Author Topic: Paradise Lost: Middle Earth [Chapter 3] (Read 6989 times)

pandami21 · « **on:** March 12, 2015, 03:52:18 PM »

Yo minna-sama. I'm back for another story.
This time its a fantasy-full story. Hope you read.

Prologue

Have you ever read the book "Monsters at the end of the book"? Not yet? Well then you better read it. It was dated to be the ever first book that told the story of the creation of the Angels and Devils, God's Law, Lucifiel's Betrayal.

Thousands of years ago God, Benzaiten or Benten, feeling lonely created the first Seven Archangels: Michael, Lucifiel, Raphael, Gabriel, Uriel, Barachiel, and last, Selaphiel. After them, then were the creation of Angels. As being the first Angels, the Seven Archangels become the Chiefs of Heaven. And so they were called the Knights of Heaven.

Benten realized that there should be balance, equilibrium to form harmony in the Earth and so he created the Devilss and their would-be home, Hell, as well. Of course this brought bad news since being the counterparts of Angels, the Devils caused havocs wherever they went. To control this Benten creates the Seven Archdaemons also called the Knights of Hell: Seraphim, Cherubim, Zachariah, Beelzebub, Balthazar, Castiel and Azazel.

Thinking of this Benten asked Metatron, one of the Angels who worked hard to went up his ranks become part of the 2nd generation of Archangels, to write the 'Word of God' or the 'Decalogue' which contained the 10 Rules or Commandments of Benten.

'Word of God'
The 10 Rules:

1) Thou shall have no other Gods before Me.
2) Thou shall never make idols.
3) Thou shall never take thy name of thy LORD thou God in vain.
4) Remember to never forget who thou art and where thou belong to.
5) Honor other beings.
6) Thou shall never seek power.
7) Thou shall never murder.

Thou shall never wage war.
9) Thou shall always avoid thee seven deadly sins.
10) Thou shall never disobey thy rules.

If ever one is found have disobeyed even one of these rules will be severly punish. You will lose all your rights to be either Angel or Devil and will turn into a powerless beings and then you will likely be called Humans.

And so over centuries the Angels and Devils co-existed and created piece, but alas very piece has its ending. The final straw for it was the betryal of Lucifiel. The cause? It was because Benten caught the God-sickness turning him into a power-craving God. His actions become that of a mad man. He forgot his own 10 Rules.

Lucifiel tried to stop him, but hadn't had the power to do so and this cause his exile, thus becoming the first ever Fallen Angel. He become the so-called God of the Devils and was referred to as Satan.

Years passed by: Heaven and Hell lost its harmony, wars are everywhere, and most of all the Word of God has been forgotten by many, lost and become only a myth.

A decade? A century? Thousands of years had passed. Angels and Devils were worn out due to too many battles: won or lost.

To achieve piece again two individuals of different kind, fallen in love with each other at the wrong time and place, used their full powers to kill Benten. They succeeded, but lost their lives in the process. Thus two legend were created. Before succumbing to death though the two made their promise to each other that in another time they will meet again and will fall in love to each other again. And in that time no one will ever separate them again.

Haven't decide who to pair with who and who, and the main characters are. Because I wanted the reader-sama's to do the choosing. Please do so minna-sama. Thank you for reading the prologue.

MaYukiIsLife · « **Reply #1 on:** March 12, 2015, 05:14:22 PM »

FuruYanagi (Furukawa Airi x Takayanagi Akane) & WMatsui (Matsui Jurina & Matsui Rena) pls author-san <3

pandami21 · « **Reply #2 on:** March 12, 2015, 05:19:39 PM »

I've always ship Atsumina but since i'm trying to do other pairings story I need to do research on those pairings. So i'll research on the pairings you want goes on with the story mayukiislife-san.Although Furuyanagi is the only pairing you seggested that I don't know about. Keep it touch then mayukiislife-san.

MaYukiIsLife · « **Reply #3 on:** March 12, 2015, 05:38:50 PM »

Quote from: pandami21 on March 12, 2015, 05:19:39 PM

I've always ship Atsumina but since i'm trying to do other pairings story I need to do research on those pairings. So i'll research on the pairings you want goes on with the story mayukiislife-san.Although Furuyanagi is the only pairing you seggested that I don't know about. Keep it touch then mayukiislife-san.

