROAR...” Risa too upset to think of anything else when the two cuties started to roll on the ground for their fun play.

“What was that about?” Ai mused at the brunette’s choice of word.

“Too pissed for any word…anyway…she wouldn’t listen too.” Risa sighed deeply and pouts cutely before resting her head sluggishly on the Princess’s shoulder.

“Ain’t they cute?”

“We probably look cuter.”

“Oh~ Someone even bypassed to question me now and just tagged me in on whatever she likes.”

“Why are you bullying me too?” Risa whined

“Because……you look cute this way?” Ai said as she runs her finger through the smooth brunette locks.

“HA! Did I hear you say I’m cute?” Risa lifted her head from the raven’s shoulder to look at her.

“Hmmm……Ya…… but probably you are like… 0.1% adorable and 99.9% ugly.”

“I think I’m gonna cry.” the girl pretended to sniff.

“You should. I can lend you this.” Ai chuckled as she taps her shoulder.

Risa rested her chin onto Ai’s shoulder and eyed her playfully before wrapping her arms around her slender waist.

“But it’s because you love me even though I look that ugly to you.”

“I love you?” Ai questioned in an obvious mocking tone

“Woooooo…...Is that a confession?”

“Isn’t it obviousssss……………..That it’s not?” the raven smiled as she speaks the first part of the sentence sweetly before dropping to monotone for the last part.

“Anyway… didn’t I tell you that I hate you?”

“Oh~ you know how that ended up right? Or…… you want to try that again?”

The only answer she got was an overly ebil (a cuter form of evil – came from little kRiSz) mysterious smile from the raven girl.

“Is this like some sort of psychological game or something?”

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“What are you looking at?” Reina tilts her head back to look upside down in the direction the puppy was distracted to. Currently, they were still on the ground… or rather…she is on the ground while Eri is on her.

“Gaki-san never let me do that…”

“Ai-chan never does that to me…”

Both cuties voiced out in unison as they continued to observe the activity that their masters are currently engaged in.

Dropping her attention from the pair, Eri gazed down at the essential “prop” for the stunt. Oblivious of the “threat”, Reina still had her head arched back to view their masters, leaving the so call “prop”, totally exposed at the mercy of the puppy. Leaning down, the puppy experimentally laps it, nabbing the kitten attention instantly.

In shock, the kitten first reaction was to hail the head that was attached to her neck. Lifting it with both hands cupping on the cute face, the puppy reluctantly complied and inched backward just enough for the kitten to see her face with the…….. BEST sad puppy look she can mustered and whines. It was only common for Reina to give in, who would not anyway.

“What have I got myself into…” Reina sighed

“I’ll stop” Eri said as she drops her puppy ears.

“NO! wait…” Reina pulled the withdrawing puppy back, trapping her back in her arms.

“It’s just that………” the kitten paused to make up her sentence while the puppy brightens up a little and raised her ears back up again to let the kitten know she had her full attention.

“I’m not used to having someone other then Ai-chan that is able to……how do I say it? I’m just not a pushover……”

Usually” Reina squeaked the confession out softly as she covers her eyes with a hand.

“This is so embarrassing…” the kitten murmured.

“Reina…you are too adorable.” Eri whispered as she affectionately uses her nose to nudge at the hand that was blocking her view on the golden orbs.

Eri smiled sweetly as the hand revealed the shy golden cat eyes.

“Don’t worry… I’ll chew on anyone that dares to make fun of you.”  Reina chuckled as Eri showed her a cute biting action.

“Even that big brat over there?”

“Oh… That’s an easy one… I don’t even need to bite her to get her to stop.” Eri assured her kitten with a confident smirk.

“Then how about Ai-chan?”

“Hmmm… She is a tough one… probably she understands why you are like this but does it really matter since she is your master?” the puppy gave her a thoughtful look before brushing against the kitten’s cheek.

“Anyway… she doesn’t do what she is doing to Gaki-san often right?… So she shouldn’t be in any position to make fun of you...even if she does…I’m sure I can get her to stop without biting.”

“Brave puppy indeed…” Reina whispered and hooked her arm around the puppy’s neck as the pup moved in for a kiss. Eri was just an inch away from her mouth when she stopped and eyed her playfully. Immediately, the kitten bridged the distance causing the puppy to grin into the kiss.

Reina tightens her hold when the puppy slowly withdrew her tongue from her mouth. She tried to follow it into hers but was shut off by a pair of closed lip. She wanted to protest but only purred when the puppy proceeded to kiss her jawbone and nuzzled into her neck.

For a long moment, the puppy was still nuzzling into her neck but was whining softly, with her ears slightly folded. It took the kitten some time to figure out that the puppy was actually silently asking for her permission to continue.

The downcast ears and whining were just too adorable to be ignored.

Eri shivered involuntary when Reina starts to rub her thumb against her sensitive ear in lazy circles to coax them back up which too, wordlessly granted her request.

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“Oh my” the Princess chuckled.

“What…?” Risa was not very pleased that the Princess had stopped, moreover, giggling into her neck. Risa was not very sure how it all happened but somehow or rather, the Princess managed to get her to straddle her lap and then, she was lost in hickey heaven. A tiny blow to her ego it might be but was overshadowed by the fact that she is the one that brings out this hidden inner self of Ai that she is still taking her time to unhurriedly uncover.

“Reina is so cute!”

Turning to the direction where the Princess was peeking from over her shoulder, Risa grinned. Indeed, the kitten looked so adorable that Risa was considering if she could adopt Reina as well.

Even though it was obvious from the fact that the kitten was enjoying it from all the purring but the look on the kitten was just priceless. She was red up from her neck with her eyes squeezed shut which forms a deep frown as if she was concentrating really hard. Plus, she had a death grip on the puppy’s ear.

“We should be careful on what we teach them.”

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“Where’re we heading to?”

“Somewhere”

“……hint?”

“Somewhere”

“……over the rainbow?”

“……way up high”


“OH! You’ve heard of it.”

“I’m not that outdated.”

Risa chuckled softly as the smiling Princess continues to lead the way.

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“How much is that doggy at the window.”

“Woof woof”

“The one with the wiggly tail”

Eri wigs her tail as Reina giggled.


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Okay! The last two part was totally random... but i thought it was cute... LOL~

I hope the chapter is not too much.... for the...... kids? But i'm the baby! <- haven't been very convincing lately......... hmmmmm~~~ It's just hickey~ LOL~ the pets are just too innocently cute~


Let me introduce! Cotton! I have been bugging my friend to get me one! LOL



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ps: I've seen a doctor and apparently...i got a throat infection! :( Take care people!

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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 14 - Clean Ups (26/01) ]
« Reply #138 on: January 25, 2010, 06:36:10 PM »
 :lol: :lol: This chapter was so cute!! *huggles and cuddles cuteness chapter and Baby Sticky* You're going to kill me with this, but I don't mind.
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“Ai-chan never does that to me…”
I frickin' hope not! XD

I loved the last parts and the kitty vid at the end.

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Re: Esmerelda [ Chapter 14 - Clean Ups (26/01) ]
« Reply #139 on: January 25, 2010, 07:27:52 PM »
I love the kawaii parts in this story :wub:

TakaGaki has some competition still
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