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Re: Gegenschein: The First [23/9 - Tablet V]
« Reply #40 on: October 02, 2010, 08:09:11 PM »
Tablet VI


Raven supposes that no matter what happens, she keeps moving on.

People died. They keep on dying. She keeps going.

She died. She kept on going even then (through no fault of her own).

She suspects it's easier to deal with things if she just kept moving. That way, she wouldn't have to think, to consider, to really contemplate how events affected her. Leaping from one challenge to the next, testing herself continually and never stopping.

Being blessed, or cursed, to see the reality of the world as it is could be a major pain in the ass. Realizing just how insignificantly puny one was in the general scheme of things made moving on a great deal easier.

Raven supposed that it was the only way she knows how to live. Always in motion, always unaffected by the events around her. She was, and would be. What she is, though, changes and remains the same all the time, every time.

She chases that which does not wish to be caught, if only to give herself something to do.

It was only until after she caught up that she realized the difference between them.

It was also then that she realized she had found something to do for the rest of her life, long as it would probably be, whether she liked it or not.

Oh well, at least it should keep things interesting.

~*~*~

Wrong. It was all wrong.

She drops the head in disgust, barely noticing as it hit the ground with a soft plop. Her bare feet squelches around in the red muck, casually kicking aside a fallen limb as she stalks like a hungry predator around the camp.

The kicked over embers were sputtering, a cooking pot overturned next to it. She had interrupted their noonday meal, walking in as innocent as anything, dressed in rags like a lowly slave. Their hard-eyed glances had followed her, with suspicion in more than one eye, but none of them had suspected her of being the monster she was.

After all, they had been expecting attacks in the night. Their customary prey never did frequent the day, they couldn't. Little over a century since the last of the true abominations had perished, and the customary caution had faded over the relatively short period of time. Most people just wanted to treat it like a terrible nightmare, over and done with.

Hell, she wanted it to be a horrible nightmare she could wake up from. But no, she had to live this nightmare. She was the nightmare. There was no escape. Not for her, or for those she hunted.

Wrong. This was the wrong group. Frustrated, she stamps the dying embers out in a fit of childish anger, heedless of the seared skin...which knits together in moments. so never mind that.

As suddenly as her anger had flared, she freezes. Without warning, she falls into a crouch, rippling fits travelling through her shaking form. She snarls, her fangs showing clearly for once, even as she struggles to control her spasming body.

Blood... Unthinkingly, she latches onto the nearest corpse, lapping at the torn throat. Her rampage had not ended so long ago as to allow the blood to start coagulating, so she was able to stomach a few mouthfuls before hurling the body away in distaste.

Images swim before her eyes, a whirl of impressions and even emotions of the man's last moments just screaming at her...and she saw herself, a bloodstained demon, the last thing he saw, before she had torn them out in a frenzy.

She is almost sick right there on that killing field, but sets her jaw firmly and rises, letting the images wash over her as if they meant nothing. A cold feeling runs through her, and she closes her eyes, reaching out with her other senses...

Hard eyes snap open, a complete change from the almost berserk fury that had raged in the same orbs just seconds before. There is a coldness there, an unemotional air to her demeanor. Slowly, she cracks her neck, first one way, then the other. There was a sinuous quality to her movements, like a coiled serpent ready to strike...

And then she was no longer standing there. Instead, she had one man raised half in the air, the poor bastard somehow having managed to escape her killing rage the first time. He was already wounded, naturally, but had not tried risking another suicide attempt at her after barely saving his own skin after her initial attack. Playing dead was all very well and good, even convincingly as it was attempted: he had fallen in his own blood, and his dead comrades had fallen over him. But she still sensed him somehow. Damnations.

She eyes him with a cold curiosity, almost distant, as if she isn't choking him with one hand at the same time. He flails weakly, but she had not tightened her grip so painfully as to completely cut off his breathing...or for that matter, to sever his head from his spine either.

"De..mon..." He manages to squeeze out painfully, wheezing. Her eyes narrow infinitesimally, as does her grip. He tries to get a grip on her deceptively slender arm, but his left hand would not obey -- the small bones in it had been broken earlier.

"It is good you still live." The voice that came from her was raspy from disuse, but surprisingly normal for all that. "It would have been...troublesome...without any clue where to go next if you had all died."

"You'll get...nothing...from me." She had slackened the grip just enough for him to speak, and he gathered his courage to defy this monster before him. He had no doubt that she would kill him either way, there was no mercy from the likes of such abominations. But he would not be of use to her. He would not.

A dry chuckle, more mechanical than heartfelt, as if it were a learned response. There was something inhuman in those dark eyes, made worse by the visage splashed in the blood of his brothers. He had thought the girl beautiful when she first collapsed at the edge of their camp, but there was none of it present right now.

