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Thank you - Chapter 11 (KumiNon)
« on: August 13, 2012, 06:47:49 PM »
Hey there guys , I'm New in here & this is the first time I wrote fanfic , so if there is a mistake , pardon me please :bow: , so this is the first chapter , &  I'm truly sorry if it's boring / others , and sorry for my bad grammar  :sweatdrop:

My name is Kimoto Kanon , I'm 16 years old (in this fic ) , Today I'm gonna transfer from xxx school to xxx school .

"Ahhhhh , I'm so nervous right now , what should I do , what should I do " I keep mumbling that word time by time

" Relax sis , it's gonna be okay , trust me " my little sister said that

" Yeah .. I hope so .. "

BTW , this is my little sister , her name is  matsui jurina , she is kind , honest &  friendly , I feel from the tone she speak &  her face is , she is very relax , I don't know why , but , sometimes people say that I'm a shyful type .

*at the front school gate*

"wow , sure is a big school , eh sis ? "

 " Yeah .. Sure is .. "

There is a big clock in the school wall , when I was about to see it , I realize that it is almost the time for the student to study .
So before I go to class , I have to go to principal room , except for my little sister , because she is alread told by the homeroom teacher to study directly , before we go to opposite direction , we said a farewell to each other . When I was about to walk
Again , someone's hit me .... And with a full speed , automatically I fall .

" Ahhhhh !!! Ittai~ !!! " I said as I rub m head

" Uwahh , sorry for that " that person said as she give me a hand to stand up

"Nah , it's okay " I said as I took that person hand , it feels so warm &  comfortable .when I see that person face , I saw a female figure with a black long hair , wearing a jacket with pink colour and headphoen on his neck , I have to say that she is cute.

" You okay ? I'm very sorry about this , and if you excuse me , I have to go to m classroom , 'cause I'm late , so ... Later mmiss " she said as she smile , and ran to her classroom in hurry . When I was about to stand up , I realize there is something on the floor , so I pick it up ... It's a student card . 'Yagami Kumi' so it's her name .

TBC(?) :?

Uwaa , I'm so nervous , Sorry for the boring chapter :( , I think it's short , I mean very very short , I'm truly sorry for this :bow: , I will try the best more in the next  chapter , and if it's not bothering you , please write a comment or critic for this , &  I will try the best for the next chapter  :cry: :panic: :nervous
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Re: Thank you - Kuminon
« Reply #1 on: August 13, 2012, 09:46:31 PM »
 :thumbsup Great opening and it is kind a short but I'm looking forward to read more of your update!


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Re: Thank you - Kuminon
« Reply #2 on: August 13, 2012, 09:51:34 PM »
 :welcome to the forums! I hope you enjoy your time here! Even though it's short, at first I was also not able to write long updates. Practice takes time. So ganbatte, nee?  ;)
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Re: Thank you - Kuminon
« Reply #3 on: August 14, 2012, 08:00:34 AM »
welcome to jphip!

yay! another kuminon fic..

pliz continue~ i want to know what will happen next..


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Re: Thank you - Kuminon
« Reply #4 on: August 14, 2012, 12:00:19 PM »
Welcome  :welcome  :hee:
I love it ! Kuminon FTW !  :kekeke:
It's kinda short ?  :dunno: .... Nahh. It's just a prologue, isn't it ? So I guess it's normal~  :bigdeal:
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Re: Thank you - Kuminon
« Reply #5 on: August 14, 2012, 01:36:19 PM »
@Megumi : Thank you for the comment , i will do my best for the this chapter and the rest  :)

@Sakura_drop_ : Thank you , i will do my best  :D

@yukofan : thank you , i will do my best for this chapter  :)

@chuuupuffss : yeah , it's definitely short , gomenasai  :cry: , in this chapter 2 (or not) i will try my best , and thank you for your comment  :)

so , this is the chapter 2 ..... i guess . anyway , this is it and sorry again for my bad grammar  :bleed eyes:

Chapter 2

after that accident , i directly go to principal room , when i was there , i got a warm greet by my homeroom teacher , his name is Takahashi Kai , i can say from his look that he is a kind person , and i got a warm greet by Akimoto yasushi-san too, the principal of this school . then , after some introduction , Takahashi-san told me to follow him to my new classroom , he told me to stay at front of the classroom for a while , i can hear what he say and the other student say .

