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Re: Too Young
« Reply #220 on: July 27, 2007, 05:16:26 AM »
The line about recoginizing Miya by her chin cracked me up :lol:
Okay, back to the more solemn stuff. This chapter was good, showing how the girls cared about each other and you even managed some funny moments in between *thumbs up*

Oh and YAY to the new Yurina PB. It was time she got some attention.

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Too Young: Unorthodox Finale
« Reply #221 on: July 29, 2007, 02:20:37 AM »
It's been a while since I last wrote here. Well, you know me. I only write if a) something good happens, b) something weird happens or c) something bad happens. In this case, it's all of the above.

Well you see, Sugaya and I, we had a fight.

It started a few weeks back. As usual, I walked her home after school. But we didn't hold hands. Even before that, I already knew something was wrong because there was something different with how she talked to me in school that day. I'd talk to her but it seemed that she wasn't really listening to me. She'd just give a slight nod or raise an eyebrow. I was thinking that maybe she has something in mind again, like what she did a few months ago. But I was wrong.

Just before she went inside their house, she stopped and asked me something...

"Captain said you two watched a movie before. Is that true?" she asked.

I looked at her. Maybe the way I looked at her already told her that I was guilty.

"Yes." it would be useless to make excuses. It was Captain who told her about it so I had to answer her with the truth. She deserves to know. "But..."
"How come you didn't tell me about it?"
"I was gonna tell you about it. I was just waiting for the right time to..."
"And when will that be?"
"I...I don't know."
"So if Captain didn't tell me about, you would have just kept quiet?"
"That's not..."

She didn't let me finish. She went inside and closed the gate behind her.

I could feel that she was just leaning behind the gate but I couldn't do anything to break the silence. I wanted to explain. I know I should have apologized. But I didn't do anything. I just left. I heard their gate open after a few steps but I didn't look back. I was afraid of what she'll tell me. I was afraid to look if I made her cry again. I didn't know what I should say. I just left.

When I got home, I sent a message to Shimizu-san, asking her if I could give her a call. She replied after a few minutes.

"Shimizu-san, there's..."
"There's something wrong, isn't it?"
"Yes."
"So Rii-chan told you that I told her about that date we had."
"Yes."
"She's angry at you, isn't she?"
"Yes."
"You're mad at me, aren't you?"
"Huh? What for?"
"Because I told her?"
"It's fine. I was going to tell her about it anyway. At least she didn't learn it from someone else."
"Right."
"By the way, do the other girls know about it too?"
"Nope. Only Rii-chan knows."
"I see. Alright. I'll talk to you later Shimizu-san. Thanks."

Honestly, I didn't have any bad feelings towards Shimizu-san. She just did what she had to do. I just hope that she Sugaya are not in bad terms.

I didn't try to contact Sugaya anymore that day. I didn't want to explain to her through phone. I planned to tell everything to her on school the next day. No letters this time. I'll tell everything she needs to know, everything she has to know.

But she didn't go to class.

I was thinking that maybe they had an event scheduled for that day only. I wasn't worried.

But she didn't go to class for two weeks.

Now I was worried. I tried to call her a few times but she wouldn't pick up.

I didn't bother calling Shimizu-san, Natsuyaki-san or the others to ask if they knew what Sugaya was up to because that would make it look like Sugaya and I aren't communicating. I was the one who put myself into this mess, and I should be the one to find a way to fix it.

It felt like that time. That time when we didn't talk because I wasn't able to watch the concert because I lost the ticket she gave me. But that could have been avoided. If I was more careful. It seems that I haven't changed at all...


It was lonely without her.

I've gotten used to walking her home after school.
Sharing the umbrella with her when it's raining.
Buying her ice cream when she asks me to.
Helping her understand the lessons she didn't quite get that day.
Hearing her giggle after figuring out how easy it was.
I miss when she whispers, "Get home safely" when I leave.

She never called me. Did she even try?

I know I did. I tried calling her but she didn't answer.

I didn't know what was going on. I guess this is how breaking up feels like. So this is how it ends afterall...


I caught the flu a few days back and I missed class for a few days. When I got back, some my other classmates told me that Sugaya already attended class. I waited for her to arrive that day but she didn't come. Maybe something came up again. When I got back from school, I was surprised to find my sister waiting for me at the door.

"You're late! Where have you been onii-chan?"
"Umm...school? Why?"
"Tss. One of your classmates went here. But she went home now."
"Really? Now who could that be?
"She was wearing glasses and a cap and she had nice clothes and she was cute. She asked if you were here but I said you weren't home yet. She said she'll wait for you so I let her in. We played some Puyo Puyo and she was quite good. We ate some snacks too. Then she asked me how you were doing."
"What did you tell her?"
"I told her that onii-chan and his girlfriend broke up. And I told her that onii-chan got sick. And that onii-chan was acting kinda weird these past days. And that onii-chan started using chopsticks with his left hand. And that onii-chan was crying in his sleep while calling her name..."
"Use chopsticks with my left hand? I don't do that! And cry in my sleep while calling out her name? When did that happen? I don't remember any of that!"
"How would you know that onii-chan? You were asleep."
"Fine. What else did she ask you?"
"She asked if I listened to Berryz Koubou. I told her I did. Then she asked me if I had any favorite member."
"You told her that it's Natsuyaki, right?"
"Yeah. Miyabi-san and..."
"And?"
"Chinami-san! She's cool and funny!"
"What did my classmate say?"
"She said that Miyabi-san has a sharp chin and Chinami-san can't be seen if the lights are out."
"She said that? Haha! What did you do?"
"I laughed. Because it's true."
"Haha. What else did you talk about?"
"She told me to tell you that you should give her a call."
"Did she tell you what her name was?"
"She said her name was Star. Weird name. But she looked a bit different too, she looked like a foreigner, though her voice sounded really familiar. Oh, oh, and she had this bracelet too. ."
"Star huh? She told you that I should give her a call?"
"Yeah. And she said that if you don't, she'll..."
"Okay."
"Don't tell me you replaced Risako-san with that girl. Star-chan's nice but I won't forgive you onii-chan..."

