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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 5: Ching-A-Ling)
« Reply #40 on: July 30, 2009, 11:52:28 PM »
WOW! I guess its been a while since I've updated  :mon sweat:

Lol but I reaaaalllly want to finish this :mon thumb: so if anybody's still interested here goes Chapter 6...
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Chapter 6: Mo' Money Mo' Problems



Sayu's Pov

Stay in the car Sayu... We don't want you to screw this up Sayu.... You lack coordination Sayu... Jerks!

“This is so boring!  How long does it take to rob a bank... Geez!”

She rolled her eyes before turning the radio on.
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Risa's Pov

Okay everything is going according to plan... I can't-

“I can't believe we pulled that off!” Risa exclaimed

“I told ya!  Fool-proof” Reina answered smiling

They quickly removed their sunglasses and hoodies then tossed them inside a nearby dumpster.  Unsure of when the drugs would wear off, they began running as fast as they could to the alleyway Sayu was parked.   Reina struggled to keep pace with Risa; the closer they got to reaching Sayu, the more she lagged behind.  Suddenly Risa stopped, allowing Reina to catch up.

“What are you-”she takes a deep breath “-doing?  Lets go”

“Do u hear that?” Risa whispered

“Huh?”

“Ssh listen..”

Reina stopped and focused in on the sounds around her.

“Yeah I hear it” she whispered back

They crept inside the alley as they got closer to the car.  They peered inside the vehicle and saw Sayu spazzing out, moving in an irrational rhythm.  They tore their eyes away from the window, looked at each other, and began laughing.

~~From inside the car~~


“~Cuz if you liked it then you should have put a ring on it...If you liked it then you shoulda put a ring on it... wo oh ooh oh oh ooh oh oh ooh oh oh oh~”

*THUD*

“Oh my Jesus!” Sayu cried out startled by the sudden bang on her window

“What the hell were you doin?” Reina laughed as she gestured for her to open the trunk.  Sayu pouted collecting herself and popping the trunk open. 

Risa began loading the money in “We totally just robbed a bank!” she said while getting into the backseat.  “Robbed. A Bank! What a rush!”

“The dance from the Beyonce video! You know...  wo oh ooh oh-”

“Yea.. I got that” Reina said between her laughter she sat down on the passenger seat

“Alright we are all set lets go!”

“Of course, of course!  Everyone.. seatbelts on!” Sayu checked her mirrors

Reina sighed “Just Drive!”

“Safety first, my car my rules”

“Fine! Whatever” Reina grumbled. Sayu began driving

“What are you guys going to do with your cut?” Risa asked excitedly to no one in particular

“F**k Sayu! Pedal to the metal, homie lets go!”

“Chill out Reina!” she continues to sing “Wo oh ooh oh- God I love that song”

“I'm gonna buy a villa in Florida and maybe Hawaii” Risa smiled

“Please don't sing Sayu you sound like a dying cat!  And while your at it... Speed th F**k up!”

“Teehee jealous much?”

“No offense Sayu but you sound horrible”

“Whatever Risa, no one asked you!”

“But my ears!--”

“F**k this!  Pull over!”

“Wha-”

“PULL OVER!” Reina growled

“OK OK damn...” Sayu grumbled

Reina got out of the car and yells  “Come on, we're switching”

Sayu looked over at Risa unsure of what to do; Risa just shrugged also confused so Sayu sighed, got out and jumped into the passenger side,  Reina went into the driver seat

“I'll show you REAL driving”

“Geez!  What's your deal?”

“Sorry if I'm a lil on edge Sayumi... did I hurt your feelings? Hmm? I was just thinking about the BANK! And THE COPS WHO WILL START LOOKING FOR US!”

Reina floored the gas and sped off  Risa yells “Reina thats a one-way!”

*KAPOOW!*
***

Reina's Pov

F**K!

“Nice Driving” Sayu said with a smirk

“Shaddup!”

F**K!!!!!!!!

“I think 'I told you so' is appropriate here”

Reina opened the door to assess  the damage done to the car.

“This is BULLSHIT!” she screamed in frustration

Sayu and Risa laugh “Whatever... Come on Reina get in the car and lets go”

Just then the driver of the Range Rover they hit gets out.

“Hi my name is-”

“F**K YOU!”

“Huh?” the girl uttered, completely startled by Reina's outburst

“WHAT THE F**K MAN!”

“S-Sorry?”

“NO! F**KING WATCH WHERE YOU'RE GOIN!”

“But-”

“NO BUTS! Look at my car its f**ked up... look at your car its f**kin fine what kind of bullshit is that!”

