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Only in Dreams [Mayuki] (Chapter 10) 7/1/2014
« on: March 02, 2014, 10:50:34 PM »
Author’s Note

Hello readers, my name is nishimura and this is my first time writing a fanfic. I lurked around the forum for a while before I decided to join the community a little over a month ago. While I have little confidence in my writing abilities, I aspire to improve my storytelling skills. I chose to write a Mayuki fic because they are my favorite paring. 

Since it is my first time, constructive criticism is wanted and greatly appreciated.
Thank you for reading and I hope you enjoy this story.

Chapter One

"I've never felt this tired before."

Sitting in her car, looking at the harsh, red traffic light, Watanabe Mayu impatiently waited for the light to turn green. She had a terrible fifteen hours in the operating room as a cardiologist. On this particular day, she had an intensive operation which unfortunately resulted in the loss of a patient. While this happens to many doctors, it completely crushed her. At this point, she drastically needed to get home and sleep.   

Mayu sped home in her tiny white car. The outside of the vehicle looked slightly in need of a wash. The interior was full of trash from quick meals on the go, extra changes of clothes for late night hospital shifts, and abandoned items that she was too lazy to bring into her house. The doctor's busy schedule put car maintenance at the bottom of her priority list.

When she finally arrived home, she walked up the lonely steps to her apartment. Unlike her car, Mayu's apartment was clean. Although it looked well taken care of, there was a lack of life in the space. The apartment looked as if no one lived in it. The place was larger than that of the average dwelling for one person. The front door opened to a modern looking kitchen which was open and connected to a minimalistic living room. The living room had a sleek, grey couch in the center with a nice sized television in front of it. Stairs that lead to the doctor's bedroom and bathroom were positioned several feet behind the couch. Mayu's bedroom matched the modern look of the rest of the apartment with a few girly touches. Her bed was positioned at the left side of the room which was parallel to a large window which revealed a dazzling skyline. The right side of the room had a simple desk with her computer along with a large shelf that housed several hundred anime DVDs. Her extensive collection included the well known shows as well as the lesser known and more obscure.

"Ah, I should really eat dinner, it's already 3:00 AM"

Mayu grabbed some leftover mushroom curry from her fridge and placed it in a bowl. She placed it in the microwave and walked to the livingroom couch to wait for the food to heat up. She plopped her body onto the couch with great force. Even though she's home, she can't stop thinking about what happened in the operating room earlier that day. In order to calm herself down, she powers the TV and begins to watch the news. The images on the screen begin to blur into colorful mosaics as the young doctor's eyes slowly shut. The narration of the news anchors gradually lull her to sleep.

BEEP! BEEP! BEEP!

Suddenly the loud beeping of the microwave startles Mayu awake. She grumpily gets up and collects her food from the microwave. Her feelings are conflicted because the microwave annoyingly woke her but she also finally gets a nice hot meal in the comfort of her own home. She returns to the couch and scarfs down the mushroom curry in a hungry frenzy. The warmth in her belly causes her tiredness to appear again. In a matter of minutes, the exhausted doctor drifts into an incredibly deep sleep.

"Good morning! I'm Kashiwagi Yuki with today's weather"

Mayu slowly awakens to the sound of an enthusiastic girl on the television.

"Unfortunately today is going to be mostly cloudy with scattered showers throughout the region, please remember to bring your umbrellas if you plan on running errands"

Mayu, irritated by how overly cheerful the weather girl is, reaches for the remote to shut the television off. As she's holds her finger over the powerbutton, she realizes how beautiful the weather girl is. Kashiwagi's eyes seemed to immediately captivate Mayu. The weather girl's presence caused Mayu to leave her state of exhaustion. Yuki's aura energized Mayu, time seemed to slow down. The sadness about the failed surgery and the emptiness in Mayu's home was washed away with Yuki's beauty.