I went inside and headed to my room. I dialed Star's number.

No answer

I started to change out of my uniform when my phone started to ring. It was her.

"Call me." she said before she hung up.

I called her.

"It's been so long since we last talked huh?" she told me.
"Yeah. I tried to call you but you don't answer. I can explain everyth..."
"You don't have to."

This is it.

She's going to tell me that it's over. I wanted to cancel the call before she could tell me but I guess it was over the moment she closed the gate behind her. It's been this far. I will let her go if she tells me to. So I won't hurt her again. It's what's best for her.

"Risako..."

It was good that Shizuka was able to meet and talk to her today. That's probably the last time it will happen.

"I'm sorry..."

Yep. This is it.



The end





























"..."
"How come you never took me out on a movie date before?"
"W...what?"
"How come you never took me out on a movie date before? Captain said that she had fun when you went out."
"Is that so?"
"And she said that you have naughty hands. I wonder how naughty they are. Maimi-chan was right about you liking to touch butts.."
"No I don't. Shimizu-san's the one who has naughty hands. And Yajima-san's the one who likes being touched in the butt. She placed her hands on top of mine so I couldn't take it off her."
"Really? I'm going to tell that to them!"
"Go ahead. Just try sitting next to Shimizu-san in a movie house."
"I have. So it was her who was touching me before. It wasn't Miya!"
"S...she did w...what?"
"She also said that you were late when you went out."
"I wasn't late. I was there a few minutes before her but I left my phone at home so I wasn't able to tell her where I was."
"How'd you find her then?"
"Well, if tall people are easy to find, then so are small people. Don't tell her that."
"Hahaha. True, true. So, what's up?"
"Wait. You're not..."
"Not what?"
"I thought you were mad at me?"
"I'm sorry. I'm sorry if I acted like a real jerk before. Sorry if it looked like I was mad at you. I admit. I was a bit jealous when Captain told me about it but it's really...something you should not worry about. And what gave you the idea that we split?"
"You left without saying anything. You weren't answering my calls."
"Oh that? I left my phone at home. I had to go somewhere to do something."
"I see. So we're still...you know...still..."
"We're still us."
"Still us. Okay."
"So, did you miss me?"
"Of course."
"I missed you too you know."

***
"Your little sister was cute! She beat me a few times in Puyo Puyo."
"Thanks. I guess your disguise worked this time. She didn't know that it was you, Star-chan."
"Haha. She didn't? Then I have to use that kind of disguise more. Also, I didn't know that she likes Miya and Chii-chan."
"Well, yeah. She buys a lot of your stuff and C-ute's stuff so..."
"Do you think she likes me too?"
"Of course."
"Aww."
"Where have you been?"

Before she could answer, Shizuka knocked at the door. I told Sugaya to hold on for a while as I opened it.

"Your classmate told me to give this to you." she said as she handed me a package wrapped with some brown paper. Then she left.

I started to talk to Sugaya after I placed the package on top of my desk.

"Did your sister give something to you?"
"Yeah. She just handed it to me."
"Tell me if you like it."
"I haven't opened it yet."
"Open it then."
"Can I just open it later? I want to talk with you."
"Okay."
"Okay."
"So, when will you take me out on a movie date?"
"When do you want to?"
"Saturday would be nice."
"Saturday then."
"Great! Want me to bring Captain too? You know, so I can prove that she doesn’t have naughty hands."
"Haha. Maybe some other time. Let’s spend that time together. You know, just the two of us."
"Okay."

We talked. I don't remember for how long. It didn't matter. I missed talking to her. I really thought that it was all over. I'm glad that it isn't. We stopped when she said that she had to sleep already and told me that she'll see me in class the next day. I told her that I'll wait for her.

"Who said you'll be the first to be there? I will be the one waiting for you! Tomorrow okay? " she said before she hung up.

She's really something.

The package she sent me caught my attention. I started to remove the paper she used to cover it.

It was a photobook.

Sugaya's photobook.

PURE+

So she went out to make a new photobook. She looks good on the cover. I didn't open it. Yet.

Hearing her voice again took away all my worries, well at least for now. After seeing the phtobook, I felt a mild jolt on the the scar on my eyebrow, the only thing left to remind me of that incident...

I noticed that there was also a small note attached to her photobook.

"Whatever other people say about me, whatever you hear from them, it doesn't matter. Because I know there's someone who always believes in me. You."

Sugaya Risako.

The girl whom I thought broke my heart, does something again that made sure my heart was still in place.

Surely, this is far from being over.

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Re: Too Young
« Reply #222 on: July 29, 2007, 02:57:10 AM »
Yay, update.

This chapter starts with gloomy atmosphere ... so lonely.. :D

So, the love story gonna ends, or not.

Pretty Boy is saved. :D

Hehe, Puyo Puyo. Did his sister really beat Star?! Her skills must be awesome :P

Berryz should makes an appearance in Music Fighter again exclusively in this fic :3


Last thing, your new chapter is awesome as always... Glad to read it again~

Good job, wordsworth! :D


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Re: Too Young
« Reply #223 on: July 30, 2007, 01:20:45 PM »
when i read the title of the new chapter, i thought it would be the last chapter..thank goodness it isn't.

we have to have that chapter of the movie date!! :w00t:

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Too Young: Like a Thief in the Night
« Reply #224 on: August 08, 2007, 10:24:37 AM »
It was that time when Ryota walked me home...

