Eri Kamei vs. Morning Musume

[Sukoshi]

I too was thinking of the height difference but what if Koharu mistook old man Yossie for an old man  But yes what is going on indeed :ONshock:

Thank goodness Eri has Sayu :baa60776: Eri almost gave up twice without her :ONfarofflook:

but that makes me wonder about everyone's well being after they land...I mean in the first chapter it was only Eri running away from Yossie...What happened to everyone else :ONbadluck:

[Blizzard]

The cabin was dark though, and Eri is injured, so she probably wasn't able to distinguish the height of the attacker.  Sayumi doesn't seem to be paying any attention to anything other than Eri.  Kusumi has been scared since the plane took off, what makes anyone think she's in a state of mind to notice something like that at the moment?  And, as far as we know, Risa isn't dead yet.

I'm probably wrong, but I enjoyed coming up with my theory anyways!  :MKgroovin:

[meowchi]

BGM: Background Sounds (249 KB)

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Ai Takahashi
Flight 707 Wreckage, Unknown
October 8, 5:09 PM
 
“ Mmm… “ Ai slowly regains consciousness, her eyes still closed.
My chest….
She sat unpleasantly with her posture, leaning forward and slumped; the seatbelt straps providing the only resistance to hold her up.
It’s so… so tight…
She runs her fingers across the warm metal seatbelt buckle, caressed firmly against the bone in her chest. She slowly leans against her seat. The back of her neck felt incredibly sore.
My head must’ve been in a weird position.
Within the eerily silence, the sound of crashing waves erodes in the background. Subsequently, the familiar sound of sea gulls, cawing uncontrollably, follows soon after.
Am I dreaming?
It felt like her eyelids weighed a ton. She opens her eyes.
Ah!, Ai thought, perplexed. The crash… I… survived?
She gazes ahead. The cabin was a complete mess. Seats, debris, pillows, blankets, oxygen masks, and even pamphlets cluttered in all places, making the ground itself nearly invisible. A deep golden aura fills the room. The stench of smoke is still evident, though not as strong as the fumes she’d smelled earlier. Which reminds her…
“ Risa? “ Ai calls out. She glances to her right. An empty chair.
“ Risa! “ Ai screams, more forceful this time. Her eyes scan the room. Reina has disappeared too. “ R-Reina? “
She quickly undoes her seatbelt and stands, leaning herself against the nearest armrest.
Where’d ya’ll go? Ai thought timidly. She carefully scans the room again, more alert this time. Brushing aside piles of debris with her foot, she carefully scuttles onto the corridor.
Is the power out? The lights are off… Ai thought as her eyes observe above.
She hadn’t noticed before, but the only light source came from outside the cabin windows; the sun, which seemed to be setting soon. Ai rushes towards the nearest window, hoping to spot some sort of rescue aid effort.
Disheartened, Ai exhales deeply.
This… We’re on a shoreline.
Through the cracked window, she sees sand, miles and miles of sand, followed by huge barriers of greenery in the far distance.
A forest!, Ai thought. She presses herself against the windowpane, narrowing her eyes in hopes to make out the details of the rural geography.
Sand… Flora… Trees… Ai contemplates. …What’s behind those trees?
After a brief moment, she sighs disappointedly. Her hands slowly drop from the window, causing her moist fingers to skid against the dry surface, initiating an exaggerated sound.
I can’t see. It’s too far away.
Looking down in hopelessness, she leans her head against the windowpane.
Ai waits. She questioned where all her friends were, but dismisses it.
I’m probably dead already… Ai grimly thought. Am I a ghost?
Her eyes glance towards the window. She hadn’t noticed before, but the bodily heat from her, made the window haze up.
Ai gradually smiles. Somehow, the blurry haze itself reminded her of home. During cold winter nights, she’d gaze out her bedroom window, admiring the natural beauty her hometown had to offer. She never seemed to notice how she always fogged up her window, until now. She tenderly bites the bottom of her lip, holding back the urge to cry.
Using her pinky, she carefully inscribes her name onto the hazy pane.
“ 愛 “ (Ai)
After a brief moment, a short sob escapes her, as she inscribes a few more words.
“ 福井県の愛 " (Ai of Fukui) “
Her hand bleakly drops to her side.
I want to go home…
Ai begins to weep as she closes her eyes.