"alright , class , please be quiet , we have a new student here ." as he said that , the whole classroom suddenly became quiet .

"sensei"

"yes?"

"is it a girl or a boy?"

"it's a girl.." i hear most of them say 'yayyy' and the other are just keep silent

"okay , then , you may come in .. " then , i go inside the classroom , as i walk to Takahashi-san , some of the student are looking to me with an amazed look on his face , some of the student starting to whispering to each other , i hope it's not a bad thing ..

"Please introduce yourself to them "

"okay , my name is Kimoto Kanon , and i'm a transfer student from xxx school to this school , please take care of me for this year , yoroshiku onegaishimasu" i finished it with a smile , then i bow to them

"okay , Kimoto-san , you may take a seat in...yagami-san front seat" as i heard that name i starting to thinking ' Yagami ... yagami kumi .. it's her ..' after some of my daydreaming , i go to the direction of my seat . when i approach my seat and her , she offered me a smile , then i reply her with a smile too ."

a minute later , i receive a small paper from her , i took it then i read it

'hey there kimoto-san , my name is Yagami kumi nice to meet you :3 you can call me kumi if you want ' as i read it , a smile form in my face . i reply her too , the words that i write is :
'hello Kumi , nice to meet you too , then you can call me kanon too  :D i'm still new in this school , so when it recess , can you tell me each of the place in this school ? if it's not bothering , and oh yeah , i have your student card , i think it's fall to the floor when we hit each other this morning :) ' so i give to Kumi , her student card . not long after that , i receive her small paper again ' sure ! i have a lot of free time , so don't mind it , and thank you for already giving me back my student card ^^ ' i reply to her : ' thank you very much Kumi and your welcome ' . after that , the lesson started

--skip--

*recess bell is ringing*

after Takahashi-san go out some of boys are just staring at me , somehow it makes me a bit uncomfortable . but that uncomfortable vanished when it covers by the girls that come to me .

"hey there , my name's matsui rena , you can call me rena if you want" a girl name matsui rena introduce herself to me , it's amazed me when her last name have a same last name as my little sister . oh yeah , actually my little sister and i have a different father , so her name and my name is different , it cause different father because when my real father died because of an accident , my mom get married to another man , it's jurina father ... but now they are all missing , they left some money and credit card in the house , luckily , i know the password of their credit card so we can survive , i don't know if they abandoned us or died , i feel bad for them if they died before say something to us , that night actually , jurina cry , but i don't , because i have to know if they died or not , so from that day until now , i'm stiil searching for them , but i stiil don't have enough information about them

"a-ahh , uhn ,hello , rena-san "

" you can drop the formality if you want "

"okay then ..... Rena , nice to meet you" i said it with a smile

"uwahh , you're so cute , nice to meet tou too , Kanon" i blush as i hear that

"tha-thank you"

"haha , okay then , kanon , this is my friend , her name is furukawa airi "

"you can call me airin" she said with a smile

" okay then , nice to meet you airin " after that i feel that my back is poke by a finger . when i turn back , it's kumi

"hey hey , you wanna know each of the place in this school right ? "

"ah yeah , sorry for keep you waiting "

"nah , it's okay"

so then , she told me each of the place of this school , this school is definitely big , my feet hurt a lot , but kumi is still have a relax face , maybe she is a athlete or something ? or maybe just i'm the one that very weak ? not sure of it.

--skip--

an hour later , the bell is ringing , it is the time for student to go home .

"hey kanon , i realize that you are very tired of exploring the school am i right ?"

"how do you know ?"

"the way you stand up , your legs is a little bit trembling"

"ah you're right..."

"wanna go to ice cream stall ? i will treat you "

"err .. sure !" then she go to the direction of the ice crean stall , and i just follow her , cause i'm still don't know where the place is

"kanon , which kind of ice cream do you want ?"

"ngg , i will choose cookies and cream then.."

"okay then , mister , 2 cookies and cream please "

"here miss , this will be xx yen" after kumi pay the bill he turn to me , then i say "thank you" to her with a smile , she smile back to me , i feel that there is something ing my cheek , it feel hot , and when i see my reflection on the mirror , my cheek turns red , i have no idea what is that , i keep on rub my cheek , but it's not working , finally , my cheek even become more red than before , maybe beacuse i rub it to hard , oh well , i let it be like that . after having some of the conversation with kumi , the sky turning become more darker , i decide to go home.