Mayu realized she had been temporarily lost in the weather girl's beauty and was still pointing her remote at the TV. The doctor glanced at the clock and read 6:00 AM. She had only slept for 3 hours. The doctor continued to allow herself to be hypnotized by the weather girl's beauty. Mayu's eyes gradually began to lose the battle between sleep and looking at the weather girl. Yuki's enthusiastic voice harmoniously comforted to doctor. The doctor wanted to keep her eyes open to see Kashiwagi for as long as possible, but the inevitable exhaustion kicked in. As Mayu lovingly stared at the screen, the young weather girl's beautiful face was shortly engulfed in darkness.
« Last Edit: July 02, 2014, 06:09:58 AM by nishimura »

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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] Chapter 1 3/2/2014
« Reply #1 on: March 02, 2014, 11:19:35 PM »
Really interesting and excellent redaction!!!  :cow:
I'm looking forward!

I hope don't take you too much to update the next chapter!!!! >___<

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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] Chapter 1 3/2/2014
« Reply #2 on: March 02, 2014, 11:34:51 PM »
Hmm im wait for the next event


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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] Chapter 1 3/2/2014
« Reply #3 on: March 03, 2014, 12:49:51 AM »
Update please~

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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] Chapter 1 3/2/2014
« Reply #4 on: March 03, 2014, 03:05:44 AM »
Author’s Note

Hello readers, my name is nishimura and this is my first time writing a fanfic. I lurked around the forum for a while before I decided to join the community a little over a month ago. While I have little confidence in my writing abilities, I aspire to improve my storytelling skills. I chose to write a Mayuki fic because they are my favorite paring. 

Since it is my first time, constructive criticism is wanted and greatly appreciated.
Thank you for reading and I hope you enjoy this story.

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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] Chapter 1 3/2/2014
« Reply #5 on: March 03, 2014, 05:17:26 AM »
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Koneki: Thank you for taking interest. I hope you continue reading :D

Terragen: Thank you for reading, I hope you continue.  :twothumbs

Kirozoro: Thank you for reading. I'll definitely try to update quickly.  :thumbsup

Mo-chan: Thank you for reading. While my user name doesn't derive from Nakanishi Yuka, I will graciously accept your nickname for me. I feel closer to the community now, so thank you for welcoming me.  :cathappy:

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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] Chapter 2 3/2/2014
« Reply #6 on: March 03, 2014, 05:22:00 AM »
Author's Note

Hello readers, nishimura here. Thank you for reading the first chapter of my first fanfic. I really hope it kept you interested in the future chapters. Once again, criticism is appreciated.

I frantically wrote the second chapter after reading the wonderful comments. I decided to update on the same day I uploaded the first chapter! I hope you enjoy it!


Chapter Two


"Did you find everything okay?"
"Yep"
"Great, your change will be 200¥. Have a wonderful day"
"Thanks you too"

"Attention shoppers, just a reminder, we have an assortment of beverages on sale today, thank you."

"Hey mom can we buy this?"
"Not today sweetheart"

Noises from all directions were heard. The area was very bright and had shelves full of different merchandize. All of the conversations and announcements began to blend together and create white noise. Mayu rubbed her eyes and adjusted her vision. At that instant, the audio became distinguishable again. Mayu suddenly realized she was standing in a convenience store. She had no idea how she got there, however, she surprisingly felt the situation was normal.

She wandered around the aisles for a while, reading magazines and looking at snacks. She had no idea what day it was or what time, however, the doctor was content with roaming around the store. After making several laps around the perimeter of the building, she looked down the aisle to her left and saw someone familiar.

"It's her...Kashiwagi, the weather girl. She's even more beautiful in person"

Yuki was casually looking at the various beverages that were on sale. She looked a little indecisive about what she planned to purchase. The weather girl would put a few drinks in her basket, then exchange them with different drinks several minutes later. This routine continued many times.

Mayu shyly hid around the corner of the aisle. Once again, she found herself mesmerized with Kashiwagi's beauty. The doctor desperately wanted to talk to her but her confidence had disappeared at that moment.

"I should just walk up and talk to her...no I can't. What would I even say?"