[jenmoshka]

I really like how you give a time and place stamp at the begining of each chapter.  It really gets your mind going with a visual of what's going on.  Again, I have to say that your descriptive writing is amazing. And how you're able to show such sorrow a character is feeling through the simple act of fogging up a window pane then writing your name in the steam is quite down to earth, because we've all done this at least once.  It feels though that she's writing out her own tombstone which makes me sad...
I can't wait to read what's happening with the others, I'm loving the story keep it up please!

[lil_hamz]

And Ai LIVES!!!!

But it's so sad how she wrote her name and all :MKsniffle:
All the "Ais" in the stories I'm reading these days seem to be in really sad situations. Poor Ai-chan :ONcry:

[Sukoshi]

I like how there are chapters with different perspectives once in awhile.  I wonder where everyone went.  The last chapter felt so lonely and the Ai chan part with the name writing made me all :pencry:

[meowchi]

Miki Fujimoto
  Flight 707 Wreckage, Unknown
  October 8, 5:21 PM
 
  Side by side, Miki and Hitomi amble towards the wrecked exit.
  Miki’s throat clenched. She felt extremely dehydrated. Hitomi glares in the region of her atmosphere, wary of her surroundings. The walls, embellishing elaborate cracks and loose debris, looms all around them.
  Dammit.
  Miki exhales deeply. Her left hand trembles as she clutches her right shoulder. Having lost most of the feeling in the right side of her torso, she felt nauseous, making her disoriented.
  “ Ngh… “ Miki grumbles. She cursed herself for being so fragile, largely dissatisfied of her previous actions.
  I’m stronger then this. Miki told herself. Quit being so damned pale.
  “ You ok? “ Hitomi inquisitively asks. Still walking alongside her, she observes Miki limp across the corridor.
  Feeling the immediate stare, Miki focuses ahead. “ Yeah. “
  Her eyes narrow. The cabin exit steadily enlarges as they progress towards it.
  Hitomi paused. “ You sure? “
  She reaches out her arm, hoping Miki would accept her aid.
  “ Well… “ Miki utters, eluding Hitomi’s kind gesture. “ I could use a drink. Got one? “
  Miki prods her chin into the air, emphasizing her speech with her eyebrows.
  Hitomi frowns. Spotting her friends’ allusiveness, she slowly retracts her arm.
  “ That stuff’ll kill ya. “
  Hitomi shifts around a mound of rubble, knocking a small part of it away.
  “ True… “ Miki replies, glancing at the mound. “ …but it’ll take way more than one, believe me. “
  After a brief silence, Miki forcefully steps over a pile of debris. The sound of broken glass and wrecked metal, pounds against her shoe.
  “ More than one, huh? “ Hitomi teasingly reiterates. “ Tough girl. “
  Miki smirks, playfully nudging her friend with her body. They make eye contact as she slows her pace.
  “ Not that tough… “ Miki says with a tone of sincerity. “ Hey… “
  Hitomi curiously slows her pace as well, her head turned to face Miki while her body lingers forward. “ Hm? “
  Miki pauses, trying her best not to look away. “ …Thanks for saving me back there. “
  She stops in place as a dim smile overtakes her, showcasing her gratitude. “ I owe you one, Hitomi. “
  Mimicking her friend, Hitomi brings herself to a standstill as well.
