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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 80 - (8/18)]
« Reply #640 on: August 18, 2010, 06:36:00 AM »
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that wast the most sadest break-up ever! WHY~!!! WHY??????????????
i feel so bad for ai cus knowing makes the pain 20 times more worse and then having to put a smile and everything! UGH! ahe lost her AGAIN!!!! poor poor ai-chan D:

now to risa.....MY GOD CHILD DONT CUT THE LONG BEAUTIFUL HAIR!!!!!....will she get extentions for a breif time too? XD and i feel so bad for her >.<  now next to getting sick from not eating and having thin clothes and then ontop of that cut her hair she has 100% chance of getting sick AND EMO!

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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 80 - (8/18)]
« Reply #641 on: August 18, 2010, 06:50:46 AM »
Well that was quite simple and hopefully it goes well for both of them
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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 80 - (8/18)]
« Reply #642 on: August 18, 2010, 07:01:54 AM »
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I love Risa's long hair >o<

Even if she looks sexy with short hair... XD

Today I have to go to work, so I look forward a nice chapy when I back XD

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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 80 - (8/18)]
« Reply #643 on: August 18, 2010, 08:26:59 AM »
:badluck: 

:frustrated:

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..... tho, thinking about Risa's haircut only makes me think of how uber sexy she's gonna look   :mon bleed2:
I've been all hard core goo goo ga ga for GAKI since she cut her hair    :drool:



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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 80 - (8/18)]
« Reply #644 on: August 18, 2010, 09:39:31 AM »
I've been all hard core goo goo ga ga for GAKI since she cut her hair    :drool:
LOL! w00t~!! I guess I'm not the only one that fell HARD for Gakisan after she cut her hair  :D

@SarangAi: Ahh, now I see where the hair question I asked a while ago comes in and why it is so important :) Nice tie-in with the story~  :twothumbs
And, I don't know why, but I keep on getting this Korean drama vibe from these past chapters! :nervous It's like... Aichan will go crazy after Risa leaves her again (after she says that she'll never lose her) and will attempt to drive off a cliff or something.  :doh: and then Risa will get all emo and what not and commit suicide... and then all hell would break out when Sayu realizes what she's done and she gets sent to some mental hospital or something...  :roll: woops sorry I'm rambling now.  XD

Sorry for my lack of comments! I've missed out on commenting on a few chapters. Hmm, I have to be quite honest with you... I haven't been reading with as much scrutiny as before recently.  :nervous IT HAS NOTHING TO DO WITH YOUR WRITING~! Seriously. It's just me... :P my life is in some kind of turmoil right now... :( me slowly losing interest in a lot of things... and reading all this angst is like stabbing a knife through my heart.  :cry: It's too much to handle! Your writing ish too good~~ :wub: I'm just gonna wait out all this drama in my life and tryto read diligently again in a little bit. (maybe a week/few days or so)  XD

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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 80 - (8/18)]
« Reply #645 on: August 18, 2010, 02:27:07 PM »
Omg, that is so freaking sad!!  :cry:

Ai is really strong for being able to handle this as calmly as she did, though I guess it helps that she knew what was coming. I can only imagine her reaction if she hadn't.

Risa, she's really determined to go through with this. I have a feeling that Sayumi will take as much advantage of this as she can to get whatever she might want.

What will Jun do when she sees them together? Or will she avoid them all together?

And Risa finally cuts her hair. I hope you have in mind the sexy dark cut that came to just below her chin that she had just after she cut it and now. That is absolutely juicy on her. :drool:

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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 80 - (8/18)]
« Reply #646 on: August 18, 2010, 02:57:32 PM »
Somehow its a good thing thats aichan know its gonna happened

but thats one of the saddest break-up :OMG: :fainted: :stunned: :on speedy: :gyaaah: :mon cry:

and gaki-san cut her hair shorts :mon blood:

and please sayu lets gaki.san go back to aichan  :aimonkey::mon rush:

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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 80 - (8/18)]
« Reply #647 on: August 18, 2010, 03:01:28 PM »
Ai took the break up quite well, I wonder if it is becasue first of all she knew it was coming and seconf off all that she knows that the one that Gaki really loves is her and is willing to wait for Gaki to figure out that however responsible she may feel for the situation Sayu is in she cannot deny her heart!