Mayu continued to watch Yuki from a comfortable distance. She observed the weather girl's drink switch routine for a while. Mayu finally built up the confidence to walk towards Yuki. In order to make her motions seem normal, Mayu pretended to look at beverages as well. After the two girls stood next to each other for thirty seconds, Mayu attempted to make conversation.

"So, these drinks...are...on sale, it's pretty cool those drinks. Yeah drinks."

Mayu stammered. The doctor's face instantly turned bright pink. She was so embarrassed with herself and her speaking abilities. She wished she never approached the weather girl. She just wanted to leave the store, run home, and never leave her house again. Her thoughts were swirling around in her head as her face grew warmer.

"Hahaha, yeah. I'm having a really tough time deciding what to buy"

The weather girl chuckled. She acted as if the stranger talking to her never said anything unusual. Yuki's effortless social graces made Mayu feel less uncomfortable. The doctor finally snapped out of her  embarrassment and tried to continue the conversation.

"I really like this drink, it's good for your health. It's full of antioxidants and other vitamins that are really good for your heart."

"Ahaha, you sound like a doctor." Said Yuki.

"Oh, well I am a doctor. A cardiologist"

"That's awesome! That must be so stressful. I'm a weather girl so I don't get too stressed with my job"

"But you're job's awesome too! I've seen you on the 6:00 AM news." Said Mayu in an overly excited voice.

"Oh, thank you for noticing me. Well I have to go, I'll buy the drinks you recommend Dr."

With a smile, Yuki filled her basket with the drinks Mayu recommended. The girl waved goodbye to the doctor and walked down the aisle. The further Yuki walked, the more Mayu's vision began to blur. The shape of the weather girl grew smaller and less defined.

"Damn it, I didn't even tell her my name" said Mayu in a regret filled voice.

Mayu spun around the aisle in an effort to focus her vision. The brightness of the convenience store grew dimmer. The shapes around the doctor became blurry. Mayu was soon surrounded with a soft darkness.

"THEN KUSUKAMI PASSES THE BALL TO MINAMINO, HE SHOOTS AND GOOOOOOALLLL"

Mayu quickly jerked out of her sleep. She frantically looked around the room and realized she was sitting on her couch. She glanced at the TV and saw there was a lively soccer match on. The enthusiastic announcer had woken her up with his passionate yelling.

The doctor angrily shut her television off. She sat in her living room for a while and looked out the window. It was raining heavily, the noise of the droplets hitting the apartment roof was soothing. Mayu, no longer annoyed about the soccer announcer glanced at the clock and it read 9:00 AM. It had been three hours since she saw Kashiwagi on the news.

"It was all a dream. I never met Kashiwagi"

Mayu felt lonely and disappointed. She looked around her sterile apartment. She laid herself back down on the couch, she was still incredibly tired from her failed operation. The doctor closed her eyes and allowed the sound of the rain drops to fill her thoughts. The tired girl gradually lost her awareness and returned to her comfortable slumber.
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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] Chapter 2 3/2/2014
« Reply #7 on: March 03, 2014, 05:41:27 AM »
Masaka mayuyu with yuki in this story just meet only in dream??!

That was somehow cool if yuki dream about mayu too



Mayu failed operation,yeah not able to safe person was heavy


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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] Chapter 2 3/2/2014
« Reply #8 on: March 03, 2014, 06:06:33 PM »
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Terragen: Thank you for reading. Yeah that dream part was kind of a bummer for Mayu. I never thought about adding Yuki's dreams into the story, but, that's definitely an interesting idea and I'll consider it.  :cow:

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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] Chapter 2 3/2/2014
« Reply #9 on: March 03, 2014, 06:08:53 PM »
Author's Note

Hello readers. This chapter is happier than the second one. I feel this is the first development of Mayuki's relationship. I had fun writing this chapter, I got to do a little research about one of the trains that runs into Saitama Prefecture which was cool.

I hope you enjoy this chapter. Criticism is greatly appreciated. Happy reading.


Chapter Three

"Attention passengers, the doors are now closing. To ensure your safety, please step away from the doors"

The calm yet stern voice of the automated train announcer alerted Mayu to her surroundings. The train's interior was very familiar to Mayu, she had ridden this train hundreds of times. The doors of the train closed and a well known jingle played as the train took off. After hearing the jingle, she knew she was on the Fukutoshin Line.

