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Author Topic: You Took Me By Surprise:AtsuMina,KojiYuu,MariMii JUNE 26, 2015 Chap 18 ADDED!!!  (Read 41774 times)

Offline rabutan

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Kyaa!!!!

I love your ff author-san

please continue

I can't wait for the next chapter.

I hope you didn't get wrters block

I really want to know whts next :shock:

Offline Archer1992

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thats not fair for minami!!

what is tomochin doing back...?

Update ASAP!!

thanks

Offline 2manyOTP

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Hi GUYS!!!!
So sorry for the late update :kneelbow:. I was having a hard time trying to figure out what to write, Plus I had work so I could really find time

Like I said before, I am writing this as I go.

Same as always please leave your comments. They really do motivate me.

I hope you like the update

 



Chapter 8


I open my door and head straight to the dark living room to leave my coat

Then I hear “Hi. Minami”

Even with the dark room, instantly I knew who that voice belongs to. My pulse begins to race, turning on the light and I knew my
assumption was right. I felt my heart drop to the floor

“T.Tomochin. What are you doing here” I say looking at her dumbstruck

She walks up to me and gives me a hug. “I missed you”

Still unable to comprehend the situation I stay rooted on my spot.

“What are you doing here?” I ask once more as I watch her sit on my couch

“I just arrived from my tour in America. And I really wanted to see you. You never replied to any of my messages whenever I tried to contact you. It’s been too long Minami. I figured it’s about time.” She says

Unmoving, I say “How did you find out where I live?”   

“I’m a very persuasive person. Being one of Yuko’s talent, she’s the easiest to get information out off. Trust me. It wasn’t easy. She’s probably told the others by now. And I’m sure she’s tried to give you a heads up too” she says as if reminiscing how she got Yuko to talk

“How did you get in my apartment?” I continue to question her

Sighing, “We used to live together Minami. You used to hide the spare key under the fire extinguisher in the hallway. When I got here, I figured you’d do the same. I was delighted to see I was right.” She replies

Giving up I sit down on the opposite end of the couch. “Go home Tomochin” I say to her.

“It’s been too long Minami. I’ve stayed away from you, from our friends for too long. You can’t run away forever” she replies looking at me

“Tomochin go home..Please” I look at her pleading

“No! We still have a lot to talk about.” She replies

“We will talk.. Just.. not now. I’m tired and I am not ready. So please.. Go home” I say with a hint of desperation in my voice

“I am staying. This has gone on for too long. If you won’t talk then I will” she says getting off the couch to stand in front of me

I stay silent and continue to look at the ground

“It was perfect Minami. You did everything perfectly. The proposal was beautiful. The ring you picked was like a counterpart of me.” She continues

Biting my tongue I let her continue

“We were perfect for each other. Supported each other till we’ve reached our dreams. Dotted our I’s and crossed our T’s. Others
were jealous of us. Of what we had. We were living a dream. You were and still are the best thing that happened in my life. You showed me that my dreams weren’t out of reach. With you the impossible became possible.” She says as I hear her begin to lose composure.

Looking at the ground, I unknowingly see my tears drop to the floor. Each reminder of the past was like a knife stabbing my heart.

Unable to stay silent much longer, I say “Not perfect enough I guess”

“What happened with Tomomi was the biggest mistake I’ve ever made. It was stupid and rash. I forgot about us.” she gets on her knees and takes my hand

I look at her. I can see the pain in her eyes. Tears are streaming down her face

“I forgot that I had the most amazing person in the world at home waiting for me. The person who loves me over everything else. The biggest regret I had this past couple of years was not the fact that I made a mistake. But the fact that I broke your heart
Minami.” Tomochin says sobbing

Shaking my head I say “I was bitter and angry Tomochin. Not at you but at myself for being too blind to see that I was losing you. I got too comfortable with our relationship. I was a fool. I’m not going to lie and say I was okay. I wasn’t. And I know I did a poor job at keeping myself together.”

“I. Am. So. Sorry” she says between sobs

Wiping the tears off her face, “It’s okay. I’ve forgiven you a long time ago. I just didn’t know how to handle myself around you. What happened with us made me a stronger person. I know now that I am capable of loving a person more than life itself. I concentrated on making myself good enough for you, to make you love me that I forgot to think about me. But now, I’ve learned to love myself first. To be satisfied with how I am. I can now stand on my own two feet. It was painful. All of it was. But I am a better person because of it. I didn’t get back up on my own. I have our friends to thank for that. So please don’t be sorry. I thank you for it. The hard part is over for the both us. I have been a coward. You’ve given me courage to face my problems. I think this is a new beginning for the both of us. We can be great friends” I finish saying as I pull her into a hug

Sobbing in my arms, she finally pulls away and looks at me “I love you Minami” she says as she leans in to kiss me. I look away and have her lips land with my cheek instead

Looking at me with a confusion in her eyes

“I love you too Tomochin. I always have and I always will. You are a big part of my life and I don’t want to lose you again. But I am in love with someone else.” I give her my usual dumb smile. I feel my heart beat faster. Realizing that I am in love with Atsuko. I need to see her. I need to tell her..