It was intresting what you wrote about Ai resenting Jun, I would of though Ai would of been to understanding of Jun with her trails to get Gaki in the first place, why do I feel a confronation between Ai and Jun coming up!

I do wonder where you will take the Jun character from here, will she end up dissapering when she sees Gaki and Sayu together, will she stay to keep an eye on Gaki? will she see that she's been a complete idiot and try and put things right? I suppose I will see!

Final thought, I wonder How these events will affect Reina and Eri, just a thought.

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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 80 - (8/18)]
« Reply #648 on: August 19, 2010, 04:16:56 AM »
I'm going to chase you!!!! :angry: At least when I stop crying... :cry: :banghead:

You just had to make it so freaking sad! :fainted:

Why?!! How could that happennn?! :frustrated: :mon scare:

Poor Ai-chan! She's being so strong. :mon cute:

I'm going to continue crying with my pillow now... :mon cry:

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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 80 - (8/18)]
« Reply #649 on: August 19, 2010, 04:46:53 AM »
Ok, Jun and Sayu better get their comeuppance. Just how they conduct themselves so they can live in their fairytale world at the expense of other innocent people. By the sounds of it, Ai is Sayu's biggest victim and what's more, she thinks Sayu is in the right and that she had wronged Risa in the past which stopped her from revealing herself as "Ai-chan". I wonder how Jun will take it once Sayu's cover is blown and all her lies and deceptions are uncovered. Or Sayu can come to her enlightenment no matter how hard she tries she won't be able to win Risa's heart, and she can live in misery knowing she has Risa in body but not in mind.
And as I no longer see Jun as a victim, I don't exactly wish her the best for the rest of the story :lol:



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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 80 - (8/18)]
« Reply #650 on: August 19, 2010, 05:12:30 AM »
@kawaii beam: lol I get that a lot XD

@kurosawa87: yes, keep hope... :twothumbs

@Haruka: omg yes, you should still go to work!  :shocked Althought I'm honored by the fact that you missed a day to read my fic XD

@Swtme03: OMG i kno, short hair sexiness :D

@xanimefreak13x: Agh~ I'm trying to stop it from going down the K-drama road!  Although if it does, i can't help it, cuz i'm korean so it's kinda in my blood... :nervous

@rnmdnwierd: yes, Sayu taking advantage of everything is the exact train of thought :)

@fallenxangel: would Sayu listen? :cry:

@oddball: Ai usually keeps her composure, except when it comes to Risa.  that's why she feels resent towards Jun, even though she doesn't show it :( oh, and TanaKame will get involved again soon :) nice set of analysis there, i enjoyed it! :D

@kano-chan: I am so sorry.... I was trying not to cry while I was writing it too  :cry:

@aussie: well, Sayu's in the fantasy world while Jun is just blinded by Sayu, even though it still pokes at her conscience  :(


So I realize my chapters are getting shorter and shorter...   :nervous
\AGH I'll do my best!  especially during weekends though, can't wait till friday :P

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Chapter 81

   Something felt warm.  She couldn’t move an inch of her body but she could tell someone was next to her.  Who was it?  Who was touching her hand?  She wanted to see the mystery person.  She tried to open her eyes but it felt as though something heavy was pushing down on her entire body, preventing her from doing anything.  But she just needed to check who was next to her!

   “Look!  Her eyelashes just moved; she’s starting to wake up!”

   She could never mistake that voice.  It was her.  She definitely had to wake up now; she had to see her face!

   She was greeted by the bright florescent light above in the ceiling.  Somebody sighed in relief next to her.  She turned her neck as much as she could— which wasn’t a lot— to see who the owner of the voice was. 

   The girl she was in love with was sitting by her bedside; their hands were tightly curled around each other’s.

   “Risa-chan…?” the patient whispered.

   “I’m right here, Sayu,” the older girl answered, smiling.  “Welcome back.”

   “How long have I been out?”

   “Just a couple days.”

   “It feels like weeks.”

   “That’s because you were the one sleeping, silly,” Risa chuckled.  “Junjun and I’ve been visiting you every day.”