"Now leaving Akatsuka Station, our next stop is Narimasu Station"

"Oh, my station is in two stops, I'll just ride the rest of the way home" thought Mayu.

The atmosphere of the train was soothing to the doctor. The quickly moving scenery and the occasional bump left the girl content with her thoughts.

"Now arriving at Akatsuka Station, the doors are now opening"

Mayu sat diagonally across from the door. She enjoyed watching the various passengers exit and board the train. The train was relatively empty, it definitely wasn't rush hour. While watching the last of the passengers board the train, the last person to walk though the doors was Kashiwagi Yuki. The weather girl looked as stunning as she normally does, however, she looked more casual than she did on TV. It must have been her day off.

"Ah! it's Kashiwagi! Not this again, I'm totally going to forget how to communicate" thought Mayu.

The weather girl looked at the various empty seats in the train, she eventually locked eyes with Mayu and smiled. Once Mayu met Yuki's eyes from across the train car, her face instantly began to feel warm.

"Hey Doctor......I'm so sorry" said Yuki in an embarrassed voice.

"Hi Kashiwagi-san, why are you sorry?"

"I totally don't know your name, I feel terrible"

"Oh, my name is Watanabe Mayu, it's nice to see you again"

"It's really nice to see you too. If you don't mind, can I sit next to you?"

"Of course" said Mayu in an excited voice.

The weather girl sat next to the doctor and they both exchanged smiles. Mayu tried to observe Yuki's every detail. The doctor loved Yuki's casual, yet cute outfit. The weather girl was sporting an adorable sweater with a collared shirt layered underneath it. She was also wearing a skirt that pulled the entire outfit together. It was a perfect blend of femininity and sophistication. While Mayu loved Yuki's outfit, her favorite part about Yuki's appearance was the fact that she had her bangs pinned  back. The weather girl never showed her forehead during her broadcast so Mayu cherished this rare site.

"We are now leaving Narimasu Station, the next stop is Wakoshi Station"

"Wakoshi is the last stop on this line, does that mean we're getting off at the same place?" asked Yuki.

"Yep, I live a few minutes away from that station" explained Mayu.

"If you live close, I'll walk you home"

"Oh, you don't need to do that" said Mayu in a shy voice.

While Mayu was trying to be polite and decline Yuki's offer, the doctor secretly hoped Yuki would walk her home anyway. This was an actual opportunity to get to know the beloved weather girl and she didn't want to lose this chance.

"I insist Dr. Watanabe, besides, you've kept me company this entire train ride"

"Thank you Kashiwagi-san, you've made this train ride enjoyable for me too"

For the remainder of the ride, the two girls talked the entire time. Mayu talked about her work as a cardiologist, telling anecdotes to describe her experiences. Yuki told hilarious stories while using outrageous reactions to describe events. Mayu throughly enjoyed every word the weather girl spoke. The doctor couldn't remember that last time she felt this happy. A warm feeling developed in Mayu's stomach, the heat traveled to her face which caused the girl to blush lightly. While she couldn't describe her feelings as they were happening, she was in love.

"Now arriving at Wakoshi Station, please remember to take all personal belongings with you"

Both girls happily exited the train. They continued to talk while walking to Mayu's apartment. The walk only lasted ten minutes, but, they had already learned much about each other.

"Well this is my place" stated Mayu.

"Wow, you actually live pretty close to me" explained Yuki.

"Really? That's awesome. Hey Kashiwagi-san?"

"Yeah?"

"Since you don't live that far, I'd be happy to quickly drive you home"

"Are you sure? Thanks I really appreciate that"

Mayu grabbed her keys and opened her car. The doctor suddenly remembered that her car is a mess. Yuki looked inside and saw old food wrappers and various changes of clothes in the back seat. Mayu was incredibly irritated with herself. The inside of her car was an embarrassment.

"I'm so sorry, my car's disgusting"

"Oh it's okay, you must work really hard so a little mess is justified" said Yuki with a chuckle.

