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Author Topic: Different Dimension (MayuXyukiXjurina) Chapter 1 part 1 update  (Read 1996 times)

Offline kokoiscute

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This is my first time posting these kind of things, and my english grammar are not so good.
All I have now is these... Please tell me what you think about this prologue.

Prologue:
 Watanabe Mayu's childhood friend Matsui Jurina has a secret crush on Mayu,but they're both girls. Mayu also had a fiancé call Kashiwagi Yuki who's very perfect and he is also Mayu's childhood friend (even though they met each other during 3 so both has no memory). But what if Mayu suddenly goes into a different dimension world? And her best friend Jurina turned into a handsome boy while Yuki remains as a boy? Who will Mayu choose? Her best friend or her fiancé?
« Last Edit: April 10, 2013, 01:36:43 AM by kokoiscute »

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Re: Prologue (mayuXyukiXjurina)
« Reply #1 on: April 03, 2013, 04:22:41 PM »
Mayu choosing between the two.

Sounds interesting
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Re: Prologue (mayuXyukiXjurina)
« Reply #2 on: April 03, 2013, 05:07:55 PM »
continue please!! :cow: :bow:
My kami-oshi is Mayuyu, and my oshimen is Oku Manami.

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Re: Prologue (mayuXyukiXjurina)
« Reply #3 on: April 03, 2013, 05:19:00 PM »
Sounds interesting, wonder what will happen next!

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Re: Prologue (mayuXyukiXjurina)
« Reply #4 on: April 03, 2013, 10:02:35 PM »
Interesting Prologue,

Mayu have to choose which one she loves,

looking forward for your next chapter!

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Re: Prologue (mayuXyukiXjurina)
« Reply #5 on: April 04, 2013, 02:37:35 AM »
interesting prologue

I can't wait to see the story

Love triangle.....

Thank you for the great prologue

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Re: Prologue (mayuXyukiXjurina)
« Reply #6 on: April 04, 2013, 03:12:14 PM »
Your prologue is interesting :on GJ:
Love triangle Yuki-Mayu-Jurina :kekeke:
Wonder who will Mayu choose :dunno:
Hope it's Yuki  :on lol: and Jurina with Rena :bath:
Anyway, update soon, please :kneelbow:
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Re: Prologue (mayuXyukiXjurina)
« Reply #7 on: April 06, 2013, 06:43:51 PM »
Thanks for your supporting everyone! I hope I'll not dissapoint everyone! 
 
Chapter 1 part one
 Standing under a cherry blossom tree, I was waiting for my best friend Jurina to come. It was the school opening ceremony the season when cherry blossom tree blooms rapidly. A lot of cherry blossom's petals were falling then I heard a voice shouting my nickname. I turned my head and saw Jurina running toward here shouting"Mayuyu" which was very embarrassing. Many students are laughing watching us, but I was a little used of these kind of things. Since Jurina is my childhood friend who already embarrass me from young. I walk toward Jurina then suddenly I was falling, then I notice that I tripped over my leg. I saw Jurina running toward me shouting something, I couldn't hear her but I can read her mouth saying "watch out".  My face got very close to the ground until my nose can feel the ground a little bit, but after I blink I don't have any memory of it.


I hope there's no grammar mistakes!
Hope everyone likes it... Thank you very much for reading~~~

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Re: Prologue (mayuXyukiXjurina)
« Reply #8 on: April 06, 2013, 10:36:19 PM »
Ara... Mayu hit the road....

Jurina is not fast enough to rescue her....

What's going to happen next

Thank you for the update

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Poor Mayuyu falling to the ground.
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Mayu hit the road  :on lol:
Maybe that the way she come to other dimesion :kekeke:
Wonder what'll happen next :dunno:
Update soon, please :kneelbow:
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