Sure <3

For your information, this is FuruYanagi <3

Raizel · « **Reply #4 on:** March 12, 2015, 05:45:00 PM »

Author-san.... The prologue is interesting..

I hope you choose WMatsui as the main pairing...

I really love them because their opposite personality which make them the best pair...

black_maa · « **Reply #5 on:** March 12, 2015, 07:47:23 PM »

Woah.. it's really sounds like a fantasy story.

It was even little bit hard to read, more like how to spell right.

About pairing.. hmm.. in my mind is only one pair.. like usually..

Mina · « **Reply #6 on:** March 13, 2015, 12:50:08 AM »

Atsumina!!!!!

sophcaro · « **Reply #7 on:** March 13, 2015, 12:57:58 AM »

The prologue is indeed a bit hard to understand... Maybe too much new information to process?

Anyway, I voted wmatsui because it's my favorite pairing, but I think you should write about the pairing you like/know the best

junrena · « **Reply #8 on:** March 13, 2015, 01:20:21 AM »

Wmatsui ,,,,

Sayamilky

Kojiyuu

pandami21 · « **Reply #9 on:** March 13, 2015, 01:43:11 AM »

@black-maa and @sophcaro: Thnak you for saying something about the story.

I was having trouble writing this since I wanted to use just simple words but it came out like this.

I'll try to make it easy to understand.

Then please always leave criticism, be it good or bad. I'd appreciate it very much.

cisda83 · « **Reply #10 on:** March 14, 2015, 01:13:45 AM »

I wish for Atsumina as the main pairing with the rest of the other pairings as the supports

But may be you can make multi pairings story.... with everyone has equal scene time

Whatever it is looking forward to reading it

Thank you for the wonderful prologue

Can't wait to see the next chapter

sakura_drop_ · « **Reply #11 on:** March 14, 2015, 01:39:19 AM »

It is an interesting Prologue and for me was an easy read, since I used to read Greek and other Mythology related webcomics. I would love to see wMatsui or YukiRena

pandami21 · « **Reply #12 on:** March 14, 2015, 06:01:08 PM »

Chapter 1

A millennium had passed since the creation, hundreds after the 'Apocalypse'. Changes occurred, restorations were done.The biggest event that happened had been the peace treaty within all of the races; dated as the 'Horns of Truth'.

The races, because of the war, from a 20 of it, had come down to a number of only nyane. With different personalities, physical appearances, accustomed cultures, etc. had come to accept the existance of each others. In whole they have been called the 'Yggdrasil'.

Yggdrasil

'Asgardheim' is the realm of the angels. After the death of Benten, Michael had succeeded his throne and ruled over it with justice, wisdom and patience. Its capital is known as 'Valhalla'. This world is found at the toppest of all the world and is known as one of the two floating worlds.

'Alfheim', also known as 'Fairy Land', is home to the 'Light Elves'. Second to 'Alfheim' in position and also one of the floating worlds.

'Midgardheim' is inhabited by the 'Humans'. It is as well called as the 'Middle Earth' because it is found practically in the middle of all the nyane worlds, in short it is the center. Surrounded by a world of water, of ocean, that is impassable and guarded by a great sea serpent 'Jormungandr'. Its capital city is 'Eanrendel'.

'Svaltarfaheim' is dwelled by the 'Dwarves' or the 'Dark Elves'. Dwarves are known to be genyausesa and master of craftsmanship. They fam0ous due to their mastery at forging alm0ost indistructible weaponries. Sexond in being one of the lowest worlds.

'Helheim' is the realm of the devils. Ruled by Lucifiel after his bAanyashment from Asgard. Its capital city is'nyalfhel'. The lowest world in all of nyane.

'Vanaheim' is the land of 'Nephilims' or Breeds. Its pride is having one of the rarest ability: the power to see the future, clairvoyance. Capital is 'Tana Fork'. Found west from the center

'Musfelheim' is the realm of 'Fire'. Found south from Midgardheim.

'nyalfheim', home to 'Ice and Cold'. Found north from the center.

'Jotunheim' is the homeland to the 'Giants'.Positioned east of the center. Divided into two kinds: 'Rock Giants' and 'Frost Giants'. Capital is 'Utgard'.

