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« Reply #240 on: October 27, 2006, 03:39:44 AM »
You mean, no more threesome (for now)? :o

Phew, I thought I was gonna miss this chapter for sure, since I had been sick for a couple of days and couldn't get around to going on the forums. I made sure I checked this as soon as I got back on though :D

Ai-chan being angry? That itself is a scary thought :S... anyways, so we still don't know what the machine thingy is, hmm... eh, I just suddenly thought about Eri's side of things.. what if she finds out what Sayu and Reina did? Uh oh :doh:

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« Reply #241 on: October 27, 2006, 05:57:51 AM »
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What?! We’ve only got 20 minutes.”
XD That got me soooo good.

Sigh, I guess this means I officialy like fan fiction now, seeing how this is my third fanfiction ever, and its from Jphip!

I have to admit, at first it seemed a little amaturish, and since Im not a big fan of the first two couples, I didnt see myself getting into it.... that was until Gaki and Takakahshi joined... and I thought Reina being added wouldnt interest me--- but it toooottaly did! And the KamieShige, ha, that was even further from my interest (Im not the BIGGEST Shige fan, but then again, as of late, shes getting into my senses more) but now I see it as a good thing. KonMako has a good plot to it... (and like everyone else, I get that weird feeling that its a--well...).

This is definitly PTA-approved (as we would say in H-O).
Keep it up, this is my first real H!P/MM romantic fanfic (since enrik has a combination of every genre!) and its treating the head reallll good :D

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« Reply #242 on: October 29, 2006, 07:02:02 PM »
This chapter is seen through Risa’s POV so its basically written through her thoughts. Also, special appearances by the other Momosu members.


Chapter 36


[Inside Risa’s Head]

I shuffle into the dance studio grudgingly with my bag hanging lopsided off my shoulder. It was bright and early the next morning with the sun barely climbing up into the crimson sky. My eyes were only half open, a result of lying awake the whole night wondering how the girls were and not daring to message or call them.

“Good morning!”

Eri greeted me in a cheery voice and slapped me on the back a little harder than usual. I wonder what she was so happy about. Did she communicate with her alien friends again last night?

“Morning.”

I mutter a half-hearted reply and went back to my zombie-like state. I’m sure I look like a total wreck and apparently Eri noticed it too.

“Did you get that?”

Eri’s question jolted me from drifting off to someplace comparable to Neverland and I look in her direction, trying to focus on her face, which appeared a little fuzzy.

“Wha…t?”

“Did you catch the number of that truck, the one that just hit you?”



I mumble another indecipherable sound before realizing she was taking a poke at me. Usually I might acquire a reaction close to annoyance if I was made fun of like this when I wasn’t in the mood to be made fun of. Did you get what I just thought? My brain isn’t functioning all that well in sleepy mode.

But staring at Eri’s face all joyful and smiley, I somehow couldn’t get mad at her. Who could go nuts at Kamei with her childish grin and kissable lips?

“Yeah I didn’t sleep that well last night.”

I hope this excuse was enough to get Eri off my case, she could get buggy if she wanted to. My rather weak reason appeared to be enough to satisfy her and she grabbed my head in a hold and rocked it from side to side.

“Ahhhh poor Gaki baby.”

“Er…you can let go of my head now.”

I struggle to free myself of Eri’s grip and shrank away inconspicuously. Now I’m fully awake, too freaked out from Kame’s weird actions. I slowly become aware of the studio being quieter than usual with only the sounds of Yoshizawa-san fiddling with the stereo and Makoto’s voice booming in the background as she told Asami some joke.

Glancing around, I saw Ai stretching in one corner, Reina warming up in the corner diagonal from her and Sayumi with her face practically buried in her bag as she acted like she was searching for something. Surely Eri couldn’t have been taken in by such lousy acting skills?

“Okay everyone in their places!”

I scramble into position with Eri hot on my heels as the music started. I look at the leader’s reflection in the floor to ceiling mirrors and saw her brows knotted in deep concentration. As madcap as Yoshizawa-san is, she was always responsible and serious when she needed to be.

My gaze landed on the two girls in question but the expressions they wore were normal. Did I dream up everything that happened last night? After all catching Reina and Sayumi in the ‘act’ among bushes wasn’t something you bang into everyday. Maybe I was just overly active in my dream world or something. That would explain why I was dead tired now.

After that, I run through the dance for Ambitious! Yashinteki De Ii Jan not paying much attention to anything until Mikitty’s voice made me jump. I turn my head and freeze at the sight before me. Fujimoto-san had her hands on her hips and she was glaring, yes glaring at Ai and Reina.

