Doki Doki

[bluekinoko]

I knew this day was coming but Im shocked at how quickly it came.
And so its here!
The end of my writing.

After putting so much energy and sleepless nights into writing DokiDoki I thought it would be a waste just you let it rot here so I found myself a successor.

Mikan has been following this story almost ritually and now knows it's past, future and present more than I do. So I thought it would be only sensible to hand it over to her to continue writing. I will occasionally be editing and possiblely writing a chapter or two but most of the work will now be Mikan.

Sorry to leave you. I'll still visit
Lots of love,
BlueKinoko

[huggumwuggums]

Noooo~! Well, i guess all good things have come to an end eventually and I really appreciate all the time and effort you put in writing this gripping fanfic. Hope  you'll still be active in this forum and i wish Mikan all the best! Cheers mate.

[Mikan]

Hello!

This is Mikan~

I suppose you're all a little disapointed that bluekinoko left. I am too

Dont worry, I will do my best to uphold the reputation that Doki doki carries.

First lot of bad news.
- I spent today writing up the Doki Doki 55 and while getting ready to post the computer crashed and I lost it. So, it will take another day to rewrite. Im so sorry. To make up for my mistake I will publish an extra chapter on top of what I already intend to do.

Sorry to make you wait so long!!

[freya86]

I knew this day was coming but Im shocked at how quickly it came.
And so its here!
The end of my writing.

After putting so much energy and sleepless nights into writing DokiDoki I thought it would be a waste just you let it rot here so I found myself a successor.

Mikan has been following this story almost ritually and now knows it's past, future and present more than I do. So I thought it would be only sensible to hand it over to her to continue writing. I will occasionally be editing and possiblely writing a chapter or two but most of the work will now be Mikan.

Sorry to leave you. I'll still visit
Lots of love,
BlueKinoko

But you won't stop writing in general, right??? You'll still write other fics, right??? Pretty please???

[Mikan]

Bluekinoko says:
Huh, freya said that?...

Mikan says:
Yep!

Bluekinoko says:
Hmm, well...I will have a lot of free time after giving up the writing I suppose...so I guess I could do a little writing...

Mikan says:
Haha! Are you going to start a small story to work on?

Bluekinoko says:
Nah,...I'll finish Stop or I'll shoot
Its the only piece of work I can truly say Im proud of...




Haha, sorry I thought I must paste it here. To summerise - Bluekinoko promises to finish up Stop or I'll shoot (which she keeps accidently calling Stop and I'll shoot )
So if my writing sucks that much you can still read retro-kinoko

[freya86]

Nah, nah, Mikan, I'm very much looking forward to your writing. Doki Doki is a great fic and I'm sure you'll do your best.

But it would be a waste to see Bluekinoko giving up writing, considering how all of us over here love her style. And for obvious reasons I'd love to see her finish Stop or I'll Shoot ^_^

This way, we'll get both of you and that's the best

[lil_hamz]

AWWWW nooooooooo bluekinoko why??? Just kidding, I still wanna thank you for all the great chapters so far. You won't be leaving the forum for good I hope

Welcome mikan, will be looking forward to reading all ya upcoming chapters

[Mikan]

Eri pulled on the hood as she stepped through the flowing red curtains that took her to a place she had never seen before. This small section of the shop was filled with rows and rows of thousands of exoticly named movies all ordered carefully by genre and popularity. All the other hooded and disguised customers floated down and up the aisles picking up the DVDs and inspecting them with great care as if they were works of art on sale. Eri panicked a little, grabbed the first ten movies she could get her hands on and power walked to the front desk.

"H-hi-ah"

Her voice broke. The clerk scanned the videos with raised eyebrows.

"You got ID for these?"

Eri's heart made a leap into her mouth in an attempt to run for the door but she swallowed it down. If she spoke too much all hope would be lost.

"Membercard"

She slid the card across the table into the open hands of the clerk. He sighed and swipped it.

"Yeah that will do..."

His computer gave a menacing beep as the card went through and a look of shock came over the young boys face. Eri nearly died, her heart trying to find another hole to escape from.

"Im sorry sir, you look a lot different from TV....I guess I didnt recognise you with the...uh...glasses and the uh...well anyway...Im new here... Its great to finally meet you..."

Eri grunted in appreciation which untentionally sounded like a dying cow.

"Well, with your goldmember discount it comes to....2000yen..."

She was all too happy to pay. Anything to get out of there.

