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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (She Noticed - updated 6/19)
« Reply #220 on: June 19, 2008, 08:56:29 PM »
@Kame: Yeah, I'm sure Eri did not mind at all! :lol: And Bad Ai-chan is the hottest!
@Lolli: I'm glad risqué is to your liking. But I don't think I can go any farther than that...maybe. :oops: I will most definitely keep up Takagaki, but with some other pairing in between.
@peti-chan: It's already Thursday! I can't wait for an update. Maybe my stories can give you some ideas... :twisted:
@shadowolf8: I'm happy you noticed the risqué too!
@tru_harmony: Ok, I guess I know a little.... :oops: But it's only from what I read. So you can thank your fellow fanfic writers for my knowledge! XD
@JFC: Yeah, I can totally picture it too! I cracked up when I wrote it! And no, they aren't watching softcore. Our idols aren't those kind of girls.....(maybe). They were exaggerating so what they were doing was little more risqué than the movie.  I've killed so many ppl. Should I be feeling bad about this? :? XD
@lollipopgirl: Silk is teh shit! And I love you too! I've been trying to be good and make sure all you readers know that you mean a lot to me!
@heyyouhiya: It's okay, as long as you're reading. It always starts from video games, doesn't it? But eventually those get dull... I expect all of you to go out and buy something silk!
@Yukari: Fake sex is whoooooooooooo! Takagaki is always hot, no matter what they're doing!
@ringo-hime: :rockon:  :hehehe:

Ok, this turned out totally different than what I intended. It's not even the same pairing! But I had a little fun writing this. And believe it or not, I attempted to use some of the tips from our senpai writers. Enjoy!
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She Noticed

I slump against the wall and slid onto the practice room floor. I could feel my mouth curl into a somewhat frown as I pull my knees to my chest and hug them. I’m feeling pretty dejected. This feeling is not new. But the reason I am like this makes me even more upset.
   I just saw Ai-chan playing around with Sayu and Lin Lin while I sat here, looking bored. I mean, what the hell? I’m her best friend and she’d rather play with them. I know I could have asked and they would probably let me hang out with them. But I just….I just don’t want to. It’s stupid but I’m hoping she’ll notice I am alone and  invite me over.
    My head seems to fall lower and lower as I think about her. Her kind smile, the only thing that could bring me out of my slump. The broad expansion of shiny white teeth, the little line above her upper lip. I trace the wrinkles on the knee of my black and white Adidas track pants. “I love you…”, I whisper, my heart breaking.
    A few minutes later, Natsu-Sensei tells us all to get back in position to practice for Resonant Blue. I take a few deep breaths and stand up, my usual smile pasted on my face. No one suspects a thing. I take my place and the music begins. My anger and disappointment manifests and I can feel the smile slip away. I don’t know if I look angry but I put all of those feelings into my movements. I jerk my knee up hard and roll my body. I can feel some of the other members glance at me. I ignore them and continue my moves. My shoes squeak loudly as I twist my body to the choreography.

Even Ai-chan seems to notice me now.

   As the songs ends, I come down from my high. My adrenalin slows and my blood pumps less rapidly through my veins. “Niigaki, good job”, Natsu-Sensei says to me, smiling and patting my shoulder gently. I weakly smile and quickly gulp some water. I walk past Mittsi and Koharu and catch a bit of their conversation. “Nee, did you see Niigaki-san?”, Mittsi says, looking at her friend with serious eyes. “Yeah, she was really working hard”, Koharu replies as she reties her ponytail. I inwardly smile at the comments.

No one suspects a thing.

   I stretch my legs and bend over to retie my shoelace. I can feel someone staring at my back. Standing up, I swirl around to find Ai-chan standing there. She is wearing a white T-shirt and grey sweatpants. She looks so beautiful, even though sweat drips down her forehead. I smile at her and turn to walk away. She reaches out and her small hand grips my wrist. I don’t turn and she begins to speak, just as I predicted. “Nice job with the dancing but I know you’re mad”, she says, “I’m sorry for whatever I did.” I start to look at her but she pulls me into a furious hug. I let out a tiny cry and my body crashes into hers. My arms move up and hold onto her back. My eyes begin to water but I don’t care.

My Ai-chan is back.

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (She Noticed - updated 6/19)
« Reply #221 on: June 19, 2008, 11:28:41 PM »
awww...

that was sweeet...

they really know each other... like they're connected telepathically or something...

