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« Reply #160 on: March 24, 2007, 02:32:30 AM »
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'For a couple of beginners, they ran out of steam rather quickly, since both of them hadn't known that they should probably keep breathing in between in order not to run out of air halfway.'

hahaha! Aww, this makes TaGaki so much more endearing! Now they're a married couple?! :ONxD:
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'"About earlier, um, let's not do that again...at least not until we get to know each other better..."'

Gaki's so adorable! :tfr9a7wg: Taking things slow, eh?

More NacchixMaki goodness too!:ONhee: And the twins are so thoughtful.

Ayaka's concern over not having a proper wedding for Ai's hilarious!

What will the next chappie bring, I wonder! More valiant Yossie, GAM lovin' and TaGaki sweetness?

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« Reply #161 on: March 24, 2007, 02:51:34 AM »
AWWW~~~ Miki was doing sweet things but I can't say it's too sweet. She's still cruel I tell you. She want Aya to have the feeling of being grope, private or in public. Although I like her for not taking advantage with unconscious Aya. :ONhee:

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« Reply #162 on: March 24, 2007, 03:46:30 AM »
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"I do."
OMGASS THEY ACTUALLY WENT THROUGH WITH IT! :damnfunny


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"Have fun!"
I know I would. :twisted:


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already missing the warmth that she had woken up to this morn......must not think of that!
GIVE IN!!! You know you wnt to! :damnfunny


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Then Risa's knees buckled, and Ai rushed forward to catch the younger girl before she fell. Unfortunately, in her haste, she slipped up a little, and the two of them stumbled around, pitching backwards awkwardly, before finally tipping over and crashing to the hard stone floor.

Risa had hit the ground first, and the impact made her wince, and even more so when Ai fell right on top of her, their foreheads knocking together painfully.

"Owww..." Both girls whimpered
Such klutzes, so cute! :D


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Then Risa suddenly got a 'oh screw it' look in her eyes and just pulled Ai down, consequences be damned.
:hump:


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Risa almost immediately jumped off, bumping her head against the shelf behind her, making her wince and rub vigorously at the back of her head. Ai just sat up slowly, blushing so hard that she resembled a ripe tomato.
Once again...so cute!


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About earlier, um, let's not do that again...at least not until we get to know each other better..." The latter half of the sentence came out in a soft mumble that the barmaid had to strain to hear, and it made her flush slightly
Sliiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiick. :twisted:


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"Help!" The naval officer squeaked as she tried in vain to fend off Yuko's hands. Kaori shrugged. "You're on your own I'm afraid."

"Welcome to the club." Kei added.

No escaping the original groping demon, after all.
And that is why Yuko rulez. :yep:


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"Aren't you going to do anything else to her?" Tsuji blurted,

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Miki half turned with a raised eyebrow. "You wanted to watch?"
XD XD XD


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Miki couldn't help the small smile that tweaked at the edge of her lips when she saw the gift the twins had gotten for her. A whole array of small, double-ended blades balanced for throwing, as well as assorted daggers built for close combat.

"Do you like it?" They chimed eagerly, anxious to know if their gesture was appreciated by the older pirate. "We know you lost quite a few of your knives in the last few fights, so we decided to get you more."

The knife-loving pirate was holding up one of the smaller throwing knives, inspecting the quality and hefting it to test for balance. "Perfect." She almost purred, pleased by the offering. The twins beamed in satisfaction.
Aw how sweet. :)


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Natsumi was cuddled close to Maki, clearly too freaked to get close to Yuko for fear of getting groped again. Maki had been irritated when she first woke up, upset that her Nacchi had knocked her out earlier, but had been pleasantly surprised when the older woman had all but climbed into her lap in an attempt to escape Yuko's clutches. The two had had an implicit agreement previously to avoid public displays of affection, so the change was interesting, to say the least.
Awwwwwwwwwwww, NacchiMaki! :inlove:


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What did you do to Ai-chan, you crazy pirate?!" Ayaka wasn't pleased, to say the least. She stormed up to a grinning Yuko, her arms akimbo as she glared down.

Pirate?! Maki and Natsumi exchanged slightly startled glances. At their feet, Yuuki twitched. Kaori watched their responses with a neutral expression, but said nothing.
Tsk, tsk, tsk. Nacchi and Maki need to work on their poker faces.


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Ayaka exploded.

...

"She doesn't seem to have a problem with the marriage, just how it was done." Kei whispered. Natsumi raised an eyebrow.
Well...wouldn't you be upset if you missed out on a chance to throw a ceremony/banquet for one of your favourite barmaids?


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"Isn't that somewhat besides the point?" They all nodded quietly to themselves. Maki snorted.

"Do you want to tell her that?" Everyone looked at the hysterical scene before them, before shaking their heads as one.

"Nah."
:ROTFLMAO: Wow I can totally picture them all nodding their heads in unison. :yep: :yep: :yep: :yep: :yep:

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« Reply #163 on: March 24, 2007, 05:44:13 AM »
I'm actually surprised by Ayaka, she yelled at Yuko! XD

Yuko was simply awesome, again. In fact, no other fic has ever made me like her this much...

The Miki-Twins interaction was funny, too. I liked how they somewhat managed to avoid the flying daggers.

And then TakaGaki... Very cute indeed!

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« Reply #164 on: March 24, 2007, 07:39:07 AM »
Ah just finished reading chapter two. I gotta say, this is a DAMN interesting plot and setting for Morning Musume.... It's almost too interesting, haha.

Best two things:
Miki back handing the pirate bastards  :pimp:
and  Miki being a fellow slave :whip:

Yuuummm, YoMiki chemistry, it's smexy. Where Rika? ;-;

hmm seeing as I had some outside information on this... I'm taking it that the daughter was Aya...hmmm... Oh well, I guess I gotta keep catching up.. but its almost 3 am. I'm looking forward to reading more!

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« Reply #165 on: March 24, 2007, 08:37:47 AM »
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Nice picture Ren! XD Yeah that's a nice outfit (funny captions too XD).

