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« Reply #240 on: September 10, 2006, 06:48:55 PM »
That was a good chapter! Now I can't wait for the next one! Will everyone be alright? Will H!P be destroyed??? Proabably not....

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« Reply #241 on: September 10, 2006, 07:05:34 PM »
^^^yeah^^ i like the story

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« Reply #242 on: September 10, 2006, 07:10:59 PM »
What's going on? Need to know!XD

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« Reply #243 on: September 10, 2006, 07:47:17 PM »
Oh boy! Earthquakes!

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« Reply #244 on: September 10, 2006, 09:34:46 PM »
Earthquakes. x.x Woa, I wonder what's gunna happen to everyone. :O Good chapter! I want more. :3
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« Reply #245 on: September 11, 2006, 01:17:16 AM »
Whew, just finished all 37 chapters in one sitting.

Your fic has really gotten me into it so far, even though I'm not a YoMiki fan. The plot and stuff's just too interesting to not read. I think it's an extremely well-written fic, especially if it's your first in English.

Regarding the latest chapter, I think earthquakes were the last thing I was expecting x_X. Keep up the good work, hope there's another chapter soon :D.

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« Reply #246 on: September 11, 2006, 02:29:45 AM »
Haha! Cuuuute :] Carry on!

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« Reply #247 on: September 11, 2006, 03:09:20 AM »
aww that's cute how miki jst had to hold on to something fast cuz of her fear of earthquakes ^^
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« Reply #248 on: September 11, 2006, 04:27:28 PM »
the earthquake thing is funny how it came to my mind. I was so blocked than I began to play DDR a little and then it was like 'PUFF' and the idea appeared XDXD
thanks again for all your comments


***38***


“Is everybody ok?” asked a staff member.

Rika was trying to stand up. She was still a little stunned after the earthquake and her legs were shaking. Ishikawa didn’t remember clearly what happened, just the tremor and everything around her falling. Then, someone pushing her.

She looked around and saw the big painting of the hall on the floor.

“You’re ok, Yoshizawa-san?”

Yossi? She was here?


“Yeah, I’m fine”
“Really?” asked the guy worried “You’re lucky. That thing could have hit you really hard”

Ishikawa turned her head to look at the younger who was standing against the wall, holding her right arm and pretending to be all right. But she knew Yossi for so many years already to know perfectly when she’s hiding something.

“Let’s go” she said taking Yossi by the hand and leaving the hall.
“Hey! Wait!” complained the taller “What do you think you’re doing?”
“I’m bringing you to the sickbay”
“I’m not going anywhere with you” answered Hitomi angry “I have to find Miki”
“Fujimoto can wait. You need to see a doctor”
“No, I don’t” said Yossi releasing her hand from Rika’s “I’m ok and I’m going to search for Miki”

Seeing that Yoshizawa wasn’t going to hear her, she didn’t have more alternatives than hit her where she knew that Yossi was hurt.

The pain made Hitomi scream.

“See? You’re not ok” said Rika taking again the other girl’s hand “Come on”

This time, Yossi just followed her in silence trying to hold the tears caused by the pain in her shoulder.

***


Miki didn’t want to open her eyes. She was too scared that she’d even forgotten who was holding her until the other girl spoke.

“It’s over, Miki”
“You’re sure?” she asked with a tiny, cracked voice.
“Yeah”

She slowly opened her eyes and looked around. She was safe, the world was still there and she was in Aya’s arms…

Wait…

Suddenly, Fujimoto realized what she was doing and tried to move away from her friend, but Aya didn’t let her go.

“Aya, I’m bet… I’m better now” she said avoiding Matsuura’s eyes.
“I’d like to be like this forever…” Ayaya hold her tightly again and rested her head on Miki’s shoulder.
“This isn’t the best moment to talk about that, you know?”
“Yeah… sorry” said Aya finally letting Miki go “We… we should find if everybody is ok, right?”

Miki nodded. She was glad that things weren’t worst, and she wasn’t thinking just about the earthquake. If Aya had insisted or tried to kiss her, Miki was sure that she couldn’t fight against it. That’s why she hated so much the earthquakes… There were just two things that made her vulnerable, that and the girl in front of her.
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« Reply #249 on: September 11, 2006, 05:11:04 PM »
Ah i can't wait to see the next one!!^^

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« Reply #250 on: September 11, 2006, 05:53:18 PM »
i kinda hope yossie and rika will work things out between them...
not saying they sld be tgt but just you know...
no more evil rika?

