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Traces. CHAPTER 4
« on: August 10, 2013, 11:49:57 PM »




Traces.

'Oh no, you have to be kidding me …' I found myself in an old alley. I could've sworn the last time I checked, I was going towards my house. 'How the hell did I end up here...' I looked around to see if anybody was near only to be met with the emptyness of the night. No living person to be seen nor heard. I started to walk forward. As I was walking while attempting to find an outway of this place (that gave me the chills by the way), I took out my cellphone. As I opened it up, I could only look at a gray screen. My battery died. 'Just great' . As I continued to walk, I thought someone was watching me but each time I turned around, I could only see darkness. I finally reached the end of the alley and saw a small pond. It was surrounded by trees and flowers. It totally didn't belong here. Just as I was about to have a last look at the alley, it was gone. The place where I came from was now replaced by a wall 'What...' I closed my eyes and opened them again. I repeat that progress a few times but the wall was still standing there. I slowly turned around again, trying to out my thoughts together. I started to head towards the pond since I could illuminate a small pathway there. Suddenly, I could hear a deafening scream coming from my right side. I turned around as fast as I could. Next thing I know, I'm in my own bed, sweating and trembling like crazy. 'What was that...?'


TBC


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My first AKB fanfic :D
I hope you like it !
Sorry for any errors, english isn't my native language!
Guess who's the pairing ;) ~
« Last Edit: September 23, 2013, 01:49:01 AM by nouke1995 »
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Re: Traces.
« Reply #1 on: August 11, 2013, 03:10:55 AM »
Oooooh~

Looks interesting... And mysterious, too...

Nice poster! And I wonder what the pairing is... Any Takamina pair, but which one?

I can't wait for an update! Bye~ :heart:
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:heart: l Dropped: Tentomu chu l REBORN l Bite me l NMB Gakuen l YumeToki l Cafe 48 l :heart: l Hiatus/Indefinite: Samurai l Blood Bonds l Night Wind's Deed l PRISM l Time Travelers l :heart:
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Re: Traces.
« Reply #2 on: August 11, 2013, 04:01:19 AM »
Oh... Mysterious...

Is it a thrill or horror...?

Minami as the main...

Can't wait to see how the story going to develop

Thank you for the interesting start

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Re: Traces.
« Reply #3 on: August 11, 2013, 04:09:44 AM »
Hope this could be an Atsumina >w<

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Re: Traces.
« Reply #4 on: August 11, 2013, 04:49:29 AM »
It sounds mysterious...It's quite interesting!!~
-I wonder, is that a nightmare or her imagination...
-Maybe, it did happened...Oh, surely is mysterious...
-From what i know, Minami is the main character in here...
-Who'll be supporting Minami on the back?
-Who'll accompany her through that mysterious alley??
-Or will the next location take place to another location??

>Can't wait for it, plz update soon!!~ Looking forward to the next one!!~

PS: AtsuMina?? Onegaii~~ (>/\<)

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Re: Traces.
« Reply #5 on: August 12, 2013, 11:37:48 AM »
This seems really interesting.
I wonder what happened with Takamina there. :dunno:
I'm kind of hoping the pairing will be TakaYuu but that's just my bias. :shy1:
Anyway keep up the good work can't wait to see where this goes.  :on GJ:

Set by Mei.ka~ on Hello Online
My AKB Oneshots Thread
My H!P Oneshots Thread
Love Can Be A Complicated Feeling (TakaYuu + Multiple Pairings)
Love's Handler (WMatsui, MaYuki, TakaYuu)
H!P Pairings I like: Suberies, MaaDuu, KarinTomo, TakaGaki, IshiYoshi, MomoChii, FukuAkari, YajiSuzu, TakeTamu, NatsuMomo, IikuDawa, TanaKame, KameShige, TanaShige, GakiPon, SayaSuzu, SakuSuzu, PinPon

AKB Pairings I like: TakaYuu, WMatsui, SayaCchu, YuiParu, AtsuHaru, TanoHira, MaYuki, MariHaru, TomoTomo, SaeYaka, AtsuYuu, AtsuMii, SayaMilky, KumiNon, FuruYanagi, MioMeru, SasshiLove, SakurAnna, ChiHaru