The girl looked at both cars “Ah yea your right”

“F**k yea I'm right!” Reina folded her arms against her chest

“I.. um.. one second!” the girl ran back to the passenger side of her vehicle then ran back “Um.. my cousin says this is your fault-”

“Whose fault?” Reina put her hands on her hips and leaned closer to the frightened girl daring her to repeat herself.

“Come on Tanakacci just get in the car!”  Risa shouted from inside the car

“Nah yo! They disrespecting me! Calling me a liar and shit”

the girl was on the verge of tears “Um... uh Tanakacci was it?  We don't want any problems-”

“F**K ME!” Reina said as she facepalmed herself

“Excuse me!” shouted the scared girl

Reina stomped towards her damaged car

“Alright then! Come on lets go!” Risa said waving Rena inside the car “Gosh we're committing a whole bunch of crimes today...bank robbing, hit and run- OH MY GAWD! REINA!”

Reina had walked passed the car door and into the trunk wear she took out the tranquilizer gun.

“Aw Damn!” Sayu grumbled

“Reina! Reina! What is she-What are you- Holy shit on crackers! OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMG!!”

*SLAP*

“Ow” Risa yelped in pain

“Risa! Pull it together” Sayu yelled

Meanwhile Reina shot the girl she was talking to previously.

“Eri!” shouted her cousin before passing out as Reina shot her too.

“Help me put them in the backseat of their car”

“Oh nononono Wh- the eff man! Kidnapping! Are you serious?!”

“She knows my name! Thanks to you! I had to do this... Now come on and help me!”

Sayu stared at her “She doesn't know MY name”

“Word Sayu? Word?!”

“If you had just let me drive none of this would have happened!”

“What's done is done Damn! Shit happens! Now help me drag these bodies in the trunk!  It improvising time!”

“Improvise my-”

*sirens blare*

All the girls froze in they're tracks, Sayu and Reina eyed each other down.  When the sounds began to come closer Risa rubbled her temples together 

“I don't like this either Sayu, but we are in this together... now help Reina out with the girls and I'll grabbed the money.... I mean we had to ditch this car anyway so... Yay?... Oh and I'M driving”


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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 5: Ching-A-Ling)
« Reply #41 on: July 31, 2009, 12:33:14 AM »
I remember this fic! Sorry about not comment.  :sweatdrop: This fic is so funny! I love it. You're doing such a great job with it.  :thumbsup I'm glad there's an update! I hope there will be another one soon. Ohhhhh and Eri's in the fic now? That's interesting. Will she be paired with anyone? *whispers* kameshige.

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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 5: Ching-A-Ling)
« Reply #42 on: July 31, 2009, 03:52:13 AM »
Chapter 6: Mo' Money Mo' Problems

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Sayu's Pov

Stay in the car Sayu... We don't want you to screw this up Sayu.... You lack coordination Sayu... Jerks!

“This is so boring!  How long does it take to rob a bank... Geez!”
Hey, as long as she doesn't hear alarms ringing from inside the bank, it's all good.



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She rolled her eyes before turning the radio on.
Careful Sayu, make sure that you're still watching and paying attention.



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“I can't believe we pulled that off!” Risa exclaimed

“I told ya!  Fool-proof” Reina answered smiling.
Whoa, they did it?



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Reina struggled to keep pace with Risa; the closer they got to reaching Sayu, the more she lagged behind.
Reina's probably bad enough at running on her own. Now she's running with a load of money, so yeah, that's not helping her.



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*GAKIREINA HEAR SOUNDS*
Uh-oh...cops? Bank security? :O



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They crept inside the alley as they got closer to the car.  They peered inside the vehicle and saw Sayu spazzing out, moving in an irrational rhythm.  They tore their eyes away from the window, looked at each other, and began laughing.
Oshit, don't tell me...:P



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~~From inside the car~~


“~Cuz if you liked it then you should have put a ring on it...If you liked it then you shoulda put a ring on it... wo oh ooh oh oh ooh oh oh ooh oh oh oh~”

*THUD*

“Oh my Jesus!” Sayu cried out startled by the sudden bang on her window

“What the hell were you doin?” Reina laughed as she gestured for her to open the trunk.  Sayu pouted collecting herself and popping the trunk open. 
Oh Sayu, caught parapara-ing in the car. XD



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Risa began loading the money in “We totally just robbed a bank!” she said while getting into the backseat.  “Robbed. A Bank! What a rush!”
Caught a bit off guard by the fact that it was Risa that said this. Had it been Reina it would have been expected, almost second nature to expect her to say this, but Risa?

