JPHiP Radio (8/200 @ 96 kbs)     Now playing: Guilty Gear Isuka - Push A Bush

Author Topic: Berry Beautiful [Volume 2]  (Read 113201 times)

Offline rokun

  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 1101
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 24: Mors Mordre]
« Reply #140 on: October 26, 2007, 12:50:07 PM »
Yay for you guys thinking of Buffy! :D Yes, I like that show too much and now it's seeping into my writing... LoL. I just :heart: Willow so much that when Miyabi started heading that way I couldn't help but throw some of that in...

As to the results of Miya's hocus pocus... we'll have to wait and see. One immediate result you can see already is that Saki is a little concerned about Miya coughing up a snake. :lol: Among other things... She's the more mature one, and thinks of things like opening the door, so she might do her best to try and keep Miya grounded... something that might be hard to do since Miya is realizing exactly how much she can do...

For the relationships, I can't say anything specific or it'd be no fun to find out what happens :P, but I will say I :heart: MiyaSaki quite a lot... Saki's been through a lot, and Miya's always been there for her, even though she doesn't act terribly mature all the time (all that Socko influence :roll:). Now that Miya will be going through quite a bit of her own... it'll be interesting to see how she turns out.

For more technical things, at the very end I think Miya was trying for a bit of lightness to contrast with what they've just been through.. Of course, after what had just happened to her, it might be hard not to think of some things... Interesting her seeming indifference to Risako fainting though. :)

Offline g4rfield

  • Yocchan is my chan~
  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 316
  • I belong to a religion called Yossy-ism
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 24: Mors Mordre]
« Reply #141 on: October 26, 2007, 06:46:46 PM »
Quote from: rokun link=topic=10667.msg#msg date=
...Interesting her seeming indifference to Risako fainting though. :)
Yeah, interesting. My guts told me it's gonna be MiyaSaki after all.  :D

Offline rokun

  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 1101
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 24: Mors Mordre]
« Reply #142 on: October 26, 2007, 06:59:18 PM »
Yeah, interesting. My guts told me it's gonna be MiyaSaki after all.  :D
That's probably a good thought. ;) Although in a soap opera you can never say for sure what's gonna happen... After all, if Momo's back she's gotta be thrown into the mix too however she, er, winds up. :kekeke:

Offline chibilolli

  • Uh Wha?
  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 626
  • Gaki Gay Lord
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 24: Mors Mordre]
« Reply #143 on: October 26, 2007, 07:12:32 PM »
No, you can't do this too me. Is Momo gonna come back really different, like, someone who always gets what they want even if they have to be forceful about it?  Or evil or gahhhhhh!!!  :twisted:

UPDATE NOW DAMN NAMMIT!!!

*breathe, breathe*

Sorry I'm bored
« Last Edit: October 26, 2007, 08:39:28 PM by Lolli »

Offline rokun

  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 1101
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 24: Mors Mordre]
« Reply #144 on: October 26, 2007, 07:59:44 PM »
Lol yay for a little conversation in here! :D I'm bored at work late on a Friday afternoon too, so I'm writing, lol. I've already finished maybe half or so of the next chapter. My, things between (among?) Miya, Saki and Risako are... complicated...

I can't wait to see what happens if Momo turns up somewhere... :twisted:

modesta107

  • Guest
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 24: Mors Mordre]
« Reply #145 on: October 26, 2007, 08:07:23 PM »
I've already finished maybe half or so of the next chapter.

wow rokun, your a fast writer  :bow:

*prays that you never get a writer's block*

Offline g4rfield

  • Yocchan is my chan~
  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 316
  • I belong to a religion called Yossy-ism
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 24: Mors Mordre]
« Reply #146 on: October 26, 2007, 10:43:53 PM »
Kekekeke.....you aggravate me with those little hints of yours who seemed to go into a certain direction but of course as the case with all the teasers you'd deny every single thing I state to confirm those hints.   :banghead: DAMN IT! Finish that half of the chapter quick!! So I can calm my mind about MiyaSaki!!  :angry:

Well....actually part of me can't wait to see Momo came back wrong and stranded somewhere to make it worse.  :lol: I'm mean!  :twisted: But as you said, Saki is more mature than Miya so hopefully she can see that the Momo now is not the Momo she knew.

Aaah....I got ahead of myself. Who knows if that's what really gonna happen eh?  ;)

Offline rokun

  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 1101
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 25: The Veil of Reality]
« Reply #147 on: October 28, 2007, 12:52:35 AM »
Don't expect updates in two days like this often. :P But like I said, I wrote a lot of this yesterday afternoon, and now I'm content enough with it for posting. It's a fitting end to a day where I listened to the Dalai Lama speak...


Chapter 25

A short time later found Miyabi and Saki trudging into the hotel with Risako halfway supported between them. The girl was fully conscious, having woken up barely a minute after fainting, but also took full advantage of her plight to make the other two nearly act as her personal assistants. By the time they got back to the hotel, Miyabi was about to just drop her to the floor, but at a warning glance from Saki thought better of it. Still, both girls were happy to be rid of her weight once they found a couch to sit her on.

Risako laid back into it, holding the back of her hand to her forehead as if she’d just been through a horrible ordeal, and closed her eyes. “Miya, I hate you,” she said in a weary voice.

Miyabi exchanged glances with Saki and shrugged. “Fine,” she said. “Suits me. I wish you’d told me that before I dragged you the whole way back though. I would have stayed as far away as I could from you starting then.” The girl’s eyes opened below her fingers as she lifted her head a little to give Miyabi a cute glare. However, Miyabi just avoided her eyes and looked at her girlfriend, who was surveying the lobby. Miyabi did a quick sweep of it herself, and saw that it was nearly empty except for a man who looked as if he was napping on another couch and a desk clerk who frowned over at them. Well, more precisely, at them and the muddy trail they’d left from the door to the couch. She ignored that though. There were spots elsewhere too. They weren’t the only ones who had come in out of that mess outside! Granted, probably not many others had graveyard dirt…

“It’s late,” Saki said abruptly.

Miyabi stared at her. “Yep…” she began. “I was hoping it wouldn’t take so long, but through the rain and mud traipsing halfway across town and back again took quite a while…”

Saki stared back at her as if she was stupid. Miyabi blinked. Was there something on her face? “As well as the time it took for you to summon a demon and cough up a snake…” she corrected, and Miyabi blushed slightly. “But that’s not what I’m talking about. I mean… It’s late.” She pointed to a clock near the service desk.

Miyabi looked at it, squinting since she could hardly tell what it said. She’d been trying to put it off, but with all the reading she did, if this kept up she might have to get glasses… Finally she was able to comprehend what it said, and blinked, which made the hands all blurry again. She squinted once more to get a better look.

“No,” Saki said. “Your eyes aren’t that bad yet.” Miyabi frowned over at her. “It’s really nearly three in the morning.”

“But that can’t be,” Risako said, stirring from her self-induced slumber. “We only left at around seven. There’s no way we were there for…” Her eyes went out of focus and her lips moved as if she was counting in her head. Miyabi sighed. “…seven hours!”

