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Re: Traces.
« Reply #20 on: September 02, 2013, 02:42:05 AM »
i like this ff, call my atettion just like that game ..."Fatal Frame"(LoL)

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Re: Traces. Chapter 2!
« Reply #21 on: September 19, 2013, 12:45:09 AM »
Sorry for the long wait, here is chapter 2 !


'Atsu~ I won't talk to you for too long because I think they already think you're crazy for talking to “your imaginairy friend” but be careful, if they find out you have interest in that girl, she might get in danger.'
'I'm not interested, I don't get where you get that from but I'll be carefu--' Atsuko suddenly stopped, turned around and waved as she saw Minami staring at her from the rooftop.
'Not interested you say?' a silent chuckle could be heard.
After seeing that Minami was startled she let out a final laugh and continued her way towards the gym.
'Shut up..'


Takahashi Minami:

While we were eating, I zoned out the whole time. Yuko is a member of our schools baseball team, and she was telling me how great it was that the team could enter the nationals. Ofcourse I'm happy for her, don't get me wrong, but I couldn't get my thoughts of how weird it was to see Atsuko talk to an empty space... I've been trying to find reasonable explanations but the only thing I've come up with that was a bit reasonable was that she is crazy...
'—so me and nyannyan went to drink something after practice and then I got home! How amazing right?'
'Oh yeah great! W-wait, who's nyannyan?'
'Were you even listening to me? Nyannyan is a new teammember, she's also new at our school but she's a year older than us so we're not in the same class. Oh and I forgot a very important fact... She's very beautiful!!'
She showed me her usual squirrel laugh. Yuko isn't the type to make new friends, she told me many times she liked it like this, just the two of us. So it surprized me she made a new friend.
She continued on how beautiful 'her nyannyan' is and that she wouldn't want me to think that she'd dump me for her so that I'm still her best friend thinking I would be mad.
'Yuko, I'm not mad okay? Don't go apoligizing for doing nothing wrong.'
'But still ~ You know what, it's been a while since we went out together, let's catch a movie tonight?'
'Sure, let's do that.' I thought it'd be great to get my mind of things.
After finishing our meal, we both took our stuff and went donwstairs. As I was walking, I suddenly felt light headed so I stumbled a bit. Yuko looked over to see if everything was alright. Saying that I just wasn't looking where I was walking made her on her ease. I didn't know where the light headedness came from but since it was already over, I didn't think about it anymore.

'Hey, let's go, PE is about to start!'
Great, if there's a subject I'd really hate, it would be PE. Really, I'd rather stay late at school and suffer from math than PE. I mean, I can run, I can jump, I can hit someone, I can kick someone, what else could be usefull? I mean what else could be useful?

My ranting came to an end when suddenly someone shouted and came running to us.
'Hello my dearie~ and who's this?' A very pretty and tall girl asked Yuko.
'Oh nyannyan, this is Minami, my best friend! Minami, let me introduce you to Haruna, the girl I told you about!'
I quicly introduced myself and before I could do something else, the students all came out meaning the next period would start.
'Ahh nice meeting you Minami-san!' Haruna quickly said before heading towards her own class.
'So, don't you think she's beautiful?' Yuko asked me as she was smiling like I would if I'd pass a restaurant with a board saying;FREE KATSUDON!
'Yuko stop scaring me and yes, she's very pretty. Now let's head to one of the only places I don't want to be.'
'You know, PE could be fun, it's just you who keeps on ranting about how bad everything is, did you ever give it a try to like it?' She asked me while draping an arm over my shoulders.
The only reply she got was a grunt and I left her standing there while I headed towards the gym. Something bothered me though, not with what Yuko said but with that Haruna girl. She had this mysterious aura and her eyes are cold as ice. There's no emotion to be seen. She did smile but it didn't reach her eyes though. While I was thinking I didn't notice that a certain squirrel came running next to me and linked her arm with mine.
'Let's go, maybe you'll like PE after today! Now put up a smile will you miss sunshine?'
While heading towards the gym I saw Atsuko walking in the oposit direction, isn't she going to PE? Suddenly Yuko started to run towards the gym, pulling me along, but ofcourse is my stamina not as good as hers so at the end, it's still me alone, making my way to the gym.
When I reached the gym, everyone was already changed, making it obvious I was late, and if it were one teacher on whom's lecture you do not want to be late on, it's hers, Ms Shinoda.
'Takahashi, what's your excuse?' Ms Shinoda said, or should I say screamed.
'… I uhh--' 'No good reason huh Takahashi?' Ms Shinoda doesn't like me, at all...
'You will clean the gym and the aula after PE, got it?' Great, that'll take me hours to clean... That'll mean no movie with Yuko later... Why does she hate me so much anyway, the other students would get a lesser punishment..
'Fine.' I mumbled.
'Okay so thanks to your classmate, we will not play hockey wich you all were so exited about because we have no time enough to go to the other field and get everything ready,' she said and all the students exept Yuko, started to glare at me 'but we will play dodgeball!' Ugh no, not dodgeball... I mean, it looks like a bullying game if you ask me, hitting eachother on purpose, how sadistic. In this game I alw-- Owww... 'Nice shot Takajo!' 'I wasn't ready!' I was rubbing my leg where the ball hit me. How strong is that girl, it hurts like hell. 'Takahashi, that's quick, even for you.' Ms Shinoda said while I can clearly see amusement in her eyes.