Hopefully she doesn't start wanting to have that "rush" again anytime soon.  :huhuh



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“Alright we are all set lets go!”

“Of course, of course!  Everyone.. seatbelts on!” Sayu checked her mirrors

Reina sighed “Just Drive!”

“Safety first, my car my rules”
Indeed. Plus it would really suck if they got caught with the money because a cop pulled them over for not wearing their seatbelts.   :nervous



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“F**k Sayu! Pedal to the metal, homie lets go!”

...

Speed th F**k up!”
Likewise, it would really suck if they got caught with the money because they got pulled over for speeding. A proper getaway is made when the vehicle being used has:
a) not been identified to the police, and
b) does not stand out/draw attention to itself in normal traffic.



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Reina got out of the car and yells  “Come on, we're switching”

Sayu looked over at Risa unsure of what to do; Risa just shrugged also confused so Sayu sighed, got out and jumped into the passenger side,  Reina went into the driver seat

...

Reina floored the gas and sped off  Risa yells “Reina thats a one-way!”

*KAPOOW!*
Um...yeah. When I mentioned the whole "not standing out/drawing attention" part...this would be an example of what NOT to do.  :doh:



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“Nice Driving” Sayu said with a smirk

“Shaddup!”

F**K!!!!!!!!

“I think 'I told you so' is appropriate here”
* JFC nods with Sayu.



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*REINA'S ROAD RAGE FREAKOUT*
Goddamit....and now she's let herself be seen by Eri AND Eri's cousin...which means that if/when it comes time to do the insurance claim on the damage to the car, she can be identified.  :banghead:

And oh...she frakkin' shoots Eri and her cousin with tranquilizer darts, which now adds assault with a weapon AND kidnapping to the list of potential charges the trio faces.
:dizzy:



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*sirens blare*
Oh fuck.  :bleed eyes:

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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 5: Ching-A-Ling)
« Reply #43 on: July 31, 2009, 04:28:52 AM »
I thought this fic was over. Glad to see it's not.

Reina tranquilized people because of road rage? Talk about making a bad situation worse. The police are coming too so they better get the bodies are get out of there.

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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 5: Ching-A-Ling)
« Reply #44 on: July 31, 2009, 04:17:23 PM »
OMG, this story is hilarious. I loved the whole part where Reina and Sayu tried to get Risa to agree to the job the first time, a few chapters ago.

And now they have hostages, oh Reina. This story definitely needs to be finished.

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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 5: Ching-A-Ling)
« Reply #45 on: August 01, 2009, 12:05:22 PM »
I so love how everyone is coming back from writers heaven!  Happy~~~  :twothumbs

lol you sure haven't lost your touch...every single line is still as funny :lol:  and I think things just got a whole lot better with the addition of Eri and probably her cousin Ai chan or Aika...one of the Ai's XD

I agree with everyone else.  This story definitely needs to be finished (just not any time soon! after many many chapters that is XD)

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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 5: Ching-A-Ling)
« Reply #46 on: August 01, 2009, 01:23:51 PM »
Ahaha... this is great stuff! XD
OH HAI ERI U HAZ LAND ROVER? And now... the kidnappers have you. ^^;
lol@ the idea of Kameshige. I can just imagine what Reina might have to say about Sayu hitting on a hostage. More inappropriate language here we come.

I wonder who Eri's cousin is. If it's Koharu I think she might just drive the three "criminals" nuts enough to turn themselves in eventually. :nervous

But yes, awesome job on the chapters so far!

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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 5: Ching-A-Ling)
« Reply #47 on: August 11, 2009, 07:13:10 AM »
LMFAO at Sayu being stuck in the car and dancing/singing to Beyonce. Reina's got such a temper and holy shit, she attacked Eri. :shocked Gaki, Gaki, Gaki...the sensible one. :nervous

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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 5: Ching-A-Ling)
« Reply #48 on: August 14, 2009, 06:10:06 AM »
Ch 7: Breakin' Old Habits... Is hard too do



Ai's Pov

“ERI!” She screamed

What the hell is going on?!

She watched in horror as Reina aimed the gun at her

Should I run?  Should I just sit here and get shot?

In a quick second she decided that staying here with her cousin would be better than running and having something worse happen.  Not only would she probably not get far she would have left Eri...  and well Eri isn't the smartest person in the world, she needed to protect her foolish cousin! However, by the time she reached this conclusion in her mind, Reina had already shot her.

OW! that kinda hurt...lots... a littles... a much she thought as the dart hit her and released the drug inside of her veins

This, what the hell is?  What shoot me with did she?  To think getting harder it is.
 