"Boy..." Her voice was low, almost like the purr of a great cat. "I never intended to ask in the first place."

She lets go of his throat, and even as he is falling, he grabs the dagger at his belt with his right hand, intent on landing at least one blow on her before he met his fate. He stabs mere air where she was just standing no more than a blink ago, and she is suddenly behind him.

Fingers slick with gore clap over his face, holding him still as he felt the much smaller girl kick him at the back of his knees. The limb gave way with a sickening crack, and he was forced to the ground.

"The hunters at Zagros...the God-slayers...where are they?"

The hiss was barely human, and he could barely focus on anything other than the incredible pain from his newly broken knee, when a surprisingly gentle touch to his neck made him forget it entirely.

"Everything you know...give it to me." She whispers, barely audible, before plunging her fangs into his jugular. His eyes dilate, from fear, pain, or even pleasure...it was hard to tell.

Conscious thought, memory, emotions, impressions...the veritable maelstrom of the human mind howling into her as she fed. With ruthless precision, she wrestles order from the chaos, calling on memory that was not hers for aid.

All she needed was a direction, nothing more. Better if he knew exactly where, but she wasn't going to risk draining him dry. She didn't need or want his mind cluttering hers up. Already, what she had taken would take days, if not weeks, to fade from her consciousness.

North. Another band. Another hunt. She drops him carelessly, but not without breaking his neck first. She never left any survivors. She wasn't going to start now.

Already the fury was coming back. Her calm receded as a boiling rage came to the surface, seething. She would stop for nothing, spare no one, until she had her revenge.

So many dead...I will take my price for the ones you vermin took from me.

Unconsciously, she was rubbing her belly, but the action only fanned her rage as another half-formed memory whispered its existence.

"I will kill you all..." Dark eyes solidified into a deep red, even as rationality faded away.

It was not a threat. It was a promise.

The sun shone overhead in mocking benediction.


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Not much of actual fighting, but it's hard to have a good fight when it's so one sided. Gore though, just for Sushi.  :twisted:

EDIT: Oooh I got a new page. :D

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Re: Gegenschein: The First [3/10 - Tablet VI]
« Reply #41 on: October 02, 2010, 09:37:53 PM »
lol im glad u liked the way how i said it lol that's how it felt to me^^; and i guess it was ^^ yay for straight-forwardness~!

now raven..i still dont know who the hell she is XDDD

the 2nd part....ai is one hell of a bad ass vampier person lady girl! XD the part when she goes all spazzy for blood really creeped me up...in a good way? XD
and the army guy was like getting his dream come true yet nightmare XD who would think that the pretty girl would be the one to kill u AND the army? that must suck.
and lastly the part where she rubbed her tummy made me go :cry: poor ai-chan!D:

great job and dont worry about the commonters k? im sure more ppl are reading but are LURKING! if u get vampier ai on them i'm sure they'll come out XD
is everything ok now btw? i hope ur bad mood's gone...unless this triggered it^^; did that make sense? lol

EDIT-holly cow this was my 600th post! well im happy it was on here so this post is for u essy^^
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Re: Gegenschein: The First [3/10 - Tablet VI]
« Reply #42 on: October 03, 2010, 01:00:53 AM »
Now I'm 99% sure Raven is Ai   :yep:  And the other girl from the previous chapter could be Reina's ancestor.


Lovely chapter, it's like I was watching a TV.


I need some vinegar and spices or a straw will do too  :grin: Eww  :grin:


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The hiss was barely human, and he could barely focus on anything other than the incredible pain from his newly broken knee, when a surprisingly gentle touch to his neck made him forget it entirely.

"Everything you know...give it to me." She whispers, barely audible, before plunging her fangs into his jugular. His eyes dilate, from fear, pain, or even pleasure...it was hard to tell.
A pervert victim  XD 

I love those lines though, it's like I was the one being bitten by AI of course  :D

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Re: Gegenschein: The First [3/10 - Tablet VI]
« Reply #43 on: October 03, 2010, 06:24:28 PM »
I fell like I don't have any idea anymore, feels as though Ai could be Raven and Raven could be Ai while at the same time being completely separate, except that they are connected. I just can't pinpoint where exactly. @_@ Need the last piece!

But I do so love a good gore scene, especially with Ai in the middle.

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Re: Gegenschein: The First [3/10 - Tablet VI]
« Reply #44 on: October 04, 2010, 02:18:35 PM »
Right, I'm thinking that Raven is Ai, but perhaps nit at the same time, perhaps raven is a part of Ai, or perhaps ASi is a part of Raven?

Why do I really feel that i would not like to be a 'god slayer' right about now?

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Re: Gegenschein: The First [3/10 - Tablet VI]
« Reply #45 on: October 11, 2010, 05:12:19 AM »
Yoohoo I'm back. Anyone miss me?

