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Fallen Devil - Ch.3B (Feb.20.12)
« on: February 05, 2012, 02:27:41 AM »
Fallen Devil

Hello everyone! Its been so long since I wrote a fic. and when I do write, I don't really stick to it haha  :sweatdrop: Well! I've decided to stick to this one! A story that will have tragedy, suspense, and of course, love! But this tragic love story will surely have a happy ending! The pairs in this story will be AtsuMina, KojiYuu, and MaYuki! There is no main pair, because this story has many major characters. Please enjoy!

   Chapter 1

  Once upon a time in a far away land, where Kings and Queens still exist and where human rights where still limited to those who lacked money, there was a King who befriended other Kings in hopes of living peacefully: King Astral Takahashi. King Astral and King Batler Maeda were good friends which had their daughters close friends as well; Minami and Atsuko. As children, they got along well, and even now as they grew up to their adolescence their bond also grew. The relationship between Minami and Atsuko became more and more intimate until they were able to call each other lovers.

But alas, their wonderful fairy tale came to an end. They were forced to separate and never to speak to each other again. No one was aware of their relationship; however it was because of the up rise of their fathers’ conflict that they had to say their farewells. Torn apart from each other; they vowed to once again meet.

Flashback:
* In secrecy they meet in a dark forest between the two kingdoms: the Devil’s forest*
“Minami, this may be our last—“ with a finger above her lips, she was silenced. “Shh! Atsuko! This isn’t going to be our last. We shall meet plenty more. I promise.” Minami wanted her princess to feel reassured, but with the stutter in her voice, Atsuko wasn’t convinced. “But how? Father intends on having me married. He wants me to marry my cousin Charles.” still panicking, Atsuko couldn’t help but tear. “Prince Charles? Fortunately he isn’t someone outside of your Kingdom.” shocked by her lover’s reply, she yells “What are you saying, Minami!? You want me to get married!?” . “No! Of course not! How could I ever want that!?” holding her tightly, she whispers to her dear Atsuko, ” I can’t stand the thought of you belonging to someone else. I can’t even go a day without seeing you, but this way… with this plan, we can somehow manage to be together. Just bear with me, kay, Atsuko?”

  Now:
Years have passed since the melancholy of their love; and yet it still exists. Princess Atsuko who is now Queen Atsuko and Princess Minami who is to wed a Prince have not contacted since that meeting.

Minami receives an anonymous letter that says ” Devil’s forest”. She knew it was her lover messaging to meet her. On that night, she sneaks out to rendezvous with Atsuko.

*In a isolated cabin hidden somewhere in the Devil’s forest*

Minami enters the cabin seeing her long beloved, Atsuko sobbing on the bed. “Atsuko!?” she rushes to her lover’s side and tries to comfort her “What’s wrong, Atsuko!?”. In that moment, Atsuko had laid a kiss upon Minami’s lips, not answering to her concern. Atsuko pushed Minami down on the bed and became more assertive with Minami’s body. “Atsu—hey! Wait!” Minami tried to overcome Atsuko, but her force was too strong. “I said wait!” Minami yelled. “Eh! Gomen!” Atsuko got off her oppressed lover. “Atsuko, explain yourself.” Minami demanded, staring at the other girl with a fierce look. “I..! I…! Waaah!!” Atsuko wailed and cried, Minami, shocked from her outburst, was very confused. “Atsuko, please explain to me what’s going on…” she said gently while holding her, “Its daddy…” she said with her face in her hands, “first he wants me to marry Charles, and now he demands I have a child with him!” Minami’s face suddenly became bland, “Ch-child?” Minami pulled away and stepped back from Atsuko. “Minami… I…” walking closer to her, Minami looked away and said “Do it.” “What?” Minami then looks into Atsuko’s eyes with a stern face, “Do it with him. Have a child.” 
« Last Edit: February 20, 2012, 05:41:00 PM by Mari07 »
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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. 1 (Feb.4.12)
« Reply #1 on: February 05, 2012, 02:35:36 AM »
mari mari MARI!!!! please update the next chapter ASAP!!!!! :)





if u want to know mari's real name pm me hahaha just kidding :)
« Last Edit: February 05, 2012, 02:41:12 AM by creamcracker »
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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. 1 (Feb.4.12)
« Reply #2 on: February 05, 2012, 02:43:37 AM »
I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!! FINISH CHAPTER TWO SOON!!!!
"The consistent anarchist should be a socialist, but a socialist of a particular sort. He will not only oppose alienated and specialized labor and look forward to the appropriation of capital by the whole body of workers, but he will also insist that this appropriation be direct, not exercised by some elite force acting in the name of the proletariat. Some sort of council communism is the natural form of revolutionary socialism in an industrial society. It reflects the intuitive understanding that democracy is largely a sham when the industrial system is controlled by any form of autocratic elite, whether of owners, managers, and technocrats, a vanguard party, or a State bureaucracy."
- Noam Chomsky