It started as a quiet walk. I didn't know how to talk to him, after I accused him of two-timing Kuma-chan. Also, I didn't know if I should talk to him. He did say some nasty comments about me, and my clothes, even before. I wanted to start a conversation but when I try to talk, I'd see him looking at me weirdly. Maybe because when I see him trying to talk I'd give him a dagger stare.

I thought it would end up as a quiet walk until...

"So, Miyabi. Are you gonna tell me stuff about yourself or are we gonna just give each other the silent treatment till we get to your place?"

It wasn't a good way to start one but I obliged. I told him my hobbies, how my school life's like, how it feels to be an idol and other things. When I was done, he started telling me about himself. I learned that he had to move from different schools and live in different places because of his parents' business. Also, he said that his mom and younger sisters listen to our songs. He wasn't really an asshole person like I thought he was. He was a nice guy after all. But I should learn when I should keep my mouth closed...

"They told me you stalked Maimi-chan before."
"I didn't stalk her. I just followed her around. You know, like a bodyguard. There's a difference between stalking and following..."
"Tss. I don't think she needed a bodyguard. If any of us can take care of herself, it would be Maimi-chan. That was a lame excuse, Ryota."
"I didn't expect you to beleive me anyway."
"Did you have any girlfriends before?"
"Me? Oh no, no. Never. Not yet."
"Have you ever kissed Kuma-chan?"
"Huh?"
"Have you ever kissed Kuma-chan?"
"Nope. But I will. Someday."
"Scared?"
"Of course not! Why should I?"
"Waiting for the right moment to strike eh."
"Well, yeah. I want that kiss to be perfect. I'm thinking of taking her on a Ferris wheel then tell her my feelings and kiss her when we reach the top."
"Too stereotype."
"Okay. So how about taking her on a boat ride on a lake then?"
"It's been done before."
"Fine. I'll come up with something."
"Excuses! Why don't you just admit it!"
"Admit what?"
"That you don't have the guts to do it! That tough guy attitude you have is fake!"
"You think so?"
"Yeah! I even think that you don't have the balls to kiss me, do you?"
"Kiss? You?"
"Come on, I dare you to!"
"..."
"Haha! Scaredy cat!!!"

Was that a mistake?

Or did I really bait him to do it?

He grabbed my hand and dragged me into one of those tunnels where the trains pass above. There were no other people around. I felt the ground shake whenever a train passed.  It was dark but I could see Ryota looking at me straight in the eye. With my back against the wall, he leaned towards me. I started to get scared.

"W-what are you planning to do?" I said as I looked away from him. "I'll let Kuma-chan know about this..."

He tilted my face so I'd look back at him. Then he stroked my chin.

"I'm just making sure I don't get stabbed when I..."
"When you what?!" I said as I slapped his hand away from my face. I prepared my hand to slap his face next but...

He removed my cap and the shades I was wearing...

Then…

The next thing I remember was our lips were touching. My eyes were wide open because of shock at first, but when I closed them, it felt really different...

I liked it

My hand that was supposed to slap him, I put it behind his head, to make it last a bit longer. I could feel his warm body over me. If it weren't for the train that passed by, I would've heard my heart beating fast too.

I remembered the song I did with Airi-chan and Tanaka-san...

Is this how a first kiss feels like?

Is this how Rii-chan felt when she and her classmate kissed?

Is this how Kuma-chan will feel if she and Ryota kissed?

Kuma-chan

What am I doing?

I decided to push Ryota away. He let out a fake cough and scratched his head, like nothing happened. After that, I couldn't look at him straight in the eye. 

He took my first kiss away from me. I should be angry with him. I should be crying about it.

But I'm not.

Why?

I can't believe my first kiss was like this. But I'm gonna admit that I kinda liked it. If I didn't I would have resisted, right?

But he could have chosen a better place! A park would've been nicer and more romantic.

There was something lacking in his kiss though. Maybe it's because his heart belonged to someone else, not me.


He picked up my cap, which fell on the floor and placed it back on my head. Then he smirked and shook his head and pinched my cheek, to make it redder than it already was. His face was red too though.

"Not bad for a first-timer." he said. I don't know if he was referring to himself or if he was talking about me. Then he dragged me again.
"W-where are you taking me? I don't want to..."
"Where do you think? I'm taking you home of course! Yurina asked me to, remember? What are you thinking, Miyabi?"
"Oh..."
"What a dirty mind you have."
"Shut up!"


We continued our walk to my house. This time, neither of us wanted to start a conversation.

I wanted to ask him why he did that but I remembered that I was the one who dared him to do it.

When we arrived at my place I went inside without saying anything to him. He shouted something though...

"You never had a boyfriend before, right?"

What he asked me forced me to stop. But I didn't answer his question.

"I pity the guy who's going to be your first one though coz..."

That was it. I went out to confront him.

"Why are you such a bastard?! What did I ever do to make you treat me this way!" I said as I pushed him. "Is it my clothes? Fine! I'll dress differently from now on!"
"Whoa! I didn't know you were such a violent person!" he held both of my wrists to stop me from pushing him. "There's nothing wrong with your fashion sense. Why are you so mad, huh?"
"It's your fault dammit!"
"Of so it's my fault now. It's your fault because you keep on jumping into conclusions!" he said as he used his index finger to poke my forehead and push me back.
"W-what?"
"You didn't let me finish what I was going to say."
"..."
"I pity your first boyfriend because he'll never get a kiss like that from you."
"..."
"That was your first one right?"
"So what if it is? What's it to you?"
"Nothing really. It's just...I'm sorry Miyabi. I shouldn't have done that. You dared me to do it and I thought you were gonna stop me but..."
"So it's my fault?"
"No. It's mine. I'm really sorry. I hope you can forgive me..." he said as he bowed.
"Liar! You're just saying this so I won't tell Kuma-chan aren't you?"
"Of course not. Okay. Fine. You can tell her about it. I have no problem with that. Only the two of us know what really happened."
"Are you trying to blackmail me or something?"
"Why would I do that?"
"Just a hunch."
"Haha. You're crazy. But I like you, Miyabi. I just want us to get along."
"Hmph. I decide who I want to get along with!"
"Fine. That means we’re friends now right? I'll be going now. See you around Miyabi."