Actually, if anyone looked at the Some Boys! Touch performance during Maki's G-Emotion Tour, she was also wearing a very navy-like outfit, which was awesome as well. XD

The captions are not mine though, judging from the ky, I think it might belong to JPM's ky_khor?:ONdunno:

Can DEF. Diva's Suki Sugite Baka Mitai outfit be categorized as navy-like? Oh the sexy navy outfits. :baa60776:

The prince outfits from Ribbon no Kishi also screamed Pirates of the Caribbean... Along with Torte (and Gaki's male character).

I can imagine them doing all the scenes from All Abroad! wearing those clothes. :ONwriggly:

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« Reply #166 on: March 24, 2007, 10:40:05 PM »
*hehe* I can just imagine Yuko shoving TakaGaki into the room and locking them in ... her idea of fun is certainly, umh, obvious ^^

Again, the TakaGaki scene was amazing! *melts* I love how they are so absolutely clueless and nervous about this whole thing and still have the hots without even knowing each other :D Adorable!

Also, more Nacchi/Gocchin :heart: I love them to bits and pieces *cuddles*
Their rule about avoiding public displays of affection needs to be broken more often ^^

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"You mean she's like this without alcohol?"

[...]

"Welcome to the club." Kei added.

No escaping the original groping demon, after all.


:ROTFLMAO:

God, I may just be in love with your witty sense of humor :heart: Seriously!

And yay for original groping demon, hip-hip-hooray ^^

Also, chapter 14? GAM, of course, and maybe more Nacchi/Gocchin??? Pretty please? :masa:

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« Reply #167 on: March 24, 2007, 11:10:06 PM »
"Besides, it also didn't help that Risa had had certain images preying on her mind ever since she had barged in on something she probably wasn't supposed to see a couple of weeks ago, and it had been lurking at the edges of her consciousness ever since. That it had taken this opportunity to burst out of her was probably a complete accident and a case of bad(?) timing."

I sense a new side story... *rubs chin* XD
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« Reply #168 on: March 24, 2007, 11:37:03 PM »
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"Besides, it also didn't help that Risa had had certain images preying on her mind ever since she had barged in on something she probably wasn't supposed to see a couple of weeks ago, and it had been lurking at the edges of her consciousness ever since. That it had taken this opportunity to burst out of her was probably a complete accident and a case of bad(?) timing."

I sense a new side story... *rubs chin* XD


*hits forehead* How could I forget this??? Makes you wonder what she barged in on ... :drool:

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« Reply #169 on: April 03, 2007, 02:01:32 AM »
Well now I get to reply to all the replies to last chapter before I repost Chapter 14 again. XD

Yuuyami: Anime Laws are fun. ^_^ I like Takagaki even more after writing them like that. XD I wrote myself into becoming a fan of them... o_O;

rndmn: Hehe, glad you think so.

FIM: Funny how Takagaki is the first to get together (technically speaking). XD

orangesocks: Yes yes, Gaki is adorable! I'll try my best to inject more humor and coolness for every succeeding chapter, although there's no guarantee for that. XD

Sancho: Yeah Miki is just being evil in her own way. She has her own set of really weird principles that not many people can understand. XD

JFC: Whoa, mass quoting! XD Glad you liked.

Amarghetta: I think the more I write, I more I surprise myself. I end up liking the characters more after writing them! Haha.

slave: Haha glad you started...and welcome aboard! ^_^ I will convert you...XD

freya: Yeah I plan to let them break their "no public display of affection" rule more often some time in the future. XD As for who Risa barged in on, well, its kinda obvious when you think about it. I left enough textual and timeline clues for it to be picked up on. ^__~

cheesesticks: Yes, I was wondering who would pick that up. :P And yes, there's going to be a side story about that, but not yet. The timing's not quite right yet. :P

Okie time to repost Chapter 14....the pain...haha.

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« Reply #170 on: April 03, 2007, 02:16:52 AM »
Had to split the whole chapter into 3 posts....stupid character limits! Abolish it for the fanfic section!
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Chapter 14


Waking up with a woozy feeling in her head for the second time of the day, Aya groaned and shifted to one side, opening her eyes...

...only to see the smugly smirking face of one sneaky pirate, whose smirk widened when she realised that Aya had noticed her presence.

"Good morning sleeping beauty." Miki leaned forward and quickly sneaked in a quick peck on a surprised Aya's lips, before withdrawing a safe distance to avoid getting slapped for her efforts, still grinning roguishly.

Aya glared as she pushed herself upright, rubbing her lips against her sleeve. With the frequency that they have been attacked lately, Aya briefly wondered if it would be a good idea to invest in a face mask of some sort to protect herself against that...that woman.

Deciding that trying to argue with Miki about the whole sexual harassment thing that had been going on ever since their first meeting was going to be pointless, Aya put it aside mentally (at least, as best as she could) and went for the more practical questions.

"Where am I? Who are you? How did I get here?" Three incisive questions, flatly delivered with her best poker face and her most authoritative tone. Miki raised an eyebrow at the sudden change in mood and approach. This was an interesting girl she had here.

"First off, you're at the Sea Coconut tavern. Second, my name is Fujimoto Miki. As for question number three..." Miki trailed off, savoring her planned response. Aya raised an eyebrow expectantly.

"I saved your life and carried you here." Miki was watching Aya's face intently, hoping to see a delightful reaction of some kind. To her profound disappointment, a rock would have had more of an expression than the one currently on Aya's face. The young captain was clearly adept at hiding whatever she was thinking or feeling behind a mask, as long as she has had time to prepare herself for the situation.

"Ah, in that case, I offer you my thanks." The best way to deal with this, Aya decided, was to keep that annoying woman at a distance, and using a professionally unconcerned tone was her usual and most effective defence. Even fully grown men gave her a wide berth when she used that tone and expression on them.

However, this is Miki we're talking about, and Aya's attempts to place a kind of distance between them was duly noted by the knife-loving pirate...and promptly ignored. Actually, the more Aya tried to push her away, the more Miki would be interested in pushing back. After all, it is a law of physics that for every action, there is an equal and opposite reaction.

"Is that any way to talk to someone who saved your life?" Miki asked, while pointedly moving closer to Aya, who was now sitting on the edge of the bed, about to get up. Aya looked coolly unperturbed as she replied.