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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. 1 (Feb.4.12)
« Reply #3 on: February 05, 2012, 03:11:19 AM »
Atsumina!!!
Love the story
Hope you update soon :bow:

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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. 1 (Feb.4.12)
« Reply #4 on: February 05, 2012, 06:01:43 AM »
You're alive! LOLOL

Do continue :3

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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. 1 (Feb.4.12)
« Reply #5 on: February 05, 2012, 06:28:17 AM »
Thanks for the Update :)
But... NO!!!! :cry: What's wrong with Minami?!!! :angry:
Telling Acchan to...!!!! :angry: :angry:
What is Minami's plan?!!!! :banghead:
I'm having so many mixed feelings!! Anger and sadness... :cry:

Please Update Soon :mon cute:
I hope Minami is just joking about it... :banghead:

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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. 1 (Feb.4.12)
« Reply #6 on: February 05, 2012, 07:17:26 AM »
Mari!!!!!!!!! UPdate!! HURRY!  :twothumbs :twothumbs

Need more of this!!!!!!!

Hey I see lurker Randy posting finally =)

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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. 1 (Feb.4.12)
« Reply #7 on: February 05, 2012, 11:38:01 AM »
Me gusta. This is great.
what the hell is wrong with Minami  :smhid
Please do update soon!  :bow: :bow:

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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. 1 (Feb.4.12)
« Reply #8 on: February 05, 2012, 11:41:51 AM »
ahhh whts wrong with minami why would she tell the person she loved to hav a child!! :banghead: :panic: :?
Update Quick!!!

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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. 1 (Feb.4.12)
« Reply #9 on: February 05, 2012, 03:49:52 PM »
Omg ! Seriously?! Wt..! Does minami got any plan for its ? Plz i dont want to see Acchan has a child with any1 else but Takamina ! ( - ~ + ) !   

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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. 1 (Feb.4.12)
« Reply #10 on: February 05, 2012, 09:17:10 PM »
@Creamycracker: Yay! My mama likes my fic!
@GreenAnarchist: I have completed chapter 2, as you demanded  :roll:
@msst28: Oh thank you! It gets much more exciting when we reach the climax
@Shii-chan: Yes, I am! Im surprised you are too!
@Yagami.Rai: Minami is scitzo! Haha just kidding xD we'll see, we'll see!
@Kira: Yeah!! A comment from the immortal one!
@crazywota: Who knows  :smhid
@XxRoByNxX78: Keep reading  :banghead: :panic:
@anzai48: Minami, in my story, is a genius and also very ambitious. In my story, there's a lot of sacrifice for love. 
@okiedokie: Im sorry D: but she had to >_< !!


Chapter 2

“You want me to… do that with him!?” Atsuko exclaimed; what kind of remark was that? Why? How? How could she say such a thing? “Don’t worry Atsuko. This is part of my plan.” Minami said to herself. “But… I love you, Atsuko and no one will take this away from me.” Minami took Atsuko in her arms and embraced her closely. Looking into her eyes Minami said to her. “If you are to do it, then I shall be your first. I will not hand him over your chastity.” Minami gently laid Atsuko down on the bed, whispered in her ear her plan for their future, and gave each other their virginity.

Three months passed from that day and Queen Atsuko had announced she was carrying a child.  Batler could not wait to be a grandfather; when Astral heard news of this, he had forced Minami into immediate marriage. He was not going to let his rivaling Kingdom ahead of him.

Nine months after Minami’s marriage, and Atsuko’s pregnancy, Atsuko gave birth to a princess. They named the child Yuki; even though she was born in the summer, they named her “snow” because of her deep dark eyes which gave you chills if you stared at it too long.

Three years later, Minami also gave birth to a child; Mayu. A princess who was very cheerful and enjoyed jokes.

Five years have passed, Yuki being 7 years old and Mayu being 5 years old had their first meeting together.

Queen Atsuko and Queen Minami took their daughters into the devil’s forest to meet. When they both entered the cabin, they were shocked.

Why, you may ask?

Because it ruined their plans.

“You have a daughter…?” Minami asks. “As do you… “ Atsuko said with a raised eyebrow, “What are we going to do, Minami? This isn’t part of the plan.”