"kumi , it's getting darker here" i said that as it getting more cold .

"uhn , we should go home ,i will accompany you till you go home then ."

"is it okay ? you should have go home too , cause it getting more cold in here .."

"it's okay , moreover , when a girl go home at night , it dangerous right ? and plus you're cute , so it will be more dangerous " she said and then turn to me with a smile . the heat on my cheek become more hotter than before , i guess my cheek is like tomato now . luckily , because it's dark she can't see my face is red as tomato , because it's a shameful thing .

"...but you're a girl too right ? isn't it dangerous too ??"

"i'm okay with it , 'cause i study to fight / protect myself from my uncle "

"owh , okay then , thank you kumi" i smile to her

"no prob" she reply to me with a smile too

*a few minute's later*

"this is my house "

"owh , it's a big house "

"yeah , it's quite a big house , ja , once again , thank you for already accompanying me kumi , and be careful on the way to your house " i said as i smile

"you're welcome , thank you , i will be carefull " she smiled back and then leave

*in the house*

"hello si- .............wow ...... you got at attack by an bee ?" jurina said that to me

"nu'uh , no i'm not,do my face really that red?"

"pfttt ... yeah .. your face is even the same as a circus clown.."

"HEY!!!"

when i ran after her , i see a mirror and my reflection ... yeah , i have to agree , my face is similiar to a circus clown face .... TT_TT

TBC

okay then , first i have to apologize for this boring chapter  :cry: , and the second , i'm sorry with my bad grammar  :banghead: , if it's not bothering you (again).. please write a comment or a critic  :panic:  ... and i will try harder next  time ..  :) ( and btw is this short or not ?  :? )

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Re: Thank you - Kuminon
« Reply #6 on: August 15, 2012, 10:16:31 AM »
hey , i'm new in here too  :D , actually i never made a fanfic before , i only read people's fanfic  :hee: , i'm kuminon shipper too  , i think this is quite good ... please update soon  :glasses: oh !! and please take care of me  :kneelbow:

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« Reply #7 on: August 15, 2012, 01:08:23 PM »
Kuminon is an effing cruiser !  :on GJ:
Good job on this chapter ! It's actually kinda longer !  :on GJ:
Yeee~ Can't wait for lovey dovey scenes  :on bleed:
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« Reply #8 on: August 15, 2012, 02:19:21 PM »
So far it's good. Keep this up!  :mon misch:

*is also waiting for some perv scenes...*  :mon star:
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Re: Thank you - Kuminon (chapter 2)
« Reply #9 on: August 15, 2012, 03:12:41 PM »
@Kuro--black : owh , you're new in here too ? well , please take care of me too  :kneelbow: and btw , thank you for already reading this and comment it  :D  :hee:

@chuuupuffss : thank you so much for reading and commenting again  :bingo: i will try more for the next chapter  :whistle:

@sakura_drop_ : thank you so much for reading this ( and commenting )  :mon ignore: i will try more for the next chapter  :mon lurk:

@all : i will try as fast as i can for updating the next chapter 'cause i have to study for exam  :mon study:  :on cloudeye:  :on study: and thank you for reading this fic guys  :oops:  :on drink:

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Re: Thank you - Kuminon
« Reply #10 on: August 15, 2012, 07:49:27 PM »
I always have a place for Kuumin..
Kuumin with anyone..for sure I'll read..

You have a good start here..
please update soon, okay  :D

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Re: Thank you - Kuminon
« Reply #11 on: August 16, 2012, 04:17:29 AM »
@maso-kun : thank you for reading &  commenting this fic :) , maybe when weekend / friday I can update the next chapter ( actually , I reply this secretly , 'cause my mom will get mad when tomorrow exam &  I open my laptop :kekeke: )

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Re: Thank you - Kuminon
« Reply #12 on: August 20, 2012, 07:56:38 AM »
is it short or long? i think it's long enough XD
don't worry about grammar. almost all author here (or maybe all of them, i don't know exactly,hehe) don't use english as their first language. it's very normal to make grammar mistakes. but, i think the most important isn't perfect grammar but making your readers understand what you write. And i can understand what you write very well..

i love your story and i'm waiting for your update..hehe..