"Didn't I say that you have my gratitude?" The young captain stood up, now facing Miki, who was almost nose to nose with her. She didn't even flinch. No sense in showing the same weakness that would only tempt the other to tease her, she realised. Aya had already begun to string together the pattern of Miki's behaviour, and had correctly deduced that Miki particularly enjoyed seeing her reactions to her amorous advances, and so the best way to counter it was to present a calm front.

That was easier said than done, of course. But it was a start.

She's a tough nut to crack. Miki thought as she eyed the slightly taller girl in front of her. The height difference wasn't all that noticeable, but Aya was surprised to find that Miki was actually smaller than she remembered. Maybe it was the fact that the events of the night before had clouded her perceptions. Probably didn't help that Miki had been so aggressively upfront with her then.

Seeing that no response was immediately forthcoming from the pirate, Aya was about to walk around past Miki, heading for the door, when a hand latched onto her arm, forcibly pulling her backwards.

"You're not going anywhere." Miki said with just the faintest hint of triumph in her voice. Their gazes met and sizzled the air between them.

"Oh? And on what grounds are you stopping me?"

"Doctor's orders, you were poisoned and need rest to recover." Miki repeated Kei's words from earlier, still gripping on to Aya's forearm tightly.

Ah, poison. So that's why I fainted. And why I still feel nauseous now.
Aya considered the situation briefly. "Well, I'll just have to rest someplace else, can't I?" Someplace where you are not around. She didn't say that last part out loud, but it was clearly implied in her tone, enough that Miki merely sneered at the implication, and pulling Aya a few steps closer to herself.

"Well it's just too bad that you can't get away from this room right now." Miki reinforced that line of reasoning by tightening her hold almost painfully on the younger girl, who winced and glared fiercely at the pirate.

"Is that any way to treat a sick person?" Miki merely shrugged in response.

"Is this any way to talk to someone who saved your life?" A very good comeback. Aya sighed inwardly. She got the feeling that Miki was going to be pulling that line on her repeatedly. And it wasn't something that she could easily refute either. She did owe a debt of gratitude to Miki, whether she liked it or not. It didn't help that the sense of honor that her father had rammed into her head since she was a child was making her feel obligated to the knife-throwing pirate, who was currently unashamedly groping her bottom with her free hand.

Slap. "Do you mind?!" Aya bit out forcefully, her other hand poised to slap Miki's throbbing cheek again.

"Nope." Miki was grinning victoriously at having elicited some kind of a response from the fuming girl in front of her. Riling the girl was becoming a sort of a bad habit, Miki dimly realised somewhere in the back of her head. The knife-loving pirate was feeling a strange desire to irritate the heck out of Aya, just to look at her flustered and/or angered expressions. It was almost addictive.

"Gah." Aya glowered at the defiantly remorseless pirate, who took advantage of the younger's momentary distraction to pull the startled girl into her arms.

"What do you want?" Aya asked flatly, deliberately suppressing her instinctive urge to scream and smack Miki around some more, in favor of her cool approach in order to irritate the other girl. Miki felt mildly disappointed at the lack of any reaction, but then again, there was time enough to rouse a response from the stubborn girl she held.

"You." With that, she leant forward, clearly intending to capture Aya's lips with her own again, but the captain prodigy had already anticipated such a move, and blocked the assault with her palm.

"Other than that." Aya sounded halfway between exasperated and amused. Did this girl have a one track mind or something?

Miki was pouting slightly behind the restraining palm held to the lower portion of her face, but was secretly pleased that the whole situation was becoming more interesting than anticipated. True to form, her hands began to wander around Aya's body, the older girl knowing that this, if nothing else, would surely garner one of those responses she so yearned to see.

Sure enough, Aya's eyes narrowed at her blunt advances, but the young captain bit down firmly on her own lip to stop herself from screeching at the pirate that was currently groping her with a challenging expression in those dark eyes, clearly daring her to do something, anything, to stop those wandering hands.

Aya growled as she released her hold against Miki's face, and using her arms, pushed away from the girl, while simultaneously stepping on Miki's foot to ensure that the grip would be loosened sufficiently for her to break free. The ploy was successful, at least partially, since she did manage to stumble away from Miki. However, Miki had also taken the opportunity to direct Aya's momentum backwards to the bed, and the younger girl tripped and fell over on the rumpled sheets.

And trapped. Miki quite literally pounced, straddling the younger girl easily and pinning her down on the bed.

"Can't you go five minutes without trying to sexually harass me?" Aya blurted out indignantly at the smirking Miki on top of her.

The pirate shrugged carelessly. "Nope." She then leaned down to nuzzle at Aya's neck, paying special attention to tease at the pulse points, and feeling Aya swallow nervously at her efforts.

"Will you please stop?" Aya asked as neutrally as she could, even though her entire body was wound more tightly than a spring now. Miki didn't pay attention to her. Clenching her teeth in irritation and cursing her own body's weakness right now (lingering aftereffects of the poison), Aya tried again.

"Can't we just talk about this first?" Now Miki raised her head curiously from where she had been busily trying to give Aya a number of very visible hickeys, one eyebrow raised curiously.

"What's there to talk about?" Miki drawled lazily.

Desperate to stall another assault, Aya tried to come up with something convincing in a split second.

"Well, didn't the doctor say that I needed rest? I can't very well get any rest if you continue like this, right?" It sounded sort of reasonable, and Aya tensely watched Miki ponder her words.

Miki had to admit that the girl had a point. Not that she cared about what Kei said, of course, but then again, the pirate had never intended to force Aya to submit to her under these circumstances. Groping and stealing kisses were one thing, but Miki strictly abhorred rape as an option. Not that Aya knew that, of course, and Miki certainly wasn't going to explain her complex code of principles to someone she barely knew anyway.

"Hmm, well, it's not going to be fun since your body's weak now. We'll continue when you get better." Saying that, Miki raised her body off Aya's, but remained sitting on the younger girl, just to make sure she didn't run away immediately.

