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The Devil Inside Me (WMatsui) - Chapter 6 (31/12/2013) (HIATUS)
« on: November 08, 2013, 04:55:21 AM »
Special thanks to Imteedee and AshuraX for proofreading the story...  :bow:

And thank you to all of you who motivates me to try to write the story...


Prologue

*Knock* * Knock*
“Come in…” a heavy voice sounded out behind the closed door.
A man in a black suit walked in.
“We found her, Sir…” said the man to the person who was sitting behind a big desk.
“Good job. Bring her in. Alive.”
“Sure.”
The man then walked out.
The figure who was sitting behind the desk then got up and walked towards the window.
“Finally, I found you…You’ll pay for what you did to my brother 2 years ago, Center…”
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Re: Untitled - Prologue
« Reply #1 on: November 08, 2013, 05:05:50 AM »
Interesting.  I expect action :)
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Re: Untitled - Prologue
« Reply #2 on: November 08, 2013, 07:28:27 AM »
the prologue already says the 'feels' of the story, so I'd better share this song, found this one a long time ago and is actually included on my daily playlist and thought this suits the story so much  :)

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“Among the nonsense tragedies, what on earth you are looking for?
You only have to be honest to yourself and your own fate.”

I'm looking forward to your fic  :thumbsup
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« Reply #3 on: November 08, 2013, 09:29:37 AM »
ATSUJURI~ ATSUJURI~ :lol:

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Re: Untitled - Prologue (WMatsui)
« Reply #4 on: November 09, 2013, 03:36:16 PM »
I'm a new writer, so forgive me if there are any mistakes... :bow:

I also want to thank Imteedee and AshuraX for the suggestion and proofreading... :bow:

Here it is...

Chapter 1

Nagoya, Japan

“Good morning, Rena-chan…” said a puppy like girl to the raven haired woman who just woke up beside her.

“Morning, Jurina. What time is it?” asked Rena while sitting up.

“It’s 6.45. We still have time before we leave for work…” said Jurina with a sly smile and suddenly pulled Rena down to her and made Rena lie on top of her.

“Stop it, Jurina. We’ll be late for work…” Rena tried to get up and escape from Jurina’s hug.

“Don’t worry. We still have time…” said Jurina while kissing Rena’s neck.

“No. If we do it, We’ll be late for work…” Rena forcefully pulled herself from Jurina’s embrace and got out from the bed.

“Mou…Rena-chan is so cold”. Pouted Jurina. Rena just rolled her eyes seeing the puppy girl’s action. “Go take a shower. I’ll prepare breakfast for us.”

“Yes, ma’am”. Jurina saluted to Rena then got off the bed and walked towards the bathroom to take a shower. After finishing her shower and put on her clothes, she walked towards the kitchen. She leaned towards the wall and watched Rena moved gracefully while preparing their breakfast. She’s so beautiful. I’m so lucky to have her beside me. Do I really deserve her? Do I have the right to be happy after what happened? Jurina was so busy with her thought she didn’t realize that Rena already finished preparing their breakfast.
 
“Jurina, what are you doing there? Come on, let’s eat”. Rena’s voice startled her out of her thought.

Jurina silently walked towards the dining table and paused for a moment to kiss Rena on her cheek and whispered in her ear, “I love you”. Before proceeded to sit beside Rena.

Rena seemed startled with Jurina’s action and she blushed and punched Jurina’s arm weakly. “What was that? You’re startling me”. Jurina giggled.

“I’m just doing what I want to do and saying what’s on my mind”, said Jurina while smiling sweetly. Rena rolled her eyes and said, “Just eat your breakfast”. They ate their breakfast in silence, a comfortable silence. After finishing their breakfast, Jurina washed their dishes while Rena preparing to go to work. Then they proceeded to their work place respectively.

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Jurina is in her office. She was busy choosing some photos to be used at the fashion magazine where she work at, when suddenly someone knock on her door.

“Come in,” said Jurina.

A short girl who looked like a squirrel then walked in. “There’s someone looking for you downstairs. She said that she’s your friend. She’s pretty, but not as pretty as my NyanNyan. Who is she? Do you have any appointment today? Are you cheating on Rena?” asked the squirrel girl suspiciously.

“Shut up, Yuko. I don’t know who she is. And I’m not cheating on Rena. I love her.” Jurina herself was confused. She only knew very few people in this town and she can’t exactly call them her friend either. She kept them at arm’s length all the time. No one can get too close to her except Rena. I wonder who is it.

Jurina then got out from her office and went downstairs to meet her guest. When she finally saw her guest, she stopped abruptly and stared at the woman who stood in front of her in shock.

“Well, hello, Matsui Jurina. Long time no see…” said the woman in front of Jurina.