She shook her head and struggled to keep her eyes open

STAY AWAKE AI! COME ON! Observe your surroundings!

She watched as Risa tied her hair in to a ponytail and shouted out instructions to the other two

Ah! So their leader, this is.  Argh i mean so this is their leader!

She watched helpless as Reina dragged her cousin in to the back seat.  Even though she tried to will her body to move, she could do nothing as Reina grabbed her and laid her next to her cousin.  The leader went into the drivers seat, Reina went into the passenger side, and the other nameless one got in the back next to them.
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Risa's Pov

Risa fastened her seat belt and gripped the wheel

One...

She closed her eyes

Two...

The sound from the sirens get louder

Wait for it...

“Risa lets go we're going to get caught!”

“OMG we're going to jail! I'm to pretty for jail! You know what they do to pretty girls in jail? Because I don't!”

In an instant her eyes open.  Blue and red lights cover the brick walls of the alleyway

Three!

She put the car in reverse and hit gas pedal as hard as she could.  The gears screech as she took off.  A huge cloud of smoke and the smell of burning rubber is the only thing left behind.  She makes a hard donut turn onto to the main road.

“Ow” the girls yelped as their heads hit the window during that hard turn

She took her foot off the brake and hit the gas again.  As the dial indicating the mph increased rabidly Risa's eyes flashed to her rear view mirror.  She spotted the cops turning the corner.

Show time

They sped off, she zipped in and out of traffic.  The cop cars struggled to keep up.

“We are all gonna die!”

“Bunnies, diamonds, and shopping sprees.  Bunnies, diamonds, and shopping sprees.  Bunnies, diamonds, and...” Sayu repeats to herself over  and over again while rocking her body back and forth

“Shut up Sayu!  Shut up Sayu!  Shut up! What the hell man, mantras?! You tryna freak me out?! Cuz I ain't scared! Reina ain't neva scared ya dig? Better recognize-- Aww f**k whats da use? Ahhhhhhhhh!”

Risa remained oblivious to the noise, all her focus was on the road.   Her body felt one with the car... total silence all she heard is the purrs of her ride.  She reminisced of her time as a illegal street racer flashed before, she smiled.  She eyed her rear view mirror watch as the cops crashed trying to follow her.  She smiled again

Its been too long
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Ai's Pov

Ai slowly began to regain consciousness, but her limbs were numb and she was unable to move.  All she could do was watch as the other henchman screamed.

It would be best if I keep quiet.  I don't want them to realize I'm up...  Think Ai how are we going to get out of this situation?  Wait!  I can think properly again!  This means whatever they drugged me with is wearing off!

Suddenly a truck that Risa just cut off honks its horn, its thunderous sound startling Ai.

“OOOWAH!”

Sayu screamed after being surprised by the deep throated yell.

“DA F**K?! WHAT KIND OF BEASTLY SOUND WAS THAT SAYU?!”

“THAT WASN'T ME! DOES IT LOOK LIKE I WOULD HAVE SUCH A MANISH SCREAM?”

“...”

“Why did you go quiet, Reina?” Sayu narrowed her eyes “Does it. Look like. I would. Have a. MANISH SCREAM?

“...”

“Eff you Reina! NO! it wasn't me! It was the f**king hostage! Holy fudging CRAP! I forgot we had hostages!”

They forgot we were here? That means they don't know who we are! Phew! They're not after our money.  Maybe if we can just keep our identity secret they let us go
...or kill us!


“Oh yea!” said Reina

“Oh yea? Oh yea!  All you can says oh yea?!”

“What? I forgot they were there” Reina said with a shrug

“and?”

“And... 'oh yea'. What else do you want me to say?” Reina rolled her eyes “Thanks for reminding me”

“Hahaha this so messed up!” Risa bit down on her lip to stop the laughter from escaping.

“Why is that funny?” Sayu asked, her irritation growing

“Because- HAHA we so sure of ourselves... what was it? FOOL-PROOF HAHA! FOOL-PROOF!”

“S**t she's cracked!”

“I'm not cracked I just find this whole mess humorous--”

“Of course she would Reina! Its Gaki! Damn I was kinda counting on her to be the reliable one guess now I have to be”

“I can still hear you” Risa said knowing that they had ceased paying attention to her

“Why am I not the reliable-”

“Do you really have to ask that question? If anything you are the dumb quick tempered one! And I'm the cute sexy smart one!”

Therefore the one who I need to convince to let me and Eri go is Risa the reliable one and avoid angering this Reina

“WHY AM I THE DUMB ONE?!”