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« Reply #251 on: September 11, 2006, 11:11:54 PM »
Good thing Aya didn't try to kiss her. :O Gahh knows what that would lead to, and then Yossie would find out and x.x But yea, good chapter! :3 I like.
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« Reply #252 on: September 12, 2006, 02:45:42 AM »
Yossi pushed Rika to safety~ AH~~~ that's so S-W-E-E-T

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« Reply #253 on: September 12, 2006, 04:27:55 AM »
.... Love it!!!°°

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« Reply #254 on: September 12, 2006, 05:32:27 PM »
Already waiting the next chapter XD

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« Reply #255 on: September 13, 2006, 08:21:36 AM »
***39***


“You should rest and tomorrow go to the hospital” said the doctor “It’s just a dislocated shoulder but it would be better if you take some tests. Just to be sure”
“Ok”

The girls left the room after the doctor gave Hitomi some pills against the pain. She was lucky that it was just a dislocation. Now the shoulder was at her place again and she just would feel a little aching for some days.

“I’m glad that it wasn’t worst”
“Why are you still here?” asked Yossi turning to look at the other girl “I’m not gonna die so you don’t have to pretend anymore”
“I’m not pretending” said Ishikawa really serious “I was worried. If something happen to you…”

There was a silence. Both girls looked at each other without knowing what to say. Then, Rika took the first step and went closer.

“Why have you done it?” she asked placing her hand carefully upon the hurt shoulder and letting it to slip down on Yossi’s arm.
“I’d have done the same for anyone. Don’t think that you’re special”
“But…”
“That I can’t stand you it doesn’t mean that I want to see you being hurt” continued Yossi.
“Well, that’s better than nothing…”

Hitomi was tired and made a new attempt to leave but there was Ishikawa’s hand again to hold her.

“Let me go” demanded Yoshizawa.

But Rika-chan didn’t obeyed and made quite the contrary. She went closer to Yossi and surrounded the taller’s waist with her arms.

“Thank you” she whispered burying her face in Hitomi’s chest.

Yossi thought that maybe, for once, she could forget everything and just hold her. The earthquake was a shock for everyone and she had to be still scared. A friendly hold it wasn’t going to hurt anyone… At least, as long as Rika could keep it friendly and she didn’t try anything else…

“It feels so good to be in your arms like this again…”

In her mind, Yoshizawa agreed with Rika’s words. It feels good, really good, even too much if she despised the girl who was in her arms. That couldn’t be right.

“Don’t mix things, Ishikawa…” she said trying to move away.

Rika took advantage of Hitomi’s injury and made her stay close. Then, she saw a pair of silhouettes that she knew perfectly and took it as a perfect opportunity for her plans. Without warning, she raised her head and captured Yossi’s lips with hers.

The taller wasn’t expecting that move and caught her totally unaware. That’s why she couldn’t react for a few seconds. When Yossi finally realized, she pushed Ishikawa away with her good arm.

“What do you think you’re doing?” she demanded remembering her angry against the girl in front of her.

“I could ask you exactly the same” said a cold voice behind her.

Yoshizawa didn’t need to turn her head to know who the owner of the voice was. She knew it, and she was going to regret the moment of weakness that she had before with Rika.

“The girls said me that you were injured but you shouldn’t be so bad, don’t you?”
“Don’t talk like this Miki” said Yossi “You know things aren’t how it looks like”

Fujimoto didn’t reply. She just took her girlfriend’s hand and looked at her eyes.

“Come on, I’ll take you home”

After the girls left, Matsuura looked at Rika who was smiling with pleasure after what happened.

“If I didn’t know that’s impossible I’d tell that you’ve done all that on purpose”
“You think I’d hurt Yossi just to make my plans work?” she answered offended.
“No, of course not. But I don’t know how you manage to be always in the right place at the right time”
“I’m a lucky girl?”

Rika-chan smiled devilish and turned her back to Aya leaving the younger alone with her thoughts.

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« Reply #256 on: September 13, 2006, 11:54:16 AM »
WOW~~~~~

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« Reply #257 on: September 13, 2006, 01:06:15 PM »
woo... intense... what'll hapen next?!?!

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« Reply #258 on: September 13, 2006, 03:12:19 PM »
OMG! I will cry if Miki doesn't understand that what happened wasn't Yossi's fault :cry:  Don't write YoMiki to break up... :cry:  :P

But now: more pleaseXD

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« Reply #259 on: September 13, 2006, 10:15:49 PM »
Yossui and Miki have to work things out!
..........°_°.....
Oh god! You're making me root for Yomiki! The world is ending!
*runs around screaming* I'm not a shipper! I'm not a shipper!

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