“That’s almost eight hours, dear,” Miyabi said unthinkingly, and ignoring the younger girl’s angry pout looked over at Saki, who was looking back carefully. “But she’s right. It’s not been that long. That explains why we have no welcoming crew though…” Saki nodded slowly, still studying Miyabi. For some reason Risako was doing the same now, whatever was going on in her head forgotten. Miyabi fell into thought herself.

Of course nobody to her knowledge had done a resurrection ritual like she just had – nobody recently at least, since according to that demon they’d been called upon in the past. Hmm… she thought to herself. They would be the right word, wouldn’t it? The demon had referred to itself in the plural. Aside from the creepiness factor, it made her wonder if she really saw what she thought she saw. There must have been more than one of… whatever they were. She’d known she would be calling on something, but she thought it would be some kind of green and frolicky forest nymph or some such pretty thing – not the devil incarnate like she saw. The idea worried her slightly that she might be getting into something a little darker than she expected, but shook out of it when she realized she was becoming sidetracked.

Nobody had done such a ritual in recent years, but she heard of cases where people doing rituals, especially summoning rituals, crossed for a moment into a dimension that… wasn’t quite of this world. After coming out of these rituals, people would notice that literally no time had passed since they started, so that it was like what they did was a dream that never actually happened. Others, in rarer cases, reported that more time passed than should have – days in some instances where the ritual had taken only hours. Occult scholars thought this might be due to time moving differently in dimensions aside from the one people normally occupied. There was little substantiation to this though – all these reports seemed to be second-hand. Nobody actually claimed doing these things themselves. She smiled. Well, it seemed that now she could. She suddenly looked even more forward to putting up a new blog entry. Then, everybody would know that Miyabi Natsuyaki of Gakushuin…

“Miya!” Risako snapped, effectively snapping Miyabi out of her train of thought. She blinked a few times and looked at her two companions, both of whom stared at her. Saki’s face expressed primarily concern, though there was something else in it too… But Risako frowned at her, her hands in her lap now, her mock illness apparently completely and conveniently forgotten.

“That’s the last time I carry you anywhere,” she told the girl, who widened her eyes in surprise. “What is it?” she asked irritably.

“You spaced out,” Saki said in a tight voice. “It looked like you got… lost in your own little world…”

Looking back into the beautiful and petite girl’s eyes, Miyabi understood. Just because she vomited a snake and had a conversation with a burning crystal ball everybody thought she was going mad. Well she wasn’t! “I was just thinking about time,” she said. Trying to revive that train of thought, she remembered the storm that had appeared inside the vault they performed the ritual in. “I think we summoned another dimension, which we were pulled into for a few minutes.” Her friends stared uncomprehendingly back at her. “The storm clouds in the vault?” she offered. “That’s not something that would normally happen.”

“No,” Saki said, getting a hint that Miyabi might finally be about to explain something. “It definitely isn’t,” she finished quietly. “Although I’d throw the storm clouds outside into that mix too. Wasn’t it convenient how they gathered despite the forecasts right as we were set to go out? And then seemed to dissipate right when… you… finished… whatever it was you were doing?” Her emphasis on the word identifying Miyabi reminded her that these girls only thought they were along for the ride – she was the one actually crossing over lines, she admitted, that might best not be crossed.

Miyabi thought again. The girl had a point. However, she didn’t need that bit of info to make her point. “Sure, whatever!” she said. “Anyway, I think we were pulled a little bit into another dimension – the underworld maybe? – where time passes differently. So we might have just experienced a few minutes where a few hours actually passed…”

The two girls stayed silent as if absorbing this hypothesis. Saki looked like she accepted it, coming to realizations that it explained many things, but Risako’s expression quickly changed from thoughtfulness to terror again. “Oh no!” she exclaimed. “So you’re saying I’ve lost hours of my life? And that I’ve been to the… the underworld?! I’m too young to die!”

This time she even got Saki to stare at her. However, since her Captain was apparently thinking clearer she said, while still staring at Risako, “So… we went into another… dimension?” Her eyes shifted back to Miyabi. “I hope you know I have no idea what you’re talking about.”

Miyabi lowered her eyes. “Whether you do or not, that must be what happened,” she said quietly.

Saki took a step toward her, becoming very close, and looked up into Miyabi’s eyes. “I want to understand, though…”

Looking back into that angelic face, with its hair still wet and bangs plastered to her forehead, Miyabi couldn’t resist any longer. She didn’t want to resist, Risako and the public place be damned. She put her hands on Saki’s waist and pulled the girl into her, leaning down quickly to kiss her lips. Saki froze at first in surprise, but as Miyabi became more insistent she seemed to get lost in the moment.

It was a wonderful feeling to contrast with the rest of the night, but it was cut off all too abruptly with a quiet cough from opposite Risako. Quickly, Saki pulled away, blushing and keeping her eyes down now, while Miyabi turned narrowed eyes on the intruder.

“Excuse me…” It was the clerk from the front desk who spoke, shifting nervously from foot to foot and doing his best not to look directly at them. Apparently he wasn’t quite comfortable with himself watching two schoolgirls kiss. He began again with a nervous but droning voice, as if he were reading from a book. A boring book. “Please do not perform public displays of affection in the lobby. You… you have rooms, right? Please return there to… continue.”

Miyabi looked around the lobby. The man on the couch was still sleeping – snoring in fact – and obviously oblivious to anything that happened, and aside from him and the clerk they were alone. She raised an eyebrow, but the clerk didn’t budge.

“We’re sorry,” Saki said quietly. “We’ll go upstairs.”

Miyabi turned to her girlfriend in surprise, but she just tried to wiggle a bit more out of Miyabi’s grasp, her eyes still cast down. A glance over at Risako showed the young girl staring straight ahead into nothing with her lips pursed. “Right,” Miyabi agreed. “We’ll go up.” Careful to keep her arm around Saki’s waist – she didn’t want to let the girl go again – she started walking with her to the elevator. After a short deliberation the polite side of her won, and she turned her head to call back, “Risako! You coming?” The girl turned frosty eyes on her before slowly rising. Once up, she also glared at the clerk, who scurried quickly away, before following Miyabi and Saki. However, she still held the gap that already formed between them and walked a short distance behind.

“What are you doing Miya?” Saki asked in a low voice as they walked. It was plainly low enough that Risako wouldn’t be able to hear.

“What are you talking about?” Miyabi replied, still staring ahead but smiling thinking of the girl firmly in her grasp at her side.

“You’re rubbing it in a little hard to Risako, aren’t you?”

This caught Miyabi’s attention more closely, and she turned to look down at Saki. “What do you mean? Is it a crime to want to be close to my girlfriend?”

“I’m not an idiot, Miya,” the smaller girl responded, but didn’t say anymore as they arrived at the elevator. She pushed the button for ‘up’, and as they waited Risako arrived behind them. Miyabi wondered if she should look back, but then decided against it.

With as empty as the hotel halls were this late at night the elevator arrived quickly, and the girls all stepped in. This time they were forced to look at least a little at Risako, though the girl no longer seemed upset. Instead, she looked thoughtfully at the pair.