“BECAUSE YOU DO DUMB S**T... LIKE OH I DON'T KNOW ROB A BANK!”

Thieves not murders... Good to know

“YOU WENT ALONG WITH IT TOO!”

“THAT'S ONLY BECAUSE YOU WERE DOING IT”

“OHHHHHH NICE LOGIC! IF I JUMPED OFF A BRIDGE WOULD YOU FOLLOW?”

“F**K NO! I WOULD WATCH, CALL YOU A DUMB S**T, AND SELL TICKETS FOR EVERYONE TO SEE THE DUMBS**T SHOW!”

“F**K YOU”

“NO F**K YOU! MAYBE I'M DUMB TOO BECAUSE I WENT ALONG WITH YOUR DUMBS**T!”

“I SWEAR TO GAWD IF YOU KEEP DISRESPECTIN' ME”

“WHAT ARE YOU GOING TO DO YOU DUMBS**T! HUH?! HIT ME?”

“YES! YES I WOULD!” Reina hollered undoing her seatbelt

“HA! LIKE YOU COULD!”

“WITH THE QUICKNESS! BOOM! RIGHT THE FACE! YOU SUPERFICIAL BI-”

“Wait the face? Really? You were going to hit me in the face?” Sayumi said shocked that her face was just threatened

“Huh? No... I mean I was just saying that in the heat of the moment” Reina mumbled confused by the sudden change of atmosphere

“But you thought about it” said Sayu accusingly

“Hitting you in the the face?”

“Yeah?” Sayu questioned

Reina shrugged “Yeah”

“Yeah?!”

“Yeah”

“That is just wrong”

“But...”

“But what?”

Reina sighed “But nothing, we cool?”

Sayu took a minute to think it over “Not sure”

“Seriously?”

Reina turned her body so that she was facing Sayu

“My face is very important to me Reina, I'm hurt that you thought about striking it.”

“Seriously?” Reina asked again in disbelief

“Seriously!”

Reina turned around again now facing forward she folded her arms and grumbled “Fine! Whatever I'm sorry!”

“I'm didn't hear that say again.. Oh and louder this time” said Sayu with a devilish smile on her face

“F**k you!” Reina grumbled

“HAHA its okay! I hard you say it the first time so bleh”

Childish possibly crazy thieves...

“Whatever! Risa where are you taking us?” Reina asked, eager to change the conversation

“The hostages are waking up so I'm going to stop at home depot for some rope and duct tape.  Then we are heading... there”

How did she know I was up?
...Oh yea the scream!


“Ha!  See this is why she's the reliable one... wait. There? Where's there?”

“There is where they live” Risa answered

“Who's they”

“They is them folks I never wanna see again! Why are we heading there?!” Reina yelled

“Because they are the only ones who can help us”

“F**k that!”

“Where else are we going to go?” asked Risa who tried to remain calm

“Who are they? “Where is there?!” Sayu asked annoyed that they were being so cryptic

“GAM”

“Gam? As in an attractive female leg?” asked Sayu

“No as in Great Aya and Miki.. it just so happens to mean that.”

“Do they have nice legs?”

“Well yea they do, but it was more of a cheesy nickname they called themselves.”

“Are you sure, because thats one hell of a coincidence”

“Yup! Just go with it”

“Okay... and we are going to them because?”

To drop off our dead corpses?

“There the best at what they do”

Dispose of hostages?

“Which is?”

“You'll see” said Reina

“You can't just tell me?

“No”

“Why not?”

“Don't feel like it bleh”

“Risa!”

“Reina stop teasing Sayu”

“She started it!”

“Lies!”Sayu yelled

Hmm they don't seem to scary but still they are armed and dangerous criminals
can't let my guard down

« Last Edit: August 15, 2009, 12:04:53 AM by takagakifan »
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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 7: Breakin' Old Habits... is hard too do)
« Reply #49 on: August 14, 2009, 06:31:02 AM »
OMG, Risa as a former street racer, Ai's manish screams, Reina and Sayu's fight. I just about pissed myself laughing, or trying not to laugh as my friend is sleeping peacefully. And GAM in the next chapter. Oh please hurry with that. This story is so awesome.