“Ma-Ma-Mariko-sama? What are you doing here?! How did you find me?” asked Jurina.

“Well…I’m here to see what my favorite student has been up to these days. And, how did I find you? Hmm…I have my sources” said Mariko with a sly smile. “Let’s go out and have lunch together. I’m hungry”.

After Jurina got over her shock for meeting her mentor for the first time after two years. The two of them went out to a nearby restaurant. They picked a table in the corner of the room.

While waiting for their food, Mariko spoke up, “So, a photographer, huh?”

“Yeah…I always want to be a photographer,” smiled Jurina.

“You seem happy. It’s good to see you happy. Who is she?”

“What are you talking about? Who are you talking about?” asked Jurina innocently.

Mariko narrowed her eyes at Jurina’s answer. “The woman you fall in love with. Who is she? You can’t lie to me, Juriboy”.

Jurina sighed. “Her name is Matsui Rena. She’s 25 years old and a bakery owner”.

Mariko smiled. “I want to meet her someday. I want to meet the person who is able to bring your smile back”. Mariko paused a bit and said in a serious tone, “Did you told her about you? About your past and what you did in the past? Did she know about Center?”

When Jurina heard about Mariko’s question, she frowned. “No… I didn’t. And I don’t want to tell her about what happened. I don’t want to tell her what I did in the past and more importantly, I don’t want her to know about Center”.

They paused a bit when the waiter come with their order.

Jurina then decided to change the topic. “How long will you be in here?”

“Not long. I have to go soon. I have job to do. I’m coming here just to check up on you”.

Jurina pouted. “I want you to meet Rena-chan, though.”

“Maybe next time, kiddo,” said Mariko and she reached out and ruffled Jurina’s hair affectionately.

They continued eating while chatting randomly. After finishing eating, Mariko paid their bill. They got out from the restaurant and before they parted ways, Mariko pulled Jurina into a hug and whispered in her ear, “Call me if you need anything. You know how to contact me.” Jurina nodded in Mariko’s hug. But then she pulled out and stared into Mariko’s eyes and she asked softly, “Do I deserve her? Do I deserve to be happy? After what happened, do I have the right to be happy?”

Mariko could see the uncertainty and insecurity in Jurina’s eyes. She cupped the younger girl’s cheek and said softly, “Everyone deserves to be happy. She’s your happiness now. Don’t let your mind tell you otherwise. Follow your heart”. Mariko then let Jurina go.

“Un. Thank you, Mariko-sama. And be careful on your job”.

“Sure. Bye, Jurina. See you.”

“Bye. See you.”

To be continued

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Re: Untitled (WMatsui) - Chapter 1
« Reply #5 on: November 09, 2013, 05:54:47 PM »
Hoho dark past  XD I love that.
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Re: Untitled (WMatsui) - Chapter 1
« Reply #6 on: November 09, 2013, 06:27:25 PM »
Well, because it's an 'untitled',, I can't predict what'll happen next.  :P

What a good start. Welcome to the author world.  :lol:

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Jurina silently walked towards the dining table and paused for a moment to kiss Rena on her cheek and whispered in her ear, “I love you”. Before proceeded to sit beside Rena.
It's so sweet.  :inlove:
I love this kind of sudden sweet things. A sudden confession, a sudden kiss, a sudden hug.. etc. 

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Mariko paused a bit and said in a serious tone, “Did you told her about you? About your past and what you did in the past? Did she know about Center?”
Hohoho... Jurina's secret.
Based on your prologue and Mariko's expression, I guess... it's a dark memory. Something bad happened to Jurina's life in the past.
I can't wait to dig it more.  XD

Umm.... if Rena found out about it, I think... at first, she'll angry at Jurina because she'll think that Jurina didn't trust her (because Jurina hiding 'it' from her).
But I'm sure that Rena will help Jurina to surpass it and help her to solve the poblem too (whatever is it).

I'd love to see your next update.  :)

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Re: Untitled (WMatsui) - Chapter 1
« Reply #7 on: November 09, 2013, 07:24:53 PM »
Jurina's past seems to be more complicated than it seems....  :nervous
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Re: Untitled (WMatsui) - Chapter 1
« Reply #8 on: November 09, 2013, 08:48:24 PM »
it was a good start.. Im waiting for the next..

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Re: Untitled (WMatsui) - Chapter 1
« Reply #9 on: November 09, 2013, 10:59:19 PM »
@Zita: thank you... you'll know about the past later

@Anakpanti:  I named it as 'untitled', because I don't have any idea what title I should use for this story... :nervous
Yeah...Jurina had a very dark past and it's not easy for her to trust Rena with 'it'.
Stay tune to find out what it is.  :grin:

@kuro_808: Yes, it is... :grin:

@Haruko: Thanks... :grin:

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Re: Untitled (WMatsui) - Chapter 1
« Reply #10 on: November 10, 2013, 12:13:53 AM »
Interesting start

I wonder what Jurina pass, and why she dont want Rena to know about it  :?