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (She Noticed - updated 6/19)
« Reply #222 on: June 20, 2008, 01:05:34 AM »
I meant keep up the writing. Not keep up the smutty stuff :lol:

I loved this story *squee* I'm a sucker for sweet stories just as much (or maybe more) then smexy ones. All depends on the pairing and writing.

TakaGaki do have something special going on - mind wise. They know each other so well...Like they're soul mates :heart:

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (She Noticed - updated 6/19)
« Reply #223 on: June 20, 2008, 01:06:26 AM »
Risa =  :mon tantrum:
Aichan =  :mon whimper:
Risa = :gmon tears:
TakaGaki =  :gmon love2:


Dammit we've got no "hugging" smiley.  :tama-mad:

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (She Noticed - updated 6/19)
« Reply #224 on: June 20, 2008, 04:05:13 AM »
awww...

that was sweeet...

they really know each other... like they're connected telepathically or something...

Gaki actually said recently that her and Ai can tell what each other is thinking without either saying a word :heart: :wub:

Now, what should I buy that's silk :drool: :P
About the writing, did you use the 'camera movement' technique that was suggested? I really noticed that and it worked well ;) A very sweet story and angry RB dancing Risa is hot!!! :o :heart:
Curiously, was this meant to be Ai and Reina? The pouting and annoyance at the start just made me think Reina :lol:

Man, I'm so glad you're on holidays when I am, I'm loooooving all these updates from you :D

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (She Noticed - updated 6/19)
« Reply #225 on: June 20, 2008, 04:14:46 AM »
another great work of art!  :wub:
poor Risa, i'm glad Ai-chan noticed her and came back to her!!
TAKAGAKI  :heart: :heart: :heart:

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (She Noticed - updated 6/19)
« Reply #226 on: June 20, 2008, 04:15:54 AM »
Gaki actually said recently that her and Ai can tell what each other is thinking without either saying a word :heart: :wub:

that's just amazing... if i knew anything... i'd think they're  :heart: :heart: :heart:

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (She Noticed - updated 6/19)
« Reply #227 on: June 20, 2008, 04:44:21 AM »
^ See, my TakaGaki love is justified :P

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (She Noticed - updated 6/19)
« Reply #228 on: June 20, 2008, 05:33:42 AM »
it's pure love  :luvluv2:

gaki is so cool... and sweet too  :shy2:

waiting next chapter!!

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (She Noticed - updated 6/19)
« Reply #229 on: June 20, 2008, 11:59:47 AM »
awww Takagaki...
Aichan sure knows her beloved Mameko  :wub:

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (She Noticed - updated 6/19)
« Reply #230 on: June 20, 2008, 02:31:36 PM »
HEY,hey,hey..  :wub:
so sweeeett... :luvluv2: :shy2: :shy1:

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (She Noticed - updated 6/19)
« Reply #231 on: June 20, 2008, 03:09:50 PM »
KAWAAA~II  :heart: Risa simply needs her Ai-chan  :shy1:

TakaGaki  :luvluv2:

Hope to read some more of TakaGaki... and also more TanaKamei :shy2:

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (She Noticed - updated 6/19)
« Reply #232 on: June 20, 2008, 04:00:45 PM »
somehow I can relate  :roll: 



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My Ai-chan is back.

I love how you end your stories like that  :yep:

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (She Noticed - updated 6/19)
« Reply #233 on: June 20, 2008, 06:59:01 PM »
I feel like replying to comments but I don't have a new story yet. So bear with me, I'll try and have one up later today.

@tru_harmony: Yup, they are attached in the mind. Makes them even cuter, imo.
@Lolli: Ok, well, I think I'll be keeping up both. XD Sweet stories are fun because you can add all the mushy, cheesy things you would never say or do in real life. (Or stuff you'd want to say or do but are too shy.) I agree, if any members were to be soulmates, it would be Takagaki. They just click.
@JFC: Even if my stories are too short for your epic posts, it's still cute to see your smily comments. Come to think of it, we don't have a hugging smily....
@lollipopgirl: Hmmm, I'm sure they sell a lot of silk things out there. I did actually try the camera thing, glad it turned out ok. I can just imagine Gaki moving around furiously with this expression.... :drool: I think I was either trying to write RenAi or TanaKame. I can't really remember but it wasn't exactly like this. It had something to do with dance lessons. Summer break is the best thing to ever happen to me!!!!!!
@shadowolf8: Maybe Ai isn't as absentminded as we all think. :P
@Yukari: I love Gaki. She's so... :wub:
@AmberSan: Yup, Ai-chan totally knows what she's doing.  XD at Mameko!
@ringo-hime: Sweet like sugar! :heart:
@Kame: Honestly, I think they can't live without each other. Ai wouldn't have someone to listen to all her babble and Gaki wouldn't have anyone to lean on. They just complete each other. I think I can write some more of those!
@kRisZ: Oh, so you have a kind of Ai-chan in your life? I think I like ending that way because it's not really a full ending. It kinda gives you the freedom to think for yourself beyond the limits of the story. It's fun.