Aya breathed a sigh of relief. Taking a deep breath to reorganise her thoughts, she met Miki's studying gaze.

"Can you let me up now?" Miki didn't say anything, but raised an eyebrow. Aya frowned.

"...please?" Miki hummed to herself in response. Aya twitched irritably, causing Miki to grin widely.

"It'll cost you a kiss." Miki watched Aya's eyebrows knit together at her demand.

"You've already had plenty from before." Aya said matter of factly, giving Miki the evil eye. That was certainly true, but of course Miki wasn't going to let Aya get away like this.

"Ah, but I was the one who started all those times. And each time you cut it short. So now I want a proper one. And I'm not letting you up until I'm satisfied." Miki had a devilish little smirk on her face as she watched Aya pale slightly at her suggestion.

If the situation allowed it now, Aya would have gladly skinned Miki slowly and roasted her on a slow fire. The nerve of that girl! But then again, Matsuura Aya was not a pushover, and she never backed down from a challenge. Clearly, Miki didn't really think she would do it. Or expect her to do it well at all. That was going to change shortly. Aya hated to lose, and especially not to this obnoxious half-child who was presently acting like a spoiled brat.

Miki watched with growing curiosity as the conflict in Aya's eyes solidified into a steely determination that really served to make the pirate excited. A spitfire, this girl. Definitely going to be fun. She was still caught in her own thoughts when Aya abruptly pulled one arm free and yanked the older girl down without warning.

The contact was...electrifying. In an instant, the world around the two girls seemed to vanish, leaving nothing but the two of them in their own plain of existence.

Miki, of course, was shocked to the core by the sudden move. She had half expected Aya to try kissing her, yes, but not this way. The memory of Aya's tentative responses to her earlier kisses was rapidly being erased and replaced by the aggressive, confident, and utterly sexy way that her former captive was currently dominating the kiss. The normally flirtatious pirate was utterly floored by the display, and she found herself quite literally melting on the inside from the searing contact and exploration.

Aya, for her part, was guided mostly by instinct. She hadn't had much experience with kissing in general. The little experiments during her teens didn't really count. She was simply unloading all her repressed agitation (mostly incited by Miki anyway), while recalling the way that Miki had kissed her earlier, attempting to replicate the way Miki had explored her mouth earlier. Her competitive instinct, coupled with her natural urge to lead, took care of the rest. She might not fully understand what she was doing, but she was learning very quickly and improvising along the way. In any case, Miki's moans of approval was a clear enough indication that she was doing it right.

Smirking triumphantly into the kiss, Aya abruptly pulled away, leaving Miki panting heavily, a small disappointed whimper escaping the older girl at the loss of contact. Seeing that Miki was no longer actively pinning her down, Aya easily pushed the still slightly stunned pirate aside and sat up, wiping absently at her lips with her sleeve as she mentally recapped what she just did. Her own boldness surprised her, but overall she was quite satisfied with how it turned out. Surely, she had shown that obnoxious woman that she was not a pushover. Extreme times called for extreme measures, Aya reasoned, as she faced away from Miki.

A hand closed on her right shoulder. Aya turned her head back to see an intense light shining in Miki's eyes. A resolute and determined air seemed to hang over her.

"Do it again." Aya quirked an eyebrow. Miki was staring at her with a extremely serious expression, and that alone sent chills running up the young captain's spine.

"You only said one kiss." Aya rebutted easily, then added. "And you can't say you weren't satisfied, because I know you were." Effectively turning what Miki had said to her before back on the girl. Aya felt proud of that little comeback she pulled.

If only Miki didn't keep using that look on her. A look that seemed to encompass a burning need to know, as well as disbelief and determination. As if she couldn't quite believe that Aya had really been able to kiss her like that, and wanted confirmation. There was a strange light in her eyes that Aya couldn't quite place. It seemed...desperate. Needy, even. There was also confusion, as well as that something else that Aya simply couldn't identify, try as she might.

"I need to know." Again, the flirtatious and teasing inflection was completely gone from her tone. Aya wondered if someone had replaced the Miki she had seen earlier with something else.

But the young captain was not in the mood to indulge Miki's curiosity. With some difficulty, she tore her eyes away from that intense gaze, knowing that if she looked at it any longer, she would have been hypnotised by it. That wasn't what she wanted.

"No."

Miki couldn't help the pout that inched its way onto her face. She couldn't believe that the girl had just turned away from her like that. She had to have felt something in that as well. There was no way that it was all on her side. Miki had sensed something during that heated kiss earlier, but she wasn't quite sure what. She wanted, no, needed to know what it was. And the only way she could think of to find out was to do it again. To try and figure out what was that she had felt. Miki had not felt truly surprised by anything ever since Yuko had rescued her from that slave ship, but this girl had done exactly that. And she was determined to work out what that meant.

"Come on~" Miki pouted and whined a bit, resting her chin on Aya's shoulder, even as her arms encircled the younger's waist from behind. Aya twitched slightly at the strange change in direction the whole situation was taking. What happened to the confidently sexy (she erased that immediately after thinking it) woman who had been shamelessly trying to take advantage of her? In its place was an almost childishly endearing girl who seemed to be begging for a favor (a sexual one, undoubtedly, but never mind that). Did this girl have a split personality somewhere?

"No. And let go already."

"It wouldn't hurt you to do it again." Miki retorted, snuggling close and practically latching herself onto Aya's back. "What's wrong with having a little fun?"

"This is your idea of fun?" The disbelieving tone said it all. "And watch those hands." The young captain snapped sharply at the offending appendages, who were beginning to wander again. Miki only grinned outrageously and nuzzled into the back of Aya's neck, earning a flinch from the latter.

"You're so uptight." Miki declared, earning a scoff from the girl she was holding.

"And you are a brat." Aya bit back, not without justification. The pirate shrugged remorselessly, a cheeky grin on her face as she plotted her next move.

"Well, at least I'm a charming and sexy one. And I kiss better than you." Miki taunted the younger girl, who stiffened in her arms.

"You do not." Ah, the competitive nature strikes again. Miki smirked.

"Do too."

"Do not."

"Do too~"

"Do NOT."

"Prove it then."