Comment replies first.


waiwai: Wow your 600th post for me! :heart: Thanks. :D I'm glad you liked badass vampire Ai. :D And lol I've come to accept that it's gonna be just you guys commenting. That's ok, it's better than nothing. At least you guys show you care. :D

kRisZ: Lol I would like to know your logic for the Raven = Ai conclusion. XD Hehe being bitten by Ai isn't such a bad way to go~

rndm: *pats poor confused rndm* You're very perceptive really. XD I couldn't have put it better than you have. Haha.

oddball: You'll see. Different sides of the same coin? Yet because they are different, much difference? Hm. Wait. Let's not get confused now. XD And nope, you definitely don't want to be a god slayer right now. XD


*yawns* Damn, I stayed up too late writing this, then I passed out. Haha. Had to edit a little when I woke up, but here's the new chapter!

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Re: Gegenschein: The First [3/10 - Tablet VI]
« Reply #46 on: October 11, 2010, 05:33:14 AM »
Tablet VII


The fire danced on one outstretched fingertip, casting light and shadow all around the scorched ground. The hand closed, smothering the flames into a shower of sparks that fell onto cold stone at her feet.

"Fascinating..." The whisper was almost reverent, even as she manipulated the elements as if it was child's play to her. A tiny cyclone spun wildly in the middle of her palm.

There was a nervous cough in the dark behind her. A dark presence, almost undetectable, yet oddly familiar. She did not turn around, knowing that her Master meant her no harm.

"You're taking to this very well." Master's voice was quiet. Raven shook her head. It was hard to think of her as anything but Master nowadays, but she knew what her true name was.

Summer, that's right. Her name means Summer.

"I miss the sun." She stated just a bit petulantly. Blowing lightly, she sent her mini-cyclone spinning across the ground, watching as it tossed a few pebbles around before falling apart.

"I am sorry for keeping you from the afterlife." Master, no, Summer sounded genuinely regretful. Raven recalled that the people of the Two Lands held great store by their gods and the life beyond. Her own people had venerated the land, and death merely meant a return to the spirits of the land. The fact that she would not be returning to the land did not bother her as much as it probably should have, though it was difficult to explain to Summer about that.

"What's done is done." Raven shrugged. "If you cannot undo it, then don't apologize for it."

Summer sat down next to her. The elder vampire cut a small figure, almost overshadowed by Raven's larger frame. As Raven kindled yet another flame on her palm, Summer reached out and smothered it, the flames charring her skin. Their hands clapsed, Raven could feel exactly how her Master's skin knitted together quickly, leaving no evidence of the burn.

"You insist on chasing the Wild One then?" Summer's voice was quiet, but did not hold approval or disapproval. Raven closed her eyes, thinking.

"I don't like being beaten." A cold flutter of wind whispered at her ear, and Raven listened. Next to her, Summer raised one hand to cradle her Child's face lightly, bringing their foreheads together.

"It will bring you to grief." Summer murmured. Raven hesitated for a moment, then reached up to grasp her Master's wrist. Her hold was gentle, though her gaze was fierce.

"I am already in darkness." Her voice was quiet. Summer looked stricken for a moment, but Raven continued on, leaning into her Master's touch.

"But you are with me."

Summer smiled.

"I am with you."

~*~*~

There are secrets in the dark. Summer once belonged to the day, but Raven had always been a denizen of shadow. Things only the day knew, but did not share with her counterpart...

Summer did not want her Raven to catch up to the Wild One, even as her own instincts yearned to hunt that abomination down. It was what she had once been called to do, not so very long ago. It made no sense. The last of them had been exterminated in the last great hunt. There should not be any left. She would know, she watched it end.

That thing was dangerous. The ones she had seen before were all half-mad, horribly deformed in mind and body. It had been a mercy to end their lives for them, brought back incompletely as they were. As it were, they had been a plague on mankind.

A plague that was supposed to have ended a hundred years ago. Yet here was another. It only took one to spread the disease. Even as they followed in this destroyer's footsteps, Summer had personally checked to make sure that none of the victims were infected. So far, the monster had only killed, but not turned anyone else.

Raven had taken to her new life much better than Summer had originally. It made the older vampire wonder just how warped her fledgling was. There was an edge to Raven, a side that was just begging to spit destiny in the face and then stomp all over it. This mad quest was but one sign. Raven was certainly not as stable as she appeared to be.

We're all a little mad inside. Summer knew it, saw it in herself. She had once tried to drown herself in the Nile, but that had been a futile effort. Nothing less than burning under the sun would do, she supposed. She might have sought death, but yet she clung to life, even this miserable simulcrum of it, harder than anyone else.

Summer wondered just how mad she really was, even as she deliberately led Raven astray. She would not let her fledgling meet a true fiend without ascertaining just what it was up to.

