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Prisoner(Shuujin) - COMPLETED
« on: August 26, 2013, 09:05:55 AM »
So... H-h-how's it goin bros?  O0 I'm back with another OS  :grin:

Anyways, this Fic is based on the vocaloid song "Shuujin" or "Prisoner"
this song was sang by Kagamine Len.

Now, I made a story out of the whole song 2 years ago.  and the fanfic was just sitting there, on my documents.

And now! I have decided to re-write my old Kagamine fic! :D

And here it is!

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It's another LONG one... Bear with it please... :bow:


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The Prisoner (Shuujin)



In the cold & cruel World War II there was a 12 years old boy named Airi

he was imprisoned by the Japanese military accused to be stealing goods

and the military’s weapons from the Military's base and selling them to the American soldiers.

He was arrested and sentence to prison for a lifetime.




2 years has passed and the war is still going the imprisoned boy
has become a Teenager who has been beaten up by the guards

in some days his only wish is to be free, but his realization of his freedom…can never be attained.
He keeps looking at the skies and keeps imagining what his life would be


like if he gets released from the cold prison…but he knows he will never leave the prison.

He was robbed of his freedom after his persecution….



One day as he was outside the cell he saw a beautiful young girl
who was about a year younger than him, she was wearing a white dress

and was wearing a straw hat, he moved closer to the barbed fence and asked the girl




Airi: um…miss May I ask why you are in a place like this?





The girl turned around and said to him with a cute smile




**** : Me? Oh nothing~ I just like to go out for a while~




Airi smiled as he watches the girl pick up some flowers and he thought to himself


Airi: ‘I would never know that there is a beautiful flower blooming in a corrupted & dark place in this world….’



As soon as he met her he has now fallen in love with a girl beyond the fence the separates him from his own freedom

Soon the girl spoke to him




****: hey! Hey! Do you wanna be friends?





As she asked with a smile and cheery tone

Airi asked her in a sad but curious tone in return





Airi: Why? Why do you wanna be friends with a dirty & beaten up prisoner like me..?




She replied to him with a straight face



****: well…you seem to have the same lonely eyes as me… and we’re both imprisoned by someone who’s more powerful than us….



In his mind he thought he has found the only freedom from the prison. But he asked.




Airi: but what if a guard sees us talking to each other?




She replied as she smiled and tilted her head a bit





****: We’ll just have to send Paper Planed letters to each other and secretly read them~!




He was surprised by her Idea but at the same time he was happy
that he has finally saw his freedom….the freedom of his friendship and his love for that girl.




Then she added







***: Tomorrow I’ll bring some papers and 2 pencils!





Soon she waved goodbye and left, Airi was truly happy and soon the guard told him




Guard: Hey you!! What are you looking at you stupid brat? It’s time to go back to your cell now!




He acted depressed and gloomy like he always does and went back to his cell.

As night falls the sound of guns and cannons are still echoing in the lifeless night of the war,
Airi has grown used to the sound and didn’t bother to look at the battle field,

His mind was somewhere else, his mind was focused on the girl

she meet earlier today and he was smiling for once in 2 years,

he was excited to see her tomorrow again…




he knows that between him a dirty prisoner and her there was a huge difference
but both shared a common life… robbed of freedom and confined in one place.



The next day the prisoners were let out of their cell house for a little sunshine,
Airi went to the same place where he met her the other day, he waited for her.
As time passes he now doubts if she will ever come.



Soon he turned around and started to walk away but before he could a familiar voice echoed in his ears….

It was the girl she met, he turned around and smiled
The girl was carrying papers and pencils, the girl threw



a paper plane over the barbed fence, Airi runs a bit far back


he soon jumps and catches the plane. He falls on his butt and he said.




Airi: Ita! (Ouch)




The girl giggled and shouts




***: Are you alright?



He replied while rubbing his butt




Airi: I think so…




He stood up and walked near the fence, the girl carefully gave her papers
and a pencil to him; Airi then takes them carefully as well and said to her




Airi: Arigatou~ (Thanks)




She replied to him with a beautiful smile




****: No problem! From now on we’ll be secretly messaging each other okay?




Airi nodded and hid the paper and pencil in his shirt, and then a guard called out



Guard: Okay you little Idiotic monsters time to go back to the cell!




Airi said to her quickly




Airi: I have to go now; you should go too you might get in trouble…




She nodded and dashed away before any guard saw her


The night falls silent and the moon shines on Airi as he reads the letter



“Hey I hope you can get released out of the prison I really wanna play with you outside soon!
And if you do let’s play every day outside even if it’s raining!!
I’ve got lots of stuff I wanna share with you~ don’t forget to write back okay~? See you tomorrow!!”




Then he thought to himself


Airi: “I'll Be free one day even If I know that It's a lie... If I had you, whatever lies there were...I felt that they all could become the truth… all I want is you to come over here and speak with me…at least once... no letters... just our own words...”