  “ Nah~ you don’t owe me nothin’. “ Smiling, Hitomi modestly gestures with her hand. “ You would’ve done the same for me, I bet. “
  “ Well… “ Miki says exaggeratedly as she suddenly continues forward, passing Hitomi. Her eyes still maintaining contact with Hitomi’s. “ … Not really. “
  Miki watches as Hitomi’s smile, fades to a murky grimace. Her mouth gapes open, suddenly in disbelief to what Miki just said.
  “ W-W… ?! “ Hitomi stutters. She crosses her arms in annoyance. “ W-what!? “
  A smile creeps across Miki’s face.
  “ Gotcha. “
  A whole-heartedly laugh escapes Miki’s mouth. A familiar laugh everyone knew. She walks quicker, expecting some kind of erratic response.
  “ You..! “ Hitomi glares. She quickly catches up, and shoves her friend. “ Doofus! “
  Miki cringes as a pale, prickly pain stuns her shoulder.
  “ S-shi! “ Miki cries out, stopping herself from cursing. “ I’m still hurting y’know! “
  Miki peeks at her dislocated arm. She hadn’t noticed before, but it seemed to sway side to side, with each step she takes accordingly.
  Hitomi shakes her fist in the air, breaking Miki’s focus. “ Well too bad! That’s what we call ‘karma’! “
  Miki clears her throat calmly, still snickering to herself.
  After an awkward pause, Hitomi leers at Miki. Miki returns the look with her eyebrows raised innocently, as she catches up alongside her.
  “ For a second there, I almost believed you. “ Hitomi utters seriously. “ You shouldn’t joke around like that at a time like this. “
  She quickens her pace, walking ahead of Miki, making sure to display a cold shoulder.
  Miki gives a deranged look. Her lips tensed up, crinkling up her chin. “ Tsk, don’t get mad at me… I was only trying to lighten up this lame atmosphere. “
  Hitomi ignores her as she climbs over a detached seat, blocking the aisle. Miki stops, making sure she had a solid grip on her shoulder, and carefully mounts over it. The seat rigidly shakes as she leaps off.
  “ Besides… “ Miki continued as she rushes to catch up to Hitomi yet again. “ …The danger is over. Finished. Speaking of which… “
  Miki bumps into Hitomi, hoping to seize her attention. “ …You still have the gun, right? “
  Hitomi responds with a quick glance, down her left pocket.
  “ Wouldn’t lose it even if I wanted to. “ Hitomi responds. “ It’s the only evidence we have of that crazy woman. Why would she- “
  “ Don’t. “ Miki interrupts. She angrily kicks away a small heap of metal debris, making it rattle under the seats. “ I don’t even want to think about it. “
  Hitomi nods vaguely.
  “ Yeah… I understand. But you’re gonna have to think about it when you tell the cops. “
  Miki frowns. Her eyebrows firm, as she deeply inhales.
  “ That’s a given. “ Miki replies. “ So for now, let’s just grab the others and get the hell off of this piece of junk. “
  She shakes her head, still agitated at the thought. They finally reach the cabin exit, stopping just in front of the dark blue curtains, which separates the rooms. Miki momentarily glimpses behind her, making sure no one was following.
  “ Oh? I take it you don’t like planes? “ Hitomi reiterates, using the same tone she’d used earlier, prior to taking off.
  They make eye contact as Miki flashes a boyish grin. She wittily shakes her head.
  “ No, no, it’s not that… I just hate stewardesses’ who try to kill me. “
  Like old war heroes, Hitomi contentedly pats Miki’s back, as they walk through the draped curtains.
 