With that, he left.

He left with my first kiss with him.

I went inside, straight to my room.

I called Kuma-chan.

"Kuma-chan..."
"I know. Ryota said some things about you again. Don't worry Miya-chan, I'll hit him when I see him in school."
"No, no. Ryota..."
"What about him?"
"Take care of him okay? He's a nice guy."
"..."
"Don't let his outside appearance fool you. He's a..."
"What's wrong with you, Miya-chan?"
"Huh?"
"Are you drunk or something?"
"What?"
"It's funny."
"Why is it funny? I'm trying to be serious here!"
"I can't believe you'd say something like that about Ryota. After he kept calling you a witch earlier."
"Oh."
"Don't worry Miya-chan. I can handle him. Thanks for the advice. But are you sure he didn't say or do anything to you when he walked you home?"
"No, no. He took me home safely didn't he?"
"Right. I'll talk to you later okay. Bye."

I should have told her.

I should have told her that Ryota stole something from me.

But I doubt she'll still believe me. After dragging her earlier just to find out that Ryota wasn't two-timing her.

Ryota was right.

Only the two of us know what really happened...
« Last Edit: August 10, 2007, 03:38:31 AM by wordsworth »

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Re: Too Young
« Reply #225 on: August 08, 2007, 10:57:12 PM »
Aww poor Miyabi!! :cry: Glad to see her doing more in your story though. I hope she's able to find happiness. :heart: Poor Kuma-chan too... She'll never know... and that's not really a good thing >.> I had a feeling something like that was going to happen on the walk home... Although I don't know if I really expected Miyabi to instigate it...

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Re: Too Young
« Reply #226 on: August 09, 2007, 09:54:39 AM »
It figures Risako will call herself Star-chan since she really is the star of BK. But it's ok MomoMiya, cuz I still like you both best XD

Uh ohhhhhhhhhh..... Miyabi and Ryota kissed. Now what's gonna happen? And I wanna protest against Ryota's comments about the chinny wonder's dressing :angry: It's perfectly fine and they look good on her  :)

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Re: Too Young
« Reply #227 on: August 11, 2007, 11:34:15 PM »
Oh my GOD!

I haven't been here in AGES!


I'll start reading this story here right now, and I'll comment later because I have to do something ><


                               
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Re: Too Young
« Reply #228 on: August 15, 2007, 09:16:13 PM »
that's it... i hate Ryota...

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Too Young: Open Ended
« Reply #229 on: August 27, 2007, 12:15:34 PM »
It started like this.

Ryota walked me home after school. We were standing in front of my house when he asked me something...

"Kumai Yurina..."
"Didn't I tell you I don't like you calling me by my whole name? Or do you want me to tell it to you again?"
"Okay, okay. Kumai..."
"Yurina."
"Yurina..."
"That's better. What is it?"
"...Can you be my girlfriend?"
"W-what?!"

I knew he was confident but I didn't know he was THIS confident. Out of the blue he asks me this, a question I was waiting for him to ask me for a long time. I didn't know if I should answer it right then and there. But that's how he is. He's not really the romantic type of guy, yet he's been able to do things that can melt my heart. Heck, I think he can even tame a self-conceited girl like Miya-chan, or even make a crazy girl like Momo think straight or make Chinami tell good jokes.

"I..."
"Umm...Yurina?"
"Y...yeah?"
"You don't have to answer now you know."
"..."
"It'll be great if you say yes but it's also fine if you say no..."
"It's not..."
"... because I'll do whatever it takes to make you change your mind."
"What are you talking abo..."
"You know what I'm talking about. I'm not going to give up. No matter what. What I said before is true. I like you. I like you a lot."
"Ryota..."
"I'll see you tomorrow. Better be early because I will be early haha."

That's what he said as he left. But the way he left was different this time. Before, he would look back at me just before he'd cross the street then give me a lousy salute with his hand. He wouldn't leave unless I salute back. I remember the first time he did that. I didn't know I had to salute back. When I went out that night, I freaked out when I saw him still standing there. I went to him and asked him what he was doing. He said that he can't go until I tell him he's dismissed. And that's how it was, until today. I know. It was kinda pointless, until I realized that it was fun, and I missed doing it today.

About waking up early, it's because I still have his ID. Even though I've tried so many times to sneak it back in his bag. At the end of the day, after he walks me home, I check my bag and find his ID there again. I don't bother asking him how he does it because he'd tell me how he it got there.

That night, I wasn't able to sleep. I already have the answer to his question but will I able to tell it to him? Reading the letters he gave me before didn't help me get to sleep, but it helped me a lot with what my answer will be.

What made me feel uneasy was what would happen if it became 'us'? It definitely won't be the same as before. Would it be better? Would it be worse?

I don't know.

But I will know soon enough.

The next day, I woke up earlier than I usually do because he said he was going to be early. I wanted to be there earlier than him so I can rub it in his face. Or maybe because I felt it was the last time I was going to do it.

But he stood me up.

The nerve.

After telling me to wake up early, he has the guts not to show up.

I didn't bother calling him.

Why should I?

He's not yet my...

He's nothing anyway.

That afternoon, I got a call from his cell phone but I didn't answer. I didn't want to. But he didn't stop. Finally, I picked up, at around 10 PM.