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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 7: Breakin' Old Habits... is hard too do)
« Reply #50 on: August 14, 2009, 06:39:16 AM »
LMAO ah man this chapter was so funny!  XD :lol: I love it. I love the fights between Reina and Sayu. I always look forward to those. They're just too amusing and hilarious. Though I can't help but wonder from that argument if they like each other. Reina should just kiss her and that way she wouldn't have to hear Sayu's whining anymore! lol AND she won't get Sayu mad at her. See it works out on both ends if they did that. Or my logic is all wrong.
 Risa was a street racer?? Some how I find that really hot. lol She used not only her wits to win but her hotness cuz who can resist her!?That explains why she was arrested though. And in comes GAM!  :cow: They're always so fun to read in fics. I wonder what it is that they're good at. I can't wait to read when they come into the scene. I forgot, Ai's in here?! So SHE was Eri's cousin I kinda guessed that. Does that mean there will be TakaGaki? ^_^ I hope so! I can't wait for another chapter.

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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 7: Breakin' Old Habits... is hard too do)
« Reply #51 on: August 14, 2009, 12:33:08 PM »
LOL I love how this story makes me laugh my head off every single chapter! :mon lmao:

"Bunnies, diamonds, and shopping sprees."  LOL yeah Sayu!  You go girl!  Creep Reina out!  :mon lmao:

LOL Man scream!  the face! and Risa as a street racer! :mon lmao:

Can't wait to see how crazy GAM are  :lol:


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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 7: Breakin' Old Habits... is hard too do)
« Reply #52 on: August 14, 2009, 02:41:03 PM »
ROFL, this was too awesome and I agree with Junkie, there are totes TanaShige vibes coming off this fic, whether intentional or not. Well, whether or not that's coming up in future chapters, the two of them are just hilarious together. XD ...Wait, wasn't I just cheering for KameShige just a chapter ago? XP

O: So Ai was worried that Risa, Reina and Sayu were actually targeting them? Why do I get a feeling they're the daughters of either really important or really rich people? Heh, I liked Ai's observations on her three kidnappers. X3 Too bad Eri's been knocked out this whole chapter, I can't wait to see her reactions to this situation.

We finally found out what Risa did in the past... and... SHE'S SO COOL! The moment she was putting up her hair, I was getting ready for something amazing because something amazing always happens when her hair is up (Prince Gaki, hello?<3).

HOMG, it's Great Aya and Miki♥ The next chapter's going to be so much win just because of that.
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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 7: Breakin' Old Habits... is hard too do)
« Reply #53 on: August 14, 2009, 07:49:07 PM »
*dies from laughter* That's what happened to me. :rofl: TanaShige argument is so awesome. But my favorite part is Gaki being all Fast and Furious. 8) *gasps* GAM?!

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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 7: Breakin' Old Habits... is hard too do)
« Reply #54 on: August 15, 2009, 06:40:47 AM »
Ch 7: Breakin' Old Habits... Is hard too do

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Ai's Pov
AICHAN IS ERI'S COUSIN!?!? :o



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Ah! So their leader, this is.
She talked like Yoda. XD



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“We are all gonna die!”

“Bunnies, diamonds, and shopping sprees.  Bunnies, diamonds, and shopping sprees.  Bunnies, diamonds, and...” Sayu repeats to herself over  and over again while rocking her body back and forth

“Shut up Sayu!  Shut up Sayu!  Shut up! What the hell man, mantras?! You tryna freak me out?! Cuz I ain't scared! Reina ain't neva scared ya dig? Better recognize-- Aww f**k whats da use? Ahhhhhhhhh!”
It's no use. Sometimes you just have to freak out. :yep:



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Risa remained oblivious to the noise, all her focus was on the road.   Her body felt one with the car... total silence all she heard is the purrs of her ride.  She reminisced of her time as a illegal street racer flashed before, she smiled.  She eyed her rear view mirror watch as the cops crashed trying to follow her.  She smiled again

Its been too long
Betcha now Reina wishes that Risa had been their driver instead of Sayu. :lol:



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*EVERYONE REACTING TO AICHAN'S MAN-ISH SCREAMING*
:on lol:



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*AICHAN OBSERVING AND MAKING MENTAL NOTES ON THE OTHERS*
Very good. Smart move there Aichan.  :thumbsup



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*SAYU'S MANTRA*
:mon lmao:



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*OMGASS NOT DA FACE*
Sayu = :scared:
Reina = :dunno:
Sayu = :gmon cry:
Reina =  :cool2:



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Risa where are you taking us?” Reina asked, eager to change the conversation

“The hostages are waking up so I'm going to stop at home depot for some rope and duct tape.
Home Depot!
:wahaha:

Smart move actually. Risa knows that the tranquilizer wouldn't last forever, so they need something to use for restraints.



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Why are we heading there?!” Reina yelled

“Because they are the only ones who can help us”

...