“You two look cute together, you know,” she said, and even donned a small smile. Miyabi felt slightly taken aback in surprise. “Since it looks like we’re gonna be here awhile, I wish I could invite my boyfriend over. We could have a double date!”

Miyabi peered at her disbelievingly. She was thankful her boyfriend was… well, he’s her classmate, so he must be thirteen or so too, right? Anyway, she was thankful he couldn’t come here. Because a… double date… would be a blast. However, she realized this was a perfect opportunity to convert Saki a bit more. “That’s too bad…” she said, with as much regret as she could muster. “It might be fun. Although, Saki-chan and I do like our private time to be… well… private.”

Risako blinked at her. “Well of course,” she said, looking at a loss. “I didn’t mean…”

“Will you two please stop it?” Saki asked in a quiet voice. There was virtually no authority in it, but Miyabi suddenly felt no desire to break the silence, and Risako looked the same. Saki looked up between them. “Aren’t you the least bit… concerned… about what happened tonight?”

Miyabi swallowed, and Risako lowered her eyes, looking chagrined. They were once again saved by the door opening though, and after seeming as if surprised they were still in an elevator, the girls walked out into the hall. Risako quickly took her leave of the other two and slid her card into her door upon arriving at it, leaving Miyabi and Saki to walk on. Miyabi could almost feel the tension in the air between them as she opened their own door.

Once inside, Saki announced she was going to take a bath, and as she headed toward the washroom Miyabi asked in what she hoped was a casual voice and a smile if she could join. Saki barely gave her a glance back before she disappeared into the room and closed the door behind her.

After they both finished bathing, Miyabi sat on the bed brushing her hair while Saki lay seemingly asleep. That was how Miyabi had found her after finishing her own bath. She was curious that the girl didn’t want to talk any more since she seemed concerned about what happened tonight, but it was late… They would likely have to wake up within a few hours’ time. However, as Miyabi was fighting a particularly tough tangle, she felt the other girl stir.

“Miya…” Saki said in a voice that showed she was plainly wide awake. She immediately disengaged the brush from her hair and turned to her lover, eager to hear whatever she might have to say.

“Yeah?” she responded.

“I’m sorry it didn’t work tonight,” Saki continued in a melancholy voice.

“What didn’t work?” Miyabi asked.

“The…” Saki began. “The thing you did. You know, with the storm. And… the snake. I know you, well, put a lot into it.”

Miyabi still stared cluelessly at her. “What are you talking about? It worked fine.” She furrowed her brows. “I think…”

Saki finally turned to look up at her with a puzzled expression. “What? What are you talking about? Nothing happened…”

Miyabi stared at her a moment before coming to a realization. “Oh… oh!” she said. “You didn’t see the demon!”

“Demon?” Saki asked in a neutral voice.

“Yeah, the demon in the globe. I talked to, er, it, and asked it to raise Momo. And it said it did.”

Saki looked at her unblinkingly. Miyabi held her gaze steadily, though after a while in the uncomfortable silence the corners of her mouth turned up and she gave Saki a toothy grin, raising her eyebrows in an attempt to look interesting. Eventually the girl pulled herself up into a sitting position, keeping eye contact with her the whole time. Then, without any further comment, she laid her hands on Miyabi’s shoulders and leaned in to kiss her. Miyabi was caught somewhat off-guard, but definitely not minding the turn of events, kissed her back. Saki’s hands slid around to her back, holding her as if she was desperate not to let her go, and Miyabi’s arms slid around the girl’s slim waist as well as she was kissed with an underlying passion that might even outdo some of their previous encounters.

For the first while Miyabi thought she might be fantasizing – this was definitely too good to be true, especially for tonight – but before long she just got lost in the moment. However, just when she found herself wanting more, Saki took her mouth away from her own. The girl still held her very closely, but she looked up into Miyabi’s eyes as if searching for something.

“Miiya~” she cooed. Miyabi tried to listen through her still hotly running blood and Saki’s breath which still fell warm against her face. “There are no demons… There are no other dimensions… Miya, Momo…” she swallowed as if it was hard to say herself. “Momo is dead. She’s not coming back…”

This time Miyabi heard the girl’s words clearly through the emotional fog she was in. “Yes there are,” she responded. “Well I mean, I didn’t really know before tonight since only second-hand accounts were posted online, but tonight proved it. I talked to the demon and, well, the dimensional theory explains how long it took, doesn’t it?”

She’d hardly finished before Saki kissed her again, this time even harder than before. Miyabi widened her eyes before they rolled back in her head and her eyelids slid shut. She could definitely get used to this…

However, once again the girl pulled away earlier than Miyabi would have liked. This time she kept the fingers of one of her small hands tangled in Miyabi’s hair, caressing it gently. “Miyabi…” she looked at her moving fingers while she spoke. “You weren’t talking to anyone.”

“Yes I was…” Miyabi said, this time with annoyance breaking through the things this girl was making her feel. “You didn’t see it because you weren’t looking at the front of the globe. And Momo is back… somewhere…” She gazed determinedly into Saki’s eyes as she talked, and when she finished slid out of her arms and beneath the blankets, turning away from her. She couldn’t believe it. Saki didn’t believe her… She knew it was a strange tale, but she’s seen things other people haven’t. She knew what happened. As she lay there, Saki sat up a little longer, looking down at her. “You saw what happened,” she told the wall. “You saw the ceiling of the vault and the globe catching flame and floating. The snake… If that happened, is it so hard to believe me about the rest too?” She was almost crying now.

She felt her girlfriend move beside her, and after a few seconds arms carefully wrapped around her sides and Saki snuggled against her from behind. “Okay,” she said from close to her ear. “So maybe there are demons. But Momo didn’t come back… Momo isn’t coming back, Miya.” Miyabi felt her hair moisten with the girl’s tears, which now matched her own.



They woke in the morning to a loud knock on the door. When Miyabi opened her eyes, she noticed that half of her was draped over the other girl, who smiled sleepily up at her. She blushed a little before rolling over and sliding out of the bed, taking a robe from the arm of a chair and pulling it on before stumbling over to the door.

When she opened it, she was surprised to see the other four Berryz members waiting outside, fully dressed. “Um… good morning?” she greeted.

Yurina was at the front, and she craned her neck to see into the room, where she noticed Saki still lying in the middle of the bed. “Is she in there?” Chinami asked. Yurina nodded. Then Chinami looked at Miyabi. “We want to talk to you two.”

“Um… okay,” Miyabi said, and with a little self-consciousness for her current fashion and a glance back at Saki, who nodded and sat up in the bed, pulling the covers up over her, opened the door fully to let them in.

The other girls all filed in as Miyabi rejoined Saki on the bed. Maasa and Chinami took the available chairs, with Yurina leaning against the wall and Risako standing further back from them all near the wall as well, staying silent but watching everything closely.

“We’re starting some rehearsals later this morning,” Yurina said with a cheery voice, breaking up the slightly uncomfortable silence. “I guess they’re gonna try to get things back to normal. The… funeral… is on Thursday, and we’ll be having concerts again next weekend…” She ended much less optimistic than she started, and the silence began again.