At some point during that little exchange, Aya had half turned around to face Miki, and was glaring at the older girl. At Miki's challenge, Aya's eyes narrowed as she thought it over quickly. Miki grinned tauntingly at her, as if daring her to try.

The distance between their faces closed alarmingly...then stopped. Miki blinked rapidly at the sudden halt. Aya was practically nose to nose with her now, a strange look hovering in her eye.

"Don't think I don't know what you're doing..." Aya rasped out breathlessly, before closing that last millimeter between them...and biting down on the same spot as before.

"OW!" Miki cried out, falling back and releasing her grip on Aya, her hands returning to clutch at her mouth, the raw wound on the lip reopening again. "What the hell?"

Aya licked the traces of blood off her lips triumphantly. "Gotcha."

"You have a habit of biting me in the same place!" Miki whined, tentatively poking at her aching lip and wincing.

"And you have a habit of groping me!" Aya retorted, carefully placing herself just out of grope-range. Miki snorted, waving one hand dismissively.

"That's different, I grope everyone equally!"

"Gee, now I feel special." Aya shot back sarcastically, ego slightly wounded. Miki rolled her eyes.

"Take heart in the fact that you're the first one I tried to kiss within minutes of meeting you."

"And that's supposed to make me feel better?"

"Hey it's an honor!" Miki said defensively.

Aya scoffed at it just as quickly. "It's an honor I rather do without."
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« Reply #171 on: April 03, 2007, 02:17:40 AM »
Miki glowered slightly at her opponent, who was steadfastly refusing to meet her gaze. This Aya girl was going to be a challenge. No one had managed to counter and parry her attacks this well or this far before. If this goes on for much longer she might just be in for a world of trouble.

Aya was silently deliberating the situation. This Miki girl was definitely going to be a handful. No one had managed to get under her skin as quickly or as effectively as the girl had managed to thus far. If this went on for much longer, she might just just have a problem.

Provided we don't fall in love first. They both thought at the same time, then promptly slapped themselves mentally for even considering it. That was absurd. Completely and totally out of the question.

I can't stand her. Aya mentally reaffirmed that notion, bobbing her head slightly.

She can't stand me. Miki reassured herself, stroking her chin lightly.

If I/she can stand her/me... They both thought simultaneously. That could be bad.

Best not to think too much into it. Miki broke the silence with a grouchy word.

"Bitch."

"Brat."

"How original of you." Miki sneered.

Aya ignored that. "Get off the bed." She ordered.

"Why should I?"

"Because I'm ill and need it more than you."

"Can't you share?"

"Do you want me to puke all over you?"

That did the trick. Grumbling, Miki scurried off the bed, leaving Aya to grin smugly at her minor victory. But Miki wasn't done yet, naturally.

"You still owe me, you know." Aya frowned at the reminder. Of all people to have saved her life, she had to have one who was obnoxious, insufferable, and annoyingly intent on getting into her pants. Was bad karma at work somewhere in the equation?

"Only my life, not my body...so quit touching already!" Aya spat, forcibly prying Miki's hand off her thigh, even as Miki chuckled.

"What's the difference?" Reaching out to pat Aya on the cheek insultingly, then stepping back before the fuming captain could hit her again or worse.

Aya glared dangerously. "Argh, fine, whatever. Just stay away from me." She really wasn't feeling too well now, so she didn't want to get into any more verbal fights.

A flicker of concern flitted briefly through Miki's eyes. So briefly that Aya missed it completely. The pirate "hmphed" and turned away, going to the door.

"I'll be back." Aya made a derisive sound as she settled with a groan back onto the bed, her head swimming.

"Take your time." She muttered even as the door slammed shut behind the departing pirate. The soft click of a lock turning didn't even register on her as she closed her eyes, already on the verge of passing right back out.

I hate her...

~*~*~

Ai was nervous. She shifted around, one eye constantly watching the back door of the tavern where Ayaka had taken Risa to earlier. They had been rescued from the cellar, almost an hour from when they had been first pushed in, and Ayaka had immediately absconded with Risa, stating that she needed to have a good, long talk with the girl.

It had been about 20 minutes already, and there was no sign of them coming back. The barmaid was beginning to worry. Would she be made a widow before she was even married for more than an hour? Ayaka wouldn't really try to murder Risa, would she? The woman had always taken care of her very well, and was fiercely protective of everyone under her charge. Ai was sure that her wife was probably getting the grilling of her life.

"Don't worry, there's no screaming. They're probably both still alive." Kaori observed from beside the fidgety barmaid, trying to assure the nervous girl. Right after she had said that though, a gunshot rang out somewhere behind the tavern, making everyone jump. That didn't help Ai's nerves in the least, and she was on the verge of chewing her fingernails right off.

Meanwhile, Kei had taken to supervising Yuko at Ayaka's behest, since the pirate captain was currently being forbidden from touching any alcohol within the Sea Coconut for the time being. Yuko looked almost sulky while sitting in the corner. Clearly, she didn't like being told not to drink.

The naval trio had retreated to their own corner, discussing among themselves in quiet tones what to do with Aya, considering the situation at hand. Maki was not at all pleased to find out that Miki had saved Aya's life and was using that fact to keep Aya with her (or holding her hostage, whatever). Knowing Aya as well, she would probably feel honored to repay the debt. Maki didn't like the idea, and neither did Natsumi. Who knew what Miki would do to Aya?

The twins, having come down earlier, had immediately run off again, since they were too bored to stay in the same place for too long. Well, the peace and quiet in their absence was much appreciated, but the pirates didn't envy the rest of the town. Having that troublemaking duo bored this early in the morning pretty much equalled unrivalled chaos for the rest of the day. Definitely not going to be a good day for the town.

Finally, the door she was watching for so long creaked open. Both Ayaka and Risa walked through unscathed. Well, there were no visible bruises anyway. Risa did look slightly shaken though, and her eyes were very wide and round. One could not help but wonder what exactly Ayaka had said to her to land the poor girl in that condition.