Ok, well, I think I'm gonna try writing a different pairing. They are well known and I find them very interesting. So we'll see how it goes.
See everyone later!

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (She Noticed - updated 6/19)
« Reply #234 on: June 20, 2008, 09:26:41 PM »
I'm a bit late :doh: Anyway, if you want to know Silk gave me some idea and I will use it in my story :twisted: And about She noticed...

Ahhh~~Ai-chan is back :wub: XD

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (Change - updated 6/20)
« Reply #235 on: June 21, 2008, 02:37:58 AM »
@peti-chan: There's no such thing as late, you're perfectly fine. 8) Whoo! I'm glad to help my fellow writers! And I loved your ch., btw!

Ok, here it is! I've never even thought about writing this pairing but I've always liked reading about them! So enjoy!
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Change

   Fujimoto Miki crawled into her queen-sized bed at around 12:30 AM. The white sheets felt cool on her bare skin and she shivered. Her pink tank top protected her back from the chill but the tiny striped boxer shorts did little for her legs. She curled up into a ball and closed her eyes. But sleep wouldn’t come. They flicked open again and she was left laying wide awake, feeling alone. “Where is she?”, she wondered, a now familiar feeling rising up in her chest. It moved from the pit of her stomach all the way up to her head. It burned her throat and stung her eyes. Tiny tears welled up and fell silently.
   Miki had no idea how she changed. She used to be the tough girl who needed no one. The girl who spoke her mind and looked only to herself for comfort. But ever since she got with her that night, she was different. Sure, she loved the girl, of course, but she didn’t like the way their relationship had evolved. She was now this girl who couldn’t live without hearing that sweet, girly voice. She needed to feel that soft skin on hers. Her girlfriend had captured her heart but her real self got tangled in the process.
    By now, the tears were flowing freely. Drenching her pillow and leaving salty streaks on her face. She rolled over, facing away from the empty bed and shut her eyes tightly. Miki soon found herself in a light sleep.
     But a few minutes later, the bed creaked and shifted as another body entered. Miki was barely awake but could feel this movement. An arm made its way around her waist and pulled her backwards. She was now leaning into the body of Ishikawa Rika. “Baby, I’m home”, the older girl whispered, kissing Miki’s ear. Miki leaned back into the soft, but taut body and relaxed, smiling contently.

Sure, she’s changed but change isn’t always a bad thing.
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Dou? Dou? DOU?
If you watch Haromoni@, you'll get it! XD

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (Change - updated 6/20)
« Reply #236 on: June 21, 2008, 03:06:36 AM »
... charmikitty!!!!

change is good sometimes...



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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (Change - updated 6/20)
« Reply #237 on: June 21, 2008, 04:03:07 AM »
wojoo charmikitty, such a weird pair  :mon fyeah:

i like to read something "new" (i had read charmikitty fics, but doesn't exist so much)

i want to know what will happen  :mon thumb:

waiting a update~~

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (Change - updated 6/20)
« Reply #238 on: June 21, 2008, 07:59:45 AM »
You had me at the mention of Miki-sama in a Queen-sized bed (what else would she have, after all? ;D).

And yeah, CharMikitty isn't a common pairing, but the story was still sweet enough for a :mon fyeah:.

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Re: strawb3rrykream's notebook (Change - updated 6/20)
« Reply #239 on: June 21, 2008, 08:04:31 AM »
Whoa! a new twist! awww Miki and Rika! It's nice seeing them as lovers and not haters once and a while.
one question what does Haromoni@ have to do with it??  :?
but i must say seeing a new story by helps brighten my day once again!  :wub:

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