While it continued, Miyabi looked at the others’ faces. Yurina seemed about as uncomfortable as she felt, and darted glances at the girls with her. Chinami always kept her eyes on Miyabi and Saki, who just stared up at the ceiling with an odd smile as if nothing interesting was happening. Maasa looked coolly at everyone.

Finally, Chinami spoke up. “Before we start rehearsal…” she said, “We wanted to talk to you two about… you two.” She glanced at the girls with her as she spoke for support. However, she didn’t seem to have a whole lot. This time she even got Saki to look over at her too. She swallowed. “I dunno if I’m very... comfortable… with you two, er, dating. And I mean,” she started to look nervous again, but couldn’t keep her eyes off Saki, who leaned toward her as if to hear her better. “You’re also sleeping in the same room, and the same bed…” She looked around again.

“I just think it’s awesome,” Maasa said with a big grin, making Miyabi’s face reflect the same.

“Miya, Captain…” Yurina began, a bit more serious. “You know I love both of you, but now that both of you are… in love…?” Miyabi blushed at that, and she imagined Saki did as well. She gave a glance to Chinami, who nodded sharply. “Well, I don’t know what I think of it. I mean, you’re two of our leaders… Of course,” she said, looking at Saki, “You’re our Captain. And Miya, you know we look up to you when we perform. I just don’t know what to think of things now…”

“What’s there to think of?” Miyabi asked, puzzled. “Nothing’s changed. We’re the same Berryz as always. Well, almost…” The faces of all the girls fell at that. “Speaking of that,” Miyabi began with a little anger. “I see nobody’s asking about last night.”

This time Chinami and Maasa exchanged glances, and Yurina frowned at the two of them. Risako kept quietly studying them all like she had been since walking in while now leaning back against the wall like Yurina. “Um… how did it go?” asked Maasa, and Miyabi noticed the skepticism in her voice.

“A snake came out of Miya,” Risako interjected. Miyabi glared at her.

“What?” Yurina asked. Chinami looked between the two of them with wide eyes.

“A snake came out of her mouth,” Risako repeated, pushing off the wall and walking forward, her eyes glued to Miyabi’s. “And she’s convinced she resurrected Momoko.” Chinami gasped at that, and Yurina’s eyes widened.

“Im… impossible!” Chinami stuttered, plainly frightened again.

“Of course it is,” said Saki, who spoke up for the first time. Miyabi looked over her shoulder, but the girl had come up behind her and now wrapped her arms around her waist, resting her own head on her shoulder. Miyabi blushed at the action in front of everyone. “Now can we get back to the more important business of Miya and I doing naughty things?” she said with a grin. The other girls looked at her with various expressions of shock as if she was mad. All except Maasa of course.

However, before any of them could comment on that, there came a rapid knock on the door. “What!” Miyabi exclaimed. “Is this ‘Bother Miya and Saki’ morning?!” However, she didn’t have to get up for the door because Risako turned around and walked over to open it. In front of it stood several of the tour staff. Upon seeing them, Saki quickly pulled back from Miyabi and needlessly straightened her shirt. They all looked very excited.

“You’re all here!” said a Miss Takakubo. “That’s wonderful! Now you can all hear the wonderful news together.” Risako let them in, and they all beamed at the girls.

“We just heard from Tokyo management,” said Mr. Nakato, smiling at faces of young girls that stared curiously back, plainly struggling with dealing with the quick and crazy start to the morning. “Apparently their earlier reports were mistaken! They’ve just managed to locate Tsugunaga-san. She was a little dusty, but her healthiness for being trapped in the wreckage for who knows how long is quite amazing! I’m sure she’ll tell you all about it when she sees you, though. She’s spending today and tomorrow with her family, but wants to join up with us as soon as possible again. Isn’t that wonderful?”

The girls were no longer paying attention to him though. In fact, Miyabi wasn’t sure if she even heard his last words right. Upon hearing Momoko’s name, a very broad smile indeed had come to her face, and even though she was staring off into space, she knew all the other girls were looking at her with wide eyes too. “Yeah,” she said, giving a little twist to a corner of her mouth in sarcasm. “That’s incredible…”

modesta107

  • Guest
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 25: The Veil of Reality]
« Reply #148 on: October 28, 2007, 01:59:53 AM »
Aww, poor Risako.  Dammit Miya, she should have waited to kiss Saki when Socko wasn't there. Very awkard moment.

Miya and Saki's  'momentsss'  are getting more mature. But of course we can expect that since they are teenagers. 

and I just love how Maasa is the only one who is supportive of them.

 :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart:
 
Momo is alive!!!

Offline Amarghetta

  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 722
  • The likeness of a human
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 25: The Veil of Reality]
« Reply #149 on: October 28, 2007, 02:02:06 AM »
Cocky, witchy Miya FTW!!!  :rockon:

Offline g4rfield

  • Yocchan is my chan~
  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 316
  • I belong to a religion called Yossy-ism
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 25: The Veil of Reality]
« Reply #150 on: October 28, 2007, 02:33:03 AM »
 :bath: Finally...some more mature 'interaction' between Miya and Saki. Thank you very much. Keep 'em coming please! :grin: Now that Momo is back to the circle I can't wait to see what sort of complication and/or destruction she would bring. :ding: You're a Buffy fan so...could it be that Momo is back and have her body possessed by one of those demons? No wish to the Underworld will be granted with so much as coughing a snake out of your mouth. Naaah, I don't believe she'd get off that easy.

Regarding Risako tho' she seems to put on a mask, at least temporarily.  I wonder if you're gonna have Miya confront Risako about that 'little problem' they have any time soon.  :shifty: 

Maasa is waaaay comfortable with the lesbianism eh? Maybe she had dabbled or thinking about it herself.   :twisted: More writing materials for you if you haven't already thinking of it, Rokun.  :grin:

Offline meowz

  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 69
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 25: The Veil of Reality]
« Reply #151 on: October 28, 2007, 09:09:44 AM »
I don't really read berryz fics but this just keeps getting more interesting by the chapter.
If momo comes back wrong, I imagine she could be obsessed with snatching saki from miyabi or maybe hellbent on revenge on saki for rejecting(?) her. Kinda like those horror flicks! lol!  XD

Offline chibilolli

  • Uh Wha?
  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 626
  • Gaki Gay Lord
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 25: The Veil of Reality]
« Reply #152 on: November 06, 2007, 10:55:38 PM »
Wow Rokun. This fic is going from strengh to strengh :D

I loved all the Miya / Saki moments :heart: and now that Risako isn't too bothered about them that's great aswell.