Ai immediately stood up and walked very quickly towards the incoming pair. She would never admit it, at least not this early, but Risa had grown on her quite quickly during that conversations in the cellar earlier, and the barmaid found the younger girl likeable. Definitely someone she could consider knowing as a friend, although of course, due to certain unforeseen circumstances, they had ended up as much more than that.

Ayaka watched with an interested expression as Ai completely bypassed her on a straight course set for Risa. It looked as if the barmaid genuinely liked the young sailor that she had questioned (read: grilled mercilessly) earlier. To be honest, Ayaka hadn't been particularly impressed by Risa at first sight. Risa had appeared too frightened in front of her, which didn't lend much confidence to Ayaka about whether the girl was capable of taking care of Ai-chan for the rest of their lives.

However, when Ayaka had tried to push the younger girl into breaking it off with Ai, the uncertainty hovering around her appeared to fade, solidifying into a kind of determination that was at least partially impressive.

"I'll take full responsibility for whatever happens to Ai-chan. If anyone wants to hurt her, they'll have to go through me first."


Of course, anyone could just say that, and Ayaka challenged Risa with the same question. The navy sailor had frowned at that, before drawing one of her pistols and with a swift move, shot a passing seagull right out of the sky. The poor bird had been a good distance upwards, swooping around without a care in the world when the sharpshooter of Aya's crew spontaneously decided to place a shot right into its puny skull, just to prove a point.

Ayaka was impressed, naturally. Not many could pull off a difficult shot like that with only a few moments to aim. Risa appeared to shed her uncertain image whenever she had a gun in hand, and had then declared to Ayaka that no one was going to get anywhere near her Ai-chan as long as she was still around.

The proprietress, marginally assured by Risa's capability, had then proceeded to give the young sailor a very detailed account of what she would do to her if Risa ever hurt Ai in any way possible. The increasingly graphic descriptions were the main cause for why our favorite Gaki-san's current dazed expression. Death threats in full gory detail were generally unpleasant affairs.

Looking at the newlywed couple now though, Ayaka had to admit that they did sort of make a cute couple like Yuko said earlier. Ai-chan was holding on to Risa's hands, and the younger girl was making an attempt to smile for her worried spouse, while trying to assure her that no one (save for that unfortunate seagull) had been wounded in the proceedings. The two were not quite in love, but they were getting to be comfortable around each other, and were at least concerned about the other's wellbeing. Which was a feat in itself, considering that they had never met before the last night.

The sweet moment between the newlyweds was interrupted when a familiar group of people entered in through the front.

"Lady Ishikawa?" Yuuki blurted out immediately, as he was facing the doorway when Yossi and Rika had entered, closely followed by Eri. Reina had not joined them after the explanation along the waterfront earlier, since as the wonky eyed pirate declared, "NOW I have to go and repair my harpoons again. Thanks a lot Yossi", before stomping off back to the blacksmith with her weaponry. Mari too, had decided that she would go on ahead to the ship to take over guard duty from Makoto.

The tall pirate sensed then that Rika had wanted to talk to her, but the waterfront didn't seem like a very good place to have a serious conversation, so she had suggested that they find a place to sit down and talk. And that had meant going back to the Sea Coconut of course, since that was the only place that was guaranteed to give them an uninterrupted space for conversation, barring any intrusions from her shipmates.

Frankly, Yossi wasn't looking forward all that much to the conversation. Mostly because it was too difficult to talk about the many things that had happened. Too painful to relive them all over again, even for the sake of her closest childhood friend. Well, there was also the matter of wanting to spare Rika the more lurid details of her ordeals during the years. Despite everything, the pirate was still a caring person, and wanted to protect Rika at all costs.

Of course, there was also the matter of Rika's engagement. For some reason, Yossi found that the very idea of it hurt her. Maybe it was a little childish to remember the silly promise they had made as children, but somehow it had stuck in the back of her mind all of these years.

"When we grow up, I'll take Rika-chan as my bride!"

"Promise?"

"Promise."


That was a very long time ago. They had only been around 5 or 6 years old when that promise had been made, and Yossi had mostly forgotten it, until the mention of Rika's impending marriage by that bounty hunter had somehow triggered that dormant memory. Even though it had been a childish promise, Yossi couldn't help but feel somehow betrayed upon learning that Rika was to have been married to someone else. It was an awkward issue between them, definitely.

"I'll always wait for you, Yocchan..."

There it was again. That voice. Rika had said it to her over a trivial matter when they were but 12 years old, before everything had gone wrong. They had been innocently happy together at the time. That commitment had been made in a spur of the moment. It didn't mean anything...or did it?

To Rika, it definitely did. She had waited for Yossi for a whole 10 years, rejecting every single suitor along the way, not knowing exactly why she did so even as she smilingly declined every proposal. Her friend was important to her, yes, but was it a reason to turn away perfectly acceptable men who were eager for her hand in marriage?

Rika didn't know the answer to that. Finally, of course, her father had taken a hand in things and arranged a marriage for her. A purely political union, which she had been groomed to accept as part of the norm all her life. Marriage within the higher echelons of nobility were usually a tool to secure alliances or strengthen bonds between different clans. Love was usually not part of the equation, although she had seen arranged marriages develop into stable, happy, and even loving relationships. Of course, there were also many other unhappy examples, but that was besides the point. Women didn't have a place to complain in a patriarchal society anyway.

The arranged marriage, by all ends and means, should have served to anchor her back into the cold reality of her life. It was time for her to settle, as her father had sternly informed her. It was for the good of the family. Dreaming of the day where her best friend would return to her and rescue her from the prison her social standing had incarcerated her was but a foolish hope. There were no miracles in the world, at least not those that happened without any effort or reason.

So she had taken matters into her own hands. Seizing her own future for herself, not dedicating it to other people. Rika didn't want to sit back and be the docile porcelain doll that her family trotted out on special occasions for the crowds to gawk at, not anymore. She was tired of having other people decide her fate for her.

The resulting fiasco had occurred. Running away from the wedding, from home, joining a navy ship, and all of it eventually leading up to meeting the one person she wanted to see, in this port town far on the eastern edge of the Empire...it made her believe in miracles. At least, those that had been worked for.

