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« Reply #280 on: September 17, 2006, 10:15:35 AM »
from here? XD
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“You’re the one who forced me” said Ishikawa caressing Yossi’s lips with her words “Who’s sicker?”

that's why I said that Yossi wasn't an angel either... Just _Hitomi_ caught it?
I've disimulated it a little 'cause using the word 'rape' sounded a little too much for me, but yeah, that's it, and at the end of the fic you'll know why she did it :P

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« Reply #281 on: September 17, 2006, 04:53:04 PM »
That's why they broke? or They have never been together?

Will you do a flashback about their relationship?

(i think i'm losing ^^U, sorry!!!)

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« Reply #282 on: September 17, 2006, 05:20:32 PM »
ok... to recap the situation..
Yossi fell in love with rika, she dumped Maki and started a relationship with charmy. after a long relationship without sex 'cause she wasn't ready, Ishikawa became jealous of every girl that came near Yossi 'cause she's insecure. then she thought that Yossi was sleeping with Maki (with a little help of Erika). Something happened (yes, there'll be a flashback) and Yossi forced Rika (remember it was her FIRST time together). At this point, Rika thinks that Yossi has to be with her because of what happened and Yossi can't be with Rika because she feels bad.  
You remember when Miki asks maki about Yossi&Rika relationship? Maki tells her that one night she found Yossi crying in her doorway but she never told her what happened. Ok then, it was THAT night. That's why maki told Miki that Yossi&Rika had never slept together. She didn't know the truth.
Soo, that's it. I hope you'll understand better now :P
And now.. i have to began to write the next part XDXD

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« Reply #283 on: September 17, 2006, 05:40:08 PM »
UOOOO ok ok thank you!!!! (K)(K)
I will wait for the next part :P

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« Reply #284 on: September 17, 2006, 07:00:38 PM »
So Yossui did rape Rika? °__° I must have missed that part....

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« Reply #285 on: September 17, 2006, 07:03:32 PM »
yay!^^ i can wait:D :D

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« Reply #286 on: September 17, 2006, 07:52:42 PM »
WOW! Don't know what to say...

You are such a good writer! Wanna be as good as youXD  Altought I have never written anything:D

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« Reply #287 on: September 17, 2006, 08:01:32 PM »
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   So Yossui did rape Rika? °__° I must have missed that part....
You haven't missed anything. I haven't wrote it (and i'm not going to do it... at least not in a perv mode...) i've just made a mention of it inside Rika and Yossi last conversation XDXD

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You are such a good writer! Wanna be as good as you Altought I have never written anything

and what are you waiting to start? :P

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« Reply #288 on: September 17, 2006, 08:07:02 PM »
WOA O_O I was scared for a moment when Yossie was in Rika's house and stuff, I was biting my nails and was on the edge of my seat, then BAM! Yossie got back at Rika. WOA I can't stop saying woa. Heh, I love it. AMAZING! You have a great way with words, I love it. And just for the record...WOA.
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« Reply #289 on: September 18, 2006, 07:39:23 AM »
***41***


“You don’ have to be here if you don’t want it”

It seemed that Aya was reading her mind all night. It wasn’t exactly that she didn’t want to be with her best friend but, somehow, she felt bad leaving Yossi alone the way she did it. Her girlfriend must be thinking that she was angry.

“You argued with Yossi?”
“No…” answered Miki coming back from her inner thoughts.
“Then, why aren’t you taking care of your injured knight?”

This time, Aya’s question sounded more like if she was making fun of what happened.

“Don’t start again with that” said Miki.
“What? I’ve just made a question”
“The mocking tone in your voice is annoying, you know?

Aya crossed her arms and looked at her friend trying to seem serious.

“Well, is ironic how your girlfriend was hurt saving the woman who’s trying to break your relationship. Oh! And don’t forget the kiss… It was so romantic…”
“Aya, stop it”
“Don’t tell me that you didn’t feel your guts burning when you saw it…”
“Shut up!”

The shout made Matsuura take a step back. For a moment, she thought that Miki was going to hit her.