“O-Oh.” Tomochin says looking defeated. “I’m sorry. It’s time to me to leave.”

She quickly grabs her stuff and head for the door.

I follow her outside my door as she walks out.

She turns around and gives me a hug. She then looks at me with a smile, shocking me at how her mood changed so quickly.
“I am going to win you back Minami” she says with a determined look on her face as she walks to the elevator.

Just then.. I realize Atsuko standing a couple of doors away from my apartment. Looking glum, she watches Tomochin get on the elevator.

She then looks at me and says “Yuko called me and told me to check up on you to see if you were okay.” Then tilting her head as if pointing at the elevator that just left, “But looks like you’ve been taken care of”

She then turns around and walks away

“Nani!. Atsuko. Hold on Hold on. Let me explain” I chase after her




 












Offline cisda83

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Eh... Now that Minami able to put the past behind, new problem arrive.

Atsuko really has a bad timing or Minami is out of luck

Problem kept coming whether she wants it or not.

How Minami is going to handle Atsuko's jealousy?

Would Minami able to explain everything to Atsuko?

Would Atsuko give Minami cold shoulder?

How about Tomochin determination to win Minami?

What happen with Tomo~mi?

Can't wait to see

Thank you for the update

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Offline nickyololol

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this fic is awesome! lol acchan vs tomochin

author san please continue to update!
douzo~~

Offline Haruko

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acchan fight for your husband

Offline liabont

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please update soon author-san

Offline ubulubulbilu

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Finally, an update !! Yeay
I love this fanfic. And Tomochin, u really need to make some more trouble, make it dramatic! Lol

Arigatou author san

Offline ayudewi6

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oh no! tomochin seems to be doing something that she could have takamina back!
acchan listen to the explanation of takamina, don't run! :(
takamina quickly explain everything to acchan! :scolding:
acchan seems to have to do something if she doesn't want to lose takamina :twisted:

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* sigh * acchan see minami in bad timing nee??  :nervous Acchan let minami explain first. :doh: . Tq for include tomochin.  I see more conflict gonna happen and more drama.. minami fight for acchan!  :fap

Offline X8RTIER

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  • Love ache!! who cares!! Stone like heart!!
Need more update!! pls pls pls
:3 MEOW? PROBLEM PEOPLE

Offline Justqle

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ouuch tomochin you can't beat acchan in this  :mon noprob:
takamina hurry you explain everything to acchan before it's late ..
acchan please understand takamina's situation  :(

waiting for the next chapter  :twothumbs

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So Tomochin chose to stay away from their friends... How did their friends feel about all this?
Must have been awkward working at Yuko's agency (more so in the beginning, less with time, and yet still awkward now)...
Though I'm not surprised that she stayed since it sounds like an insanely good agency...

Tomochin's been touring in America, huh? Has she been overseas since that time?

What happened with Tomo~mi? Did they grow distant because confusion caused by Tomochin's guilt over what happened and her touring overseas have anything to do with it?

On another note, Takamina and Acchan haven't really defined what type of relationship they're in...

Hold up, did Tomochin say she paid Yuko a visit that day?
Wait please tell me she didn't call Atsuko too late-

Atsuko WAIT! It's not what you think!

She loves YOU not her!

achfneiwufhnwkcweoinvowei
TAKAHASHI MINAMI RUN!

Offline iLeo221

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NOOOOO!!!! Acchan! Pls let her explain!!!! Minami looooves youuuu! pls stop!!!!
OMG! Atsuko has a really bad timing!
Hope they are fine....

thx u for the update! It was really enjoyable to read and very gripping.
hope to see you soon again!

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why acchan always come in bad timing   :smh
takamina! explain it now! u dont want losing acchan right?  :shifty:
run for ur everlasting love takaboy!  :mon yeah:

Offline rabutan

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great ff author-san.

I look forwards to whats next

please update soon


Offline Keisthename

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wowowow! I like this fic very muccchhh

Tomochin get out!! lol

Offline 2manyOTP

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Hi guys!
Sorry for taking a while to update.
I hope you like this chapter. It was a bit rushed I know.
Please leave me your comments


Chapter 9

“Nani!. Atsuko. Hold on Hold on. Let me explain” I chase after her

Ignoring my calls, she continues to walk in a fast pace to her place.

