Fanfics Review / General Discussion Thread

[rndmnwierd]

I hve the same feeling as Kawaiwai. I can't type when other people are in the room or if I do, I'm always glancing at them like a crazy person. I think it's cuz I have a serious, not phobia really, but I hate it when people read over my shoulder. One of my friends used to tease me really badly about it.

BTW I think it was a cellphone. Cellphone, right? Cuz she was holding it in the pictures.

[Sukoshi]

@Tuna:  I'm neeeeevar tellin' ya

though that wouldn't stop me from telling Miss Random

@Dinner:   =

[kawaii beam]

tuna-i only do whne like a randome moment of insperation hits for that chapter at like lucnh or when im done with my wrk i dont do it anymore i mean in college there's liek a billion more ppl now i just do it at home since my mom doesnt barge in much^^; but i dont get out much eaither*for many reasons* and maybe that's why i've been like blargh lately D:

[Tundra Wind]

@Sushi So mean. I'm just going to assume that it is a cell phone. I was tempted to say she's just calling herself cute for some reason but you said it vibrates...

@kawaii beam You too with the tuna? People barge into my room a lot so I don't really have enough privacy to do anything like saying things aloud.

[kawaii beam]

lol i had a feeling u'd do that   but if u dont want tuna i'll call u something else.....*thinks* dra dra~! then again u' probably dont like that one either

but i dont say things out loud i just write and type at home cus i feel more comfertable.

[Tundra Wind]

Anybody have any advice about writing details?

@waiwai  Somehow I like that better than tuna.  So basically, we just all hate being stared at.

[Estrea]

Advice about writing details? My only real (crappy) advice is that you have to know exactly what you're talking about.

I mean, you need to know exactly what you're describing in order to describe it in the first place, no? If you just have a vague mental image of what you want to portray, then what comes out will be equally vague.

Practice helps too. Look at the things around you. How would you describe them if you were to put it in words? That's a spontaneous exercise one can practice anywhere, with or without benefit of actually writing anything down. If you learn how to find detail in common things around you, you can do it again when you write.

Hope that was helpful.

[rokun]

I think what our dear Essy is trying to say is that you just need to have a good imagination.

Or at least... that's what I'd say, lol.

Not that I claim I'm great, but the time I feel happiest about what I write and the detail in it is when I have a very vivid mental image of the scene. I think one reason we can write so much about our idols (I never wrote anything like this before I got into them) is because we watch them over, and over, and over... We know their faces so well, their hair, their looks... so we can develop that almost perfect mental image of them, which is the starting point the rest of the world grows from in the fics we write.

Then we imagine the clothes they're wearing, their surroundings - is it a cloudy day, making their features dim a bit? Is it raining, hence maybe making them feel a bit down emotionally and, if they're outside, meaning water is dripping off them one way or another? Or just if they're inside, what's around them? Is it a plush velvet couch or leather? A bed or a futon? What kind of electronics do they have? Once you have that image, of both their mental state and the physical setting, you can put it in words. If you're imagining them in a red sweater, you can describe them as wearing a red sweater. You might even go a bit further and add more adjectives or adverbs - the fuzzy burgundy wool sweater with hairs of the fiber sticking out from the static cause by the dry heat from the radiator in her apartment on the coldest day of the year. As you add more description, the setting almost builds itself as well. It all fits in together to set the mood of the story and what the girl is feeling at the time. It's so cold she wants to get some coffee... where she has a chance run-in with the stunning girl she falls in love with at first sight...

...Or at least that's how it seems to work with me.

[Tundra Wind]

^^ Thanks That's actually great advice. Developing an eye for detail hmmm...Now I just have to space out less and actually try describing random things sometimes. 

^ That was really helpful. Once in a while, I forget how little details can improve a story by a lot. Well, let's see if I can actually put yours and Essy's advice to good use the next time I write. 

[rndmnwierd]

Alrgiht, Tuna dra dra. You wanted a drunken reply, here's a drunken reply. I've tried ti leave this as unedited as possible, so here goes. I really fon't knoe what exactly to put down, so maybe I should start with my day  today. I went out in the afternoon to go to the bar and guess what? My car wouldn't start. One of my frineds left the getto ass fan switch on my car on and it drained my battery. So I called my mom;s boyfriend for a jump and he came over and my car started working so I picked up my broke ass friend from work and we hit up the local watering hole. I haven't gone drinkin in a while, so after four jack and cokes, I was down. I sung some ass fucked karaoke and then I decided, hey, Tuna dra dra wanted a drnken reply from me, so I hacve to do that when I get home.

A very sober friend drove me and here I am, writing out this nosense. And Yeah... Whaterver, so what.

Blah, blah, yada, yada, coomusunghooi. SDon't ask me what that means, I told you I qwas incrediably uncreative when I was drunk. Nonsense. Blergh.

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I'mma go nows.

[kawaii beam]

wow.. i can cleary tell the diff beteween sober rndy and drunk rndy now

[Beecubed]

I love how drunk rndm still begins every sentence with a capital letter... 

(Is it wrong to find that attractive?  )

[rndmnwierd]

^Honey, finding me attractive is never wrong.

Ergh, you know, four drinks doesn't sound like much, but then I realized this morning that my bartender loves me and each drink was like two, two and a half shots. Like, okay, pour the liquor.... And put a spritz of soda for color. And when the mixed drinks are that strong, the shots are even better. First of all, the shot glasses are huge! At the top, there's a little white line that indicates where the proper shot is. They always fill that to the top. I love my bar.

And I'm still hurtin'!

[memory]

hey everyone...

i need help.... how do you put your favorite fic in the Library???do you put your own fic in there or you can put someone else fic too???
can someone help me please???

[rndmnwierd]

Ask a mod, preferably Yuuyami.

[Estrea]

Just drop a PM to Yuuyami, she should take care of it. Alternatively, you could still drop off that PM, and I can go kick her ass to do something about it when she logs in.

[memory]

Thanks a lot rndmn-san and estrea-san.....

i'll send a PM to Yuuyami-san right away!!!!

[Estrea]

Oh and by the way, the Library section is only for completed fics, that's what it's for, and you can't actually put any one fic inside unless it has already been completed. Just so you know.

[memory]

i understand that estrea-san.....

thank you for helping me again.....

[abok]

i wanna thank you for this question memory-chan....

i've always wandering how to do that......

but i've never ask.....