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Re: Untitled (WMatsui) - Chapter 1
« Reply #11 on: November 10, 2013, 05:18:06 AM »
*high five for wmatsui*  :hand: 

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Waiting for the next chapter :3
Is the title really 'untitled'? *confused*
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Re: The Devil Inside Me (WMatsui) - Chapter 1
« Reply #12 on: November 17, 2013, 11:02:25 AM »
Thanks for imteedee-san who proofreading it...  :bow:

Also thanks for all the silent reader and the 'thank you' clicker... :bow:

And sorry for the late update..

Here it is...

Chapter 2

Two Days Later

Matsui Rena was busy talking with her best friend and also the cashier, Kashiwagi Yuki, when Jurina came.

“Rena-chan~” said Jurina happily while walking behind the counter and hugged Rena.

“Eh… Jurina, what are you doing here?”

“I’m here to pick you up, of course and I also want to ask you out on a dinner date. It’s been a long time since the last time we had dinner date together”, said Jurina while grinning from ear to ear. Rena just smiled and wrapped her arms around Jurina’s neck.

*cough* *cough*
Yuki pretended to clear her throat and it made the two lovers turned their heads towards her. Rena who finally realized that Yuki was also there, immediately got out from Jurina’s hug while blushing.

“Hi, Yukirin”, greeted Jurina innocently.

“Hi, Jurina. Ahhh… I envy you two. Watching the two of you being lovey-dovey towards each other makes me want to have a lover, too,” said Yuki dreamily. She then turned her head towards Rena. “You can go ahead and have your date with Jurina. I will close the shop later.”

Rena opened her mouth to say something to Yuki, but Jurina beat her, “Really?! Thanks a lot, Yukirin,” smiled Jurina and she immediately grabbed Rena’s hand and dragged her towards the exit.

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“Nee…nee…Rena-chan, do you remember this place?” asked Jurina excitedly when she stopped her car in front of a ramen restaurant.

Rena looked at the ramen restaurant and looked back at Jurina with confused face. “Should I remember something about this place?”

“Rena-chan…you…you forgot about this place?” asked Jurina in surprise. “This is the place where we first met. Did you forget about it?” asked Jurina with a hurtful look.

Flashback

Fourteen months ago

Jurina was sitting alone inside the ramen restaurant while enjoying her ramen. Suddenly she heard a loud crash. It’s coming from two customers who sat three tables away from her. The male customer was drenched and his face was furious. Apparently, the female customer who was sitting in front of him had thrown her glass of water on his face.

“Lover’s quarrel. Can’t they do it in another place?” mumbled Jurina while continuing eating her ramen. Looking a bit annoyed.

“Don’t you dare to tell me to calm down! You cheated on me with my friend! I walked in and found you two in bed having sex!” yelled the female customer. All of the customers inside the restaurant watched the two customers who were having a lover’s quarrel, but no one dared to interfere. Jurina watched them with amusement.

“I’m a man and I have needs. You’re the one who don’t want to have sex with me. So I went to someone who can give me my needs. And apparently your friend is willing to cooperate. Unlike you who pretend to be innocent and refused to sleep with me every time I asked you to, but who knows how many men you had slept with?!” said the man while smirking.

The woman suddenly got up and tried to slap the man but the man grabbed the woman’s hand.

Oh no. It’s bad. Jurina stood up from her seat.

“I’m sick of you!” yelled the man while moving his arm to slap the woman. But, suddenly someone grabbed his arm.

“Now…now…That’s not how you treat a lady”, said Jurina while holding the man’s arm.

“Who are you? Go away! It has nothing to do with you!”

“Oh…you’re wrong. It has something to do with me. You see, I was trying to enjoy my bowl of ramen peacefully when suddenly you interrupted the peaceful moment with your stupid action. Sleeping with her friend? Come on… Can you be any lower than that?” said Jurina while looking at him with disgust. She then tightened her grip on the man’s arm. She can see the man wincing in pain.

“Now…Get. Out,” said Jurina calmly but her eyes seem deadly. The man wanted to fight back, but something in her eyes made him afraid. The man gulped and pulled his hand from Jurina’s grip. He turned around and tried to walk away, but suddenly Jurina stopped him. “Wait. You forgot to pay the bill. You can’t let the lady pay for your meal, right?” The man then grabbed his wallet and put his money on the table and walked out from the restaurant.

All of the customer inside the restaurant clapped their hands for Jurina. Apparently pleased with how she handled the bastard. Jurina didn’t bother them and turned around to face the woman who was in daze with everything that happened.