“Who are they? “Where is there?!” Sayu asked annoyed that they were being so cryptic

“GAM”

“Gam? As in an attractive female leg?” asked Sayu

“No as in Great Aya and Miki.. it just so happens to mean that.”
OSNAP! GAM!!! :rockon: :cow:



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“There the best at what they do”

...

“Which is?”

“You'll see” said Reina
Aw c'mon! :O We wanna know!



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Hmm they don't seem to scary but still they are armed and dangerous criminals
can't let my guard down
Nah, they're just frantically...frantic right now.  :P

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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 7: Breakin' Old Habits... is hard too do)
« Reply #55 on: August 15, 2009, 09:31:30 AM »
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Risa remained oblivious to the noise, all her focus was on the road.   Her body felt one with the car... total silence all she heard is the purrs of her ride.  She reminisced of her time as a illegal street racer flashed before, she smiled.  She eyed her rear view mirror watch as the cops crashed trying to follow her.  She smiled again

Its been too long

well that's hot...  :mon crazyinlove:


SAYU AND REINA...  :mon lol: :mon zoom:

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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 7: Breakin' Old Habits... is hard too do)
« Reply #56 on: August 15, 2009, 11:03:31 PM »
Earlier this week I've read from the beginning to chapter 6 straight through and I lol'd throughout the whole thing :wahaha: These girls are so out of character from their real personalities, it's HI-larious. Although Eri remains to have her sleeping habit as she is still knocked out throughout the last chapter.  :rofl:

Your story reminds me of a story idea I've had for a long time but never written. It's about 3 girls who are fugitives of the law as well and they form a band. XD It's probably not funny like yours but it seems like a crazy story. I'm tempted to start writing it but I have too many stories going on.  :doh:

Anyway can't wait for the next part. :D

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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 8: Ms. Officer)
« Reply #57 on: October 21, 2009, 04:20:43 AM »
Soo... yea I'm back with another late update... Unforntunately this chapter is... not to good... and not too funny but.... at least i got this chapter out of the way so i can concentrate on the important stuff... GAM shennigans so um i hope enjoy and of course

comments are appreciated
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Chapter 8: Ms. Officer

~At the scene of the crime~

Aika's Pov

One, two, three, breathe just because this is your first major case as a detective doesn't mean there's pressure..

“Hi”

“HI!” she squeaked

“Wow that was pretty high pitched there” Said a tall girl wearing a well fitted suit and a big smile

“Oh sorry you startled me I was just-”

“Meditating”

“Yea-No! I was thinking about the-”

“Deep breathing exercises help me out when I'm nervous too!”

“I'm not nervous!”

“Well you should be? Isn't this your first big case?”

“Well yea but- wait who are you?”

“Koharu Kusumi.... Special Agent Koharu Kusumi but most people call me Koha sometimes Miracle-chan” Koharu giggled.  Then suddenly she looked very seriously at Aika.  “Look I'm not trying to take over.... although I can” she paused to make sure Aika understood.  “I want to work with you on this case.. so lets be friends” she finishes smiling brightly. 

“Well Special Agent Kusumi-

“Please call me Koharu”

“Umm... Special Agent Koharu-”

“Just Koharu, and your name is...?” she looked at her expectantly

“Detective Aika Mitsui” she replied

“Don't like it”

“Excuse me?” Aika said shocked.  However, Koharu had suddenly walked away from her.  Her eyebrows began to furrow as she realized that Koharu had just left her mid-conversation.

Top of my class at the academy!
Youngest detective in my squad!
And this... this UGH! This PERSON!
How dare she!


She took some deep breathes and regained her composure.  This was her first major case and it made her tense.  She knew the captian assigned her this job because of her skill and maturity despite her young age. 

“Mmhmm... Uh-huh... Aha!  Obviously we're dealing with professionals” Koharu shouted from withing the bank

Aika turned to face her. She was staring at the camera lens that had been sprayed black, rubbing her chin.

“How do you know?”

“I can feel it...” Koha paused “in my gut”

“I see...”

“I'm thinking ex military maybe...”

“Well a witness reported 2 small girls wearing a purple and a green-'

“Yes,” Koharu walked toward Aika “But does your gut tell you?”

“That we should question some mor-”

“Ah ah ah your gut” Said while gesturing at Aika's abdomen

“Stop pointing at my stomach please! It is saying to follow protocol and-”

“Tsk tsk tsk I thought more of you.. uhhhh ummm whats-your-face”

“Detective Mitsui” she spoke through clenched teeth

“Mitsui? Hmmmm nope don't like it! Mittsi fits you better"

She sighed “Sure”

“You don't like it” Koharu said while pouting

“Mittsi is cute I guess” she said while her eyebrows slowly began to tense up

“YAY!!  Now that is settled its off to the crime lab!”