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Re: Thank you - Kuminon
« Reply #13 on: August 20, 2012, 06:55:43 PM »
@yukofan : thank you very much :D :onioncheer:

Hey guys , I guess it's a delay update :cool2: , so sorry for that , 'cause I'm still don't have an idea about next chapter & my homework still waiting for me :badluck: sorry about this & thank you for all the readers :)

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« Reply #14 on: August 20, 2012, 07:00:40 PM »
Oh , I see .... Well goodluck with the homework , & I'm looking forward for the next chapter  :twothumbs

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Re: Thank you - Kuminon
« Reply #15 on: August 21, 2012, 10:02:16 AM »
Take your time..
We'll be waiting  :D

Ganbatte Kuumin1234-san!

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« Reply #16 on: August 24, 2012, 05:04:01 PM »
@Kuro--Black : Thank you , i hope you like this chapter , cause i made this one not fully concentrate on the story  :nervous  :banghead:

@masokun: thank you , hope you like this one  :bleed eyes:

in this chapter , i made kumi and kanon still not close yet , cause i think it's still to early , so guys i hope you like it ^^"

Chapter 3

so today is the second day of my school , before school i do my daily activity first , like taking a quick bath , make a breakfast for my sister and me , after that we go to school .

"let's go sis or we will be late"

"okay , wait a sec" i said that as i see my reflection on the mirror , i'm glad that there is no red tint on my cheek like yesterday , i'm starting to thinking , is that a blush ? maybe yes , maybe not ..
after that we walk to the direction of the school , unwittingly i don't pay my attention on the road as i cross the traffic

"SIS !! WATCH OUT!!" i  i hear jurina shouting at me from behind and a horn of a car , when the car almost hit me , i feel there is a hand from behind pull me , i feel relieve when i know that the car will not hit me

"phew , that's a close one !! you okay ?? " after that , i look up and saw kumi face , her face is so close to me , then i fell my cheek is hot ....again.

"i-i'm okay , thank you kumi " i smile to her

"no prob!! " she said with a wide smile on her face

"thank goodness !! i though you were gonna hit by that car !! " jurina said that with a concern look and a sigh after she approach me

"huff .. that nearly give me a heart attack" suddenly i see rena beside jurina , that give me shock , also to jurina , i don't feel there is a presence other than jurina and kumi , maybe i just too focus on my incident .

" w-whoa ..." i see jurina touch her chest , and with a freak out face seeing rena

"hm? what's wrong ?"Rena said that with smile , then i took glance at jurina again .. as a sister , i know that jurina talking to herself say ' wow , what beauty '
   
"n-nothing ..  " jurina  said as there is a red tint on her cheek , maybe she is blushing ... wait it's similiar to me ... i'm blushing ?

"kanon ? hellooo~?"

"N-nani?" i snap  when i hear kumi voice

"are you daydreaming ?" she said with a giggle

"errr...ehe , maybe ... ?" i said with an embarrassment laugh

"haha , you're funny " she said with a smile on his face.and then, for the second time , i fell my cheek becoming hot again .. yeah , i think i'm blushing and my heart is beating faster than usual

"t-thank you k-kumi...." i said

"ah !! and by the way , guys this is jurina , my sister .. jurina , this is rena-chan and kumi " in a moment i thought in kumi eyes , deep in it , i see a flash of pain and sadness but  think it's only my feeling

"nice to meet you guys " jurina said with a smile

"nice to meet you" they said in unison and with a smile too

"okay then , we shall go now " i said to them , and as a reply they nod to me

*at the school*

before we go inside the school i see kumi looking left and right , i ask her what's the matter , but she said nothing's matter ... so i just nod and go inside the school

"jurina , i'll go to this direction , take care of yourself  "

"hai , hai" she said and go to the direction of her classroom

"alright then , let's go to the classroom " kumi said , then smile to me , as a reply i smile back to her

after some hours of study , the recess bell is ringing , so after the teacher go out , we walk to the cafeteria

"soo , kumi what do you want to eat ? " rena ask

"hm , i will just eat kimchi " kumi said

"how about you kanon ?" ask kumi as her face turn to me

"errr .. chicken katsu .."