"What do you want?"
"A...ano..."

I can't be mistaken. The person on the other line wasn't him.

It was a girl.

"Who is this?"
"A-are you his friend?"
"Who are you?"
"Are you Onii-chan's friend?"

Onii-chan? So it's his sister.

"Yeah. I know him. He's my...my classmate."
"Really? Oh goodie!"
"Huh?"
"I thought Onii-chan didn't have any friends in school. And you're a girl!"
"Yes I'm a girl. Is something wrong with that?"
"Sugoi!"
"Huh?"
"You must be that girl Onii-chan was telling us about. He said that he has this really nice classmate."
"Really?"
"Yeah. But he also said that she copies his homework..."
"What? I don't...Why that no good..."
"But he said you were pretty. You are pretty aren't you?"
"Well..."
"Please don't get mad at him. Onii-chan wasn't able to go school today becau..."
"Oh. I see. Did your Onii-chan tell you to call me to apologize for him? That's low. He does something bad then he gets someone else to clean up his mess. Tell your Onii-chan..."
"I can't. He's sleeping."
"Not awake huh? Then wake him up. Tell him I told you to..."
"He hasn't waken up since yesterday."
"Are you saying that he overslept, that's why he wasn't able to go?"
"N-no. He's in the hospital."
"Hospital. Okay..."
"..."
"..."
"He got into a fight."
"That doesn't sound new."
"Yeah. It doesn't. The only difference this time was one of them had a knife..."





"W-what?"

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« Reply #230 on: August 27, 2007, 12:22:24 PM »
His sister told me where he was confined. I wasn't able to go immediately, because it was really late when we talked. I blame myself for not answering my phone the moment it rang. Good thing it's a Saturday today. I called Chinami and asked her if she could go with me. After surviving a bunch of her jokes, she finally agreed to go.

We met at the train station, wearing disguises of course.

"Who are we gonna visit, Kumai-chan?"
"A friend of mine."
"A guy?"
"Yeah."
"You really want me to get jealous, don't you?"
"What are you tal...Chinami?"
"Just kidding. Is he cute?"
"Yeah."
"What happened to him?"
"His sister said he got into a fight. I'm just gonna check if he's alright."
"Oooh! Just like Rii-chan's classmate? Did he get into a fight because of you?"
"I don't know..."

Now that she mentioned it, could it be that he got into that fight because of me? I remember Rii-chan's classmate being beaten by those men, because he didn't like what they were saying about her. Did Ryota do the same thing for me?

His sister already told me the room number so we didn't have a hard time looking for it when we got to the hospital.

As I was going to knock, I could hear people talking inside.

"Onii-chan, don't leave us, don't go yet!"
"Onii-chan wait! Don't die on us!"
"Aaaahhh!..."

It was him.

"Ryota!!!"

I said as I burst inside room. Then I saw...

I saw Ryota...

He was...

He was holding a DS in his hands.

And so were his sisters.

It seems like they were playing some kind of game. I dunno...

I didn't look behind me because I could hear Chinami trying to stop herself from laughing. But a few giggles were able to get out. I thought that looking at her would make her stop but it only made her want to laugh out more. Maybe because she saw the trail of tears on my face even after I wiped them. She laughed out loud, making Ryota's two sisters laugh with her.

"Kumai-chan, thanks for making me come along. Hahaha." Chinami whispered. "That was hilarious!"
"Stop it."
"Oi! What took you so long, huh? Were you were for me to die before you visit me? Hehe." Ryota said.
"Shut up!"
"Who is she Onii-chan?" asked the smaller of the two girls. She's around 7 years old, I think.
"She's my classmate."
"Ah! So you were the one I was talking on the phone! You are pretty!" said his other sister.
"She's tall. But Yurina-san from Berryz Koubou is probably taller and prettier than her. No one is taller than Yurina-san, right Ruri-oneesan?"
"I don't know Junko-chan..."

Oh.

So Ryota didn't tell them.

And our disguises worked.

"I'd like you to meet my sisters, Ruri-chan and Junko-chan.."
"Nice to meet you." the two girls said as they bowed. I bowed back to them.
"Nice to meet you too. Umm, Ryota, I brought a friend a long." I told them as Chinami bowed.
"That's nice. Thanks for coming, you two."

"I'm jealous, Kumai-chan. But I'm not mad at you, because he's cute!" Chinami whispered. "Does he have nice handwriting?"
"Oh. So you've developed that kind of fetish too huh?"
"Not really."
"Umm, Chinami, I need to talk to him privately so..."
"Alright. I'll take care of it. You're gonna confess your love to him huh?"
"Well, something like tha...err...just help me out okay."
"Oooh!"

I walked towards Ryota and sat down beside his bed.

"What happened to you?"
"Ruri-chan and Junko-chan caught me listening to KAT-TUN..."
"The truth, please."
"All right. I was listening to..."
"Ryota."
"Well, I ran into some guys from the other school and..."
"Was it because of me? Did you get into trouble because of me?"

That was the cue.

Chinami called the two girls and asked what game they were playing earlier. Then she took out her own DS and asked them if they wanted to play with her. She told them that they could make more noise outside. Ryota's sisters followed her.

Then we were alone.

"Did you get into that fight because of me?"
"What are you talking about?"
"You know what I'm talking about. Were they saying things about me?"
"Hmm. Why do you think it's always about you, Yurina?"
"Just answer my question, dammit!"
"Those guys, I fought them before and they just wanted to get back at me. I didn't know they had weapons so this is what happened hehe."
"Oh. I see."

I was wrong.

We're not in the same situation Rii-chan and her classmate were in. Our story, it's different.

But how come I feel this pain inside me? Is this the pain caused by not telling him what I really feel for him? If I told him what I felt, would this still have happened to him?