“Hey, are you okay?” asked Jurina softly. The woman seems startled with Jurina’s question and lowered her head. “Yes, I’m fine. Thank you.”

Jurina studied the woman in front of her. She has straight long raven hair and pale skin and a bit skinny. She looks like a princess. The woman felt Jurina’s gaze on her and looked up. Her eyes meet Jurina’s. Jurina broke the gaze and blushed, feeling embarrassed because she get caught staring at her. Damn, what’s wrong with me?

“I have to go. Thank you for your help”, said the woman and she bowed to Jurina.

The woman tried to walk away, but Jurina stopped her by grabbing her arm. “Are you sure you’re okay? Because it seems like a big break up, you know”

“I’m fine really. Thank you”, said the woman while smiling.

“Alright then.” Jurina let her go. The woman then walked out from the restaurant. Jurina went back to her table and continued to eat her ramen.

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Rena caressed Jurina’s cheek softly. “Of course I remember this place, even though we met under an unpleasant situation. But, I’m glad because of that I could meet you.” Rena then kissed Jurina’s lips softly. The two then got out from the car and walked inside the ramen restaurant while holding hands.

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After the dinner date, Jurina and Rena decided to go home. When they were crossing the intersection near their apartment, suddenly the car they were in was hit by a black SUV.


TBC
« Last Edit: November 17, 2013, 11:10:17 AM by olive29 »

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Re: The Devil Inside Me (WMatsui) - Chapter 2
« Reply #13 on: November 17, 2013, 11:07:56 AM »
@Kirozoro: Jurina's past will be answered soon...

@leipyon: I have put the title now...
Back then I didn't know what title should I use... :grin:
But now, I already put the title... :grin:

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Re: The Devil Inside Me (WMatsui) - Chapter 2
« Reply #14 on: November 17, 2013, 11:38:36 AM »
Jurina is such a mature person to stand up to him with calmness  :nervous
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Re: The Devil Inside Me (WMatsui) - Chapter 1
« Reply #15 on: November 17, 2013, 12:27:49 PM »

After the dinner date, Jurina and Rena decided to go home. When they were crossing the intersection near their apartment, suddenly the car they were in was hit by a black SUV.

TBC

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Who did that. :angry:
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Re: The Devil Inside Me (WMatsui) - Chapter 2
« Reply #16 on: November 17, 2013, 12:42:21 PM »

After the dinner date, Jurina and Rena decided to go home. When they were crossing the intersection near their apartment, suddenly the car they were in was hit by a black SUV.

TBC

 :shock:
Who did that. :angry:
This is bad.... really bad. I hope they'll okay.
Are they Center's enemies or something?

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Re: The Devil Inside Me (WMatsui) - Chapter 2
« Reply #17 on: November 17, 2013, 12:51:10 PM »
The Devil inside Me... finally, the titles  :twothumbs

I love how Jurina save Rena from her ex. (Yuck!! I think her ex is a hyper..  :angry:)
Cool Jurina.  :inlove:
So, Jurina... love at first sight? XD

I need more..... update!!!  :mon pray2:

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Re: The Devil Inside Me (WMatsui) - Chapter 2
« Reply #18 on: November 17, 2013, 03:15:52 PM »
Jurina is such a mature person to stand up to him with calmness  :nervous
Yeah...because Juju...you'll know later...  :nervous



After the dinner date, Jurina and Rena decided to go home. When they were crossing the intersection near their apartment, suddenly the car they were in was hit by a black SUV.

TBC

 :shock:
Who did that. :angry:

You'll find out in the next chapter.. :grin:


After the dinner date, Jurina and Rena decided to go home. When they were crossing the intersection near their apartment, suddenly the car they were in was hit by a black SUV.

TBC

 :shock:
Who did that. :angry:
This is bad.... really bad. I hope they'll okay.
Are they Center's enemies or something?

You'll find out in the next chapter...  :grin:

The Devil inside Me... finally, the titles  :twothumbs

I love how Jurina save Rena from her ex. (Yuck!! I think her ex is a hyper..  :angry:)
Cool Jurina.  :inlove:
So, Jurina... love at first sight? XD

I need more..... update!!!  :mon pray2:

Jurina is so cool, right??
I'm also fangirling while writing it...
Such a gentleman...  :inlove:

I'll update later when I have time..

Lagi skripsi, harus ngurusin skripsi juga...  :sweatdrop:

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Re: The Devil Inside Me (WMatsui) - Chapter 2
« Reply #19 on: November 17, 2013, 04:53:14 PM »
Ehhh?!

Their car got hit by another car?

It is judt an accident or there someone behind it?

Will Jurina tell Rena about her past?

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