The next 45 minutes passed on a tragicly slow pace.

'Okay that was it for today! Go and take a shower, have a nice day! Exept you Takahashi, it's not over yet! Get the balls back in the net, go shower and come then back to clean the gym and aula!'
'Yes Ms pain in the ass.' I mumbled. 'Did you say something?' She asked me. A simple gesture was enough to convince I said nothing. That was a close call...
After quickly gathering the balls and put them away, I headed towards the showers and changingrooms. When I entered I expected to be ignored by everybody but instead of that, all I met was silence. Where is everybody? It only took me 5 minutes to clean up, why is everybody gone? I couldn't even see Yuko, and she always waited for me. The next thing I noticed was that my clothes were nowhere to be seen. After searching the whole changing room, I checked in the showers and found my clothes laying there in the water. Great, just great! I was about to turn around and start to clean the gym, since I couldn't shower without fresh clothes, but I suddenly got very dizzy. Everything started to turn around me, everything became hazy looking, started to turn around me and I started to hear voices. At first just calling my name but it got louder and they started screaming my name. I couldn't handle this anymore. Before I lost contiousness, I could see someone entering the changingroom coming towards me.

TBC


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« Last Edit: September 19, 2013, 12:54:52 AM by nouke1995 »
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Re: Traces.
« Reply #22 on: September 19, 2013, 10:26:12 AM »
So Atsuko can see ghosts?
And what's happening to Takamina? Does she have some kind of super power like Atsuko?
So Atsuko is interested in Takamina? ATSUMINA!!!!
But the question is why?
Is Atsuko the one that came into the changing room when Takamina passed out?
Update SOON!!

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Re: Traces.
« Reply #23 on: September 21, 2013, 04:13:14 AM »
Chapter 3 !

Ugh... My head hurts.

I woke up in a strange place, it looked like the cellar of an old house like the ones you see in horror movies. The walls had cracks and you could see that when it rains, the water could it's way in.
'What the hell am I doing here? Is this one of those stupid dreams again?' I sighed.
I looked around me and I noticed I was laying down on an old bed wich looked like it would give in any moment. I jumped straight up but I couldn't go far as I was cuffed on an old waterpipe. Since I couldn't do anything, I just kept looking around to find something to get me free. After a while I gave up, there was nothing useful here, only old boxes, some wood and this old bed.
'So do I have to stay here and wait for my nightmare to end or what?' I started to get annoyed.
Suddenly I heard someone coming from the stairs towards this room. I couldn't see how that person looked because I couldn't even sit straight. My position only allowed me to see the walls about a meter away from my bed where those boxes and wood stood. My back faced another wall where the bed stood against. I felt that the person came near to me and I got tensed.
'No screaming questions about who I am, what you do here and so on?' the person said. I knew he was a guy when he spoke up. I still couldn't see him though.
'You don't want to talk Takamina?' Huh, how could he know me? I started to shiver a little.
'Okay then, maybe next time.' He said as I could feel him injecting something in me causing everything to go black again.