" 'kay ..... let's start kumi "

"Let's go !!!!" i look at them with a confused look

"JAN KEN PON!!!"  kumi with a scissor form , and Rena with a rock form , ohhh , so they do a jan ken pon ... but i still don't know what for they play that at this time ...

"arghhh , how can i lost !?" kumi said as she staring her hand with a glare

"yes"rena said with a happy face

"erggg .. nevermind that .. kanon let's start !"

"he ? start what ?"

"Jan ken pon , of course " she said as a wide smile form on her face

"o-ok then ..." and then we start it

"JAN KEN PON!!" i , with a paper form , and kumi with a scissor form again

"Yatta!! i love you scissor!!"

"a-ahh .. haha , i lost ... but what is this for ?"

"for buy the lunch , look at there" she said as she point the stall direction with her index finger

"in i and rena tradition , those who lost have to buy it , and then give the food that we order then give it to us , but of course for the money we paid it by ourself" kumi explained

" ehhhhh ?? but there is so much student on that stall , how can i buy it , i'm so small , not like you guys "

"well ... that's make a point though .... ah !! how about this ?"then kumi start whispering to rena

"okay then"rena said

"okay , kanon .. because you're body is small,i will help in this .."

"oh , okay then"

"let's go"

then we go inside the crowd , it's so full of student in here , it's so hard to breath in here , i already see all of the direction , but still don't see kumi ,  when i was about to stuck , i feel a hand on my left hand

"gotcha!!"

"kumi.." i blush , when i realize that her hand holds my hand ,  then she smile to me

"excuse me , excuse me" kumi leads the way , while i just follow her with kumi hands hold my hand

"hufff...finally ... miss !! chicken katsu , kimchi and beef teriyaki please !!!" after some minute we got the food that kumi order

"okay , i'm finish paying , can you hold this one kanon ?" she offer me to hold rena beef teriyaki

"s-sure"

"ok , let's go back , c'mon " she give me a hand so that we will not be separated again in this crowded

"..uhn" i take her hand with a blush on my face

finally we got out from that crowded , and we see rena waiting in the back of the crowd

"huff .. huff .. rena .. here's your's ..huff.." kumi said and give rena's food between her panting

"wow , you sure are sweating a lot ... " rena say as she take her food from kumi

"yea ...huff..  this day become even..huff.. more and more student "

"errr... kumi "

"huff..yes..?"

"thank you" i smile to her , then i saw she's blushing .. or maybe she's just to tired so her face become red

"......"

"kumi?"

"ah , yes , your welcome" she smile to me

"hoho ... interesting..."

then i look to another direction , there i saw jurina

"hi rena - sempai " jurina say with a smile

"hi" rena reply back with a smile

"what do you mean interesting ?"i and kumi said in unison

"i'll tell you later , when we eat together , 'kay ?" she said as there is a smirk on his face

".......?"

then after some minute jurina comeback

"let's eat !!" she said with a wide smile , some minute pass , no one said anything .. it's a silence , but it's a comfortable silence

"sooo ... what so interesting about ? " kumi ask

"o yea , i forgot .. it's you , kumi - sempai .."

"what so interesting about me? " after kumi ask that , jurina start to smirk

"you're blushing back there when onee-chan say 'thank you' " after jurina said that , kumi make a hand form of 'x'

"no , i'm not !!"

"yes you are , don't underestimate me , even i'm more younger than you guys " she still on his smirk mode face

"noooo , i'm just feel hot and tired so my face become red " kumi still denies that

"so why do your face start to become red when onee-chan said that , before onee-chan said that , the colour of you face still normal"

"u-ughh..." finally she surrender

"see!! i told 'ya !" she said with a proud pose

"congrat sis !!" when kumi , jurina and rena look at me , i start to blush again knowing that she's blushing when i said that back there

"whoooo , sis start to blushing too " jurina said

"jurina , stop that !!" i yell at her but my 'blush' still not dissapear yet from my face

"bye sis , i have to go to my classroom !!! good luck !!" she said then she leave

"what do she mean by goodluck?" i thought

"let's go kanon , it's our time to go back to the classroom too " rena said

"ah , okay "

--skip--

another hours have pass , and the final bell's ring

"let's go home kanon , i will accompany you again , because i'm afraid something will happen to you" she said with a concern tone and a small smile

" is it okay ? sorry for bothering you , thank you kumi " i smile to her

"it's okay , nah , it's not bothering me , i'm the one who want to accompany you , and your welcome " she smile at me , but this time , it's a warm smile , actually , i really love her smile

"hehe , ah (look at the phone).......... jurina said she want to study at her friend's house , so she will be at home at night"

"what a coincidence"

"uhn"

on the way to my house , kumi seem acting a bit strange , she always look back several times
 
"what's wrong kumi?"