To meet with a horned viper armed with little more than a stick and her own wits...that was how she felt as she approached. Such implements were sufficient in the hands of the skilled, but would she prove herself worthy of the task?

Mad, indeed. I must be mad.

She went expecting a monster. She left behind her a woman in mourning. What is justice indeed, if it were to persecute those who only wanted to be left alone? Ma'at forgive her, but it was only right that the injured sought redress for what was owed her. An eye for an eye, a tooth for a tooth. Blood for blood.

Still, right or no, that child needed to be watched. It was her last duty to the mad God that had raised them to fight this evil. The moment she crossed the line, she would have to be terminated.

It was the only way.

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Notes:

1) Two Lands - One of the old names for ancient Egypt.

2) Ma'at - Goddess of Justice in Egypt. Also know as "the Rule" which governs the lives of men, so that justice is present in all that they do.


Been reading quite a bit about Egypt to get stuff right. I'm not sure if it's wholly accurate, but hey, the thought counts!

As usual, Gegenschein the series spans across both time and space. It's never going to be confined to one era or one region. There's always a global side to it, I suppose. I wrote myself into an epic, but I couldn't be happier about that. :lol:

As usual, a big hug to all those who commented. As for the lurkers, have a police baboon. (Yes they actually have police baboons in Ancient Egypt. Shocking, isn't it?) Crocodiles all!

...yeah I'm crazy. :lol:

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Re: Gegenschein: The First [11/10 - Tablet VII]
« Reply #47 on: October 11, 2010, 06:44:36 AM »
my goodness dont pass out on us!D:*hugs* we need u to live ok?

ok i wanna say summer's officially abe XD idk why but i shall XD and i still dont know who raven is but i guess the 2 of them are looking for ai? gah~ idk idk~*rolls around*

and yes~ im happy ur happy and glad that we care X3 ur an awesome writer essy u deserve some awesome props~^^
cant wait for the next one~ :heart:
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Re: Gegenschein: The First [11/10 - Tablet VII]
« Reply #48 on: October 11, 2010, 10:43:20 AM »
Summer and Raven. I love the interaction between them, very, hmm, famiiar, in more ways than one.So what exactly do they hunt? Like a gnarled nosferatu? I want to post a better comment, but I need to go back and reread again and that will probably have to wait until I get home. I guess I'll just end this with a quote for now and a promise to edit my reply later.

Alice: But I don't want to go among mad people.
The Cat: Oh, you can't help that. We're all mad here. I'm mad. You're mad.
Alice: How do you know I'm mad?
The Cat: You must be. Or you wouldn't have come here.
Alice: And how do you know that you're mad?
The Cat: To begin with, a dog's not mad. You grant that?
Alice: I suppose so,
The Cat: Well, then, you see, a dog growls when it's angry, and wags its tail when it's pleased. Now I growl when I'm pleased, and wag my tail when I'm angry. Therefore I'm mad.

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Re: Gegenschein: The First [11/10 - Tablet VII]
« Reply #49 on: October 11, 2010, 02:40:38 PM »
Hmm Raven and Summer, definatly an intresting pair, all though summer is the older it seems as though raven is the one who's truly in charge, as a pair they also act close and distant at the same time, very intresting

Summer regrets what she has done, I wonder if this involves Ai at all(or raven or both or perhaps even the same) intresting that they are also both 'hunter' seeking an abomination?

I kinda keep thinking of two 'blade' type characters at the moment....

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Re: Gegenschein: The First [11/10 - Tablet VII]
« Reply #50 on: October 11, 2010, 07:34:46 PM »
Hola! Here I is. :D Bet I surprised you guys!


waiwai: Lol I guess it's easy to think of Abe when the name is Summer? Not that it particularly matters...you'll see. XD I'll try to take better care of myself....*bends double from gastric* x_X I'll..try...

rndm: I beat you to your edit. :lol: Have no fear! New chapter is fear. Yes, we're all mad, and I love that quote! XD

oddball: Yes I rather like Raven and Summer. They're an interesting pair, suffice to say.


Ugh pain, but let's proceed to edit!

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Re: Gegenschein: The First [11/10 - Tablet VII]
« Reply #51 on: October 11, 2010, 07:50:31 PM »
Tablet VIII


She slumps down in the highest branches of a looming cedar, letting herself become part of the frosty scenery in the mountains of Lebanon.

It comforts her to be in high places, where she had spent the happiest times in her life, before everything went wrong. Here among the trees, snow and cold, she could heal; it was different from the dusty heat she was used to, but this suits her perfectly. The higher she was, the further away she was from causing harm to others.