I imediatly shot up and gasped for air. As my eyes adjusted to the brightness inside the room, I noticed I was now lying on a hospital bed. Some whires were attached to my arm and the sound of a constant beep made it clear the machine I could see to my right was to control my heart. I'm confused, was it a dream or what happened?
I suddenly noticed a movement beside me and I saw a girl sitting on a chair next to my bed who had aparently fallen asleep while resting her head on my bed.
This girl looked familiar but since I couldn't see her face, I couldn't say who it was. It looked like she was waking up, probably because when I woke up, I jumped.
The girl sat straight and streched a little. Then I could see her face, now I see why she's so familiar. 'Maeda-san?'
'Oh you're awake? I was getting worried. Sorry I fel asleep here.' She said with a sheepish smile.
'It's okay, don't worry. What happened?' I asked since I really had no idea.
'I came back from the directors office to go home when I saw some light in the changing rooms. Since when I left, nobody should be at school anymore, I got curious who'd still be there. I found you unconcious on the floor. I called someone to help me to get you to a hospital since you felt like you were burning up, and I was kinda worried. They told me you had a food poisening and since your fever was very high and they didn't get it lower and since you were very weak, they wanted you to stay for the night. They called your mom but she said she couldn't visit due to some visitor but she didn't want you to be alone so I stayed with you but aparently I felt asleep...' she said while scratching her head a bit during the last part.
'Oh I see... Thanks.' I averted my eyes from her for a while, visitor? Probably her  boyfriend again... For some reason, I don't like him. He always gives me chills when he comes over, wich by the way, happens way too much then my liking. When I looked back, I saw her starting to gather her things. With her attention on her stuff, I noticed she's actually pretty cute when she's focused. Then she turned towards me again while looking in my eyes. Her eyes are also very beautiful. It's like her brown orbs are attracting me.
'I shall take my leave now. I'll see you at school right? Get better soon, kay?' With one last smile she turned to leave. 'Maeda-san, I--' She turned around and looked over at me.
'I uhh well, thanks again. Take care.' She started to smile and when she was about to open the door she said, 'Call me Acchan, Maeda-san is kinda cold.' She giggled.
'Call me Takamina then, Mae-- Acchan.'
'Okay then Takamina, see you later.'  She said and left while smiling.

Once left alone, I started to overthink things. 1St, why was everybody gone when I entered the changingrooms? It usually takes the most girls ages to get their look like what they want. I didn't take that long to gather those balls... Then, who was it that I saw entering? It can't be Acchan because she only got inside when it was evening. And when I entered it was still afternoon.
Arch this is giving me a headache again.
A sudden knock on the door grabbed my attention away. As I said a short yes, I see a doctor entering. 'Ms Takahashi right? Well, Ms Maeda said you woke up so I came to check you up and if you're alright, you can leave.' He said. After a quick check up, I was allowed to leave and gathered my stuff together. While walking home, I started to think about what I dreamed again. Who's that guy? Why did it seem so real... Why didn't it sound like he wanted to hurt me when he talked to me? It's all so strange.
I reached my house and I saw a car in front of it. I live here with my mom and we don't have a car, we don't really have guests either so it has to be his... The thing is, in this streat, everybody knows everybody, there are alot of party's, gatherings, outings,... they do together but we never go. They don't even ask anymore. We're pretty much... the odd ones. If you're wondering about my dad, I don't know where he's at. He left us a long time ago.
I took my key and opened the door. 'I'm back.'
I was greeted by the scent of pancakes. I put down my stuff and headed towards the kitchen.
There he was, sitting on his usual place, … When my mom saw me, she greeted me with the usual hug, then I turn to him and give him a polite hello. 'So are you feeling better now Minami?' My mom asks full of concern. 'Yeah don't worry about me.' Then I took my stuff and headed towards my room. I just throw my stuff on the ground and laid down on my bed. Another reason why I strongly despice that guy (read as hate) is because I saw him once, on a party where Yuko dragged me to. He was sitting there with another woman, who was all over him. This happened while he was already together with my mom.
Ofcourse when I told it to her, rather then kicking him out, she was mad at me for trying to ruin their relationship...

beep beep – beep beep

I turn to my right and took my phone out of my pants.

1 message recieved –  Oshima Yuko

I opened the message wich read;
Yooooo~ ♪
Why weren't you at school? I was lonely... untill Nyannyan appeared ofcourse. (▰˘◡˘▰)
But... I still missed you!
The team today had a late practice and me and Nyannyan showered together! ✖_✖
Finally someone who wants to shower with me, tell me midget, why won't you? (╯°□°)╯︵ ┻━┻
Say... Did you go somewhere with that Maeda girl?
She's also absent today ¬_¬ 
Catch you later ~
Yuko out! --

I chuckled. This girl is really something...