[/i]



And so day by day they sent paper planes to each other,
Airi felt as if he’s the happiest Prisoner alive in those cells
He thought



Airi: 'It hurts to not be free…she’s different from where I am now but…She made me feel happy again, and thanks to her I can be free in my own way….because of her I feel alive again….'



For months they’ve been sending planes with smiles on their faces
He thought





Airi:  “looking at you, it is my small happiness for tomorrow, every day since then for many days and months your paper airplanes have been my joy…..”




But little did he know he’s being watched by one of his in mates.
As the week passes by the girl slowly stops coming.


One day the girl came back and threw a paper plane to him she looked really sad,

Airi was happy to see her but…he knew there was something wrong.
He caught the letter and unfolds it, and it says:




I’m sorry that I haven’t been here sending you letters anymore and I’m sorry I worried you, but…this is the last letter I’m going to give you…I can’t see you anymore…I’m sorry but this is goodbye....”




Airi trembles from the letter he read…then he said to himself



Airi: n-no…this…this can’t be




He held the letter on his right hand and tightened his grip, the girl turned away and soon Airi shouted


Airi: I’ll wait for you no matter how long! I promise I’ll treasure this letter and away from any harm…just tell me…Tell me that we’ll meet again!




Soon the girl ran back to where she came and Airi’s tears rolled down his face he dropped down to his knees and hands,
never in his life had he ever felt this pain in his heart….he cried out his pain… and he said



Airi: you were the only one who kept me happy…you’re the only one who kept me alive with your letters…



Soon they were called back to their cell and airi walked in with tears…
As he laid down on the floor with his letters from the girl 2 guards

and the Head general in charged appeared in front of his cell gate the 1st guard
opened the gate then both of them took him out of his cell by force,


and restrained him on the ground…
the general took the letter out from his hand…the last letter that the girl gave Airi…
He tore it apart and Airi’s


eyes widen as the fallen pieces of paper slowly floats down on the floor…

his own rage gave him strength and got out of the
restraint hold down and charged after the General.


He punched the general on the face….
the General fell on the floor and the general said to the 2 guards





General: TAKE HIM TO THE GAS CHAMBER!!!




The 2 guards responded




Guards: Yes general!



They took Airi away, He tried to resist but the guards are too strong for him

Soon he was thrown in to the chamber along with the others

who has disobeyed and resisted the Military’s head general…
the doors slowly closes, Airi quickly stood up and ran towards the door,

but he was too late the door was closed and
the poisonous gas leaks in the chamber, the sounds of desperate pleads



are heard in and out of the chamber the pleads of many innocent people,
He’s breathing heavily as the gas’s effect takes in, he said to himself



Airi: why…? What did do wrong to deserve this…?



He coughed and coughed harder as his lung inhales the toxic gas….

Airi desperately bangs on the door with the side of his fist he yelled as he falls to his knees




Airi: PLEASE…I WANT TO SEE HER ONCE MORE!! PLEASE I’M BEGGING YOU….LET ME SEE HER FOR ONE LAST TIME! Please….just…just give me a little more time…let me talk to her…..let me see her… PLEASE!!! I just wanna see her….


[/i][/b]

But his desperate plead was ignored…

has he fell on to his knees the only thing he hears is the voice of the girl…


He stood up and bangs on the closed metal door and yells and yells,



his tears dripped on the floor …
He yelled on the top of his lungs while he bangs on the door



Airi: I’M BEGGING YOU!!! LET ME SEE HER!!!




He soon falls on both his knees and hands…

he held his neck tight until it scarred….


he’s running out of breath, and he went on his knees


his arms hanging down and his hands on the floor….
Then he shouts



Airi: PLEASE!! GIVE ME A LITTLE MORE TIME TO LIVE!!


 
His breathing slowly fades and soon he collapses on the floor….


his eyes saw the small piece of the letter…


he tried to reach out to it….



he grabs the piece and thought...



Airi: You mad me happy…you made feel alive….for a flower who hides in the dark & cruel place you bloomed right before my eyes…but I never…got to know your name…..



And so Airi died in the gas chamber while holding the last pieces of the torn letter
of the only girl he ever loved but never knew…..


~The End~









« Last Edit: October 21, 2017, 09:21:01 PM by sophcaro »

Offline kevinwkl

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Re: Prisoner(Shuujin)
« Reply #1 on: August 26, 2013, 09:19:47 AM »
lol..

How dare you do this to your own senpai XD

It was sweet in the beginning, though...

But the ending was.................................. NACCHAN Y U DO THIS???????

TWIT TWIT!!

SIZZLE SIZZLE!!

QUACK!

Write more! XD

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Re: Prisoner(Shuujin)
« Reply #2 on: August 26, 2013, 11:14:37 AM »
NAMI

Whoa!!! Another fic

And its Airin again

Nice,,, errr keep it up

And I'm gonna steal sakuratan from you while you are busy fan girly over Airin
Muahahahaha

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Re: Prisoner(Shuujin)
« Reply #3 on: August 26, 2013, 03:24:01 PM »
Nicely written fic. You missed changing a name.