But getting hurt is always part of a relationship

I like him.

No.

I don't just like him.

I...

Looking at him in that condition, his forehead covered with bandages, a tube connected to his wrist. I don't know if I can handle seeing him like this ever again.

"I was wrong. Sorry if I..."
"But one of them did say you were like a flagpole with hair. And you looked like a dude or something like that. Now he'll want a new set of teeth for Christmas hehe."
"Ryota..."
"I will be fine, Yurina. Don't cry."
"I'm not crying."

Yeah right. The sleeves of my sweater got wet faster than you can say Sprinter!

"It's going to be alright."
"No it's not alright! Don't you even think about what I would feel if you get hurt?"
"What? You'll cry until you fall asleep? Because you'll feel guilty? There's no need to do that. And besides, I'm used to this..."
"It's not just about you anymore! It's about us now!"
"Yurina..."
"Yes. I'll cry if you get hurt. I'll feel guilty. But it will be hard to sleep at night. Because I'll be up, thinking if I'll be able to see my boyfriend the next day."
"..."
"Yeah, that's how it is now. I don't want to see you like this again, understand?"
"I see. So, that means you forgive me already for not showing up the other day?"

I put my hand on his forehead.

"I know you're hurt but that doesn't mean you brain got damaged too right? And your temperature's normal, so you're not sick in any kind of way."
"Oh, so you're a doctor now?"
"No. But I have something to make you feel better."
"And what is that? Can I see a prescription note or a..."

I kissed him on the cheek. So he'd shut up. Sometimes he talks a lot more than Momo does.

"..."
"Okay. So, how are you?"
"I'm fine, especially now that you're here."
"Good. Hey, these are nice flowers."
"Oh those. Miyabi dropped by earlier."
"Miya-chan?"
"Yeah. It seems like Ruri-chan tried to call the numbers on my phone while I was sleeping. I only have ten people in the address book, so yeah. She went here. By the way, can you smell if the flowers are poisoned or something? I think she wants me dead."
"Miya-chan's not like that."
"I know. But she's quite a character, ne?"
"Yeah."
"I thought she was gonna use magic to make me get better, but she comes here with those flowers and a lecture that was longer than any of my mom's."
"You could have just said 'cut' so she'd stop. She unconsciously thinks that there's always a camera in front of her so..."
"Okay. I'll keep that in mind. By the way, the friend you brought along..."
"Chinami? What about her?"
"Do you think you can talk to her into getting those items I lost to my sisters?"
"W-what?"
"My two sister. They're really good at that game. All the items I've bought and found these past few months, they took it from me."
"Really? We'll that's weird."
"What's weird about that?"
"That someone as tough a you got, how does Rii-chan call it...oh, I remember! You got 'owned' by a pair of cute girls. Hahaha."
"That's not funny. You should be worried about your friend though."
"Nah. Chinami can handle herself."

After saying that, Ryota's sisters came inside the room, followed by Chinami.

"Onii-chan, onii-chan! Look! We have some new items." Junko-chan told him.

Ryota gave me a "I told you so" look. I just smirked and look at Chinami, who looked like all her genkiness was sucked away from her.

"I think we should be going now Ryota."
"Oh. Okay. Tell your friend I'll get back her items for her."

I patted Chinami's shoulder as we walked out but Ryota still had something to say.

"You don't have to wake up early now. I'll be confined here for a few days so..."
"What are you talking about? I'll still go to school early..."





"...so I can visit you when classes are over."

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« Reply #231 on: August 27, 2007, 01:18:21 PM »
Two parts in one day, sweet! I have to admit, reading your story is helping me with a new Berryz fanfic of my own.. :)

I was confused for a minute, thinking our hero was in the hospital again(thnak goodness he wasn't). It'll be interesting to see how this new relationship evolves..also how Yurina will react when she hears the news about Ryoga's kiss with Miyabi

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« Reply #232 on: September 05, 2007, 10:48:15 AM »
All the time i was reading the chapter i was telling myself "is he going to tell her is he is he ? or is he going to make a mistake ????? aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa" :lol:



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"...Can you be my girlfriend?"

(...)

 But that's how he is. He's not really the romantic type of guy


well, actualy, it's not as bad as "be my girlfriend" or "go out with me" which sound like orders lol

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Heck, I think he can even tame a self-conceited girl like Miya-chan

HEY ! XD



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"I..."

"Umm...Yurina?"

"Y...yeah?"

"You don't have to answer now you know."

"..."

"It'll be great if you say yes but it's also fine if you say no..."

"It's not..."

"... because I'll do whatever it takes to make you change your mind."

"What are you talking abo..."

"You know what I'm talking about. I'm not going to give up. No matter what. What I said before is true. I like you. I like you a lot."

"Ryota..."

"I'll see you tomorrow. Better be early because I will be early haha."
Poor girl couldn't even finish a sentence...



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But he stood me up.



The nerve.



After telling me to wake up early, he has the guts not to show up.
:lol:

interesting ...



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"He hasn't waken up since yesterday."
sounded so dramatic at first :o i thought he was in coma or something...

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"Are you saying that he overslept, that's why he wasn't able to go?"

Yurina knows the geek type ? :lol:

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"Yeah. It doesn't. The only difference this time was one of them had a knife..."
dramatic indeed...



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I called Chinami and asked her if she could go with me. After surviving a bunch of her jokes, she finally agreed to go.
:lol:



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As I was going to knock, I could hear people talking inside.



"Onii-chan, don't leave us, don't go yet!"

"Onii-chan wait! Don't die on us!"

"Aaaahhh!..."



It was him.



"Ryota!!!"



I said as I burst inside room. Then I saw...



I saw Ryota...