The two got in the car and drove away. The ride was mostly silent because Mayu was still a little embarrassed. The drive only lasted a few minutes.

"Oh, this is my house" stated Yuki.

Mayu pulled into the driveway and parked the car. Yuki grabbed her things and exited the vehicle.

"Thank you for the ride"

The weather girl smiled. Mayu grinned back and made sure to observe every one of Yuki's details for a second time. Mayu waved goodbye and began pulling out of the driveway while a sudden thought popped into her head"

"Wait! Kashiwagi-san!"

"Yeah? Oh and you can call me Yuki"

"Do you want to get lunch sometime? Yuki.."

"Actually, lunch sounds wonderful."

"Great! Let's exchange numbers and we can work out a date later."

"Sound's awesome. Thanks Dr. Watanabe."

"Call me Mayu"

"Okay, thanks Mayu, see you soon"

The doctor reversed out of the driveway while waving at Yuki. Mayu drove away with a huge grin across her face. While smiling, she looked through the rear view mirror to see Yuki enter her house. The girl continued her short drive home with her heart happily racing with excitement.

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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] (Chapter 3) 3/3/2014
« Reply #10 on: March 04, 2014, 12:21:33 AM »
Hi Hi !
Just discovered your story today and i must say i really love it.
You got my attention easily: the plot seems lovely with a little mystery (since they seems to meet only in dreams...), your writing skills are very good.
Welcome here ^^

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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] (Chapter 3) 3/3/2014
« Reply #11 on: March 04, 2014, 01:17:39 AM »
I just dbwkehbhjwebjhdbwej I love this story!
I love how the events take place in their life  :cathappy:

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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] (Chapter 3) 3/3/2014
« Reply #12 on: March 04, 2014, 03:20:12 AM »
Mayu exchange phones number with Yuki!!

Please update

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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] (Chapter 3) 3/3/2014
« Reply #13 on: March 04, 2014, 04:59:19 AM »
Mayu, that was nice, right? :wub: :wub :wub:

You able to ask Yuki out for lunch~! :fap

Can't wait for the lunch date of MaYuki~! :twothumbs

Thanks for your hardwork :kneelbow:

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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] (Chapter 3) 3/3/2014
« Reply #14 on: March 04, 2014, 09:50:46 AM »
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soolim: Thank you for reading. I’m really glad I caught your attention. Yeah there is a little mystery involved. Sometimes I even get confused between dreams and reality while writing the chapters hahaha  :lol:. Thank you for complimenting my writing skills, I've learned through doing academic writing but I think I’m getting the hang of writing fiction. I hope you continue to enjoy the story.

Koneki: This comment makes me really happy. I’m really glad you like the story. I’ll continue to try my best at making the events sound interesting. I often find that the events that are taking place in the story are pretty ordinary but I try to spice them up with some descriptions. Please continue to keep up with this fic, I really appreciate it.  :thumbsup 

Kirozoro: Thank you for continuing to read. Yes! Mayu and Yuki’s relationship is finally starting to develop. I’ll try to write the next chapter soon, I calculated that it takes me an average of 1 hour and 45 minutes to complete a chapter. I’ll definitely post within the next few days.  :twothumbs

kenjoy12: Yay Mayu! We all knew she had it in her! I’m excited to write the lunch date chapter. I’m currently deciding on what type of restaurant they’ll go to lunch at. I might just make up a restaurant or I’ll research and write about an actual restaurant that exists near the actual train stations I named in chapter 3.    :cathappy:

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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] (Chapter 3) 3/3/2014
« Reply #15 on: March 04, 2014, 04:47:41 PM »
Mayu is so unloved :luvluv2: :luvluv1:


Hope that is not a dream :frustrated:

Update pls :kneelbow:
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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] (Chapter 3) 3/3/2014
« Reply #16 on: March 04, 2014, 05:46:38 PM »
I Love it~ Interesting story ~
2 person going out for lunch = DATE   :luvluv1: :shy1: :shy2:
HAHA.. I see you update your fanfic fast. 2 days 3 chapter already~  :shock: AND I LIKE IT  :mon heh:
Please update soon.  :mon fu: :kneelbow:  :deco: (I'll wait for you) :mon cweepy: :mon XD: Haha~

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« Reply #17 on: March 07, 2014, 10:01:55 AM »
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MayuxMatsuixMusic: Thank you for reading. Yeah, I hope it's not a dream too. I'll try to update as fast as I can. Maybe I'll just finish this fic over the weekend and upload it at a consistent pace.