TBC

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Re: Traces. CHAPTER 3
« Reply #24 on: September 21, 2013, 06:20:06 PM »
Yes! I'm not alone in this fandom!
And bout the chap, I was thinking of NyanNyan more than Acchan. Does she have any connection with that dream?

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Re: Traces. CHAPTER 3
« Reply #25 on: September 23, 2013, 01:48:41 AM »
@AshuraX: Hmm maybe she does? ;)
Also, nope, you're not alone in that ship lol

@ Ryuuka; you'll have to wait for crazy Acchan to appear for next chap cause this one is about the past! ^-^
But there will be AtsuMina soon !

Okay so this chapter is about the past :3 You'll see why I wrote this soon, it'll get clearer next chapter ! Thank you for reading! ~

Chapter 4    Past is past? I guess so...

The bell is heard in an old small school, situated in between grain fields on the countryside. The next thing heard is the laughter of the many girls and boys, running outside the schoolbuilding, ready for an hour of playtime.
Most of the boys were playing soccer, some others were just throwing balls at eachother or just talked about videogames and such... As for the girls, they would rather sit and talk about things happaned at home, their new dolls, how they want to look when they get bigger, their favourite tvshows, or they'd act with eachother like a real family, they'd dance on their latest favourite songs and so on. And then there's this one girl, who's sitting alone, reading a book, under a tree. Ofcourse this girl got picked on, she never talked about any of the subjects the other girls cared about, she didn't participate in any of the games, … Other things they used as reasons to pick on her were the fact she wore glasses and the fact she was a little bit heavier than the other kids.
The reason why this girl was different? She just wanted to be herself, she loved reading books, especially fantasy, she didn't like playing with dolls or dancing. She couldn't help it. Usually they'd leave her alone, the days she got picked on, were the days she'd enter school while crying. Instead of asking the little girl whether she was alright, they just laughed at her, calling her a little crybaby, saying she was ugly, that she didn't belong, .. The comments didn't do her alot because she was used to it, but once they added her parents, it stung alot more. Saying things like; 'Did your parents finally realise your the worst? Did they finally put you up for adoption? I pity your parents for having you as a child!' Those things hurted the little girl more than anything.
Not even the teachers asked what was wrong, nobody cared for her.
The reason why sometimes she came to school crying, it did involve her parents. Nobody knew what this girl went through at home.
After school ended, the little girl started to make her way home. She walked to school and back because her house wasn't that far away. Once she could see her house, she started to get nervous because she saw her parents car was there, so that meant they're home. She walked to the front door and silently opened it. Once she opened the door, she noticed that they were in the kitchen. She made her way over there and said a silent 'I'm back.' Before turning around, trying to run to her room.. but to no avial. 'Atsuko, come here!' Came a strong voice. The voice obviously belonging to her father. 'H-hai.' The then 8 year old Atsuko turned around and slowly made her way towards her dad.
'We have visitors tonight, you know what that means right?' he said, scaring her slightly.
'H-hai.' 'Well say it out loud you stupid girl! I want to make sure you got it all right!' he shouted.
'Eto-- Stay inside t-the r-r-room, n-no sound, no s-sign of l-life or els-se.' She stammered on her words.
'At least you remembered that after the last “or else”, did you feed the dogs outside already?'
Atsuko paniced, she forgot this morning, what is she gonna do know...
'I-I-I forgot..' cam a silent whisper. Wich was answered with a slap across her face.
'You forgot? You forgot to feed them? What if we forgot to feed you? Huh? You little worth of nothing!' He screamed the last part. Then her mother turned towards her, 'Did you take money out of the moneybox, Atsuko? It seems like money has disapeared. 'N-no, I really didn't, sister came home yesterday, sh--' Atsuko was got hit again, this time on her head. 'Putting your deeds on your sisters back huh? You should be ashamed, we're already very ashamed of having you!' Her mother screamed while almost starting to cry. Once her dad had seen that, he started to walk towards her, ready to hit her so she tried to get away. Ofcourse he was faster and started to beat the small girl while reminding her over and over again how much they don't want her at all.
Once she finally was able to run away and lock herself up in the room, she started to cry her heart out. This was something that happened qiuet alot. You'd think someone would ask questions about her bruises but ofcourse, nobody cared.