Momo's back dun, dun, dun! Will she be evil though? When will we find out??? (I can't wait)

-prods you for next chapter-

Offline rokun

  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 1101
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 25: The Veil of Reality]
« Reply #153 on: November 07, 2007, 04:26:34 PM »
Hey Lolli! I wondered where you'd run off to! :lol: You go to Japan again? Thanks for your comments everyone! Sorry it's taking a while for the next chapter... work is still slow, but I just haven't felt like writing much the past week or two, lol. Plus, I need to figure out how to bring them all back together again. I think once I do that I'll have plenty of material, but it's blocking me a little atm. XD

@ g4rfield: As far as your comments about Buffy, Miya has set herself up quite nicely, hasn't she? :) A slight problem was beginning even before Momo "died", and now... Plus, I think of Maasa as just a cool chick who is just well, cool, and excited by anything that's a little different (yet awesome). Add in a pestering inquisitive nature... Of course, this isn't to say she doesn't mind experiences like that herself, I mean she's obviously getting maybe even a little too interested in Miya's escapades... but she just loves anything that's fun. Yurina's also pretty similar in keeping an open mind - she might be a little more hesitant about approving of things, but she doesn't reject them out of hand. I'm curious to see what her role will be in the future. With Miya, Saki, Risako and Momo getting all tangled up, someone's gonna have to step in, and I sure don't think it's gonna be Chinami! :lol:

To Lolli, meowz (thanks for reading! :D), and modesta's comments... I think Risako is dealing with a lot right now. Saki knows a bit of what's going on between her and Miya, and I wonder how much Miya is actually realizing herself. Risako just has... interesting defense mechanisms. :lol: As for evil Momo... I'll just say it might be interesting when they all get back together again. :)

Oh, I might also try to get back to more "normal" chapter names. :lol: I let my fancy take over a little bit too much in this story I think... lol.
« Last Edit: November 07, 2007, 04:28:20 PM by rokun »

Offline chibilolli

  • Uh Wha?
  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 626
  • Gaki Gay Lord
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 25: The Veil of Reality]
« Reply #154 on: November 07, 2007, 05:01:20 PM »
Sorry Rokun. I didn't go back to Japan :lol: I just space out every now and again (my mind is all over the place lately). Glad you think of me :D

I can understand why you have writers block. I couldn't even try to come up with a way to get them all back together. Oh, and please don't go back to normal chapter names. I love the ones you use :wub:

Offline rokun

  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 1101
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 26: Hello! My Name is Momoko]
« Reply #155 on: December 06, 2007, 01:18:32 PM »
Well it's been a long time - and I thought it was even longer than the month or so it's been! - but I finally was able to put out the next Berry Beautiful chapter! :) If anyone forgets what's going on, please feel free to read at least the last few chapters or so. Don't really have much to say, except on with the story!


Chapter 26

“You’re never gonna let us live this down, are you Miya?” Chinami asked as the girls stretched before a mid-week rehearsal. There was tangible excitement in the air since today was the day Momoko was on her way to join them in Nagoya.

They actually were supposed to have left the city by now, but because of the cancelled concerts the previous weekend, they pushed back their schedule slightly and now had Friday and Saturday performances coming up that they were hurriedly preparing for. The excitement over the weekend, and even at the beginning of the week after the Monday morning announcement of Momoko’s miraculous reappearance, rather precluded chances of getting much rehearsing done on those days. Thus, here they were late on Thursday morning with a long day still ahead of them. Gladly it would at least be broken up around lunchtime once Momoko arrived.

“Let me think…” Miyabi replied in a thoughtful tone. “Nope,” she said, after having obviously not thought at all. She rose to her toes and stretched her hands high above your head.

“You know, you look really sexy stretched like that,” Saki said from a few steps away, pausing in her own warm-ups to tilt her head while appraising her.

Miyabi quickly dropped back down to her heels and crossed her arms as if hugging herself, blushing fiercely at the girl’s public comment. Whenever she got on her high horse too much since that morning, her girlfriend just as often had some tease or comment to bring her back down. Although, nothing had been quite as… brazen!... as this. It even seemed to make Chinami blush.

The other girls had been quiet about their relationship since Momoko’s revelation, as if scared to bring up the topic again. Miyabi thought Chinami for one was actually scared of her. She wasn’t sure what she thought about that. The only one who seemed as natural as ever was Maasa, who came to her every morning for news of what had happened with the two of them the previous night.

Disappointingly for Miyabi’s too-curious friend though, the past few days she had little to report. Miyabi had essentially put Saki into the doghouse for not believing her, and refused to even hug her. The only reason she let the girl still sleep in the same bed was because of how… pleasantly… she had gone about not believing her. Still, Miyabi wondered how much of the girl’s teasings now had to do with that frustration, and wondered how long she’d keep it up. Maybe Momoko returning would be a good time to put it to rest. She didn’t want to give Saki reason to feel like looking elsewhere for comfort, after all. At that thought her jealousy flared up again and she began getting a little upset.

“Why thank you, Captain,” she said, being careful to use the girl’s title. “I’m glad I’m impressing someone at least.” She gave Chinami a toothy grin, who ducked her eyes once again.

“Miya, are you torturing Chii-chan again?” Yurina asked, walking over in her flaming orange sweat suit. Miyabi could barely look at the girl for fear of being blinded by it. “Just give it a rest. Everybody admits you were right and believes you now, so do you really have to rub it in all the time?”

“Yeah!” Chinami contributed, giving her a pouting look. “Be nicer to us! Captain, make her be nice!”

Miyabi looked to her Captain, who was observing the exchange silently. No matter how she steeled herself up, whenever she looked into the girl’s expressive face she melted at its cuteness and sweetness. Maybe she really was pushing too far… She made a note to definitely make it up to Saki tonight.

“No need for that,” Miyabi responded with an apologetic lilt in her voice. “Ok, I’ll be nicer. But if you doubt me again I’ll turn you into a toad,” she said with a grin. Chinami’s eyes opened wide again, but Yurina seemed to relax and began laughing. “Yo Rii-chan!” Miyabi yelled over her shoulder, and the named girl stumbled in one of her stretches. “What do you think? Is that what she’d be?”

The shared joke between them all with this was that last night, the youngest Berry had been particularly whiny after one of their rehearsal sessions. They all were sore after practicing hard for the first time in virtually weeks, and the girl was pushing it to the point that even Saki was becoming frustrated with her. Miyabi meanwhile had been practicing her mystic art more and more since the confidence she gained after Momoko’s apparently successful resurrection, as well as since she did not spend as much of her free time with Saki. She was eager to try out one of the new spells she’d studied, but hadn’t had an opportunity where she was sure people wouldn’t get angry with her for it.

Risako’s childish alienation of the rest seemed just the fitting time. While Saki was trying unsuccessfully to soothe her with calm words, she mumbled the incantation under her breath and Risako suddenly became the animal whose spirit her own most resembled. She became a pure white mouse.

After the initial shock of the girl’s even higher-pitched than normal squeaks of protest and complaint and some wide-eyed looks to Miyabi, she’d assured the rest of the girls it wouldn’t last more than a few seconds, and sure enough almost right then the youngest of them was once again sitting in their midst, if with her own wide-eyed expression of horror on her face, and they started laughing. Yurina and Maasa had even patted Miyabi’s shoulder at her effort toward taming the girl, who strangely didn’t whine again the rest of the night. In fact, she avoided Miyabi completely, something she didn’t mind in the slightest. Their other recent encounters had not been the most pleasant.

“I…” Risako began back in the present. “I need to use the washroom.” And she hurried out into the hall.

“I’m starting to get a little worried, Miya,” Yurina said. “Rii-chan has undoubtedly been more pleasant to be around since your little trick last night, but I wonder if the whole experience hasn’t scarred her somehow.”