   Only then, Sayumi spotted the Chinese girl in the corner of the room.  She was leaning against the wall, staring at the tiled floor.  Her face was hard with no expression; she made no indication of wanting to join the conversation.  Of course, Sayumi really didn’t care about that so much with Risa sitting right beside her. 

   “Why are you here?” the younger girl whispered, slipping her casted hands out of the bean’s grip.  “Shouldn’t you be with your girlfriend?”

   “What girlfriend?” Risa grinned, taking her friend’s injured hand back into her hold.  “Sayumi, I’m next to you right now because I’ll always be next you.  I’m here to stay.”

   “… You’ll stay with me?” Sayumi gasped, her eyes widening.  “You’re accepting my feelings?”  She tried to get up from the bed.  Risa quickly pushed her back down.

   “Yeah, I am, so don’t try to get up,” the older girl warned.  “You’re entire left side of the body should rest, so don’t do anything funky.”

   “Risa-chan!”

   The patient weakly tugged on the bean’s arm, trying to pull her down.  Risa laughed as she bent down to give the bunny the hug she wanted.  Sayumi embraced the girl she loved as tight as she could without stretching her muscles too much.  Then, she realized something was missing as Risa backed away.

   “Risa-chan!” she cried.  “Your hair!”

   The bean’s light brown hair was cropped short, all the way up in between her ears and shoulders.  Sayumi had been too preoccupied with the mere fact that Risa was next to her to realize such a big transformation.

   “Oh, I thought it was time for a change… you know,” Risa grinned, flipping her non-existent hair strands.

   “I’m not an idiot, Risa-chan,” Sayumi thought, pursing her lips.  “Eri told both of us about the meaning behind cutting hair.  You may be upset about leaving Ai-chan, but now you’re with me.  I’ll never let you go… and you’ll learn to love me as time passes.

   The bunny smiled as she took the older girl’s hand again.  Risa squeezed back, grinning.

   “I’m going to be here every day,” she said.  “So your part of the deal is to rest and get well as soon as possible, okay?”

   “Okay,” the younger girl nodded.  “I love you, Risa-chan.”

   “I love you too.”

   As Sayumi continued to chatter on with the bean, the pianist stood still like a statue in the corner of the room.  She glanced at the two girls talking by the bed.

   “Shige-san is happy now,” she thought, “so I should be happy.  But… why does my chest still hurt?  Is it this painful to let go of love...?” 

   She pounded a fist over her right chest as she wrinkled her forehead in deep thought.

   “Then how much pain did I give Gaki-san…?

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I'm trying to get the story moving: my goal is to not go over 100 chapters :nervous

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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 80 - (8/18)]
« Reply #651 on: August 19, 2010, 05:35:49 AM »

   “I’m not an idiot, Risa-chan,” Sayumi thought, pursing her lips.  “Eri told both of us about the meaning behind cutting hair.  You may be upset about leaving Ai-chan, but now you’re with me.  I’ll never let you go… and you’ll learn to love me as time passes.

Creepy much? Urgh.



   As Sayumi continued to chatter on with the bean, the pianist stood still like a statue in the corner of the room.  She glanced at the two girls talking by the bed.

   “Shige-san is happy now,” she thought, “so I should be happy.  But… why does my chest still hurt?  Is it this painful to let go of love...?” 

   She pounded a fist over her right chest as she wrinkled her forehead in deep thought.

   “Then how much pain did I give Gaki-san…?

 :roll: Gee, that wasn't too hard to work out huh? Jun will also slowly start to learn that the longer Risa keeps up the pretense of 'being responsible' for Sayu and lying to herself, the more Sayu will get hurt. Sayu would know deep down with time that no matter what she does she'll never be that special person for Risa. I'd hate to imagine how much more delirious Sayu will turn out to be as she fights her desperation. And Jun will have played no small part in it. Even if she belatedly tries to amend things and reunite Risa and Ai, she is already responsible for allowing Sayu to have Risa to herself. When that is ripped away from Sayu, I don't think she'll be able to handle it well.