“Would you two cut it out!”

Her voice bellows and Sayumi and Koharu start whimpering. Yoshizawa-san shakes her head slightly as if expecting such a scene.

“What’s with messing up on purpose? Others have a life, we can’t spend the whole day just perfecting one dance.”

“She really wants to go meet Aya at the café. I overheard her on the phone.”

Makoto’s whispering wasn’t all that soft and I hear Konno shushed her up quickly. There was no sense in everyone getting involved in this.

“I know there’s something up between you two. Settle your boy fights before you come to practice.”

“Let’s get a drink.”

Yoshizawa-san places a hand on Miki’s arm and leads her away from the pair who was looking in different directions. Ai was staring at some non-existent object a few feet away while Reina kept her eyes narrowed on the wall behind Miki.

“Koharu-chan, come on. Everybody take five.”

I was glad Yoshizawa-san stopped Miki before things got out of hand. I was even more relieved that Koharu was out of the studio. It would be difficult trying to explain to a 14 year old the problems her seniors were facing.

“So what’s up? You should know better than to let some boy get between you”



I wished Makoto didn’t start at a crucial time like this. Judging from the look on Reina’s face, I was pretty sure she was going to explode at any moment.

“It’s really not worth it. We have something much more significant than boys.”

One Makoto who didn’t know when to keep her mouth shut was bad enough but Eri too? And boy troubles, man they couldn’t be further from the truth. I squeezed my eyes shut and hoped for divined intervention but my prayers weren’t answered and what happened next could be the trailer for some girl fight flick.

“Do you think we have something much more significant than boys Eri?”

Uh oh, please don’t get Kame involved, I plead silently at Ai with my eyes, but she either didn’t catch my gaze or she was too angry to care.  

“Y..eah?”

Eri replied, unsure at where Ai was going. Except that I was certain, if Ai continued like this, everyone was going to get implicated.

“Do you have to do that? Must you destroy what Eri and Sayu have?”

“So you care about what they have? Then why jeopardize it with your little tryst with Shige?”

And all hell breaks loose, it really does…

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wordsworth: Girl fight part 2! :tfr9a7wg:

Sukoshi: Bingo! It is food related :yay:

Yuuyami: I kinda solved one wondering in this chapter XD

jafeijai: The fight ain't over yet. I was intending to reveal the gadget but this chapter "overflowed" :p

KrazyForKamei: You really wanna see bloodshed? I can make that happen :p

rndmnwierd: Close, but not exactly :)

JFC: *Passes you some popcorn* XD

ChrNo: Your comment is as funny and entertaining as always, I :panda_love: reading it!

TydusArandor: Aw being sick feels horrible, glad you're okay now. Yep when Eri finds out it'll be :ON@_@:

Owaranai_sLaVe: You like this, you do? :panda_omg2: I'm so happy!! Welcome to the thread and thanks for reading and commenting. I'm glad you like the couples now :)
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« Reply #243 on: October 29, 2006, 07:16:02 PM »
Poor Eri and lol at the unsuspecting Makoto!

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« Reply #244 on: October 29, 2006, 07:45:15 PM »
Oh, ouch... Takahashi is really vindictive.  Too bad she couldn't just try to listen to their simple explanation last night.  And heyyy!!  So what was the object Mako and Eri were working on?  I was so curious!  :cry:

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« Reply #245 on: October 30, 2006, 01:14:22 AM »
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But staring at Eri’s face all joyful and smiley, I somehow couldn’t get mad at her. Who could go nuts at Kamei with her childish grin and kissable lips?


Oooo I really liked this chapter~  It was pretty cool from Risa's point of view!

Kissable eh?  LOL at Gaki-san!!  I'm starting to think that she has a thing for everyone XD

and omg the fight has begun!!

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« Reply #246 on: October 30, 2006, 02:13:04 AM »
And so the grudge goes on >:]

Write more!

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« Reply #247 on: October 30, 2006, 02:28:42 AM »
wow..."and then all hell breaks loose"...
and here i wanted a nice happy chapter too..at least the end of it anyways :P LOL @ Risa's thoughts!! "Eri's kissable lips"?! interesting...
:x RAWR @ not revealing the object...you'd best reveal it next chapter...or else..um......all hell will break loose!! :lol:

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« Reply #248 on: October 30, 2006, 03:18:55 AM »
Takahashi Ai vs. Tanaka Reina

I want to see them in the mounted position, just like in the UFC matches :drool:

Or in a bra and panties match WWE style. Of course a foreign object like a steel chair has to make an appearance so I'm thinking that it would be Mako-chan's mysterious device. XD
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« Reply #249 on: October 30, 2006, 10:53:02 AM »
oooO.... cat fight but for some reason I can imagine an angry Ai-chan.... Reina i can picture Ai... not really haha
Eri's gonna find out!! oh no.... or will she be too much of a boke to figure it out?