[Sukoshi]

lol that was too funny  poor Eri :-P

You did a great job on your first chapter!  Here's looking forward for more~

[Mikan]

It was a rare time that all the Gatas members could train together. A real once in a blue moon moment. Even Goto Maki had shown up. Reina tagged along and sat in the stands as a cheerleader. Kitazawa had ordered a drill match to celebrate. Fujimoto was paired up with Yossui, Ishikawa, Asami and Nono as goalkeeper. All the running acted as a release but the memories of the days when Aya use to play still haunted her.

She was far away in her dream land when the ball rolled between her feet. Yossui had done a tricky manuevour to pass the hot ball over to Miki who, without even knowing it, postioned herself in a clear line to the goals.

"RUN FOR IT MIK!"

With all the other players still clumped near Yossui on the other side of the court Miki was in the clear as she ran full speed towards Konno.

Come side on and slip in past her left leg She told herself.

Out of no where, Korenaga ducked in, in an attempt to snatch the ball. Miki's instinct took over and poor Korenaga was skidding across the floor on her ass. The game came to a sudden halt as everyone waited for Fujimoto's latest victim to stand up. With her legs spread out wide flailing in the air it was an idiots guess that she wasnt going to any time soon.

There was a yelp from the side of the court. Ishikawa had given a grinning Yossui a sharp elbow in the side.

"Whaaaat...that hurt"

Ishikawa stuck out her chin. The sign that she knew what Yossui was thinking. Kitazawa walked leisurely over to the mangled girl.

"You alright?"

She blinked several times.

"Wh-wh-what happened?"

The couch ran his hand across his jaw with concern. It appeared that she had taken more damage that previously thought.

"My friend, you've been Miki'D"

Konkon and Nono simultaneously broke out into a coughing fits after inhaling the muffins they had mysteriously started eating from god knows where.

"Fujimoto!" The coach yelled.

Miki jogged over to the small crowd.

"That technique is all good and well as long as it stays within the boundaries. Do you remember the boundaries?"

"It's not too rough that I get either penalised or hurt the other player in any way"

The coach beamed at her for remembering. "Help her back to the change rooms....GOTO! YOU'RE ON!"

There was a loud whoop from the stands as Reina broke out into cheer much to Maki's embarrassment.

Go Go Makiko Go Go Makiko!!

Maki rubbed the back of her head and waved.

"How come you never did that for me?" Yossui asked, turning to Ishikawa who shot her the most iciest - Dont even start looks which surprised even Miki.

[lil_hamz]

MUAHAHAHAHA Reina cheering for Maki was cute. And I could just imagine the death glare that Rika gave Yossi.
I'm really curious about the Eri part. Don't leave me hanging!!
Great 1st 2 chapters btw

[Carmenrous]

congratulation you are doing a really nice job!!!:) Doki Doki is still so addictive!!

[ChiruChaCha]

LOL, Eri's chapter was hilarious xDDD
Very good job, girl

[Mikan]

Back at the empty change rooms Fujimoto lay the stunned Korenaga down on the bench.

"Take off the shorts"

Korenaga did so obediantly, dropping the shorts on the floor while Fujimoto slapped the cold ice pack on her backside.

"Uwaa-ow! It's cold!!!"

Fujimoto rolled her eyes. "Dont be a baby"

She hooked the top of Korenaga's 100yen white underwear, pulling them down slightly to reveal the nice bruise forming on the left check. She couldnt help give it a little flick sending Korenaga howling.

"Its just a little bruise, get over it"

It was actually bigger than Fujimoto's fist but nobody needed to know the details. Korenaga had buried her head in her hands in order to distract herself to deal with the dull ache radiating from her behind. Fujimoto's curious hands almost went unnoticed as they ran lightly up and down her inner thigh. A muffled gasp escaped Korenaga's mouth and Fujimoto's fingers fondled her, lightly rubbing and pressing against her. She was still in shock from the fall and the fact that her Sempai was straddling her to say or do anything. This didnt matter to Fujimoto who continued to have her way with the smaller girl. Grinding herself against Korenaga's leg for mutual stimulation. Letting herself, every so often, brush over the bruise. The jolts of pain made her kouhai grow wetter and hotter until she came, crying out from the release. For the first time Fujimoto rolled the girl over, brushed her hair aside and ran the finger across her lips. Watching momentarily as the white liquid dribbled down Korenaga's mouth before kissing the rest of it off.