"shhh.....i think someone is stalking us ..." she whispering to me

"heeeee??really ??" i said with a whisper-shout voice

"yeah... wait a second okay ?" after she said that , she take out her mobile phone , and then make a contact with someone
 
"oji-san? can you please pick me and my friend ? and please be fast and bring some of the bodyguard .......... the road is xxxxxx ... okay ..... i will wait you here , thank you " and then she hang up his phone

"okay then , kanon , we have to go to save place first okay ? and make sure you're ready , cause we have to be very very careful ... my instinct tell me that there is more then 1 guy ... i think ... 3 guys is stalking on us ..." as i hear that , i become scared , cause maybe we'll be attack by those guys , i feel my leg start to trembling.

"kanon, stay calm okay ? you don't need to be worry , cause i'm here for you ... and i'm good at fighting"she said that to me , hearing that make me blush and relieved at the same time . why am i blushing many times since i meet kumi? that question keep ringing on my thought , but i try to stay focus on this dangerous condition

"o-okay .. i will try " i whisper back to her

" 'kay , we have to move fast okay ? " she whisper to me , after that i nod and then she grab my hand , her hand is so soft and warm i have to say. but not in a few second , another hand at my back pulling me hard , automatically my hand that kumi grab is off from her hand .

"yagami kumi ..... it's been a long time ..  "another guy with a one patch eye  said

"you....let go of her ..." kumi said as she give him a glare

"oh no , i'm scared " he said with a teasing tone , it's make kumi become angry , and somehow it's irritating me

" i said let go of her ... or else ... " this time it's a deathglare

"or else what ?"

"........."

"hahhh , you've not change since that day .... you're lucky that i let you live longer ... don't you feel gratitude of me?" i see kumi eyes twitched

"no...unless you don't kill her ..."

"who ? ohhhhh ..... that girl ?? your sister am i right ? well , it's your father fault , 'it's the payment for already giving me this" he point to his another eye that closed by the patch

"....and for make my life even worse then before..."

" if you hate my father that much , why do you kill my sister ?! she is not into you and my father business !!!"

"why? ... it's fun ... yea , it's fun !!!! " he said as he laugh

"!!!!!!!?????? W-WHAT TH-- "

"but ... you don't need to be sad anymore ... i want to help you again .... in a moment ... you will meet her .... "

i saw that guy take out a knife from his pocket , as i saw that my legs start to trembling again .

"but be patience okay ? i want to kill you slowly that you will fell what i'm suffering for this long " he said as he approach kumi , with a smirk on his face

"NO!!!!DON'T!!!!!!!!!"

TBC  :nervous

is this short ?  :bleed eyes: i'm very sorry for this , if it's a boring and  i'm sorry for my bad grammar  :depressed: and thank you for all the readers  :kneelbow: and please give me an advice if there some mistake or other :bingo: thank you  :)

Offline Kuro--Black

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Re: Thank you - Kuminon
« Reply #17 on: August 24, 2012, 05:16:20 PM »
yeyeyeyeyyyy , an update  :onioncheer: haha, jurina was funny  :D and go kuuminon go go !!! :on woohoo: ah , and i see why you can concentrate , because you have a exam right  :hehehe: ... or not  :grr: .. well , nevermind ,  thanks for the update , hope you can update soon , and goodluck on your homework and exam ( if there are ) :hee:

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Re: Thank you - Kuminon
« Reply #18 on: August 24, 2012, 05:22:11 PM »
@kuro--black wow , so fast  :lol: thank you for the comment and the 'goodluck' i will try my best for the next chapter  :bingo:

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Re: Thank you - Kuminon
« Reply #19 on: August 24, 2012, 06:10:04 PM »
Kumixnon. . .This fic is cüte. . .co'z kanon is in there^^. .the way kumi acts towards kanon is s0oo. . .cool!. .waiting for the next!
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