Zhen: Thank you for reading. I'm really glad you like the story. Yep, it's totally a date and I want to make it cute and awesome. I'm trying hard to update quickly. I'd like to create a reputation of being speedy.

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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] (Chapter 3) 3/3/2014
« Reply #18 on: March 07, 2014, 10:05:14 AM »
Author's Note

Hello readers, nishimura here. I'd first like to apologize for this chapter coming out later than expected. I just started my 3rd trimester of school so there's been a lot of work. This chapter was mostly written at night, right before I went to sleep so I apologize if the plot it a little harder to understand. My grammar and word choice are probably not on par with the other chapters as well. I tried to create a cute lunch scene while also adding other events. Once again, I truly appreciate all of the comments as well as criticism. 

Chapter Four

"Hello?"

"Hey Mayu, there's this great yakiniku place I heard about the other day. Do you want to go there for lunch today?"

"That sounds wonderful, what time?"

"I'll pick you up at 2:00 PM"

"Awesome, thanks Yuki"

Mayu set her phone down on her coffee table. Her heart was beating at a quick pace after making plans for her first lunch date with Yuki. While she was ecstatic about the plans, she was also incredibly nervous. The doctor wanted to make sure everything about herself was perfect for her date with Yuki. Contemplating what she would wear to lunch, Mayu glanced at the clock and noted it was 9:00 AM.

"I have five hours to make myself and my apartment look amazing" thought Mayu.

The young girl ran up stairs to her bedroom and scoured through her wardrobe to find an outfit that had a perfect balance between cute and casual. She didn't want to be overdressed to get yakiniku. After trying about fifty different outfits, she finally settled with an adorable, yet simple white dress. The girl then realized she hadn't thought about her hair or makeup yet. She wanted to attempt something different that celebrated the special occasion. Instead of wearing her hair down as she normally does, Mayu decided to style her hair in a loose braid. The doctor then applied her makeup, she chose a natural looking style.

After getting ready, Mayu looked at herself in the mirror. She was happy with her selections and hoped Yuki would like them too. The girl glanced at the clock and noted it was 12:00 PM; she still had two more hours. She decided to spend the rest of the time cleaning her apartment. Mayu thought about cleaning her car too, however, she was too afraid to attempt that today. By the time it was 2:00, the apartment looked clean and tidy. Mayu took a moment to look around and admire her hard work.

Knock Knock!

"Ah, She's here!"

Once she heard the knocking, Mayu was overcome with nervousness. She had suddenly forgotten the confidence her outfit and clean apartment gave her. In order to take maximum time to calm herself down, Mayu approached the door slowly. Despite her intentional delay, the door opened to reveal Yuki was standing right in front of her. The weather girl looked gorgeous. Her outfit consisted of a nice navy blue dress with a white scarf. She wore her hair down in her usual fashion.

"Hey Yuki, come in!" said Mayu in a forcefully happy voice.

"Hi, I really like your apartment. It's so clean and modern."

"Thanks, I try my best to keep it clean."

"Well, are you ready to go?"

"Yep, just let me grab my things."

Both girls exited the apartment. Yuki unlocked her car and opened the door for Mayu. Yuki's car was a shiny black color, the interior was a soft leather. Mayu sat herself in the passenger seat and began to examine the inside of the car. While the interior was spotless, Mayu also enjoyed the smell. The combination of the leather and Yuki's sweet scent made the aroma irresistible. Yuki plopped herself in her seat and began driving to the restaurant.