Saki walked up to Miyabi, who decided not to object to Yurina’s description of her “trick”, and looking after where Risako had run off said softly, “You should talk to her, Miya. I don’t know if there’s much any of us can do. I think…” She hesitated as if a little reluctant to go on. “I think it’s only you that’s affecting her now.”

As Miyabi looked down into her girlfriend’s earnest and resolved face, she breathed in deeply as if to sigh, but didn’t. “All right…” she said, grumbling slightly. “I’ll go talk to her…” And with that, she headed toward the door herself.

“Natsuyaki-san,” Ms. Kobayashi, their current drill instructor, called as she was nearly through the door. “If you go somewhere, please don’t take too long. We’re starting rehearsal in three minutes sharp. Also, if you see Sugaya-san, please tell her to return as well.”

“Yes, Ma’am,” Miyabi said quickly with a nod and smile over to her friends, and ducked swiftly out into the hall.

It didn’t take her too long to find Risako, who was leaning over for a drink at a fountain. Huh. It looked like she really had gone to the washroom. When Miyabi tapped her shoulder though, the younger girl jumped as if somebody had grabbed her and tried to kidnap her.

“Oh…” she said weakly. “Miya…”

“Hi Rii-chan,” Miyabi said, and her eyes began floating around randomly at the awkwardness as well.

“I’d better get back to rehearsal,” Risako said, and keeping her head low, moved as if to head in that direction.

“Wait,” Miyabi said in a louder voice, and this time she did grab the girl’s sleeve. Risako froze at her touch, but didn’t look back at her. “I wanted to, er, talk to you…” she said.

“Are you sure this can’t wait?” Risako said without turning around. “Kobayashi-sensei will be hard on us if we’re late.”

“No,” Miyabi said, becoming more confident in herself. “I need to… I want to talk to you now.”

She didn’t hear anything, but could sense that Risako sighed silently at her request, and turned to look soberly into her face. “What is it, Miya?” she asked in a much too quiet voice.

Miyabi swallowed dryly. “I… I’m sorry about last night…” she said. “I shouldn’t have done that. I was too overcome by childishness and my desire to experiment.”

“You’re right,” Risako responded, her voice still quiet. “You shouldn’t have done that. Do you have any idea how that felt?” The girl now was looking earnestly into Miyabi’s eyes, and her own were even becoming moist. For some reason, it tore at Miyabi’s heart.

“I felt like I was so small… and helpless. Everything around me seemed gigantic and dangerous. I think I was more terrified than I’ve ever been.” Miyabi stared at the girl, unable to move herself. What that true? Had she really put her through that? After thinking about it for barely a moment and realizing how much sense it made, she put up a wall in her head so she wouldn’t think about it any more.

“How could you have done that to me…?” Risako asked, her voice now barely above a whisper, and tears now visibly forming in her eyes.

Miyabi opened her mouth, but couldn’t respond. It suddenly felt as dry as the desert. “I…” she finally became able to utter. “I don’t know…”

Risako nodded very slowly and slightly, and swallowed herself as if drowning away the tears. “When you can tell me that,” she said in a partially broken voice. “Then we can talk.” And she walked away back toward their rehearsal.

Miyabi barely heard Kobayashi-sensei’s shout of “Natsuyaki-saaaan!” a minute later, but it did prompt her to return to rehearsal, where she was quiet for the entire hour. She was completely subdued during that time though, and couldn’t bear to look at Risako. She did notice however the other girls giving the two of them glances from time to time as if wondering what had happened, though of course unable to ask that while in their drill. At the same time she avoided Risako, she also did her best to avoid Saki’s eyes, which she imagined to be sternly judging.

When rehearsal was over and they finally had the chance to talk again, it was cut short by an announcement that Momoko had arrived. Apparently this made the rest of the girls forget everything else, and excitement bubbled in them as they raced down the hall to find her. Miyabi brought up the tail end of the gabbing group of girls as they traversed the halls, but to her surprise she noticed Saki hang back to join her.

“Are you all right?” her girlfriend asked, and she took Miyabi’s hand, squeezing it softly. “You’ve been distant ever since you went after Risako-chan.”

“Yeah,” Miyabi said flatly, and right away she knew that would not have convinced anybody. “We just…” she continued, becoming self-conscious. “She’s mad at me.”

Saki just nodded, and for some reason that sparked fury in Miyabi, who released her hand as if it caught fire. “Are you going to be on her side?!” she demanded, losing her composure. “Can’t I count on anyone anymore?”

Saki blinked at her. “What are you talking about, Miya? You know I’ll always support you. But…”

“But you’re on her side,” Miyabi retorted. “Fine. I can deal with it myself.” And she quickened her pace, stalking off ahead of the other girl.

What right did the girl have to treat her like that? Hadn’t she done great things lately? She satisfied Risako’s desire for her first kiss – that was obviously a mistake on many levels, looking back on it now. She poured out her heart and gave herself to Saki. What more could she do? For Heaven’s sake, she brought Momoko back from the dead!

Just as she thought that, she entered the small cafeteria at the back of the concert hall, and found the four girls who had been ahead of her gathered around another, shorter one. She came to a sudden stop, and as she looked on, the smiling object of everyone’s attention turned her own attention toward Miyabi.

She knew what she’d done, and she knew this encounter would happen since they and all their staff were excited at the girl’s return, but looking at Momoko in her dark seifuku, she felt she needed to pinch herself to wake up from the dream.

For some reason she thought the girl’s smile vanished when she looked at Miyabi, but it might have been a trick of her mind, because the next thing she knew it was back, and the girl shouted out in her direction, “Captain! I’m sorry to have worried you so much!” She ran up past Miyabi, who turned slowly as she realized Saki had entered the room not far behind her, and hugged her girlfriend as if they’d not seen each other in ages. She hugged her girlfriend!

Saki returned it, a happy smile coming to her face as well. “Momo! We thought you were gone. We…” She looked over the girl’s shoulder at Miyabi. “So you’re all right?”

“Yep!” the girl chirped. “I’m just pichi pichi!”

The other girls, seeing the movement of their current focus, came over and joined the rest. Miyabi noticed though that Risako stayed as far away as she could from her and still be part of the group.

“So what happened?” Chinami asked excitedly. “How did you survive the wreck?” A few of the girls, including her, gave Miyabi quick glances at her question.

“It was very strange,” Momoko said, and she raised a finger to her chin as if thinking in a dainty way. “I remember a jolt as the car I was in suddenly changed direction, and then a lot of people screaming… but then the next thing I knew I woke up and I was alone. I was a bit scared, but after wandering a block or two away from the wreckage I managed to find somebody who helped me get to a hospital. It was definitely something I don’t wish to do again…”

“Are you…” Yurina began, giving another sideways look to Miyabi. “Are you sure you don’t remember anything more? Like anything that happened between when the train crashed and you woke up? It must have been a long time!”

“According to the doctors at the hospital, it was about a day and a half,” she said. “They were amazed I was conscious, much less in the perfect shape I was in. I keep telling you all to work out! Aside from giving you a perfect body such as mine, it might save your life some day!” She grinned as she said that, and a couple of the girls laughed, if a trifle nervously.

