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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER SIX
« Reply #40 on: May 03, 2012, 09:33:37 PM »
                                                                        CHAPTER SEVEN
Flashback
 I open the magazine and see her in those cute red bikini. She looks so sexy. Her white beautiful legs. Her cute flat belly. And those breats. I want to squeeze them. I want to touch her whole body.
“What are you looking?”
“Oh.. Y – You scared me. No it’s nothing..”
“Show me!”
“No!”
“Oh, why are you looking at her?”
“I’m just…” I can’t think of any excuse. I’m so sorry..
“Why do you keep lying  to yourself..” said half – shouting, half – crying.
“What are you talking about?”
“You love her. And you want to be with her.”
“No. I was j…..”
“Just admit it. From the beginning you we were not meant to be. “
“I………..”
“I’m not the person you love, Minami. It’s her..”
“No, I do love you….”
“Yeah I know, but as a friend. You love her for real. And you know I’m right..”
“Tomochin… I love her so much.. I realize it now, but it’s too late now she hates me…”
“No she doesn’t. I know it. I’m her friend too. I’ll talk to her..”
“But…”
“No, but’s.”
Miichan’s POV
Is she crazy?? I don’t understand her. What is she thinking. Does she really not love, Acchan? I have to talk to that chibi. NOW!
“TAKAMINA!”
“M – Miichan? What is it?”
“Come with me!”
“But we are in the middle of practice.”
“Just come!!”
“What are you thinking?”
“What are talking about?”
“Yuko, told me everything.”
“Oh…”
“You are not really in love with Tomochin, are you?”
“No, I do, but..”
“But only as a friend.”
“Yes.”
“Ok, then I’ll ask you this. Do you love, Acchan?”
“I don’t know…”
“You don’t know?”
“……”
“Fine, then I’ll tell you this. Me and Acchan are dating.”
“Eh?”
“Yeah, we are dating, but that is ok with you right? You don’t love her so…”
“…..”
Takamina’s POV
I freezed. I don’t know what just happened. Miichan and Atsuko are dating????? I can’t believe it. She said she loves me. My heart is in pane. My feet are shaking. I just fell. The ground is so cold, just like me. What have I done? Now I know. I DO NOT want to lose this girl. Atsuko!
Tomomi’s POV
 “Tomochin?”
“Don’t!”
“Please. I want to talk to you.”
“What is it? Why don’t you go and kiss another girl?”
“No. Let me explain.”
“What is there to explain? You kissed another girl. And that girl WAS NOT me…”
“Eh..”
“Just leave me alone..”
“No, I can’t leave alone the girl I love..”
“Hmmmm… EH?!”
“I love you, Itano Tomomi.” Then I lean and kiss her on the lips. She responds it. She really loves me.
“If you love me, then why did you kiss, Sae that night when we were supposed to meet?”
“I….”
“No excuse, huh?
“No… I kissed her because I didn’t want to disappoint you…” I blushed like crazy. My heart beats so fast.
“You.. What are you saying?”
“I love you and I wanted to become a good kisser. Not like the other kisses. A kiss with passion..” my checks are so red. I feel like I’m burning inside.
“Are you an idiot. You could never disappoint me. I love you.”
“I love you too..”
Then we kiss. Her lips are so soft. It’s definitely not like the kisses with the other girls. I could kiss this lips forever. I move my head to the right. I want to kiss her with passion. Then she slowly opens her mouth and asking for permission to kiss me with passion. I grand her permission and our tongues start to battle in our mouth’s. I’m surprised. She is a real good kisser. But then she suddenly breaks the kiss and looks right in my eyes..
“Let’s go to your house.”
“Eh, why?”
“So we could do what I’ve wanted like.. forever..”
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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER SEVEN
« Reply #41 on: May 03, 2012, 11:50:56 PM »
Once again, You solved another Couple Problem... TomoTomo! :P
Miichan, Why you have to say that You and Acchan are Dating? Or, Miichan just want to make Takamina Jealous? :smhid
Let's see, Takamina... You'll feel the same as Acchan felt when you broke her heart too... But, I want Takamina confessed to Acchan... :peace:
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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER SEVEN
« Reply #42 on: May 04, 2012, 05:09:15 AM »
Takaboy now for your bad manners.. need to fix it... fight for your wifey and make her happy ok?
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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER SEVEN
« Reply #43 on: May 06, 2012, 02:22:02 AM »
YAY Tomotomo!!!!!
Miichan made her move aye!