He was...



He was holding a DS in his hands.



And so were his sisters.



It seems like they were playing some kind of game. I dunno...



I didn't look behind me because I could hear Chinami trying to stop herself from laughing. But a few giggles were able to get out. I thought that looking at her would make her stop but it only made her want to laugh out more. Maybe because she saw the trail of tears on my face even after I wiped them. She laughed out loud, making Ryota's two sisters laugh with her.



"Kumai-chan, thanks for making me come along. Hahaha." Chinami whispered. "That was hilarious!"
Hilarious indeed XD crap wordy you are so evil...

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Were you were for me to die before you visit me? Hehe." Ryota said.
i...didn't catch that...?????

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"What happened to you?"

"Ruri-chan and Junko-chan caught me listening to KAT-TUN..."

"The truth, please."

"All right. I was listening to..."

"Ryota."
:lol:...



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"Did you get into that fight because of me?"

"What are you talking about?"

"You know what I'm talking about. Were they saying things about me?"

"Hmm. Why do you think it's always about you, Yurina?"
he he he he he he.....

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"It's going to be alright."

"No it's not alright! Don't you even think about what I would feel if you get hurt?"

"What? You'll cry until you fall asleep? Because you'll feel guilty? There's no need to do that. And besides, I'm used to this..."

"It's not just about you anymore! It's about us now!"

"Yurina..."

"Yes. I'll cry if you get hurt. I'll feel guilty. But it will be hard to sleep at night. Because I'll be up, thinking if I'll be able to see my boyfriend the next day."

"..."
wohohohohoho what a nice way to say 'yes' !

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I kissed him on the cheek. So he'd shut up. Sometimes he talks a lot more than Momo does.
awwwwwwww



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"Good. Hey, these are nice flowers."

"Oh those. Miyabi dropped by earlier."

"Miya-chan?"

"Yeah. It seems like Ruri-chan tried to call the numbers on my phone while I was sleeping. I only have ten people in the address book, so yeah. She went here. By the way, can you smell if the flowers are poisoned or something? I think she wants me dead."

"Miya-chan's not like that."

HEY ! XD yeah right she got a reason to kill you...first kissu :o

err...why would her sister go all "sugoi" if they got Miya on the phone before they got yurina ?....hu hu hu...

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"I thought she was gonna use magic to make me get better, but she comes here with those flowers and a lecture that was longer than any of my mom's."

"You could have just said 'cut' so she'd stop. She unconsciously thinks that there's always a camera in front of her so..."

oh crap.... :rofl: :rofl: :rofl:

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"You don't have to wake up early now. I'll be confined here for a few days so..."

"What are you talking about? I'll still go to school early..."

"...so I can visit you when classes are over."
that's nice...but..going to school early doesn't change the time classes finish right ? XD but she could go to the hospital before going to school...but i wonder if the visit hours are open at that time....



so the drama with miya is still a suspence he he he he he he he


edit :

btw, what was the game they were playing ? XD
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« Reply #233 on: September 05, 2007, 12:32:18 PM »
Commented.






(I already read this two chapter but forgot to comment, gomenne~)(You should get more promotions words, and get a better place :P And give us more chapters to read!)

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« Reply #234 on: September 10, 2007, 04:38:26 AM »
We've been going out for a few months now, but neither of us has told what feelings we had for each other. Sure, I've been going out with him exclusively, but that's pretty much it. Gifts? I don't think I got any from him aside from the chocolate he gave me last February. Now that I mentioned it, I haven't given him anything since White Day. We still see each other even if he's in a different school now. He always invites me to watch him in the inter-school Karate tournaments but I don't go because I really don't want to see him get hurt, even if I know he won't. I like him, but I don't think that what we have isn't heading towards the direction I want it to.

I remembered a conversation we had before...

"Momo, can I ask you something?"
"Sure. What is it?"

He went closer and whispered his question.

"EEEEEHHHHH?!!!!"
"So, can you...do it? With me?"
"I don't know..."
"I won't let you get hurt."
"I know. But..."
"Please Momo." he said as he held my hand between his.
"W-why me?"
"If I have to do it, then I'd rather do it with you than with anyone else."
"I'm not sure if I can..."
"Please."
"I'll...I'll think about it."



That was a long time ago but I still haven't given him my answer. I called Risako-chan and asked her if her classmate asked her to do something like that before.

"Eh?"
"So, have you done it?"
"Oh no, no. Not yet. I don't think he'll ask me to do something like that anytime soon."
"I see."
"But it sounds fun Momo. Why don't you go for it?"
"Sounds fun? How can you say something like that?"
"I dunno. But if I were you, I'd go for it."
"Risako-chan?!"
"Are you scared Momo? That's not like you."
"I know, but..."
"You can do it, Momo."
"Okay. Thanks."

That was it. I called him and told him that I'll do it.

"Really? Wow, that's great news. So, I'll pick you up on Saturday then?"
"Okay."
"Momo."
"Yes?"
"Thanks."

There was something different in his voice when he said that. I dunno, maybe he really wants to do it with me...

Saturday

He picked me up at my house and we headed to "the place".

Just before we went inside, I asked him something...

"Will this be your first time? Or have you done this before?"
"I've done this before. But it was so embarrassing, that I really don't want to think or talk about it. The trauma it caused made me think that I won't be able to do it again."
"I see. We can back out now if you want."
"No. We can do it. I'm ready today."
"Okay..."
"I promise. I won't let you get hurt."

Then we went inside.

We held each other's hands.

I could feel him trembling more than me.

I started to get scared but I didn't show it. I would shriek at the slightest noise and hold his hand tighter.

He'll just chuckle at me but I knew he was scared too. But the longer we were inside, the more I got used to it.

It was starting to get fun.