However, when she spoke about the timeframe and what the doctors said, she gave Miyabi a level gaze, and Miyabi could tell by her eyes that there was something she wasn’t telling them. “Momo—“ she began, but the girl ignored her and turned to Saki, piping up again.

“C’mon Captain! I have a lot of catching up to do if I’m going to be ready for the concert tomorrow! The doctors said I’m in pristine shape of course, but I won’t really know until I start performing again. Let’s go!” Then, grabbing Saki’s arm, she dragged the girl out into the hall, with the others hurrying to follow.

However, Miyabi stayed behind, just staring after the rest of her jubilant Berryz comrades. What just happened there? She looked down at herself. She wasn’t that unattractive in her baggy workout clothes, was she?

“Natsuyaki-san?” she heard a voice from behind her say. She didn’t turn around, but the voice continued, “Aren’t you happy to see Tsugunaga-san? We’re all lucky to have her back, you know!”

Miyabi finally turned to face Asako, the intern who primarily managed her. The Keio college student was beaming at her, although when she got a look at Miyabi’s face, the smile faded a little. “Is something wrong?”

Miyabi stared back, and after a moment shook her head. “No…” she responded. “Nothing’s wrong.” Risako hated her. “I’m just speechless because I’m so happy for everyone.” She’d literally risked her life to save Momoko, and the girl barely seemed to recognize her existence. “It’s so wonderful to have Momo-chan back so we can have our full Berryz team again.” And now, she’d yelled at Saki, who was quickly claimed by the newly-returned Momoko, a girl who by her own admission was in love with her. “What could be wrong?”



After their afternoon rehearsals, when barely anyone still talked to Miyabi, she was changing into her street clothes when Momoko came up to her and considered her silently. Miyabi registered her presence, but didn’t say anything as she deliberately buttoned her skirt.

“Since you’re standing there, are you going to say something or do you just enjoy watching me change?” she asked in a voice that was much bitterer than she intended it to be.

“Why Miya,” the girl said. “Aren’t you happy to see me? I did just apparently come back from the dead after all. My other friends think it’s a cause for celebration! Don’t you?”

“Yeah,” Miyabi said. “I heard about that. Congratulations on being alive. It’s truly amazing.”

“I heard from a little birdie…” Momoko said, looking up as if she was listening to that little birdie right now. “That you think you… resurrected me or something?” She paused a moment as if expecting a response from Miyabi, but she kept silent. “That’s quite a claim,” she continued when she realized nothing was forthcoming. “And if it’s true, it seems that I owe you my life.”

Miyabi shrugged. “You’ve apparently got no reason to believe it’s true, so why bother?”

“Well…” Momoko began. “Captain doesn’t usually lie.”

Miyabi looked up to stare at her. “She’s the one who told you?” Momoko nodded, but Miyabi just shook her head and shrugged again. What did that really matter?

“I told you all that the last thing I remember was the train derailing…” the girl said, and she sat down on the bench next to her. Strangely though, it didn’t seem to make Miyabi uncomfortable. Considering her current standing with everyone, she wondered how she even stood talking to them. “So that doesn’t mean I forgot anything that happened before it. I know what’s going on between you and Captain. Or, at least I thought I did. Since I’ve been here though I don’t think you’ve even said two words to each other.”

Miyabi looked down at her toes. “It’s… complicated,” she said. “I think your, shall we say, resurfacing, might have made things worse.”

“They believe you, don’t they?” Momoko asked. Miyabi looked up at her questioningly. “That you brought me back to life.”

After looking into the girl’s inscrutable eyes for a second, Miyabi returned her own to her toes. “Some of them do. Others refuse to believe I can do these things even though they’ve had plenty of evidence of it.”

Momoko tittered in response. “Oh yes, that’s right. You turned Rii-chan into a mouse. I’m sure she loved that.” Miyabi felt like she could bore holes in her toes with her glare. “I also heard what you think that spell does. What do you think?” she asked, and drew Miyabi’s stern gaze again. The girl had her arms spread as if she was presenting herself. “A hamster? I might have said mouse, but Rii-chan seems to have already taken it…”

Despite herself, Miyabi broke a smile and even coughed a short laugh. “Who knows,” she said. “You’re welcome to try it out sometime though.”

“Oh that’s quite all right,” Momoko said with a grin. “I think I’ll pass on that for now.” She then got up and then acted as if to leave. Strangely, Miyabi felt like she didn’t want the girl to go. “Remember,” she said. “Come to me if you need anything. It seems I have even more reason to support you now.” Miyabi nodded dully, and the girl walked away.

Miyabi watched herself wiggle her toes for a few minutes more before pulling on her shoes, getting up and hoisting her bag to her shoulders to head back to the hotel. It was quiet since apparently the other Berryz had preceded her out, and Asako cheerily bowed her into her own cab. As she rode through the Nagoya dusk and viewed the fluorescent lights of the city, she thought about the events of the past week.

Was she really just being childish? Momoko apparently didn’t hold anything against her, so why would anyone else? Aside from Risako of course, but she figured the girl would get over it. She hoped so. Saki especially wouldn’t be against her, no matter what the deal with Risako was. After all, the girl hadn’t fallen far short of declaring her undying love for her. The thought of that made Miyabi smile, and she played with her heart necklace as the lights continued flashing by.

Upon returning to the hotel, she found her way to the floor they shared. She heard lots of shouting and excited giggling coming from Maasa’s room, where she supposed they were having Momoko’s coming-back party, but since she didn’t quite feel ready for that she just slid the key card through the lock to her and Saki’s room and walked into it, dumping her bag next to her suitcase.

It wasn’t long though before she heard the door open, and she turned to see Saki slipping inside in a pair of comfortable-looking if tight shorts and a light white blouse.

“Hello,” she said. “I thought I heard someone outside the door, and knew it must have been you. It took you a while to get back here.”

Miyabi took in the girl, and thought once again how lucky she must be to have her as her own. Her face looked perfect, and the outfit even made her look angelic, with the tight shorts adding just a touch of sexiness.

“Yeah,” she responded. “I guess my cab driver was slow. I’m surprised you heard me over all the noise in that room.”

“Oh…” Saki said, and lowered her eyes in a slight blush, toeing the ground a little. “Actually, I was keeping an ear out for you so I’d know when you’re back. After this afternoon, I wanted to apolo—”

“There’s no need for that,” Miyabi said quickly, holding her hands tightly in front of herself to keep them in check for the moment. “I’m the one that should be sorry. Lately I haven’t been paying attention to people as well as I should be.”

“Oh…” Saki said, and looked down again as it seemed like an awkward silence began.

Miyabi couldn’t help herself any longer and closed the gap between them, taking the smaller and almost fragile-seeming girl in her arms. Obviously surprised at the gesture, Saki looked up into her face. “Thank you for standing by me,” Miyabi said, and with a slight hesitation leaned in and kissed her, wrapping her arms fully around the girl’s waist. She felt Saki’s arms wrap around her neck as their kiss deepened, and Miyabi mentally berated herself through the wonderful feeling she had right now at how stupid she’d been to deprive herself of it the last few days.