Pain exhausts her already strained mind; it pulls at her battered reserves, demanding more from a consciousness split within itself. Already she finds it difficult to focus on what is before her; images from other places, other people, haunt her. Oft times she finds herself speaking aloud in a tongue she does not remember learning, or performing little gestures she doesn't recognize, yet finds oddly familiar at the same time. It chills her -- she is no longer sure what is her, or if it is all merely whispers of a dream, dreams of others.

Desperate, she clings to the rough bark, seeking the gloomy solidity it presents. Her prodigious strength, a result of her change, causes her to tear a wound in the old tree. It reminds her of how her hands wreak only destruction, and a fresh wave of despair washes over her -- along with the heady scent of balsam.

Surprised, she inhales, and finds her nasal passages clearing, bringing to her a rare calm that was hardly ever present in recent times. The sticky sap oozes like thick blood out of the living tree, and she leans against the solid trunk. She hears the heartbeat of the ancient tree, senses the roots reaching deep below the snow-covered ground. This tree has been alive for a long long time, as humans know it, had they been capable of scaling this high without aid.

There was an absolute serenity to it. The tree did not consider beginning or end, it merely is, and will be. Closing her eyes, she remembers her Lord's words in one of his many lessons.

"Not everyone is capable of understanding eternity without actually living it. Even though I have endless time before me, there are times when even I do not understand what it truly means. I can only look to the present, instead of fearing the future."

"But what of the future? Does it not concern you what it will bring?"

"Ah, that is true. But Ayesha, today's future is merely tomorrow's present. We are all but moments in this great river of time, engaged in a continual present..."

"I do not understand."

"Perhaps you will, in time."


Time, such an elusive concept. Here, amidst the timeless trees, Aisha (lovingly dubbed Ayesha by her Lord) could briefly glimpse eternity as it applied to beings like her.

A ripple in her second sight, and she was moving before she even stops to think. A blast of heat radiates both reality and unreality, a white hot flash that momentarily blinds her. But she has other senses at her disposal, and hisses in warning as she lands in a crouch on an opposing branch.

The cedar burns, and her heart howls at its injury. Another bolt splits the air towards her; she feels the air itself tearing in her second sight, and moves away without trouble. It strikes the heavy bark of the tree behind her, leaving a scorch mark.

They move like ghosts amidst the evergreens, the hunt following a familiar rhythm, like a dance. Aisha recognizes her attacker without seeing her; it wasn't the first time the upstart had come after her. Aside from showing a prodigious elemental ability, the rogue displayed a great deal of ingenuity and physical prowess as well.

Though the first time they clashed head-on, Aisha's unnatural strength had shattered the bronze sword and broken the wielder's wrist as well. Henceforth, their battles had tended to be conducted at range, usually when she least expected it.

She learns, however. The continual, intermittent pursuit forced her to hone her second sight, opening a literal whole new world to her senses. It was a dazzling, confusing whirl of color and impression. Her first tentative explorations of it gave her perpetual headaches, though she was growing accustomed to the kaleidoscopic nature of the Sight.

Aisha had known that she was being watched for a while, but showed no outward sign of noticing. Her dark shadow was not yet capable of killing her, though the girl had incredible potential. Aisha had no interest in eliminating night-walkers, however. She focused her wrath on the humans, the hunters. In truth, she even held some small sympathy for the children of the night, cursed never to walk in the day, and subject to similar torments as herself.

As if in reminder, a shudder of agony wracks her entire body, stopping her in her tracks. She hisses as a ball of fire grazes her shoulder, the burns healing in moments in a rippling move. Her fangs out, she pants heavily. Her last drink had been almost a week ago; she was definitely pushing her own limits.

The mindscape surrounding her holds a tinge of doubt, and the attacks pause. Without thought, Aisha suddenly accelerates, leaving a literal afterimage of herself where she was before she became completely untrackable by most eyes.

She collides with a surprised Raven, the taller girl knocked to the ground by the petite but insanely strong Aisha. Red eyes stare into dark ones, and Raven chokes as her captor tightens her grip. Yet it does not deter her from retaliating; one hand closes around the death grip, and lines of flame race up Aisha's arm in arcane patterns.

Raven rolls free, massaging her badly bruised neck as her quarry backs off. The flames dance as if alive, powered by the arcane symbols seared onto the skin. It burned, and would continue to burn, until there was nothing else left.

The pain is intense, doubly so for one who regenerates as well as Aisha does. The wounds could not close with the lasting flames, but her healing keeps it from eating her arm to bone and less. Tears spring from her eyes, even as she clutches the flaming limb.

It made for a peculiar scene at midnight. The forest was lit by the unnatural flames, and the two creatures, not so dissimilar from each other, faced off silently. Aisha does not scream, which impresses Raven; the soundless agony was fascinating in itself.

The silence ends as abruptly as it begins. Aisha raises her burning arm, sending shadows careening at wild angles. Raven takes a step back, suddenly cautious.