“There’s nothing to explain Minami.” She replies getting into her apartment

Just as she was about to close the door, I put my foot in front of the door “itai!” I say to myself since I ran barefooted after her

“Please Atsuko. Let me in” pleading as I hold the open

“Fine” she finally gives up trying to close the door and lets me into her place

“Thank you” I say catching my breath

Once walking into her place I see her head straight for her bedroom closes the door

“EH!” I run to her bedroom door and turn the knob to follow her in but then I hear a “click”

Knocking on her door “Atsuko! I can explain everything!”

“I said I’d let you in. I didn’t say I’d sit around and listen to your excuses” I hear her say from inside

Getting a little frustrated I snap back “What excuses!? When had I ever had to makes excuses Atsuko.”

It was silence on the other side

Sighing, I lean my back on her door and sit on the floor. Hoping she’s still listening to me I start talking

“Tomochin was my past. You know that. I’m sure you’ve already heard from Mariko and Nyan Nyan about what happened. I’m sorry we never really got a chance to talk about it yet. But now is just as good as any I think” chuckling to myself a bit

“Everything was perfect with us. Well at least I thought it was. My business with Mii-chan was thriving and Tomochin was on her way to become the pop star she’s always wanted to be. I did everything and anything to make her happy. Supported every decision she made. Of course, I loved her. She was my first love. I thought that we would be spending the rest of our lives together. So I decided it was time for us to take that next step. I planned this elaborate proposal. And what a fool I was when she said no. I was blind for not seeing she was unhappy with me. Well, it’s not that she wasn’t happy..it was more like she isn’t love me as much as I loved her. I was suffocating in that balloon Atsuko. It took every fiber of my being not to jump. I was breaking inside. It felt as though, my whole world was breaking apart. Then I realized, that she has been seeing someone else from work behind my back. And I was hurting even more. Once the balloon landed, I was too ashamed to face our friends. Too worried about seeing the disappointment look on their faces. The coward that I was ran away. I ran away from everything. I wanted to just leave everything behind. To run away from the pain I was feeling, from everything I’ve worked for, Tomochin and even my friends” I stop to take a breath slightly surprised at myself for being able to talk about it and no longer be in aching

Still no response from Atsuko so I continue

“I was broken. It was a very dark time for me. I became a shut in. I thought to myself, if I wasn’t good enough for Tomochin, I was never going to be good enough for anyone. I didn’t care about anything anymore. Tomochin moved out of our place and moved to America for her career which happened to be good for her. She came back often for holidays. I didn’t make an effort to meet her half way. She always tried to reach out to me but I ignored her. She still got to see the others though. Even after what happened with us, they are her friends too. They weren’t happy with her at first but never shut her out. They however became over protective of me when it comes to her. I love our friends. They gave me the space I needed at that time. They knew one day I’d wake up and stop being a fool. They had faith in me when I didn’t in myself. So once I was ready to pick myself up off the ground, they were there to help me put myself together. Gradually, I went back to my normal life. Learning to live without Tomochin. I was healing. Very slowly but I was. I see everything in a different light now. I have become a better person. A stronger one. And I have Tomochin to thank for that. I’ve learned a lot from it. I am the Minami you know now because of what I’ve gone through. And I hope you like me enough to take me as I am.”

Knowing that I am probably just mumbling to myself I keep going

“Then I met you. You took me by surprise Atsuko. I didn’t think I’d care for anyone this much so fast. You have the most amazing smile in the world. I swear you could take away any pain or fear or fatigue that I have with that smile of yours. I like how carefree you are and how you allow yourself to enjoy the little things around you. It is impressive how you love you job so much. Seeing you interact with your fans like they are your friends amazes me. You are wonderful at what you do. Everyone sees you as this super multi-talented Maeda Atsuko. But I see you as you. The Atsuko who will eat anything that is given her. I can’t even catch up to your appetite. The Atsuko who loves going on EVERY ride in Disneyland. The Atsuko who I think is beautiful even without all her make up. The Atsuko who would go with the plan her friends put together just to troll me. You are wonderful Atsuko.” I finish tired from my very long exhausting day.

“And. I..” Yawning “Love “ Still yawning “You Maeda Atsuko.”

I fall asleep outside her bedroom door wondering if she was listening to all my grumblings.


please leave me your comments and opinions.

Offline ubulubulbilu

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I've been waiting so long for an aupdate of this ff. Why is it so short??? Pls update more author san. I'm really curious about all of their relationship. U don't need to make it finish soon, put some more drama, it'll be interesting.  :mon determined:

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welcome back authorsan! It's nice to see you again!

OMG! Your update is handsome! Minami is handsome!!!
hope Acchan is listening to Minamis warm and honest explanation.

Thx u for the update! It was short.... but really great. XD really thx u! ;)

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