This was pretty much how Atsuko's life was for years, untill her 14th birthday. The day she turned 14, she was stuck in her room, like always when her parents were home. Nobody of her family cared so no party was held, at least for her. There was a party downstaires, but it was one of those party's where the tripple rules were on; stay in the room, no sound, no sign of life.
She didn't mind though, because when there's a party, she'd know they wouldn't come to her room. The party was held because her sister was going to graduate from highschool. She was happy for her sister but her sister was pretty much the same as her parents, she hated her, she loathed her. Atsuko doesn't know what she ever did wrong but she was used to it. She was reading a book she brought from the library, but her peacefull reading got interupted by screams coming from downstaires. Thinking it would probably be nothing she continued reading. Suddenly she starts to smell something burned, she was about to open the door to look downstaires but aparently they locked her door from the outside. Seeing that there came smoke from underneath the door, she imediatly started to panic.
She ran towards her window, where she saw that everybody was outside by now, talking to the neighbours. She saw the firefighters trying to tone down the fire but aparently it didn't die down so easily. She tried to open the window but it was stuck, searching for something to break the glass with, she found an old box, nothing was inside it so she threw it through the glass. Her room was on the second floor so she tried to use a nearby standing tree to climb down but suddenly there was an explosion in her room wich caused her to fall on the ground. She hit the ground hard but still managed to crawl a little furder but she stopped when she heard a firefighter ask her parents whether they were sure nobody was left in there. 'No, this is all of us, nobody is in there anymore. We even got the dogs free so there's nothing to worry about.' She stopped moving there, she knew they didn't care but it hurted her so much. The fact they even made sure the dogs were fine but she could die...
She started to crawl back to the garden and hid in the dogshouse until she saw nobody there anymore. Feeling very lightheaded, she tried to stand up. She felt down a few times but at the end, she got up and started to walk. For some reason, she ended up in someones garden but before she could actually notice, she blacked out.

21 p.m. Oshima Mai, a middle aged woman just came back from her work as child carer in an orphanage. She went inside her house and took of her jacket, gave her dog some food and opened the backdoor so the poor boy, who stayed inside for the day could run around to lose his energy. She started to make food for herself, as she usually does that after her dog got his food, untill her dog came back in the house running towards her. She looked at him while saying, 'What is it, boy?' The dog imediatly ran back to the back door and looked behind itself to see whether she was following. Seeing that action, Mai decided to follow her dog. 'Easy there boy!' The dog ran outside and stopped behind their gardenhouse. As Mai aproached the dog, she saw a person lying there. Feeling whether the girl still had pulse, she decided to call an ambulance since it was pretty weak.
She came with the paramedics and stayed beside the girl.
Surgery was needed so Mai could only wait for news as she was scared for the girl, though she didn't know her at all.
When surgery was done, they brought the girl towards her room and asked Mai to fill in some questions. Since this girl's wallet wasn't with her, they didn't know her name or anything so they couldn't call any family. An officer came to talk to Mai about how she found her and such, but when he saw the girl, he recognized her. 'Hey, isn't that the girl from the Maeda-family? Didn't they say she died in the fire? They said they didn't know she was at home and were crying so hard on their loss this morning. How come she is here?'
Mai explained her story, how she found her in her garden but doesn't know anything about her as he finally nodded, showing he understands the situation.
'I see, well I should call her parents now.' As he stood up to leave, a faint whisper can be heared. 'Please don't call them, please don't call them, please don't call them, …' Her eyes only slightly opened. As more she repeated it, the more she started to cry while saying this.
'Maybe... we shouldn't call, let's wait untill she's fully awake?' Mai asked the officer.
'Yeah, maybe it's better that way...' He said, he pittied the girl.
Though they assured her they wouldn't call her, they couldn't calm her down and she needed to calm down because she needed the rest.
Mai stood up and took hold of her hand. 'Don't worry, I'll protect you, please go back to sleep, everything will be better once you're awake.' She said with a smile. Atsuko saw that she was sincere and she felt more on her ease now. Finally letting the anesthesia do his work.

TBC
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Re: Traces. CHAPTER 4
« Reply #26 on: September 23, 2013, 04:18:49 AM »
I missed few of your updates...

But happy coz' got to read 2 chapters at once

Interesting...

Can't wait to what's going to happen to atsuko next?

Thank you for the update

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