"Urgula. The Lion." A voice that was quite unlike Aisha's normal voice stated. It was her voice, no doubt, but it was as if someone else was speaking through her.

Raven is surprised once more. Only the most learned of scholars knew of the relation between the arcane lines in the sky and the forces running through the world. She had adapted the patterns to her runecraft, to amplify the elements. The Lion was the Sun, and would burn till the end of days.

"The Great One will devour." Again, that mechanical tone. There was a glint, almost a spark, in those red eyes. Raven's eyes narrowed. Surely not...

The dagger flashed gold in the flames, cutting swiftly and surely into the patterns drawn on the arm. Aisha did not even wince at the fresh wounds -- she was in enough pain that a little more matttered little.

Raven gaped. It was impossible, but there it was. Someone who knew the stars, knew about the magic of the land. Summer had had her own notions of magic, influenced by the culture of her native land. Her own grasp of the theory was fundamentally different, even radical for the time, and to have it countered just like that...

The lines of the Lion give way to the Water Bearer. Aisha collapses to her knees, still clutching the bronze dagger. Her arm sizzles audibly as it makes contact with the snow.

Logic suggests that Raven should flee, but she remains rooted, trying to comprehend the turn of events. Aisha looks up from her inflamed arm -- it would take a while to heal, after all it has been through. The swirling confusion surrounding Raven was easily readable, and when Aisha spoke, it was quiet, assuring.

"Ea, son of Enki, is my Master. It is but a small thing for the Water Bearer himself to quench the Lion's flame."

Raven understands in a moment, and she looks on the crouched figure with awe. Her attempts to kill the woman were no more than a test of her own ability...as well as her quarry's. There was no real grudge, at least not something to be held for a long time. Drawn by some unseen force, she kneels by Aisha, who draws away visibly, suspicious.

"You are...different." Raven tries to give voice to the nagging sense that had been dogging her even as she had pursued Aisha over the months.

"You are gifted." Aisha counters, already light on her feet and ready to flee if necessary.

"I know." There is no hint of pride or vanity in the statement, merely an acknowledgement of fact. Raven knew she was gifted, but she had worked hard for that 'gift'. No more, no less. This certainty raises her a few notches in Aisha's estimation, though she said nothing.

Aisha hisses again, her fangs extending in her distress. Her body feels cold, and her vision grows spotty. Her hands punch through the frozen ground, clenching in fury as she fought for control of her body.

A gentle touch almost makes her snap, but the firm grasp on her shoulder held no ill intent that she could read. Worry pulses from the dark blip on her Sight, but she remains unmoved...until she smells blood on the wind.

A bleeding wrist is before her, she latches on like a starved beast. The rush of flavor and memory is instantaneous; she sees the frozen tundra that raised the Raven before she was plucked and transported to the hot lands.

She does not take much; just that little taste has given her more than she can imagine. Her eyes fade back to a deep brown, soft and wondering. Raven grimaces, moving to withdraw her hand, but Aisha stops her.

"Let me." Her lips were incomparably soft on the torn skin, and Raven shudders. The skin mends with scarcely any effort, and both withdraw, quietened by the strange intimacy they just shared.

Aisha stands. She is still in pain, and still weak. She needed to feed. She turns away, and Raven suddenly speaks up.

"I'm still going to kill you, you know."

Aisha smiles.

"Good."

No more words were exchanged, and Raven watches her quarry disappear down the mountain, contemplative.

Off in the distance, Summer watches, her face twisting into an unflattering mask. Raven was hers, not someone else's. She would not share her fledgling with anyone, much less someone like that.

There are consequences for our actions. Some are just delayed.

In the end, we are the authors of our own fate.


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Notes:

1) Aisha/Ayesha - Aisha means "alive and well", and Ayesha means "small one". Pronunciation is quite close, and yes, this is Ai's original name as a human.

2) Urgula - The Babylonian name for the Leo constellation, hence "the Lion".

3) "The Great One", Water Bearer - The original Babylonian word is gula, which translates to "great one". Both refer to Aquarius, the Water Bearer.

4) Ea - Traditionally connected in Sumerian star readings to Aquarius. Enki literally translates to "lord of the earth", and has many references to water also.