The naval trio stared at the new arrivals. What was their guest doing with that person? Judging by the way Rika was standing close to Yossi, and the way they looked at each other, clearly they were acquainted. But...how?

"You know them?" Yossi asked Rika, who was currently trading glances with a nervous Natsumi. Don't tell them who we are. Message received and processed. With the ease of someone skilled at deflecting questions, Rika replied.

"Why yes, they were the ones who were nice enough to give me safe passage on board their ship when I ran away." It wasn't a lie, but it did leave out certain points of information that would be best left unannounced at this time. The naval people breathed a silent sigh of relief. Crisis averted, at least for now.

"Lady Ishikawa? A noblewoman then?" Kaori asked astutely. Yuko frowned. "What's a lady like her doing out here anyway?"

Which was a fairly valid point. Yossi turned to Rika with a stern expression. "Why are you here anyway?" Rika shifted nervously on her feet. What could she say, especially in front of all these people? That she couldn't bear to just get married to someone she barely knew? Or that she just had to see Yossi before anything else major happened in her life? Frankly, the whole decision to escape had been made on the spur of a moment, a hasty decision based on the sole idea that she had to find her best friend before getting tied down for the rest of her life. It wasn't the most well thought out decision she had ever made, but once in a while, even rash decisions had its merits. After all, did she not succeed in finding Yossi again? That would not have happened had she not decided to run away on the wedding day itself.

Surprisingly, Maki came to her rescue. "If I had to get married to some blubbering, weak-kneed idiot like that Tachibana boy, of course I would run away too." Rika smiled gratefully at the naval lieutenant, who simply shrugged in response. It was the truth, as far as it went. Never mind the fact that she had just mortally insulted a son of one of the leading Ducal clans in the Empire. No one in Klashnik would give a damn about it anyway.

"I can't go back...Father probably had a fit when I ran off. If I go back now, I'll probably be locked up in the estate for the rest of my life." Rika sighed with a note of resignation. She was suddenly at a loss for what to do. She had found Yossi...and then what now? She couldn't go back. Could she stay with Yossi? Would she be allowed to stay? So many questions. Rika was beginning to wonder if it had actually been wise to have skipped out on her wedding to come on this crazy adventure.

There was a moment of silence. The naval people didn't know what to do, for sure. They had their own problems to deal with, although Maki and Natsumi decided to conveniently forget about the fact that they were most likely going to get in deep trouble for abetting in Rika's escape, and more than once too. The first bounty hunters had come when they were docked at an Imperial port to report in, and Aya had refused to hand her guest over. Technically, in doing so they could have been charged with kidnap and stripped of their rank in the navy. But naturally, Aya had her principles and didn't care to roll over for the rules if she didn't like them. One day her unorthodoxy was going to land her in a lot of trouble, if it hasn't already.

"Well Yossi, that's your girl right? You decide what to do." Yuko declared, thumping her fist against the table. What a way to delegate responsibility. But the pirate captain had a point. Everyone else in the room didn't have any right to decide what would happen next for Rika save for Rika herself, and since Rika was pretty much at a loss for what to do herself, then Yossi, who was the only real relation to her (even Yuko could see that they were close), the tall pirate would have to discuss with the noblewoman privately on the matter.

Maki and Natsumi looked at each other, wondering what would be their part in this. Should they let Rika go if she so willed? What would Aya have done? That last question pretty much made up their minds. Natsumi stood up, walking over to the pair.

"Well, it's your decision to leave or stay with us. We will not hinder whatever your decision you make."

Maki, who had followed after her superior officer, piped up in an ironic tone. "We're already in enough trouble as it is. One more infraction won't make it any worse."

Rika bowed her head. "I'm sorry to have caused you so much trouble."

Maki laughed it off easily, coming to stand beside Natsumi. "Don't be so hard on yourself, we were already bound for trouble the moment Aya became our captain. You're just one of the incidentals." Natsumi chuckled and slapped playfully at the taller officer's arm. "Don't be so mean."

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Re: All Aboard!
« Reply #172 on: April 03, 2007, 02:18:00 AM »
"Hey what's the party about?" Miki called out as she descended from the stairs. Her clothes were a bit rumpled, and her lip was still bleeding. Aside from that though, the knife-loving pirate was still in a relatively good mood despite her appearance.

Her entrance sparked off an immediate reaction from Maki, who clearly remembered how Miki had nearly skewered her with those knives earlier. Of course, knowing that Miki was doing God-knows-what with Aya earlier upset her. Next to her, Natsumi quickly clung on to the visibly fuming Maki, signalling to Yuuki and Eri to give her a hand just in case Maki decided to go berserk and try to attack Miki or something.

"How was it?" Kei asked immediately. Miki simply smirked, while absently wiping off her bloody lip again.

"She bit you again?" Kaori laughed. The knife-loving pirate shrugged, an impish grin on her face.

"She's a feisty one, that's for sure." Natsumi was contemplating whether she should just let Maki go over and beat that girl up, and possibly join in herself as well. Yuuki looked shocked and offended, since he had a great deal of respect for Aya, and Eri just looked confused. You couldn't blame her though, since she had absolutely no idea what was going on.

Risa, who had finally gotten out of her little world with her new wife, was looking over at her shipmates. "Um, what's going on?" She asked tentatively.

Miki's attention was thus drawn over to the newlyweds, who were standing near her, a slightly predatory expression as she locked in on the suddenly apprehensive barmaid. Even a dimwit could sense the impending danger from the groping devil, and Ai inched behind Risa, looking warily at her usual tormentor.

Risa gulped nervously as Miki prowled closer with all the intent of a hunter, even as the rest of the people in the tavern looked on with interest. The pirate was smiling deceptively as she spoke.

"Hello Ai-chan, why so distant today?" Miki smirked even as Ai backed away, dragging Risa with her. The navy sailor wasn't entirely sure who Miki was and what she wanted, but the way Ai was reacting, clearly her wife didn't want Miki to get any closer. So she acted instinctively.

"Stay away." Before she knew it, Miki was staring down the barrel of a pistol. Risa had a grim expression on her face. She had felt Ai's apparent panic with Miki's proximity to them, and she didn't like that her friend (wife) was feeling threatened. Miki didn't even flinch, though her smile grew wider.

