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Offline Tyler_Wood_2005

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« on: May 16, 2005, 09:04:49 AM »
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« Reply #1 on: May 17, 2005, 06:17:41 AM »
Wow the details are really nice...and you captured the emotions well. I just think your situation is a a little suspect. I think your enviroment should have been a bit more realistic. But its a really nice fantasy...and hey that's what fantasies are all about.
But maybe it me.  I just  can't really write myself into these kinda stories, because I can't honestly imagine myself ever meeting an H!P girl. Maybe I'll try to change that.
But keep on with your story...the details are superb. Go for it!

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« Reply #2 on: May 17, 2005, 08:45:21 AM »
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« Reply #3 on: May 17, 2005, 08:50:38 AM »
Quote from: Jabronisaur
Wow the details are really nice...and you captured the emotions well. I just think your situation is a a little suspect. I think your enviroment should have been a bit more realistic. But its a really nice fantasy...and hey that's what fantasies are all about.
But maybe it me.  I just  can't really write myself into these kinda stories, because I can't honestly imagine myself ever meeting an H!P girl. Maybe I'll try to change that.
But keep on with your story...the details are superb. Go for it!


Its all just in good fun, its all fantasy. I know where fantasy begins and where reality sets it. I don't get the 2 confused, what can I say I'm a writer :D . Writing fictional stories is a favorite pasttime of mine. I always find I can write better if I put myself in the story :)

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« Reply #4 on: May 18, 2005, 05:11:52 AM »
Awesome, I can sense some 3 some action :D

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« Reply #5 on: May 18, 2005, 07:24:04 AM »
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« Reply #6 on: May 19, 2005, 02:11:41 AM »
Haha, quite the story. My brain started to hurt at one point though because you kept jumping between tenses ("She said" and then suddenly "She says") and because I'm an English nerd, I couldn't read most of it. Very imaginative. XD

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« Reply #7 on: May 19, 2005, 05:08:37 AM »
Well when your writing it your bound to make mistakes. And with no Fing spell check :evil:  :evil: , its such a hassle to even want to read it again after you've spent 2-3 hours thinking it up, writing it and giving it a very quick look over.

......ah shit why didn't I think of that before, I'll write it in Microsoft word first then copy/paste it into here :lol:  :lol: ...such a simple solution.

and if its a little too much for you to read *content wise*, I put a "clean" version up at the normal http://www.jpopmusic.com/forums Morning Musume forums :D . No sex, only kissing and very clean stuff :lol:

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« Reply #8 on: May 19, 2005, 08:45:45 AM »
Word is awesome for that. ^^;; I do it all the time since I'm like you; when I'm writing a story I just want to get it all out before I forget anything! So typos abound. =_=;;

The JPM version is cute.  :lol:

I think I might post my story at JPM soon. XD Since it's not steamy enough for here.

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« Reply #9 on: May 21, 2005, 04:34:20 AM »
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« Reply #10 on: May 21, 2005, 05:23:22 AM »
Thank God this is fiction, if this were to really happen to W, I'd be :cry:

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« Reply #11 on: May 21, 2005, 05:45:16 AM »
:lol: , don't worry  :D

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« Reply #12 on: May 22, 2005, 08:25:20 PM »
Well it was a fun story writing process. But I decided to give up on this XXX version for now. I'm currently way to fixated on the "clean" version at the regular jpopmusic 4th station fanfic thread.

So I'll stop writing for now and concentrate on completing my story at the regular jpopmusic forum. Its keeping me quite busy these days :D at 800-1000 words per part and I'm currently working on part 10 right now.

So thats it for this version of my story and back to writing the next part of my other version. Maybe one day I'll pick this up again and continue but not for a while anyway. How long I'm not sure :?

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« Reply #13 on: May 23, 2005, 12:14:17 PM »
I didn't want to spoil the flow of your chapters over on the other thread Tyler, which is why I'm posting here instead but just wanted to say : Well done!!  :thumbsup

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« Reply #14 on: May 23, 2005, 06:41:04 PM »
Thanks :D , but I wouldn't of minded if you did. I like readers reviews, I always like peoples opinions on my stories that I write. Helps me improve when I write more stuff in the future :D

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« Reply #15 on: July 04, 2005, 04:40:47 PM »
Loved it...too bad you won't finish it. ^^ I was hoping Aibon would want some action as well.  :halo:

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« Reply #16 on: July 05, 2005, 03:36:45 AM »
Well all I've got is time, so after I finish my other story at the regular more tame Jpop I'll finish the XXX version of this story

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« Reply #17 on: July 05, 2005, 11:09:16 AM »
yey. ^^

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« Reply #18 on: November 06, 2005, 01:33:40 AM »
Darn...once you start something the urge to finish it is just constantly pulling at you to finish it, I think I'm going to try to continue soon :lol:

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« Reply #19 on: November 06, 2005, 02:11:05 PM »
I just want any fanfic to appear sometime soon!  :D

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