Back to a more linear storytelling style that should be more familiar. And easier to read, I hope. XD

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Re: Gegenschein: The First [12/10 - Tablet VIII]
« Reply #52 on: October 11, 2010, 08:14:53 PM »
oh snap ai vs raven fight~ !! but thats a cute nickname for ai too have XD i wonder if she haited it at 1st XD

and now im like kinda lost cus if ai's a vampier and ravens a vampier too like why would they be fighting against eachotehr? unless ai's some creppy hybrid thing? XD i mean she's the "abomination" what the hell makes her so bad??  :panic:
and she's a water magic lady too??? :panic: :panic: :panic:
i wants more but i shal wait*sits and waits for the next one* :)
1 chappy after another my goodness ur making me happy X3 XD and aw summers not abe? oh well XD and plz try^^; XD
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Re: Gegenschein: The First [12/10 - Tablet VIII]
« Reply #53 on: October 12, 2010, 01:33:50 AM »
Ai is the abomination? I don't know why I'm so surprised. So Raven hunts her and Ai hunts hunters? Summer is the question, then. Where did she pop up from? I sense an Ai/Summer showdown sometime in the future. Or would that be somewhere in the distant present?

Still need to do some major reading, lol.

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Re: Gegenschein: The First [12/10 - Tablet VIII]
« Reply #54 on: October 13, 2010, 09:14:06 AM »
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Lol I would like to know your logic for the Raven = Ai conclusion.
Well my mind functions in a very simple way, maybe that’s why.  :nervous


Now, my mind's starting to spin  :grin:


Hmmm...  :)   


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Re: Gegenschein: The First [12/10 - Tablet VIII]
« Reply #55 on: October 13, 2010, 03:51:49 PM »
So Ai may well be the abomination, well at least in the eyes of summer and Raven anyway and they are hunting her while she is hunting the 'hunters' I wonder if it is becasue Ai is not sticking to some sort of code which her kind live by? (to agrerssive, killing too many?)

Why do I feel as though Summer may be more important than I first thought, she may be more key to this story than I first anticipated.

I wonder if the 'hunters' and Raven and Summer might at some point form an uneasy alliance?.....

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Re: Gegenschein: The First [12/10 - Tablet VIII]
« Reply #56 on: October 18, 2010, 09:29:13 AM »
*prances in* Essy-neechan~ :mon dance: :mon roll:  :mon hi:

My 1st post went to rokun and my 100th post goes to you. I found it fitting to leave my 100th post on jphip to be my first comment for one of your fics.

I used today as my day to go into reading mode and catch up with Gegenschein.  :mon angel: A blissful day full of questions, answers, comedy, gut-wrenching gore, more questions, and much more that my brain can't completely spout out due to my lack of words at the moment.

At this point, I am happily confused :mon thumb: . I'll probably come back tomorrow or sometime soon when my brain is fully(or at least more than half) functional and either edit this post or comment again if you've updated. I have some ideas but I think it'd just end up being incoherent brain barf if I actually tried to explain my guesses.

 :mon huh2: For some reason, I felt your writing change starting from Tablet VI.  :mon dunno: Then again, it could just be that the side effects of going into reading mode kicking in.

In any case.... I actually did prance into this thread after catching up.  :mon innocent: No lurking.

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Re: Gegenschein: The First [12/10 - Tablet VIII]
« Reply #57 on: October 18, 2010, 11:30:40 AM »
*wobble wobble*  I just caught up too...but I think I lost my brain along the way XD 

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Gore though, just for Sushi.

Ugh the gore! the gore!   :mon barf:

Tablet VIII

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The sticky sap oozes like thick blood out of the living tree

Must you ruin maple syrup for me as well, Ms Gore?!   :mon heh:

*tries to move on*  :cool2:  Let's see....

Tablet IV

Eeew the blood....*ahem* *tries to move on again*  oh tsk tsk....poor thing waited too long  :sweat:  Guess the lesson of the day is Carpe Diem...get your revenge while you can! 

Tablet V

Ooo mystery healer dude, he seems likable and creepy at the same time XD

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Summer, that's right. Her name means Summer.

Eeeeek don't tell me it's Koharu!  Wait...I'm thinking of the wrong season....indian summer...
good thing that thought only lasted a brief moment XD  Nacchi~   :wub:

Nacchi being all jealous is weird  :lol:

So let's see if I have any of this right.  So Raven is a kind of hunter.  Her clan got killed off by a different gang of people.  The same gang that killed off Ai chan's lover.  Raven's the educated one while Ai chan's more savage?  Ai chan gets revenge.  Raven gets gypped. Abe gets jealous and Raven and Ai chan fight?

LOL you're gonna tell me to re-read everything again aren't you?  XD


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« Reply #58 on: October 19, 2010, 09:18:00 AM »
Gah, forget about editing. I'll just use a new post to comment. My brain only retained like 50% of the story for Gegenschein: The First so I just decided to reread it since it's fairly short compared to Gegenschein.


Tablet I

Well, now I believe that the narrator of the prologue and her "partner" have that situation where one can't live without the other. Something like the idea that light can't exist without darkness. Vampires, hunters, werewolves; they all hunt and are hunted. What the hell even led me to this?  :P


Tablet II

Of course, they never get more than a moment's happiness. How many times does this guy save Ai? Let's see, I'd say he gave her life three times but I don't think making her undead counts.