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« Reply #250 on: October 30, 2006, 01:36:15 PM »
Gah!! I FINALLY caught up with your fic until now. *applause for you* :P
 
It sucked me in right away from the start, always left me wondering what would happen next and then BAM when you revealed that Reina was actually after Ai-chan.
 
I really like chapter 36 from Risa's POV, showing us how she perceives things.
 
XD Eri and her weirdness while Risa's abit dead is too funny.
 
The tenseness and anger between Reina and Ai-chan... it's so heavy. Why won't you listen to Reina's explanation Ai-chan?!?! But I'm really looking forward to how they're gona beef it out with eachother!
 
Excellent job, and I'm looking forward to more confrontations/making up!! :D

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« Reply #251 on: October 30, 2006, 07:30:39 PM »
demmm...i've been up since 9pm and its now 2 in the morning(where i am though) reading this story from chapter 1. This story was so good, I was looking for the "Next" button when i realized this was the last page...keep the chapters ongoing please.....

p/s: i second that....a bra and panties match....but in royal rumble style...different members come at different times...and throw in a few grad members or other units......and have each member wear a different cosplay outfit.....but a man can only dream....:-L__________

spreading the usa-chan love....i mean darkness(thanks to JFC)

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« Reply #252 on: October 30, 2006, 09:39:33 PM »
No bloodshed yet! (which is actually a good thing). Lots of Eri-ness in this chapter (^_^) cept i felt bad for her :( Im gonna be crying when she finds out i can feeeeeeel it.

Ai-chan seems like the more evil and angrier of the two...her and Reina that is. So when they start whoopin ass I'm placing a 20 dollar bet on Ai-chan *puts money on the table*

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« Reply #253 on: October 31, 2006, 12:01:22 AM »
I'll see your 20 and raise ten on Reina. XD

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« Reply #254 on: October 31, 2006, 03:35:12 AM »
lol I can just see it now....Miki and co. return to the room to find Eri and Sayu crying in seperate corners while Ai and Reina are totally clawing at each other in the middle of the room with Risa just standing there hoping it's all a dream...

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« Reply #255 on: November 03, 2006, 05:17:23 AM »
Thanks for the welcome Lil_hamz (please call me sLaVe. I like nicknames... You mind if I call you Hamz?). And yes, I am enjoying it. Especially now that the tension is getting more serious D:

I love that last line, hehe.

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« Reply #256 on: November 07, 2006, 07:04:06 AM »
Chapter 37


There was this weird silence that befell upon the group in the studio. It was so quiet you could hear a pin drop, or someone’s heartbeat thumping away.

“Tryst…”

Eri pronounced the word ever so slowly the others couldn’t decide she was picturing in her mind what Reina and Sayumi did during the tryst or if she couldn’t believe it was actually true .

“Tryst.” Eri repeated again in a louder voice that screamed ‘I don’t know what the word means.’

With the emerging possibility that they might be able to cover this up with a good lie after all, Risa tried her gallant best.

“TRIES… Ai-chan meant tries.”

“Tries?”

Now Eri was really confused with the situation. Seeing that Risa wasn’t getting where she wanted to, the generally quiet Kon Kon tried to help.

“Risa meant Sayu and Reina tried out something without telling you. And they’re really sorry for it.”

It was a long shot but if Eri was clueless enough like she usually was, it might just work. More than a few people were holding their breathe and these included Risa, Makoto, Kon Kon and strangely the original perpetrator of this scenario - Ai.

“Oh! Is that all Sayu, its perfectly fine. I tried out that new chocolate fountain with Mako-chan last night too.”

Giving Sayumi a relaxed and kind smile, Eri didn’t know it was the straw that broke the camel’s back. Sayumi had rather tiny hands for someone her height and now she brought them up to cover her face that had tears gushing down like a broken dam.

“I.....I’m sorry Eri. It wasn’t anything bad, Reina and I weren’t dressed but… but…. We didn’t do anything much.”