"The night falls silent and the moon shines on Len as he reads the letter"

Hope I did not offend you or anything.

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Re: Prisoner(Shuujin)
« Reply #4 on: August 26, 2013, 03:29:40 PM »
Nicely written fic. You missed changing a name.

"The night falls silent and the moon shines on Len as he reads the letter"

Hope I did not offend you or anything.

Oh God that was embarassing XD
 Thank you for seeing it!! I have now edited the mistake :bow: :bow: :bow: :bow:
 :nervous


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Re: Prisoner(Shuujin)
« Reply #5 on: August 26, 2013, 03:32:45 PM »
Nicely written fic. You missed changing a name.

"The night falls silent and the moon shines on Len as he reads the letter"

Hope I did not offend you or anything.

Oh God that was embarassing XD
 Thank you for seeing it!! I have now edited the mistake :bow: :bow: :bow: :bow:
 :nervous

Hehe! No problem. I believe that a fic this good should be perfect so I try to help out if I see something wrong.

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Re: Prisoner(Shuujin)
« Reply #6 on: August 26, 2013, 03:34:13 PM »
Found another one:

"Soon the girl ran back to where she came and Len’s tears rolled down his face he dropped down to his knees and hands,
never in his life had he ever felt this pain in his heart….he cried out his pain… and he said"

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Re: Prisoner(Shuujin)
« Reply #7 on: August 26, 2013, 03:39:39 PM »
Found another one:

"Soon the girl ran back to where she came and Len’s tears rolled down his face he dropped down to his knees and hands,
never in his life had he ever felt this pain in his heart….he cried out his pain… and he said"


 :bow: :bow: :bow: THANK YOU SO SO VERY MUCH!!!

I re-read everything like 15 times now and I didn't notice  :banghead:

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Re: Prisoner(Shuujin)
« Reply #8 on: August 26, 2013, 03:44:16 PM »
Found another one:

"Soon the girl ran back to where she came and Len’s tears rolled down his face he dropped down to his knees and hands,
never in his life had he ever felt this pain in his heart….he cried out his pain… and he said"


 :bow: :bow: :bow: THANK YOU SO SO VERY MUCH!!!

I re-read everything like 15 times now and I didn't notice  :banghead:

Hehe! I actually only noticed the first Len when I read it. I just decided to check again just to make sure by using CTRL + F and typing Len. That's how I found the second one.

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Re: Prisoner(Shuujin)
« Reply #9 on: September 07, 2013, 05:02:30 PM »
GOODNESS~!!!!!!  :OMG: :OMG: :OMG:

 :frustrated: :frustrated: :frustrated:

WHY???!!!! SO TRAGIC!!!

LOVE IT~!

:on speedy: :on speedy: :on speedy:

You made me shed a tear..

Ohman~! I just remember how the lives of people who were involved in WW I & II.. Such cruel life... sighs..

:ptam-cry: :ptam-cry:

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Re: Prisoner(Shuujin)
« Reply #10 on: September 07, 2013, 05:26:41 PM »
Namimi~~~~~~~!!!!!!

Wai? How cud u let Airin die?!!!

Nao I demand a happy Furuyanagi from you for my B-day!!! It's on Monday so u still have time!!! Mou, u made me cry u baka!!!!
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Re: Prisoner(Shuujin)
« Reply #11 on: September 08, 2013, 01:45:18 AM »
Namimi~~~~~~~!!!!!!

Wai? How cud u let Airin die?!!!

Nao I demand a happy Furuyanagi from you for my B-day!!! It's on Monday so u still have time!!! Mou, u made me cry u baka!!!!

It's the story of the song!!  :depressed: I can't change the flow of the story that's in the song!  :on shady: (and since it was an old fanfic for the Kagamine Twins It's a bit hard to change their tragic story like this one  :err:)


And sure, for your Birthday I shall make a fluffy FuruYanagi   :hehehe:

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Re: Prisoner(Shuujin)
« Reply #12 on: September 08, 2013, 03:06:58 AM »
I wanted to read this a few times ago when it got pushed to the top of the first page... but I got lazy...
and now...
AIRI!!!! cries...

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Re: Prisoner(Shuujin) [Announcement]
« Reply #13 on: September 09, 2013, 12:59:19 PM »
Ok! so Yeah... Airin-senpai dies... I'm sorry!!   :on cloudeye:

Anyways, There will be a Follow-up story for "Shuujin" and the title is!!!!

"Paper Plane"  :w00t:

This next story will be an Answer to the story "Shuujin" And in this story
We will finally find out who the girl is!

But Fair warning!

You might wanna bring some tissues while reading it  :sweatdrop:

[I doubt you'll ever need them, because my story sucks and what not]


Anyways! I hope you guys look forward to it!

And also, that fic is the same with "Shuujin" it's been sitting in my documents for 2 years, untouched and now, unfinished and a Kagamine Fic that I would fix
 :sweatdrop:

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