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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER SEVEN
« Reply #44 on: May 11, 2012, 08:00:24 PM »
and that's done for tomoto now :scolding: start Writing and fix my atsumina pretty please  :bow:

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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER SEVEN
« Reply #45 on: May 12, 2012, 10:08:14 PM »
Chapter EIGHT FINAL
Takamina’s POV
I can’t believe they are dating. She said she loves me but after just 5 days she started to date Miichan. I don’t understand. She said she loves me and almost raped me. Why is she doing this? There must be some kind of an explanation. Are they really dating? I have to talk to her. I will make her fall in love with me all over again..
“Takamina?”
“Ah, Yuko. Hi.”
“Can we talk?”
“Yeah, sure. What is it?”
“Me and Haruna are dating.”
“Really. That is great.”
“Yeah, and it’s all thanks to you.”
“No. It’s all thanks to your love.”
“Yeah and thanks to your help. Are you still with Tomochin?”
“No, we broke up..”
“Why?”
“Because I realized I love her only as a friend.”
“Yeah I know it.”
“How do you know it?”
“Because you are in love with Acchan. Am I wrong?”
“No. You are not wrong.”
“Then tell her. Tell her how you feel.”
“It’s too late know, Yuko.”
“Why?”
“She is with someone else.”
“What? Who?”
“Miichan…”
“What? Who told you that?”
“She did.”
“Oh…. So that is her plan..”
“Eh?”
“We all want to help you.”
”How?”
“We will get you two to talk in private.”
“I don’t think she would want to talk with me. Or see me.”
“I know, but I have a plan.”
“What plan?”
“Be at Acchan’s house tonight.”
“You want me to break into her house?”
“Yeah, idiot. You have keys right?”
“Yeah…”
“Ok, it’s decided.”
Acchan’s POV
Tonight is my last night in Tokyo. Tomorrow I leave for Bulgaria. I guess it’s too late. I lost her forever. She is qwith her know and there is nothing I can do. I finished recording my second single and now I’m heading home. I’m so tired. I want to cry but I don’t want to worry the staff. I took a cab and know I’m standing in front of my apartment. I open the door and light the lights on. And I saw a figure standing in front of me. I can’t believe my eyes. It’s her, the girl I love. She has a serious look on her face. What is going on here?
“Atsuko.”
“What are you doing here, Minami?”
“I wanted to talk to you..”
“Oh, so now you want to talk to me. You avoided me right?”
“Yeah, I’m sorry..”
“Does she know you are here?”
“Who?”
“Your girlfriend..”
“No..”
“You should’ve told her. I don’t want her to get the wrong idea.”
“There is no need to tell her..” She look sad. Why?
“We broke up..”
“Heee, is that so? Please can you go, I am tired..”
“No.”
“Huh?”
“I told you I want to talk to you and I’m not going until you hear what I have to say.”
“Fine, can you make it fast? What is it?”
She starts to talk and I listen to her carefully. I want to know what she has to say. I sat on the couch and she sat next to me. She holds my hand tightly. Why is she holding my hand?
“First I want to ask you something.” She said with a worried face.
“Are you and Miichan dating?”
“What?!? No! You told you that?”
“She did.”
“Why the hell did she tell you this?”
“She probably wanted to make me jealous..”
“Like that can happen. You made it clear that you don’t feel the same. I pull my hand aaway but she grabs it again.
“Do you know the reason I started dating, Tomochin?”
“No. And I don’t want to know…”
“I wanted to know what my true feelings for you are. And she was hear broken, and it just happened. But it help me realize. The person who I love it’s not her. That night when you confessed to me I didn’t know how to respond to you. I didn’t know my feelings towards you were, so I said I liked someone else, but that was a lie. And what you did after that. It took me by surprise but to tell you the truth I liked it.” She blushed like crazy, but WAIT. WHAT?
“You… Then why didn’t you just tell me. I would’ve wait for you. Until you know how you felt.”
“I don’t know. Probably because I’m an idiot. Do you still love me?”
“Of course I still love you, Minami.  I can’t stop loving you.”
“I’m happy..”
“Why?”
“Because the person I love is you, Atsuko.”
“Eh? Don’t joke around.”
“I’m not joking. I love you.” She starts to move closer and our lips touched. It’s a smooth and soft kiss. She break the kiss and looks into my eyes..
“I love you, Atsuko. I want to be with you forever.”
“I love you too, Minami. I love you so much..” Then I lean down and kiss her this time with passion. I feel she is responding the kiss. And the kiss becomes wild. I tilt my head to the right. I suck her upper lip then her lower lip and slowly open my mouth and I lick her lips. They are so soft. My tongue is asking for permission to enter. She grand’s permission and out tongue meet. They star to dance and play around. She sucks my tongue and I let a moan. She smirked. I feel dizzy. I still can’t believe this is happening. She pulls me back and she is on top of me while we are still kissing. I warp my arm around her neck. Her hands start to travel around my body. She kisses my chin and moves down to my neck. She sucks and lick it, kiss it. She slips her hand up my shirt and know her hand is touching my stomach while she kisses me with passion. She break the kiss and looks in my eyes and says:
“Your skin is so soft. You look so beautiful, Atsuko”
Her hand starts to move up until she reached her goal meanwhile her other free hand slid down my pants. A tear rolled down my cheek. She then stopped all of her movements.
“What wrong? Why are crying?”
“I’m happy, Minami. I’m so happy. I could die right now.”
“No, don’t. I need you in my life. I can’t leave without you.”
“I love you, Minami”
“I love you too. Always will..”
Then we kiss again and again. The night is going to be long and I don’t want it to end.