~All time favorite H!P member: Eripon~MM: Eripon, Maa-chan, Sakura, Chel, Ayumin, Yokoyan~Angerme: Murotan, Funakki, Rikako, Kawamuu, Kamiko, ~J=J: Sayubee, Ruu-chan, Yanamin~CG: Yamakki, Funakki~KF: Hama-chan, MinaMina~TF: Risamaru, Anmi, OnoMizu, Kisora~Kenshuusei: Yuhane, Kirara, Eguchin, Nanacchi, Okamura~Hokkaido Kenshuusei: Minorin, Mei, Yume~

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Re: Traces.
« Reply #6 on: August 12, 2013, 08:28:54 PM »
@TTLuver497: Thank you <3 The pair is now revealed with the second poster (and with this update :p )
@cisda83: It's a bit of both! Thank you ! ^-^
@abcari: I guess you'll be happy then  with this update :D
@Kochiki: Thank you, and yes for atsumina :D ! The answers on those questions will get clearer as the story developes :3
@Ambenya: Thank you :3 Sorry no TakaYuu as main, BUT they're best friends so there will be moments :D



Chapter 1


So... it was all just a dream...?

Takahashi Minami;
Let me introduce myself first. Hi, my name is Takahashi Minami and I'm 18 years old. I'm an introverted girl though when I need to defend myself, I won't be so introverted anymore. I have a few friends though I can only talk about anything close to my heart to Yuko. I'm currently studying in Tokyo at Majiyo. This school I'm attending is … weird. I don't know what it is though. I've been attending this school for a few years already so I guess I got used to the feeling. 

'Everybody, can I have your attention?' As I got pulled out of my thoughts I slowly lifted up my head towards our teacher who was now standing in front of our class with a seemingly new girl next to her. The girl faced the ground as if she was scared to meet her new classmates.
'Pfft... She wont stay long, I bet she'll change schools before the end of next week!' My friend, Yuko, Told me. I looked at her for a second before nodding and turning my attention on the new girl again. 'We have a new student, please take care of her. Miss Maeda, introduce yourself please.'
'Ano … My name is Atsuko Maeda, please take care of me...' The girl who aparently is named Atsuko said in a hushed voice.
'Ms Maeda, you can go sit on the free place next to the window.
'Heh I though that seat was used by that Yokoyama girl?' Whispered Yuko. 'I thought so too but I guess she won't be coming anymore. I haven't seen her in weeks.' I whispered back. Yokoyama Yui was also a new student at our school.
She started 4 months ago but ever since she got in trouble with the headmasters daughter, I haven't seen her anymore. She was probably sent to another school. The thing that's strange is that none of her friends have heard anything about her anymore exept for a message saying; 'Goodbye, I had fun.' Her friends thought she made new friends at her new school and she wouldn't want anything to do with them anymore.
'Takamina, look!' As I let my thoughts behind me, I looked at Yuko. 'What's it?' She pointed at where the new girl stood, just in front of her apointed seat.
She was staring at the seat like she'd seen a ghost. It didn't take that long before she finally sat down. 'Something's of with that girl...' I turn to Yuko again. 'Maybe...' For some reason I find her pretty interesting.

As the teacher started her lexture, I noticed my mind going of into that whirlpool of thoughts again. I suddenly remembered the dream I had a few days ago. I know it's suposed to be just a dream, but it felt so real.
Also, usually I'd forget about a nightmare but this one just wont leave my mind. Cold shivers run over me as I remember the old alley. For some reason it looked kind of familiar to me. Deciding it would be nothing important, I let it go.
I turned to my right and saw the new girl staring at me. The moment our eyes met, she smiled at me and turned back to the front. 'Why would--'
I snapped out of my thoughts because of the bell. It was time for lunch. I took my books and stuffed them back into my bag. I turned towards Yuko, to see if she was ready. She was still gathering her stuff so I told her I'd go ahead. As usual we ate at the rooftop, it was always peaceful there, nobody would disturb us.
We've been doing this ever since the first year. Since I didn't want to start to eat before Yuko was here, I looked at the beautiful scenery in front of me. Our school is surrounded by nature. There was a very beautiful garden too but only a few students know of it's existance.
As I observed the scenery, I suddenly saw the new girl, Atsuko walking there.
Something was off though, it looked like she was talking to someone but there was nobody beside her and she had no phone in her hands. 'Weird...' Just as I was about to turn around, she turned towards me and waved at me. Being a bit starteled, I just stared back at her untill she continued her way.
'Takamina, I think that maeda girl likes you!' I was so shocked that I jumped a little.
'Yuko, don't do that, will you? You scared the hell out of me.' She grinned. 'Too busy with staring at that girl to notice your best friend entering?'