The journey only took about fifteen minutes. While in the car the girls talked about their mornings. Yuki discussed details about her morning weather report while Mayu pretended she didn't spend hours getting dressed for the date.

The girls entered the yakiniku restaurant. The place had a hip vibe to it. The dining room was mostly open with windows circling the entire perimeter of the room. The natural lighting created a natural feeling.

"Hi do you have a reservation?"

"Yes, table for two under Kashiwagi"

"Right this way miss"

The hostess led the girls to a comfortable booth positioned next to a window. The girls were handed menus and left to decide what to order. Mayu and Yuki looked at the various choices of dishes they could order. In the end, they decided to share a large variety of different meats and vegetables.

"I have the beef, pork, chicken, eggplant, zucchini, asparagus and mushrooms" The waitress set down numerous plates with the raw ingredients. She then took the time to fire up the grill in the center of the table.

"Thank you, enjoy your meal"

"Thank you" said both girls simultaneously.       
Mayu, hungry and excited to eat, began placing various things on the grill to cook. The ingredients making contact with the hot surface created a lovely sizzling sound and a wonderful aroma. Yuki tried to follow Mayu but struggled to place the ingrediants on the grill.

"Are you okay? It looks like you're having a little trouble there" chuckled Mayu.

"I'm fine, I'm just not the best at cooking"

"It's not really cooking, we're just placing things on a grill"

"Stop it, you're teasing me" said Yuki in a playfully whiny voice.

In order to prove Mayu wrong, Yuki swiftly grabbed a piece of beef cooking on the grill and placed it in her mouth. Yuki's mouth immediately shot open, she realized that the meat had not nearly cooked enough.

"You're really bad at this. Maybe I should just do all the grilling" teased Mayu.

Mayu placed the remaining ingredients on the grill in an orderly fashion. While the doctor was diligently watching each piece, Yuki was jokingly pouting. While the weather girl's face looked displeased, she was secretly enjoying watching the doctor put so much care into each piece of food.

"Well, it looks about done now" stated Mayu.

Mayu picked up a steaming piece of chicken, she examined it carefully to ensure it was cooked to perfection.

"Here Yuki, you can have the first bite"

While still holding the hot chicken between her chopsticks, Mayu brought the piece close to her lips and gently blew on it to cool it down. Extending her arm, Mayu fed Yuki the first bite.

"Ah, this is really good. Good job Mayu!"

Mayu began to feed herself. Her attention to the food had certainly paid off, everything was delicious.

"Hey Mayu, feed me more" teased Yuki

Mayu blushed slightly. Just the thought of feeding Yuki more than once made her excited. Repeating her earlier steps, Mayu fed Yuki a variety of ingredients. Yuki loved how the doctor was spoiling her. She loved being taken care of and enjoyed every bite of food Mayu fed her. 

After enjoying a wonderfully cooked lunch, the girls were back in the car heading to Mayu's house.

"Today was really fun, thanks for coming to lunch" said Yuki in a happy voice.

"Thank you for inviting me. Oh Yuki, do you want to come to my place for tea when we get there?"

"That sounds wonderful"

They shortly arrived at Mayu's Apartment. Mayu quickly unlocked the door and led Yuki inside.

"You can relax while I make the tea" stated Mayu.

Yuki walked around Mayu's modern living room for a few minutes. She carefully examined the geometric furniture. The weather girl enjoyed the minimalistic interior design and she loved the large windows that overlooked the city. The extravagant view contrasted well with the simple interior of the apartment.

"Tea's done" stated Mayu excitedly.

"Great."

Mayu set a tray with two cups, creme and sugar on the coffee table. Both girls sat comfortably on the couch. While sipping tea, they both joked around and told stories. Every minute they spent talking taught them more about each other. Time passed rapidly, they had been talking for so long the sun had began to set.

"I love enjoying the sunset with a nice cup of tea" stated Yuki in a relaxed voice.

"Me too. I can't believe I have to work tomorrow. I have a bunch of consultations and patients to attend to. I wish I could stay here, drink tea and watch the sunset with you forever" complained Mayu.

"That sounds amazing"

Suddenly, Mayu had an idea.