[meowchi]

Thanks for the comments guys!

[black velvet]

WOAH. Miki killed someone?! In self-defense, of course.

I wonder about the others now . . . ?

[JFC]

So it was a stewardess eh? Question now is, WHO was the stewardess? Someone they know?

Dun Dun Duuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuun!

[Owaranai_sLaVe]

I've gathered information from Hamz and Blizzards insights.
I dont even know HOW Blizzard got such an awesome one and how i never thought of it that way, but I do think that Koha is either lying, or SHE really is the stupid one and mistaked Hitomi for Risa.

But I think... It's Kusumi all the way. IF she did "mistake" Hitomi for Risa, and it wasnt true, she just lied. Everyone knows liars have something up their sleves... *hey, dont look at me!~*
Also, she's going all crazy cuz she knows non of the fan boys like her yet, and she's tired of the insane sexual harassments from.... well, everyone should know the answer to that.

But that's what I think.

but if Blizzard is correct (by the way, your edit made me laugh xD), then I have one (stupid) reason why Risa could be doing this =D *don't read it if you dont have a sense of humor *
She's simply mad that Eri's voice has been getting better and she wants more sexy lines in IBL. IBL was sexy

Don't worry Risa, you're still my favorite youngin'!


On a serious note though, I really freaking love this story! ITs so DAMN suspenseful in a different way than the other fanfics here, and it's got such a good story plot. I just hope Im not pissed on who ever you make the killer.

*OH! I swaer, its the Gremlin!!!!!!* *laughs hysterically*

*Gremlin = Aika (go on mm-bbs)

-Owaranai_sLaVe

[len.chan]

I bet that Yuko hijacked the plane to kill everybody! XDXD

[Blizzard]

The stewardess might not be the actual killer though.  I mean, Miki was trying to break into the cockpit after all.  The stewardess might have mistaken Miki for a hijacker or something and gone to stop her.  Plus, the stewardess wasn't previously mentioned in the story (unless I totally missed it on my reread).  

Actually, I kind of think it might be Koharu now.  She's acting all scared just to put everyone off her trail.  She cut or stabbed Risa in the dark cabin before she found Eri and Sayumi.  She lied and said that Hitomi attacked her.  She was clutching her stomach, which was probably her hiding the knife.  She made sure that Eri and Sayumi were following her into the dark cabin.  She attempted to separate Eri and Sayumi, but that didn't work out.  The gurgling sound is probably Risa, who is choking on her own blood from whatever Koharu did to her.  Risa's trying to get help and stumbles towards the group, and when she gets close enough, Koharu hits Eri to get her to let go, and then jumps Risa to finish the job.  Then at the end of it all, Koharu just acts all scaredy cat like and lies to Hitomi by saying that Eri did it all.  

I know I already made a guess, but after rereading it, I think I agree with slave that Koharu is lying.  I can still back both up though.  Until something new comes up to bring down one theory, I'm stuck between the two.  

The thing that really has me confused at the moment is: where did the knife come from.  You can't exactly pack one of those in a carry on.  And as far as I know, the stewardess' don't have anything like that at their little station thingies.  It could be in someone's luggage, but I don't think you can get to the luggage compartment from the inside of the plane.  Oh well.

Just so you know, I'm immensely enjoying this fic!  I've had more fun coming up with different theories.  Your writing is incredibly descriptive and really grabs attention!  I'm so glad that you're updating again!

[lil_hamz]

^^ Not only the knife, how did the gun get on

I'm pretty sure the air stewardess is not the ultimate killer but then again... hmmm.

I can't really make any new guesses from the last chapter except it's not Miki. Quite unlikely that it's Yossi too.

Finally... where's Risa???? I need to know what happened to her :MKwhine:

[meowchi]

The thing that really has me confused at the moment is: where did the knife come from.  You can't exactly pack one of those in a carry on.  And as far as I know, the stewardess' don't have anything like that at their little station thingies.  It could be in someone's luggage, but I don't think you can get to the luggage compartment from the inside of the plane.  Oh well.

^^ Not only the knife, how did the gun get on

Good eye! Just how did the gun and knife get onboard? Questions like these will be revealed in incoming chapters!

Finally... where's Risa???? I need to know what happened to her

Or Reina for that matter! Where did she disappear to?

*OH! I swaer, its the Gremlin!!!!!!* *laughs hysterically*

Aika! Ahh!! Fortunately (sorry aika fans), this is a 7th gen only story!

[Owaranai_sLaVe]

WOW, damn, I really need to stay more alert when I read late at night... I missed the last two chapters before posting my reply.

Hmmm, like Blizzard, I think it's still Koha because.... She's MM's slave and they probably made her act as the stewardess hahaha, too bad.

But then again, Risa was missing even when Takahashi was with Reina (how did those two get together anyway?)

YOMIKITTY~ <333 yay. Did Miki really kill the stewardess or was she just not wanting to think of the stewardess would even try to kill them because they were idols, and they probably didnt know each other to have a reason. I really liked the chemistry. Although there might not be room for romance in your fic, my PTA-self is still gonna make a way to pair them up

Quick question(s):
What was that thing Miki was gonna take that Yossui said would kill her? I didnt get that... I thought it was salt water since she asked for water, but they were still in the plane.
Why didnt Yossui just pop Miki's shoulder back in like the gangsta she is? *you dont have to answet that *

Yay, someone got the Gremlin joke

-Owaranai_sLaVe

[Sukoshi]

Drats...the last chapter really threw me off...so now I don't think it was Yossie which leads me to believe in Blizzard's idea about Koharu!