"Such hostility, I was only trying to be friendly!" Miki faked an injured expression. The other pirates in the tavern snickered. Miki's idea of being friendly tended to involve a lot of contact. While the pirate crew were more or less used to the whole idea of it (they learned to take it in their stride), most other people often saw it as a blatant invasion of personal space (which it was).

"Oh well," Miki sighed exaggeratedly, eyeing Risa critically. "You don't look too bad either. New friend of yours, Ai-chan?"

"She's my wife." Risa blurted out without thinking, before promptly turning a ripe red color when she realised what she just said. Ai blushed as well, and looked down at her feet shyly. Miki just appeared amused, even as the rest of the audience snickered/laughed/chuckled (depending on their breeding). Eri, who had become fairly good friends with Risa on the voyage, had her mouth hanging wide open at the revelation.

"Cute couple." Kaori observed to Ayaka, who also looked greatly entertained by the scene. "Isn't that so?" Ayaka agreed, very much tickled by the way Risa was handling the unrepentantly flirtatious Miki.

"Oh, really? Congratulations, that was quick." Miki had her most completely friendly and unthreatening face on, even backing off a bit to give the two in the corner a bit of space. Risa hesitantly lowered her pistol in response, clearly still wary about Miki even though she didn't even know the pirate. Ai poked her head up carefully, wanting to be sure that the groping demon didn't decide to launch a surprise attack again. Miki just smiled benignly and put her hands behind her back.

Wait for it, wait for it... Yuko and the rest of her crew were thinking as they watched Miki appear to ignore the couple, turning instead for the kitchen entrance where Ai and Risa had been standing next to. The knife-loving pirate seemed to brush past them easily enough, and innocently enough, but...

Two surprised yelps came from the designated victims of the day, as both Ai and Risa jumped when Miki's fingers somehow slipped close enough to pinch at their bottoms. The groping demon chuckled evilly as she darted away into the relative safety of the kitchen before Risa could pull a shot on her.

The rest of the pirates exploded in laughter at Miki's antics. Just another typical day, it seemed, despite all the strange events that had taken place. With little fuss and minimal friction, the two crews settled down into a unspoken neutrality of terms. There would be no more actual violence between them for the time being, unless Miki pushed it far enough for Maki to want to murder her of course. Though that was but a minor technicality.

How long would this truce last before the storm finally hits?

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o_o A character limit? Does that mean my chapters should be shorter to fit it all in one post?! Lol. XD

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Re: All Aboard!
« Reply #173 on: April 03, 2007, 04:31:10 AM »
lol ive never seen the afro emoticon before...  O0 O0 O0 :p  ;D

Wow, character limit huh. That's a pain D:
What an awesome dose of GAMness. Muahaha, Aya has to be prodigious at making out too?? XD Speaking of which..

I'm thinking the boots and jacket scream Captain Aya... don't you? This is how I visualize the uniform to be anyway.  ;D



Risa randomly shooting a seagull = hawt. Her being protective of Aichan makes me go warm and fuzzy inside. <3 (the song is irrelevant, but still. i love it anyway XD)
Anyway, to show some love, ive done some fan art. ill post it up laterrr after you post another chapter XD (or after i get around to scanning it >_>)

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Re: All Aboard!
« Reply #174 on: April 03, 2007, 05:48:29 AM »
Wow, love the outfit. Now I have a clear image of what Aya looks like....awesome. From the thumbnail though I thought it was Yossui aahhhh well Im dumb, arnt I

*Sings* Yay for GAM yay for GAM. You cant go wrong, if its GAM!

Im really addicted to ur fic..Im gonna admit it...and Im gonna speak for everyone else in the forum...they are too

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« Reply #175 on: April 03, 2007, 08:32:44 AM »
OMG!!!! Let me repeat that, OMG!!!!!!!!!! I just spent over 2 hours reading this and it has got to be one of the best decisions I ever made. I don't know how you did it but you weaved humor, sarcasm, sweetness, excitement, suspense and relationships all into one awesome story. You even threw in a little Physics xD
I am especially wowed by how you could pair the "right" couples up and have them somehow incompatible with each other. Like how Aya's from a Royal Navy family and Miki a pirate, or Yossui with a shamed background and Rika a nobleborn. I'll be waiting and looking forward to your updates ^^

PS: I adore all TakaGaki parts. It's so cute how Risa reacts to things and tries to protect barmaid Ai-chan.
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« Reply #176 on: April 03, 2007, 11:28:08 AM »
Muahaha.

GAM! :heart:
Groping with Miki! :heart:
IshiYoshi :heart:

Gaki being protective of her wife, Ai-chan, is so cute. Yuko should seriously start having some more wedding ceremonies in the Sea Coconut. (That would solve Yossi and Rika's problem, I bet. xD) Oh, and I'm waiting to see a Maki vs. Miki fight. :P

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« Reply #177 on: April 03, 2007, 12:23:42 PM »
Yeah I plan to let them break their "no public display of affection" rule more often some time in the future. XD As for who Risa barged in on, well, its kinda obvious when you think about it. I left enough textual and timeline clues for it to be picked up on. ^__~

Yay yay yay for more rule breaking! I shall look forward to it :D

And I guess I need to re-read the story, since I have absolutely no clue ... *scratches head* ... me and my non-functional brain!

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« Reply #178 on: April 03, 2007, 07:21:28 PM »
Damn, Estrea, you rock!  This fic has so many things going for it that I don't even know where to start!  These mellow chapters have been making a great atmosphere for all the (possible) relationships.  I can't wait to see when more of them start getting together.  I'm also really looking forward to more fighting!  :heart: You write it so well, that I'm totally hooked on it.  Well, I'll definately keep stalking checking this for new chapters!  Keep up the great work!

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« Reply #179 on: April 03, 2007, 08:03:59 PM »
Man, I typed out a response to Ch. 14 when it was put up on the temp forum. Can't access it now, and I don't really remember, nor do I feel like re-doing it. :P  Suffice it to say, this rocked! ;D

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