I would be curious to see how this will affect Eri and Reina's relationship. Will Reina stand on Ai's side and blame Sayu? Will their relationship be strained as Eri is Sayu's cousin and she feels a family responsibility, while Reina feels her loyalty to Ai? I sort of want to see a RenAi interaction, with Reina showing her loyal side to Ai, but I'm torn because that'll have to mean conflict with Eri  :sweatdrop:


(Oh, how about ending your story exactly on 100 chapters? If that's not too much for you, that is :D)






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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 81 - (8/18)]
« Reply #652 on: August 19, 2010, 05:39:01 AM »
Grah.
All I need to say is... I hate her. so much. A_A

And 100 chapters? xD Yay <3 When we were on chapter 60 and you said we barely reached the half, I thought you meant it and we'll have an even longer fic xD

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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 80 - (8/18)]
« Reply #653 on: August 19, 2010, 05:43:10 AM »
     “I’m not an idiot, Risa-chan,” Sayumi thought, pursing her lips.  “Eri told both of us about the meaning behind cutting hair.  You may be upset about leaving Ai-chan, but now you’re with me.  I’ll never let you go… and you’ll learn to love me as time passes.
Actually, I read this line in a way...hm..how to describe...I read it in a good way. :nervous My first impression of reading this part was Sayumi talking in a soft voice, kind of like she understands how Risa feels and sort of feels sad too. Though, she is determined to give Risa happiness. I guess, if you meant it for her to be evil, you should have added a bit more description like Sayumi letting out a scoff or something. :)

Poor Junjun. She must be really broken to see all this happen because of what she said. I hope things turn out all right for her. Update soon ^^

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« Reply #654 on: August 19, 2010, 05:45:08 AM »
sayu is such a b****!!! she dosent even really care about the other ppl around her >.> and poor risa must be like all emo deep down....plus jun finaly is starting to realize the the guilt trip wasnt the best way!

now i wonder how ai is and what tanakame's feelings about this are since they're like technically reffs in this now XDDD
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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 80 - (8/18)]
« Reply #655 on: August 19, 2010, 06:39:53 AM »
   
I’m not an idiot, Risa-chan,” Sayumi thought, pursing her lips.  “Eri told both of us about the meaning behind cutting hair.  You may be upset about leaving Ai-chan, but now you’re with me.  I’ll never let you go… and you’ll learn to love me as time passes.
Sayu you Baka!!! :angry: :angry: :angry:



Shige-san is happy now,” she thought, “so I should be happy.  But… why does my chest still hurt?  Is it this painful to let go of love...?” 

She pounded a fist over her right chest as she wrinkled her forehead in deep thought.

Then how much pain did I give Gaki-san…?
More than you think Junjun... :cry: :cry: :cry:





Now I want to see read how TanaKame going to reacts at TakaGaki break-up

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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 81 - (8/18)]
« Reply #656 on: August 19, 2010, 08:21:39 AM »
 :frustrated: I DON'T CARE HOW MANY CHAPTERS  IT IS!!! :frustrated: (not really. XD I want this story to go on FOREVER!! :grin:)


Jun Jun's pain....  :cry:
Aichan's pain...  :gyaaah:
Risa's... :pleeease:...pain...  :fainted:

My heart is officially shatter  :mon cry:
Just please....make it go away...  :on cloudeye:


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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 81 - (8/18)]
« Reply #657 on: August 19, 2010, 01:21:18 PM »
Hmm, Risa did pretty well not to show any pain in front of Sayu, but I wonder how long that will last or if the bunny even really cares. Does she even have a selfless side? Somehow, I hope not . XD Won't be as much angst if she did.

And Jun, yeah, I kind of resent her too, will she ever be able to make her mistake right?
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« Reply #658 on: August 20, 2010, 01:24:45 AM »
Omg! That doesn't matter! The longer the betterr!! :D

And you can't be sorry for making it so sad. It makes the story even better! :twothumbs

Evil Sayu!! :mon evil: Let go of Gaki and notice Jun!!! :angry:

I wonder if poor Ai-chan would be so depressed and go out drinking again. :depressed:

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Re: Kokoro no Uta ~Mainly TakaGaki, TanaKame~ [UPDATE - Ch. 81 - (8/18)]
« Reply #659 on: August 20, 2010, 04:46:06 AM »
Somehow Sayu is less evil unless a bigger twist awaits but Jun could end it, Jun could be the key to everything
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