“Huh?!”

“The scene already been processed, we have a crew chasing their vehicle--” she held her hand to her ear “Scratch that have lost the perps, the witness aren't going to be of any help... its time to go! I hate staying in one place for to long”

“If you say so..”

“And I do! The longer we spend here the easier it is for them to get away... You don't want them to get away do you??” she said eying Aika suspiciously

“Wha- Of course not I resent the accus-”

“This is going to be soooo much fun! Ready?!” Koharu exclaimed cheerfully

“No.” Aika responded unenthusiastically

“Too bad lets go!”
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~Meanwhile back at Home Depot~

“Oh Em Gee (OMG) Reina!  I had no idea there were so many different colored duct tape!  We should totally get the pink one!”  Sayu said excitedly

“You can not be serious!” Reina said rolling her eyes

“Why not?”

“Pink?! What self- respecting person would use pink duct tape!  Lets get the purple one.” she grinned

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~Back at the Crime Lab~
Aika's Pov

“Welcome to the CSI lab! Like it? We are probably gonna spend most of our time down here since we are dealing with masterminds.  The cops reported some intense driving skills.  Hey do you think we may be facing people like that guy in 'The Transporter'?”

“Excuse m--”

“No..  these guys were way to small... whoever they are cant be taken lightly”

I really wish she would stop cutting me off mid sentence

“High tech stuff,” She said point at the equpiment in the room “But don't break them or else I'm gonna need to arrest you.. which I can” Koha peeked over at Aika to judge her reaction

“I see”

Koharu led Aika to the trace evidence room.

“I want you too meet the 2 lab rats we will be working with during this case”

“I resent that” said a girl with long back hair and chubby cheeks

“Oh she's just mad cuz she hasn't had her morning banana” said another girl smiling strangely wide at her “I'm Lin Lin”

“Its not because of that!” the other girl shouted indignantly

“So you don't want a banana?”

“Do u have a banana?”

“No”

“Then why bring it up!”

Koha smiled “The grumpy one is Jun Jun”

“I'm not grumpy! And I'm not a Lab Rat! I'm a CSI Field Agent!”

Koharu laughed, “Whatever,” she placed her hand on top of Aika's head, “and this little cutie potootie here is Mittsi”

Aika swatted away Koharu's hand.  “its Aika M-”

“But we've already decided we like Mittsi better remember?” Koha whined

Just go along with it... there's is no sense in fighting with a fool "Yup"

“Well as you all know a bank was robbed! So this means we are on a time crunch to catch those goons before time runs out!”

“What tim-” Mittsi began to ask

“Luckily! I have managed to lower our pool of suspects by compiling the clues and forming a criminal profile!”

“Really thats amazing!” Aika shouted surprised

I knew she couldn't be all dumb! She's really young and already in the FBI, eccentric people are usually the most brilliant....

Jun Jun sighed and got up from her seat. “I don't have time for this I'm going on lunch”

“Oh me too! I'm starving, lunch would be perfect!” Lin Lin said and followed her out

“OK enjoy your meal be back in an hour, we got serious work to do!” Koha said to them before continuing “Yes well I am 98% sure that they are midgets with military background..”

“WHAT?!” Aika yelled

Or sometimes they just stupid and eccentric!

“They shouldn't be too hard to find ...” Koharu continued

“YOU have GOT to be KIDDING!”

“I don't kid, kid”

“Are nuts?! That makes no sense!”

“Well you know what! Blahblaabloobleebloo!”

WTF?!

“WHAT THE HELL IS WRONG WITH YOU?!”

Suddenly there was a burst of laughter “Haha You should of seen your face you totally bought that! Haha you are way too gullible Mittsi! Alright enough playing around we got to get to work” she said in between giggles

All Aika could do was stare in disbelief

I'm calling the captain there is no way I can work with this girl
No one on the corner got swagga like us!

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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 7: Breakin' Old Habits... is hard too do)
« Reply #58 on: October 21, 2009, 05:24:34 AM »
ah Koharu...she really is a miracle :mon evillaff:

and yes.  Purple duct tape is so much better :mon determined:

Can't wait for the crazy GAM-ing!

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Re: Paper Trails (Chapter 7: Breakin' Old Habits... is hard too do)
« Reply #59 on: October 21, 2009, 07:09:59 AM »
Aika! Poor Aika! OMG if Koharu was actually a higher ranking detective I could totally see this happening. And that little aside about duct tape was hilarious. :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol:

I definitely need some more of this story.

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