When it was almost over, he was the one who was gripping me tightly and it was my turn to chuckle at him.

Then it was over.

I saw him sweating a lot when we got out. I had fun. But it was a lot more fun to see his reaction when I asked him if we could do it again next week.

He walked me home but before I entered, grabbed my hand, and held me in his arms. Then he took out something from his pocket and put it on me. It was a silver necklace, with a peach-shaped pendant. Then he gave me an envelope and kissed me in the forehead.

"Thanks Momo You're a brave girl." he said. "So next week, I'll pick you up again, same time."

Then he left.

He gave me two things today. Three if you count the kiss. And all I did was go with him. Not bad. Not bad at all.

I went to my room and opened the envelope. There was a letter inside.


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Momo, I really can't thank you enough for going with me today. I thought I'd never get rid of this fear I have for haunted houses. I was really young the first time I went to one. Even though my cousin was with me that time, I still got scared. I even wet my pants!  But don't tell anyone okay. I knew that bringing you along would help me conquer that fear. You're the one that gives me courage.

Thank you.





And Momo, before I forget. I like you. I like you a lot.

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His handwriting hasn't improved one bit. But he said he likes me.

Now how should I tell him that I like him too?

Yes. We went to a haunted house in an amusement park. What were you thinking of? 0_o

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« Reply #235 on: September 10, 2007, 04:46:34 AM »
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"EEEEEHHHHH?!!!!"
"So, can you...do it? With me?"
"I don't know..."
"I won't let you get hurt."
"I know. But..."
"Please Momo." he said as he held my hand between his.
"W-why me?"
"If I have to do it, then I'd rather do it with you than with anyone else."
"I'm not sure if I can..."
"Please."
"I'll...I'll think about it."


That was a long time ago but I still haven't given him my answer. I called Risako-chan and asked her if her classmate asked her to do something like that before.

"Eh?"
"So, have you done it?"
"Oh no, no. Not yet. I don't think he'll ask me to do something like that anytime soon."
"I see."
"But it sounds fun Momo. Why don't you go for it?"
"Sounds fun? How can you say something like that?"
"I dunno. But if I were you, I'd go for it."
"Risako-chan?!"
"Are you scared Momo? That's not like you."
"I know, but..."
"You can do it, Momo."
"Okay. Thanks."

That was it. I called him and told him that I'll do it.

"Really? Wow, that's great news. So, I'll pick you up on Saturday then?"
"Okay."
"Momo."
"Yes?"
"Thanks."

There was something different in his voice when he said that. I dunno, maybe he really wants to do it with me...

Saturday

He picked me up at my house and we headed to "the place".

Just before we went inside, I asked him something...

"Will this be your first time? Or have you done this before?"
"I've done this before. But it was so embarrassing, that I really don't want to think or talk about it. The trauma it caused made me think that I won't be able to do it again."
"I see. We can back out now if you want."
"No. We can do it. I'm ready today."
"Okay..."
"I promise. I won't let you get hurt."

Then we went inside.

We held each other's hands.

I could feel him trembling more than me.

I started to get scared but I didn't show it. I would shriek at the slightest noise and hold his hand tighter.

He'll just chuckle at me but I knew he was scared too. But the longer we were inside, the more I got used to it.

It was starting to get fun.

When it was almost over, he was the one who was gripping me tightly and it was my turn to chuckle at him.

Then it was over.

I saw him sweating a lot when we got out. I had fun. But it was a lot more fun to see his reaction when I asked him if we could do it again next week.

He walked me home but before I entered, grabbed my hand, and held me in his arms. Then he took out something from his pocket and put it on me. It was a silver necklace, with a peach-shaped pendant. Then he gave me an envelope and kissed me in the forehead.

"Thanks Momo You're a brave girl." he said. "So next week, I'll pick you up again, same time."

Then he left.

He gave me two things today. Three if you count the kiss. And all I did was go with him. Not bad. Not bad at all.

......

what ?!

.........

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I thought I'd never get rid of this fear I have for haunted houses.

*relieved*  I see XD
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« Reply #236 on: September 10, 2007, 11:21:45 AM »
knowing words, i just knew it wouldn't about IT  :lol:
i had that feeling when i was reading all those secret talking that he wanted us to believe they were talking about IT
i know he is perv but not that perv to make momo do IT XD
and still, just the title of the fic "Too young" tells us a lot hahaha

nice trap wordy hehehe

it would have been even weirder if the guy asked IT when momo just introduced the chapter wtih
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We've been going out for a few months now, but neither of us has told what feelings we had for each other. Sure, I've been going out with him exclusively, but that's pretty much it.

and of course asking Risako, who is the youngest of all the berryz would have been a bit crazy lol
so i was wondering what kind of question it was ....

and when i read
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Then we went inside.

We held each other's hands.

I could feel him trembling more than me.

I started to get scared but I didn't show it. I would shriek at the slightest noise and hold his hand tighter.

He'll just chuckle at me but I knew he was scared too. But the longer we were inside, the more I got used to it.

It was starting to get fun.
haunted house that's it !  :lol:

but hey, momo is scared about a konyaku

she should be freaking out in those places XD

but that was a nice way to make them talking about their feelings he he he he

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« Reply #237 on: September 15, 2007, 01:44:31 PM »
huh?

what the ...

You're lucky that the ending isn't IT <--- steal from chrno, the p****** queen.

:P

Nice chapter, better no double meaning next time, or else..

Well, i guess i'll still reading it :3

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« Reply #238 on: September 23, 2007, 06:29:44 AM »
lol! that last ch. created all these weird images, then I had a clue to what was going on :p
I was sorta right :p

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« Reply #239 on: December 30, 2007, 10:35:06 PM »
hey wordsworth! don't leave us hanging! we need more!

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