The rest of the team were in a huddle with the Coach giving his speil on team tactics and morals. Miki grabbed her towel off the bench as she made her way over. The coach stopped and lowered his ledger.

"How is she?"

Miki shrugged. "A little tired but I think I fixed her"

The coach nodded. "Good good..."

Yossui was half way through drinking when her mouth fell open letting a pool of water spill out onto her uniform. She quickly closed it but kept her eyes on Miki. Ishikawa jabbed her in the ribs for the second time that day.

"You see, I dont understand why you tell me to be careful of Miki...she seems so caring..."

[Mikan]

Oh crud..Bluekinoko just read my work and pointed out a typo I made. Damn it I knew I would make that mistake!! Coach and Couch are so similar!

Correct: The coach ran his hand across his jaw with concern
NG: The couch ran his hand across his jaw with concern

(I havent changed it purely because I find it too funny)

Yuki wants me to tell you - if you see anything like that, laugh, laugh so hard you wet your pants. Then come tell me and I'll fix it up.

Im not sure what exactly she means but here is another mistake she made.
Correct: She wrapped the towel around herself
NG: She wrapped the door around herself.

This is from a different fic. I think she said Nobody Knows it.
Correct: She eased into her chair
NG: She eased into her hair

WaffeT made another one but he'll call back later. There were some more in other fics (not on this site) when I find it I'll write it. Sorry Im a NG fan

[Elle_Driver]

Nice new chapter. I love it!
"A little tired but I think I fixed her" <--- that made me laugh so much.

Who will be Miki's next victim in the next chapters...
I hope it will be Rika or Yossi

[huggumwuggums]

Wow, great work Mikan! I can definitely tell the difference of style but it's still a great fanfic. It's not everyday that you can see MikixMiki action


PS: Since Korenaga is only about 8 months younger than Fujimoto so is the term 'senpai' still used? Don't ge wrong, I'm not pointing it out as a mistake, I was just curious about the customs in Japan.

[JFC]

PS: Since Korenaga is only about 8 months younger than Fujimoto so is the term 'senpai' still used? Don't ge wrong, I'm not pointing it out as a mistake, I was just curious about the customs in Japan.

I would say that it's using the term correctly. Even without the age thing, Mikitty has been in H!P a lot longer than Korenaga has, which would still make her a sempai.

[freya86]

Waaa, loving the way this story is continuing. Great work, definitely!!!

[Mikan]

Eri skipped back to her room balancing Yossui's Tv on her head and Fujimoto Miki's DVD player in her hands. Everyone was out shopping (the freakish weather had let up) or they were at the Futsal practice. This meant no interruptions.

"Huh...oh no...why isnt it working!!"

Eri clicked the remote to the VIDEO channel but got nothing but a blank screen.

"Of course!!" She slapped her forehead. "Red wire to red socket...yellow wire to...."

The screen came to life playing one of Eri's newly hired movies already five minutes in. She starred at it in horrified interest. Like when you watch a medical documentary - its so gross yet you cant look away.

Sayumi burst into the room with her usual cheer. "Eric, you said you were out at the Futsal match!!! If you came back early you should have..."

She was drowned out by the sounds of moans, groans and tiring exertions. Eri was too enthrawled to be worried that her girlfriend had sprung her doing the unthinkable.

"...where did you get this?" Sayumi drifted into the room like a ghost, sitting next to Eri on the bed.

Eri mumbled some jibberish.

"..Well I ...I was...should go do my...thingy..."

Eri turned her head but her eyes stayed in the same place.

"Did you say something Sayu?"

There was a loud scream from the TV and both girls went silent. It didnt last long. Sayu had so many questions flying around her practically empty head.

"Do you watch these when Im not around?"

"No! of course not" Eri replied defensively. "Ok so maybe once or twice.."

Sayumi bobbed her head up and down. "Okie...so uh...is this what it looks like? You know...s..s..se-"

"-x? Yeah, pretty much" Eri took her eyes off the screen for the first time to grin at Sayu.

Sayu gave an impressed "Heee~....so...what are you doing?"

Eri hesitated before making eye contact with Sayu. "uuhh....what do you mean?"

Sayu pointed at Eri's hand which was hidden under the doona at an awkward angle. Eri pulled the covers up higher.

"Oh it's nothing...I was just itchy"

Sayumi tilted head and smiled. "Oh I see..okie"

That poor girl has so much to learn.



It took me 6 tries and 3 re-writes to get this here it keep deleting and having errors!!