[meowchi]

Ai Takahashi
Flight 707 Wreckage, Unknown
October 8, 5:55 PM
 
Ai peeks under the muddled seat. Her knees and hands, firmly against the ground, aches against the scattered remains. A yellow blanket, tied firmly against her waist, dangles towards the floor.
“ Reina? “ Ai curiously says. Although a bit hesitant, she looks a tad harder, hoping to catch sight of something. Anything.
…Nothing.
She sluggishly gets up, a little distressed. Her mouth inhales and closes, seizing in the air, making her cheeks puff up. She’d been exploring, hoping to find her friends, for about 20 minutes now; heading towards the end of the plane. Ai began to feel anxious. Out of her entire search, she was only able to recover Kusumi’s blanket; No sign of the others.
Her watch chimes.
6:00… Ai thought as she takes a glimpse. She slowly exhales and embarks across the cluttered corridor once again.
“ I can’t believe ya’ll left me… “ Ai says murmurs. She felt like running, in desire to quicken her investigation, but dismisses it. There is too much debris to maintain traction. She shoves a heap of rubble with her foot, when suddenly; she spots something underneath.
What? …What’s… that?
Ai bends forward, narrowing her eyes.
“ That… “ Ai says, baffled. She slowly regains herself.
A footprint. A dark red footprint.
Blood?, She thought to herself. The word itself seemed to repeat in her head. She carefully slides her foot above it, making sure not to ruin the print.
It’s dry…
Feeling a bit strange, she glances across the room. Until suddenly-
A noise. It eerily rattles within the cabin.
Ai flinches. Her eyes immediately fleet throughout her surroundings. “ Who’s there? “
She waits.
The noise rattles again. Being more alert this time, Ai realizes where the sound derived from.
The window!
Grabbing a long chunk of metal wreckage, she cautiously paces towards it. Ai’s short breaths accelerate. Her chest bounds in and out.
“ Risa? “ Ai focuses forward. “ … Is that you? “
Stopping in front of the broken window; her fingers clutch the debris more rigidly, holding it like a bat as she braces herself in an attack position. She slowly peers out the window, making sure she doesn’t get to close. Her eyes carefully gaze across the shoreline. From her view, the sand remained the same. The flora, unchanged. She couldn’t fathom what exactly caused the noise. Ai licks her lips as she looks off into the distance.
“ Ah! “ Ai utters, as she catches glimpse of something. Her mouth gapes open in disbelief.
It’s... a person… a girl! Ai thought, a little relieved. Finally, some help!
Ai concentrates, trying her best to observe detail, as the figure aggressively gallops across the rough sand. Towards the greenery. Away from her.
“ Hey!! “ Ai yells, knowing it’d be impossible for the girl to hear. She leans herself against the windowpane, hoping to spot some other sort of populace. This time however, having a better view of the ground below, she makes out footsteps imprinted into the sand. Her eyes follow the footpath. It jarringly trailed the unknown silhouette.
That person… Ai thought. That person came from the plane.

[meowchi]

 
But then again, Risa was missing even when Takahashi was with Reina (how did those two get together anyway?)

 
Takahashi/Reina/Risa were formed before the crash-
 

“ I want teams of three! “ Hitomi continued. “ Eri, Sayumi, and Kusumi; sit in the middle aisle, 7th row! Ai, Risa and Reina; in the row behind them! “
“ Get moving!! “ Miki adds.

 

Quick question(s):
What was that thing Miki was gonna take that Yossui said would kill her?

 
Sake! It numbs the pain y'know!
 

 
Anyway, I tried to interpret her as being sarcastic when she said that...

[lil_hamz]

“ I can’t believe ya’ll left me… “ Ai says murmurs.

Did Ai mean Risa or Reina? Though I think she meant Gaki-san. That line sounds so sad :MKsniffle:

Ai licks her lips as she looks off into the distance.

That action is so Ai-chan

That person… Ai thought. That person came from the plane.

Okay is that the mad air stewardess person? Or is it one of the girls? AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH I need to know!!! *tugs at hair*