It has indeed become a world of piece.

Inside a school Headmaster's office in Earendel

'So... this day has finally come, huh?' spoked a man in some what of an excited, yet with an underlying and alm0ost unnoticeable tone of dread in it. This man is looking straight to this eyes of a woman with inquisitive eyes, but that didn't even make her flinch.

This man is non other than Yasushi Akimoto-sensei, founder to the most famous school in all of Yggdrasil: the 'AKB University' and is the headmaster to it.

Yasushi-sensei, though have been living in Eanrendrel m0ost of his life, is NOT a Human. However that hasn't been proved true, yet. No one really knows where and what race he came from. The only thing the races know about him is that he founded AKB Uni, for all students, no distinction of races, to attends to.

AKB Uni houses and gathers all students of any race after the've finish elementary in their own world. It is because Yasushi-sensei thought that every race should have knowleadge and understanding to anything that regards the other races and to accept them without criticism.

'Yes... It is. Today would be the start of everything.' said the mysterious woman as she looks outside, at the sky from the window.

The blue sky is infinitely high, crystal clear... that's what the worlds should be... worlds of infinite possibilities, laid before us... for our destiny.

Yeah!! Sorry for this late update. Hope anyata woof it. Criticism is appreciated. Thank anyata all!!! Part 2 up next!

Reference: Norse Mythology

MaYukiIsLife · « **Reply #13 on:** March 14, 2015, 06:03:40 PM »

I voted for WMatsui because I don't really want my OTP to be the main characters I just want them in the fanfic

Raizel · « **Reply #14 on:** March 14, 2015, 06:14:42 PM »

Thanks for the update author-san..

It's getting more interesting..

And I really want wmatsui as the main pair..

, but Its all up to you..

Can't wait for the next chapter..

NamiRay!!! · « **Reply #15 on:** March 14, 2015, 09:32:56 PM »

Wahhh!! This fanfic seems really interesting!!

It definitely caught my attention!!

I'm very curious about the races you wrote and I wonder what race will each character belong to!!!

Actually I'm mostly curious about Mayu and Yuki....well they're my Kami-Oshi afterall!!!

But I guess I can already make a guess abou Mayu's race...I hope I'm correct...

I can't wait to read the next chapter!! Please update soon and don't ever stop writing!!

Bye author san!!!!

Kirozoro · « **Reply #16 on:** March 15, 2015, 04:10:00 AM »

I'm debating at Atsumina, Wmatsui and Mayuki

But i'm more happy if u include all three pairs

I woner what Akimoto-sensei trying to say there

Update soon

pandami21 · « **Reply #17 on:** March 15, 2015, 07:28:24 AM »

Minna-san today is the last day of voting so if you haven't voted, hurry up.

and thank you for your comments!!!

part 2 will be updated later of today. See ya!!!

cisda83 · « **Reply #18 on:** March 15, 2015, 07:10:03 PM »

great detail of the location where this story is going to take place...

Akimoto is the head master

Wondering when the characters are coming...

Also what pairing is the main...?

Can't wait to find out more

Thank you for the update

pandami21 · « **Reply #19 on:** March 16, 2015, 12:04:05 PM »

Chapter 2

It's a clear blue sky today... as well. The sky, pure blue and clear, is one of the most beautiful sceneries...one that has witness everything, from birth to destruction. So... it's not a mistery if the sky knows every beings... story.

Somewhere around Tana Fork

'Onee-sama, wake up.' A girl, around the age of 15, is trying to wake up her 'sister', but it seems the other girl wouldn't even budge.

'Hmm... I'm wide awake 'lil sis'. I just close my eyes.' The other said as she sit up from where she's lying and look at her 'little sister' smiling.

They're under this not so tall tree, relaxing and watching the worlds pass by. The girl with the shoulder-length hair and a has a cat-woof smile was telling a story to her 'older sister', but then she thought she was sleeping so she tried to wake her up. The 'older sister' was not actually sleeping, but rather was listening intently to her sister... with her eyes close of course.

This two girls are by no means actually sister or even distant relatives, but the only seperating them from becoming truly one are their race... and blood.