Fairly irrelevant but can Ai swim? I really don't remember.  :lol:


Tablet III

You made me go back and check names. Barak, Baram, Baran. I'm so going to get lost in names.  :panic:

Oh well, my guess about why you chose to write this chapter from this POV is that it's kind of like a set up for Tablet II. Alright, so I phrased that badly but you'll have to forgive me since my brain still isn't functioning at 100% right now. In any case, I'd say Barak and his group are the ones that killed Ai's sire.


Tablet IV

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The only flicker of anything resembling hate was at the moment of killing. The instant she ended the life of anything, fiend or human, it was there where her eyes became fiery and alive, a seething rage that threatened to devour all that stood before her held barely in check.

And then the subject dies, and she is calm once more. Impassive, like a statue.

Just had to quote that because Raven kind of scares me. I love her.  :heart:

... What the... irony of feathers, child of the Night, dancing on night of the new moon.... something in my head is screaming "Werewolf!!!"  *shrugs* She's most likely a vampire but it still screams werewolf more than vampire to me. XD

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First priority: hunt down the bitch that killed me. Yeah, would have died. Hell, should have died. Damn friend should have been less softhearted. Hell, I should have just killed the idiot the first time. Now I'm alive and...what? I'm hungry! Shut the hell up! They should all die, and I should have killed them myself. And damn, that tastes awful. Yeah, priority, kill the bitch that got to them before I could. Damn her.

Damn, I love her.  XD Yeah, I really don't know why but I do.

Alright, what Tablet was I on....

Tablet V

I assume this is the story of Ai's sire. Could his father be one of the Sources?

What did he promise her? He promised to not turn her into a vampire!

Ai technically can die if she really wants to, right? But even she doesn't know what awaits her after death. Dealing with the unknown can be scarier than suffering almost an eternity?


Tablet VI

Oh, so that's probably where I got the idea about being partners from. Yeah, I don't know who Raven would be.

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"The hunters at Zagros...the God-slayers...where are they?"

So I was right about why you used that specific POV for Tablet III? At least revenge gives her a purpose in life (unlife, not life, whatever)?

You know, I'm really surprised I haven't lost any food from reading the gore in your story. *twitch twitch* Too bad I still end up tensing at the spots that I read about being ripped out and kicked and everything. *shudders* I still remember the details about the hunter torturing Reina at the scrapyard.


Tablet VII

Alright, so my head finally stopped screaming werewolf.  :lol: She was human all the way to this point though, right? Well, then my next guess is that Raven is Reina's master. The Wild One does sound like it might be Ai but at the same time it doesn't.


Tablet VIII

So Ai really is the Wild One then?

Controlling fire? :w00t: Didn't think she could do that but then again she was supposed to excel in her magical abilities.

Aw crap, Summer is going to do something. She's so going to get killed by Ai at one point or another.

Nope, my brain does not want to try to figure out who Summer and Raven are right now. Maybe I'll have some kind of epiphany at one point or maybe I'll just blurt out random guesses after the next chapter.  :D

Holy crap, this would've been a freaking long post if I had actually I had actually let my brain barf out everything that was running through my mind... Oh well, maybe it'll still make you happy.  :D
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Re: Gegenschein: The First [12/10 - Tablet VIII]
« Reply #59 on: October 22, 2010, 07:21:24 AM »
Oh hey, here I is. XD

Comment replies!


waiwai: Creepy hybrid thing Ai isn't really...but creepy is pretty close. XD As for what makes her so bad....I really do need to explain, don't I? ^^; I wouldn't call her a water magic lady, but runes can be altered by anyone, though it takes someone with power to activate it in the first place. Lol it's ok, sometimes I wonder wtf I'm doing too. :P

rndm: More about Summer in the upcoming chapter. XD I hope I'm keeping you on your toes lol.

kRisZ: I like making minds spin. Teehee. XD

oddball: I think Ai is an abomination because of what she is, and now what she does. XD I really should explain huh... And you are right, she is more key to the story than even I anticipated. orz. Isn't it odd how characters sometimes become more alive on their own? o_o;

Tuna: :heart: Such a cute imouto. XD You are right, my writing did start to change from Tablet VI because it shifted to a more linear timeline instead of skipping around showing snippets. XD And I'm glad you're not lurking either! You're good at catching the links between the Tablets too! Good girl. :D It's too hard to reply to everything you speculated, but I can say one thing: you're good! :D Haha. :P Keep on commenting!

Sushi: You're finally here! XD The gore isn't even that bad. :P You're just fragile. :lol: And actually that's a surprisingly succinct summary of current events based on the information you have. XD Good job! Lol. I'll be nice for once and say that you did good. :P


Time to edit and post!

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