“For now, let’s have them go somewhere else.” Minami turns to Mayu, “Hunny, go and play outside with that nice girl over there, kay?” Mayu obeyed her mother’s request and took Yuki’s hand. “Wanna play with me?” she said with a smile while Yuki was surprised of how bold this little girl could be, she couldn’t help but blush seeing a cute girl with soft hands smile at her. “S-sure” she nodded. Yuki ran outside with Mayu to play in the garden beside the cabin.

“Atsuko, our plan failed…” Minami’s disappointed tone pained Atsuko’s ears, “You know, Minami… our plan may still work…”
“But how!? They’re both—“ Minami was silenced by a kiss from her beloved, many worries ran through her head but as soon as she felt Atsuko’s touch all her worries vanished.  “Don’t say it. There’s nothing wrong with that. We just have to ask them for their approval.” Minami, with her flushed red face, nodded in agreement. “We’ll see what happens.”



A/N: Okay I think this chapter's a bit boring but this just tells you whats happened over the years. Please choose to one of the choices for what the next chapter is going to be:
- Minami's plan
- Mayu and Yuki's play date (this one is as suspensing as discovering Minami's plan because while they are playing, a crisis occurs)
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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. (Feb.5.12)
« Reply #11 on: February 05, 2012, 09:32:20 PM »
so far I really like where this story is going, very interesting. I like your style of writing, please keep it up. :twothumbs
"The consistent anarchist should be a socialist, but a socialist of a particular sort. He will not only oppose alienated and specialized labor and look forward to the appropriation of capital by the whole body of workers, but he will also insist that this appropriation be direct, not exercised by some elite force acting in the name of the proletariat. Some sort of council communism is the natural form of revolutionary socialism in an industrial society. It reflects the intuitive understanding that democracy is largely a sham when the industrial system is controlled by any form of autocratic elite, whether of owners, managers, and technocrats, a vanguard party, or a State bureaucracy."
- Noam Chomsky

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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. (Feb.5.12)
« Reply #12 on: February 05, 2012, 11:38:26 PM »
I WANT MAYUKIIII

I dont mind whichever you choose to write....

BUT GIMME MORE MAYUKI

Thank you :3

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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. (Feb.5.12)
« Reply #13 on: February 06, 2012, 12:51:38 AM »
Lol
I thought this story all about atsumina
but then.. Mayuki..
Nice.. :thumbup

I also dont know what to choose
curious about minami plan..
also want to know about mayuki play date..
Why dont just write both.. haha

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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. (Feb.5.12)
« Reply #14 on: February 06, 2012, 01:10:21 AM »
Lol
I thought this story all about atsumina
but then.. Mayuki..
Nice.. :thumbup

I also dont know what to choose
curious about minami plan..
also want to know about mayuki play date..
Why dont just write both.. haha
Hahaha its not just Atsumina, and MaYuki. Its Astumina, MaYuki, AND KojiYuu  XD
But good question. I do intend to write both, but I'm asking you guys which would you rather read first. Because you wont get to know the other one until 2 or 3 chapters later.
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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. (Feb.5.12)
« Reply #15 on: February 06, 2012, 03:17:30 AM »
I wish to request for "Minami‘s plan. I want to know what happened. ^^

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« Reply #16 on: February 06, 2012, 04:07:41 AM »
I was disappointed a first.. Then I was LOLing at myself when they both gave birth to MaYuki..  :lol:

This is interesting.. I don't which one to choose, but I wanna know about Minami's plan..  XD

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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. (Feb.5.12)
« Reply #17 on: February 06, 2012, 05:15:35 AM »
Mari!!!! Your updates are too short =( it`s like just when I`m getting into it you put me in another hanger!
Too many of these hangers might kill me you know!... well I am immortal but I can still complain!

BUT BUT MAYUKI!!! Kyaaaaa!  :wub:

So what is their plan... hmmmm update update update! Pleaseeeeeeeeee  :bow:

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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. (Feb.5.12)
« Reply #18 on: February 06, 2012, 07:49:48 AM »
Hahaha its not just Atsumina, and MaYuki. Its Astumina, MaYuki, AND KojiYuu  XD
But good question. I do intend to write both, but I'm asking you guys which would you rather read first. Because you wont get to know the other one until 2 or 3 chapters later.

ok I already decided..
Well for me I want Mayuki first..
for plan let wait another 2-3 chapters..
but then most people will be crazy to know about Minami plan..

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Re: Fallen Devil - Ch. (Feb.5.12)
« Reply #19 on: February 06, 2012, 10:56:05 AM »
Euh... Arrr!!! I hate the fact that they have child with other but it's Mayuyu and Yukirin lol
But I think I wanna see what will happen ^^

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