Eventually they parted, and with both breathing a bit heavily, Saki laid her head against Miyabi’s shoulder. “I wondered how I could fix what I’ve done wrong…” she said, plainly terrified of what she’d been torturing herself with lately. “But you would hardly talk to me, and…”

“Shhh…” Miyabi said reassuringly, stroking the girl’s bushy but smooth hair. “You haven’t done anything. I’ve been too selfish. I won’t make that mistake again though. You’ll see. I’ll set things right.”

She felt the girl nod against her. “I missed you…” she said simply, and without hesitation this time Miyabi pulled her up for another kiss.

A while later, Saki suggested with one of the most real smiles Miyabi had ever seen her with that they go to a party, and Miyabi happily accepted the offer. After knocking on the door, Maasa opened it up and brusquely pulled the two of them into her room, where the other girls were playing Jenga. Chinami was just removing a block when the stack fell and the other girls screamed and poked her teasingly.

“Hello!” Momoko said, rising to greet the newcomers. “You finally decided to join us, eh Miya? Perfect timing even! We were just talking about trying another game! What do you guys think?”

Miyabi smiled, finally feeling as if she was being accepted again. She and Saki had made up… quite completely… Momoko was being her usual peppy self, and even Risako was smiling and laughing over at them. She almost felt overwhelmed at the reversal of her fortune until she caught Momoko’s eye as the girl hugged Saki in greeting. Despite her outward appearance, when looking into her eyes Miyabi suddenly felt cold. She didn’t know why, but she suddenly got the feeling that the girl hated her.

Shaken as she was, she barely even offered a comment on what game they should play next, and her trepidation wasn’t even eased by the contentment that tried to fill her upon noticing that Saki was constantly clinging to her arm and apparently did not want to let go of her tonight. Every other time she caught Momoko’s eyes the rest of the evening, nothing seemed out of the ordinary once again. It seemed her mind was playing tricks on her again.

Offline maiZe

  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 197
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 26: Hello! My Name is Momoko]
« Reply #156 on: December 06, 2007, 03:11:31 PM »
I'm fairly new to this forum, and I thought I should let you know that I joined up primarily because of this fanfic. I don't even know how it happened that I stumbled upon it, but once I started reading, I was completely hooked!

I really like how you've developed the characters through the story and I really enjoy the Miya/Saki pairing. I'm glad they made up! :D

Now I'm hoping for Miya and Risako to properly fix this gap that has formed between them, rather than just have Miya sit back and assume that if she gives Risako some time and space, the poor girl will just get over it. Risako seems very sensitive, and seeing as she views Miya as her best friend, I fully understand why Miya's recent actions have been hurting her so much. My heart goes out to Risako!

As for Momoko, don't quite know what to make of her yet. I highly doubt that the looks Miyabi's been seeing are just her imagination. What I'm not sure of is what they mean. Is it that Momoko's evil and is trying to lull the girls into a sense of security before BANG!!!, or is it like in Buffy when Willow raised Buffy from the dead, and Momoko is upset with Miyabi, because even though she says she can't remember what happened after the crash, she was actually in heaven and Miya's spell pulled her out, making for a very disgruntled Momoko who had to come back to a world where she has to deal with her unrequited love for Captain? It'll be interesting to see what happens with her.

Can't wait for the next chapter!! (Am also waiting [im]patiently for the next chapter of The Circle of Three XD)

Offline g4rfield

  • Yocchan is my chan~
  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 316
  • I belong to a religion called Yossy-ism
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 26: Hello! My Name is Momoko]
« Reply #157 on: December 06, 2007, 10:13:02 PM »
OMG rokun, finally a new chapter!! But I guess the long wait is justified by the awesomeness of this chapter! Momo is baaaaack and Miya has a rival again.

Hmmmm someone took the word out of my mouth. I was actually thinking about the same thing that happened with Buffy. Like when she was being pulled back from Heaven could be what happened with Momo too when Miya resurrected her. That would be unpleasant, but you know what would be the most unpleasant? If Momo was indeed in someplace that she enjoyed and was pulled back and met the Devil who pulled her back who then lied to her or something, clouding her judgment so she can be its vessel into the world. That cold feeling Miya felt must be coming from something and me thinks...Momo is lying.

Heh....I think I've been reading too much mangas, anyway, that's what I thought.

I like how Miya can never be too harsh toward Saki even if she is upset with her. The doghouse punishment is kinda cute, but unnecessary since she ended up NOT enjoying the luxuries that is Saki's lips.  :lol:

modesta107

  • Guest
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 26: Hello! My Name is Momoko]
« Reply #158 on: December 06, 2007, 11:04:50 PM »
Woo, new chapter! :w00t: I was bored yesterday and I came here to read some of my favorite chapters again, and then the next day, it's updated!

Quote
Miya, are you torturing Chii-chan again?” Yurina asked, walking over in her flaming orange sweat suit. Miyabi could barely look at the girl for fear of being blinded by it
:lol: everytime I read any chapter of any of your stories, I look out for things like(hope I didn't miss any more). IMO, it's almost like playing 'Where's Waldo.'

Now, when Momo came back, I was starting to think that the consequences of Miya's magic was that Momoko couldn't see Miya, and thinking it was that, I thought the other girls were not going to be able to see Miya either. Good thing my thoughts were proved wrong when Momo visited Miya after the rehearsal.

Quote
“I heard from a little birdie…” Momoko said, looking up as if she was listening to that little birdie right now. “That you think you… resurrected me or something?”

Ok, now who spilled the beans? :mon suspect:

Quote
“Well…” Momoko began. “Captain doesn’t usually lie
I would have expected Risako to do something like that instead.
Momo didn't know that she was killed at first, right? She didn't seem freaked out about it, but did Captain even think about how it could go when she told Momo she was dead and then resurrected? Seems like Momo is a chill person  :lol:

I didn't see a consequence of Miya's actions, except for that fact that Momo gave Miya a cold look. Jealousy is in that air, but that was definitely bound to happen even if Momo was never killed in the first place.

Offline Amarghetta

  • ecchi
  • Member+
  • Posts: 722
  • The likeness of a human
Re: Berry Beautiful [Chapter 26: Hello! My Name is Momoko]
« Reply #159 on: December 07, 2007, 01:56:50 AM »
I got the impression that Momo's really angry about something. It could be that she actually remembers more, and that she didn't like what happened. Or maybe she just doesn't like how Miya's actions have started to break the group apart...  :O

Saki's right about how Miya seems to affect Risako, a little too much. She was confused about Miyabi already, and having to deal with the latest occurrences must be really hard for someone like her. She probably felt Miya hates her or something. I'd say she's on the brink of depression.  :'(

Oh, and I demand more Maasa!  :love: (Well, not really, but she rocks!) I like how she's cool about everything. Nothing seems to faze her, and it makes me think she'd be level-headed enough when things get really ugly among them. Saki's doing a good job so far, but she shouldn't have to deal with everything alone.  :-\

JPHiP Radio (8/200 @ 96 kbs)     Now playing: Guilty Gear Isuka - Push A Bush