"Hey Yuki, let's get some fresh air."

After enjoying tea, the girls decided to take a walk around the neighborhood to enjoy the sunset. They walked to a nearby park which had a wonderful view of the city below.

"I love this park" stated Yuki.

"Me too, I used to come here all the time as a child"

"Aww, little Mayu must have been so cute" said Yuki with a smile.     
 
After hearing Yuki's comment, a soft blush grew on Mayu's cheeks.

"Here, I'll take you to my favorite spot in the park" giggled Mayu.

Mayu quickly grabbed Yuki's hand, the pair ran through various grassy fields. After running for several minutes, the girls approached a hill with a large tree at the top of it. Although they were tired from the running, Mayu dashed to the top while encouraging Yuki to follow her.

"Come on we're almost there"

"I'm coming, I'm coming. This hill is so tall, I can't believe I let you drag me he....."

Yuki's voice cut off. It seemed as if all of her thoughts were suddenly cleared from her brain. All of the words she was saying seconds earlier vanished. Her actions were immediately eclipsed by an overwhelming sensation of love.

"Yuki, is there something wrong?" said Mayu in a concerned voice.

Mayu looked at the weather girl who was standing a few feet away. Yuki was staring directly at Mayu. The older girl had her mouth slightly open while the rest of her body looked frozen in time. She couldn't take her eyes off of the young doctor. Mayu was perfectly positioned at the peak of the hill in front of the gorgeous sunset. The sun created a golden outline around Mayu which produced the perfect shadows and accentuated various parts of her face with wonderful lighting.

"Are you okay?"

"You're beautiful." whispered Yuki

"What did you say?" stated Mayu in a confused voice.

Yuki began to step towards Mayu. Her walking stopped when the girls were less than a few centimeters apart. With their foreheads practically touching, Yuki looked Mayu directly in the eyes and said

"I said you're beautiful"

Mayu's face suddenly felt like it was on fire. Hearing Yuki say that made the heat extend throughout her body. Out of nervousness, Mayu averted her eyes and tried to regain her thoughts. While the younger girl was internally freaking out, Yuki swiftly leaned in and kissed her on the lips.

The kiss didn't last very long. Mayu's eyes bugged as she was completely shocked with Yuki's actions. The moment she desperately waited for had come unexpectedly.

"I'm so sorry...I shouldn't have done that to you" said Yuki with a quiver in her voice. The weather girl had started to cry slightly because she didn't want to hurt Mayu.

"Don't be sorry, that's exactly what I wanted."

At that moment, Mayu quickly approached Yuki and initiated a second kiss. This kiss lasted longer and was full of passion. The girls embraced and enjoyed the softness of each others lips. The sun surrounded the pair with a warmth that solidified their mutual feelings. After exchanging soft kisses for several minutes, both Mayu and Yuki sat in the grass and enjoyed watching the sun conclude a perfect day.   

 

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Re: Only in Dreams [Mayuki] (Chapter 4) 3/7/2014
« Reply #19 on: March 07, 2014, 10:58:12 AM »
Nishimura-san, what are talking about? The plot of chapter 4 was great!! :fap
Idk, maybe because you just updated.. :nervous Gomen! :bow: but it was AWESOME~!!

The lunch date was PERRRR-FFEECCCTT~!!!

The sunset emitted Mayu like a GODDESSS~!!!
* I can't stop imagining it* Yuki! Girl, i feel ya!! :lol:

Final touched was the KISSU~!!

On top of the hill~!!! Say what!!?? Again!! :lol:

On top of the hill with a wonderful sunset on the background~!!!
That made MaYuki ♪shine bright like a diamond~♪

:wub: :wub: :wub: :wub:

Emerged~!! Emerged~!! :fap :fap

MaYuki stay that way! Feel the love! :hip smile:

Aaahhh~ I hope it was not a dream :banghead: If it is, please don't end it.. :cry: :banghead:

Ohwell, just wait and see, right? :nervous

Thanks for the update and your hardwork. :thumbup

More to come, yeah? :kneelbow:
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