Matsui Jurina, the youngest between the two, is actually from Helfheim, realm of Devils, however due to some circumstances, she's been living with the older girl since birth. She's a mischievous, stubborn, hot-tempered girl with the most obvious features that throws away all doubts that she came from Helfheim: her black tail and 2 red horns. There is this one thing, though, that she is so curious about, but whenever she asks her parents they would always tell her to nevermind about it. 'It's a birthmark.' so they would say. It is that Yin Yang mark on her chest where the heart should be.

Takahashi Minami, the oldest among the two, instead, is a Nephilim: a breed birthed from the love of two individuals with different races. She is a half Devil and half Angel. Interesting features of her, though, is the fact that she doesn't have... much. From her boyish blond hair, to her height that shouldn't be talk about are all normals and yet there not signs that shows other what race she is. Weird, but... the most prominent purr of her is her eyes: they are the colors of blue-green and brown.

'Let's go, Jurina. Its getting late. They must be looking for us now.' Minami stands up and held her hand toward her sister.

'Hai Kai Nee-sama.' Jurina took her hand and they started walking home.

'When will you learn not to call me that anymore Jurina?'

'But I've been fond of it... Kai. giggles- back then, when we were still mere children we used to watched the clouds under that tree.' Jurina reminisces those times, distant they may seem, but stand the nearest to their memories.

'Hmm... you just so love the clouds that everything you see then you would call them 'ky' not heing able to pronounce the letter 's'. And as times pass by, I don't know why but you stucked at calling me the only one as 'Kai'.' Minami smiles fondly to Jurina.

As they talked about the past and the present they... will realize soon that what they will meow and talk about are only of the future from now on.

Home

When they arrive at their house they notice that it seem they have a guest.

'Tadaima.' Both said in unison as they look at the stranger with face etche with confusion.

'Okaeri, Minami, Jurina.' She, m0other of Minami, seeing their faces decided to introduce the stranger. 'He is Yasushi Akimoti-sensei. He came here to talk to you about something.'

'Please to meet you both. Today I came here to fulfill my promise I made to someone long time ago.'

'And that would be?' Inquired Jurina. From the looks of it, Jurina doesn't seem to trust the man. She look at her sister for support, but saw her looking at the man with intensive eyes, as if she's looking for somepurr.

'Well... It's to enroll you both at AKB University.'

'Eeh?!.. Did you just said...?'

'Yes. I'm here to ask your guardians permission to enroll you both at my school which is AKB Uni.'

'Eh? But why? We've our own sensei, so why the need to enroll at this school?' For Jurina, logic isn't enough. She must always know purrs with deep understanding.

'Jurina I meow this would be time for both of uu to attend school. It's for your own good. Besides there you can meet new friends. Didn't you said before that that you would like to meet other girls your age with different races?' The woman said while asking, through her eyes, Minami's permission.

If there is only one who can control the stubborn girl it would be Minami.

'Jurina, I meow we should go.' said Minami.

'But Nee-sama...' she tried to reason out but Minami glare at her and that made her resign. 'Fine, but in one condition. Nee-sama and I would be roomates.'

'Its possible, of course. Is that all, little Jurina?'

'Yes... Headmaster.'

'If that's all then I'll take my leave. In 1 week I'll send someone to pick you up. And don't worry about yourr enrollment, I'll see to it myself.' Akimoto-sensei then stand up. 'Minami-chan, right?...Have you look closer?'

Upon the word 'look' Minami looks at the man giving him an intense gaze. A gaze that would pierce any tough man and let her see whats inside his soul.

Without waiting his reply the man went out if the main door and off he goes to the gate.

'Nee-sama why did anyata agree?

'Jurina, sometimes decisions are made to change ones fate. Not everyone fates brings luck to them. Ourselves are the only one who can change them by will or by force and today... We both took our first step. Remeber that well, my dear little sister.' She responds her woof that and went to her room. 'So he remembers... I have to be careful. Jurina's life is at stake.'

Outside the sky has turned into a... flaming color. Birds are returning to their nests. The wind has carried with it a whisper... A promising whisper from a man who knows everything tha'ts going to happen...

Sooooo sorry for the lte update minna-sam. Requirements are piling up and i'm drowning from them. I'll try so hard to update every 2 days from now. Until school ends.
Thank you soooo much for the woofs and readers and commentors. It gives me the motivation to continue and never give up. Arigatou minna-sama.