Not wanting to fib to Eri any longer and with the stress of the upcoming concerts, musical and volleyball events building up, Sayumi finally cracked under the pressure.

Not dressed? What not dressed?"

Eri’s eyes bulged so huge at those words that they looked double their original size and seemed like they might fall out any second.

It was times like this that required Kon Kon and her talented mind to think of something that might reverse the situation or at least try to salvage it but no matter how hard she willed it to focus on the greater good, the shy girl couldn’t stop her thoughts from returning to ten seconds earlier when Eri revealed what she did last night with Makoto.

How could Makoto leave her out of something she knew she loved - food? Did she secretly carry a torch for Eri? But it wasn’t hard to see why since Kamei was undeniably cute. Oh how she wished it wasn’t true.

“Argh Kamei-chan! It was supposed to be a secret.”

Makoto’s exasperated sigh brought Konno back to Earth and she realized Eri was still frozen in the same position she was minutes ago.



Lies! All lies!

Screaming at the top of her lungs, Eri unfroze and covered her ears with her hands before shaking her head a few times. Her short hair flew all over her face as she repeated those words under her breathe.

“Kame….”

Risa whispered gently and reached out her hand to touch the agitated girl. But before she could make contact, Eri suddenly spun around and ran out of the studio not looking back even once.

“Eri!”

Sayumi’s crying escalated as she started running after Eri and in the fray pulled Risa along with her in the hope that somehow her slightly older senior would be able to save this horrid state of affairs.

“Oi come back, Fujimoto-san is gonna yell when she comes back!”

Makoto’s warnings fell on deaf ears for the three girls who had just left the studio couldn’t even hear her. Heaving a sigh, she turned back around from facing the door to see Reina biting her lower lip as she tried fighting back the tears threatening to fall from her eyes, Ai sitting on the ground in a dazed state and Konno staring at her with huge doleful eyes.
 
“Oh god, why must I be the one having to clean up this mess.”

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rndmnwierd: Makoto seems kinda insensitive with her words sometimes doesn't she :ONdepressed:

hanh: Aww Ai’s not really vindictive, she’s just angry. Did you realize what the project was? It was mentioned briefly :)

yuuyami: Still got ya hardhat on tight? I hope it wasn’t thrown off XD

jafeijai: I revealed the object so no hell breaks loose now eh :yay:

wordsworth: Sorry to burst ya bubble, but Mako’s device was much tamer than what you imagined XD

stefy: Eri the boke… haha she was a little boke-ish at the beginning wasn’t she :p

goosefish: When girls get mad, they get mad :lol: It’s kinda hard getting them to listen to logic when that happens XD

kazitakato: Woah 5 hrs, does it take that long to read this? Hmmm I don’t know about seeing other H!P units here since this fic is mostly focused on the 5th and 6th gens :p

KrazyForKamei: More Kamei in this chapter. Wow I’d like to see a Reina x Ai fight too. *ding!* :tfr9a7wg:

Sukoshi: Eri does have super kissable lips doesn’t she? So pouty and all :panda_kiss: I think you might see something similar to what you think might happen in the next chapter.
 
Owaranai_sLaVe: No prob sLaVe, I like the sound of hamz too :)
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« Reply #257 on: November 07, 2006, 07:11:44 AM »
EH!? WHAT!?

The first thing I have to mention is the kissable lips thing. Oh god, Gaki-san, why!?!? :doh: It's the Sweat CM, isn't it T_T. If you follow H!M, it seems that there's rarely any TakaGaki while there's KameGaki every single episode =S.

Just when you thought the tension was gonna die down a bit, now it's right back up. I hope Eri can take it in a "good way" :kcrazy:
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I'm always this lucky, aren't I, previewing and I see a new chapter.

I KNEW IT! Something Konkon wants would HAVE to be food-related T_T. It was funny how she got jealous XD

I never knew Sayu was this dumb :doh: well... now to see what will happen next! DUN DUN DUN! :D

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« Reply #258 on: November 07, 2006, 09:53:56 AM »
lol hammy san I think you just gave me a crazy idea XD   What if your :panda_kiss: hint meant that Eri will get revenge on Sayu by kissing Gaki san! XD  :heart:

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« Reply #259 on: November 07, 2006, 10:25:56 AM »
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Eri’s eyes bulged so huge at those words that they looked double their original size and seemed like they might fall out any second.


MY SHOCK!:ONstoned:

I don't know who I pity more, Eri or Sayu. Poor Rokkies :ONgyaaah:

Thanks to Konkon for trying to patch things up.

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