“I… I’m… sorry” Fujimoto apologized when she saw her friend scared “It just… of course it made my blood boils but… How can I reproach anything to Yocchan when I’m in the same situation with you?”
“Hey! Don’t dare to compare me with I’m-Charmy-the-Bitch ok?” Ayaya took an offended pose and give her back to her friend “I’m much better”

Miki couldn’t help but laugh. Seeing Aya with her hands in her waist, eyes closed and jaw raised, acting as if what she said was the most offensive thing it was definitely a good way to loosen the atmosphere between them.

“What’s so funny?”  asked Ayaya looking at her out the corner of her eyes but without turning completely.
“Sorry…” said Miki controlling her laugh “I just was thinking… Thanks God you’re not like her. The last we need is another maniac-obsessive around”

Matsuura seated on the couch and took Miki’s hand to make her sit next to her. Then, Fujimoto placed her head on Aya’s shoulder and closed her eyes.

“I would never hurt you, Mikitan”
“I know”


***

“Sorry if I’ve woke you up”
“No, it’s ok. I’ve just came back and I was going to take a bath”

Maki let her friend come inside the apartment and closed the door behind. Yossi seemed worried and that she went to visit her at late night it could only mean one thing and it’s name was Ishikawa.

“You shouldn’t be at home resting? I’ve heard that you got injured with the earthquake”
“I’m better now”
“You want to stay here tonight?”

Yossi nodded and Maki didn’t need anything more. She wasn’t going to ask what happened or why she wasn’t with Miki. She was just going to do what she always did. Comfort the one she loved without worrying about anything else.

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« Reply #290 on: September 18, 2006, 08:00:27 AM »
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Yossi nodded and Maki didn’t need anything more. She wasn’t going to ask what happened or why she wasn’t with Miki. She was just going to do what she always did. Comfort the one she loved without worrying about anything else.


Aw. Poor Maki. And Yossi. And Miki. Damn! Poor all of them....

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« Reply #291 on: September 19, 2006, 04:09:41 AM »
You are much better at angst than I am. Everything I write always seems to have a happy ending, whereas here, I'm on the edge of my seat. Keep going!

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« Reply #292 on: September 19, 2006, 06:30:14 AM »
I always say the same things...:cry:  But again, I loooove this:heart:

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and what are you waiting to start?

I have thinked to write something someday. Don't know when, but let's seeXD

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« Reply #293 on: September 19, 2006, 06:47:40 AM »
we can never guess what'll happen next when it comes to your fic!!
its so unpredictable... which is exactly why its sooo awesome

poor maki!! yossie only goes to her when she's feeling down... aww mann

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« Reply #294 on: September 19, 2006, 09:14:47 PM »
Like everyone said, poor everyone ;____;... Write more or Yuuyami KEEL -has whip...and a hardhat XD-

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« Reply #295 on: September 20, 2006, 12:22:19 AM »
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Like everyone said, poor everyone ;____;... Write more or Yuuyami KEEL -has whip...and a hardhat XD-

-nods- Like my cousin said, write more or Yuuyami (and now Saikami) KEEL -pulls out fluffy pillow- Wait...Wrong thing. -.- -pulls out harisen- There we go. :twisted:
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« Reply #296 on: September 20, 2006, 01:04:47 PM »
hey, don't put pressure on me... just wait a bit more
i don't wanna rush things XD

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« Reply #297 on: September 20, 2006, 02:08:56 PM »
I just read through #1-#8 and I totally love your fic, len.chan.
The characters are so vividly outlined.
Gotta keep on reading~!

EDIT : OMG I finished #41 and I'm dying for the next chapters!!!
I'm usually on AyaMiki side but now I guess I have to reconsider.
Keep up the great work!
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« Reply #298 on: September 20, 2006, 09:09:08 PM »
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hey, don't put pressure on me... just wait a bit more
i don't wanna rush things XD

XD Ok, ok. No pressure, it was just a way to...erm...encourage you. :D
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« Reply #299 on: September 20, 2006, 09:58:46 PM »
Yes, to encourage you ^^- o-o -gives you a hardhat too- In case there's others who dare punt you in their impatience XD

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