TBC

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I hope you like this update ^-^
Sorry for the small update, I'll update with a bigger chapter soon!
Thank you all for the comments, I really appreciate it ~
And the pair; AtsuMina :D
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Re: Traces.
« Reply #7 on: August 12, 2013, 09:13:59 PM »
literally I scream "YEAAAH!! ATSUMINA!" hahahaha xD
this looks interesting~

Waiting more from this story :3

and thanks for the atsumina~

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Re: Traces.
« Reply #8 on: August 12, 2013, 09:19:52 PM »
iheartsaechan's here! heeey, I don't really use this account.. or I didn't until now.

I really love your story!! Please keep it going!!
It is a beautiful as your amazing and awesome graphics!!

Seeya on H!O.

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Re: Traces.
« Reply #9 on: August 12, 2013, 10:27:23 PM »
Literally, I EXPECTED the pair to be Atsumina. I predicted right.

Well, it definitely is mysterious. I wonder what happened to Yuihan.

Atsuko and Minami interaction. Things are about to go down. Can't wait. :twothumbs
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:heart: l Completed: Fire and Ice l Black Chocolate l My eternal blue rose l Dishonored l The Black Rose l Fruits of a Rose l Remnants l :heart:
:heart: l Dropped: Tentomu chu l REBORN l Bite me l NMB Gakuen l YumeToki l Cafe 48 l :heart: l Hiatus/Indefinite: Samurai l Blood Bonds l Night Wind's Deed l PRISM l Time Travelers l :heart:
:heart: l Collab threads: Sky&Ruka l Ruka&Michael l :heart:
 l Compilation thread: 48G New Gen l :heart:

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Re: Traces.
« Reply #10 on: August 13, 2013, 03:53:42 AM »
Yeah! atsumina!! :B.. Acchan is talking with a ghost right?

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Re: Traces.
« Reply #11 on: August 13, 2013, 07:14:26 AM »
Hm...Glad that it is AtsuMina~
-I see that Atsuko is a transfer student in that...school..
-Speaking of that...Yokoyama...Is that Yui?? Mehh...
-Why and what IS with that school?? Hm...
-I guess, this is mixed with mystery and horror??
-Who knows...Oh! Atsuko just waved at Minami right??
-What's this?? This is getting interesting...

>Plz update soon!!~ I can't wait for it!!~ Need to find more answer...Heheh~

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Re: Traces.
« Reply #12 on: August 13, 2013, 12:51:00 PM »
Yeah Atsumina...

I'm going to enjoy it lots more now...

Can't wait to see what happen next

Thank you...

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Re: Traces.
« Reply #13 on: August 14, 2013, 02:40:08 PM »
Judging from the protag AND the cover, it's pretty obvious it AtsuMina but who knows, maybe it might change OwO

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Re: Traces.
« Reply #14 on: September 01, 2013, 02:32:03 PM »
Hey, please continue this story! I can't wait for more.

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« Reply #15 on: September 01, 2013, 04:58:51 PM »
When I saw who your oshimen was, I thought it was going to turn to AtsuMayu... Damn. I guess I'm alone in this, huh Q.Q

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Re: Traces.
« Reply #16 on: September 01, 2013, 05:23:07 PM »
I see what you did thar~ interesting prologue
Dark, creepy, mysterious
 :ding: wooooo atsumina

keep it up!
btw  :welcome

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« Reply #17 on: September 01, 2013, 05:36:28 PM »
yey!new atsumina fic XD
Wahhhh pls update this soon? :on gay:

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Re: Traces.
« Reply #18 on: September 01, 2013, 07:08:03 PM »
whoah  :mon scare: acchan such a psyco  :stoned:
Yui and Acchan.. are they related to each other??  :mon dunno:
 :mon cigar: Cant wait for the next update..  :twothumbs


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