I'm sorry I'm late guys Here it is the Final. Hope you like it. And sorry that the "you know what scene" is unfinished but I don't want the admin to move it to the perv section....... again so. Hope you like it.

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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER EIGHT FINAL
« Reply #46 on: May 12, 2012, 11:52:50 PM »
Finally, it's update !! 
and Finally, Takamina with Acchan..   :wub:
i'm so happy like crazy~ *lol*

Thanks for your story..  :thumbsup

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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER EIGHT FINAL
« Reply #47 on: May 13, 2012, 03:03:11 AM »
They get together at the end. HaPpY ending. ^.^

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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER EIGHT FINAL
« Reply #48 on: May 13, 2012, 04:17:35 AM »
YEAH!! ATsumina... :D.. meybe you can do a special for the perv section  :twisted:

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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER EIGHT FINAL
« Reply #49 on: May 13, 2012, 07:33:38 AM »
Yeyeye Happy Ending. Me Gusta Happy Ending :lol:

It's good to see Atsumina together again~ :wub:

And then Acchan can leave to Bulgaria peacefully :twothumbs

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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER EIGHT FINAL
« Reply #50 on: May 13, 2012, 09:34:01 AM »
Great end! Hehehe Takamina is really activ here ^^

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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER EIGHT FINAL
« Reply #51 on: May 13, 2012, 01:16:53 PM »
That was an awesome series :wub:
I hope you write more from now on :wub:
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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER EIGHT FINAL
« Reply #52 on: May 13, 2012, 03:35:37 PM »
Yeah~~ Happy Ending~ ^^
Glad that Takamina realize her true feeling and didn't give up on Acchan! ^^

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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER EIGHT FINAL
« Reply #53 on: June 14, 2012, 05:08:15 PM »
OMG! This is really nice although the whole story was a bit complicated.
I can't imagine TakaMina kissing other girl than Acchan.. it's like she kissed other girls and turned to Acchan as not that clean anymore. wahahah lol
Sorry but that was my real reaction towards this.. but all in all your story was really greaaaat~~ <3  :thumbup

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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER EIGHT FINAL
« Reply #54 on: June 14, 2012, 05:24:18 PM »
Happy together atsumina~~ :heart:

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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER EIGHT FINAL
« Reply #55 on: January 06, 2013, 04:42:42 AM »
I was kinda confuse at chapter 6 but got it once I did some thinking lol but overall suge!!!!  :farofflook:

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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER EIGHT FINAL
« Reply #56 on: September 27, 2013, 07:18:23 PM »
It's the second time i read this fanfic and i love it!
Thank you for finish it  :lol:

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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER EIGHT FINAL
« Reply #57 on: September 27, 2013, 09:37:44 PM »
Oh... Came across this story...

And it's finished already...

I enjoyed reading it..

Thank you for the interesting story...

Atsumina together at last...

Can't wait to see your other creations

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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER EIGHT FINAL
« Reply #58 on: October 22, 2013, 08:01:51 AM »
Congratulations for the fanfic, have just read. I hope he/she makes more fanfiction atsumina.

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Re: Why can't you love me back? [AtsuMina] UPDATED! CHAPTER EIGHT FINAL
« Reply #59 on: April 04, 2015, 09:02:32 PM »
Love it!
Really do!
Great story  :wub:  :twothumbs  :heart:

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