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Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Chp 6 Updated 6th Feb
« on: January 07, 2012, 06:14:37 PM »
They say that when it snow in the mountains, it is the sign of the Yuki-Onna crying.

Yuki-Onna, the cold hearted spirit of the snow, attracting lost travellers with their good looks, only to freeze them in eternal ice.

What if this isn't true. What if the Yuki-Onna is not as cold as it seems and all it takes is a human heart to melt away the facade.

Inspired by てもでもの涙 and the legend of the Yuki-Onna and Yukirin being cold, blackhearted and the bringer of rain and snow, I present to you my version of the story of the Yuki-Onna...

こんなに会いたくても
こんなに好きでも
目の前を通り過ぎてく
それでも こうして
あなたを見ている
この場所から
こんなに会いたくても
こんなに好きでも
振り向いてさえもくれない
傘 差してるのに
頬が濡れるのは
どうにもできない
てもでもの涙


 “Ka-San… Ka-San!” cries the voice of a little boy as he wonders around, lost in the snow.

It was their family tradition to visit their grandparents in their home village. Driving up the familiar winding mountain road, he complained about being car sick and demanded for a short break.

Perhaps it was the restlessness that came with young boys, perhaps it was the sugar rush from the M&M chocolates or perhaps it was the streak of mischief that runs in the genking, Miyazawa Sayama that complied him to play a quick game of hide and seek.

The plan was to just sneak off quietly and hide in the snow covered landscape before calling his parents, asking them to find him.

“This would be fun!” snickered Sayama as he wiped out his mobile phone to spring the surprise on his parents, only to realize the phone was not responding due to lack of network signal in the mountainous region.

“Ehh…!? This can’t be happening…”

******

Sayama realized that he was lost, as the surrounding landscape looked the same to him. His attempts to track his footsteps in the snow have failed due to the sudden snowfall that seemed to wrap up everything with white fluffy cotton.

Lost, alone, without any help, he could only call out loudly for his Ka-San as he wandered aimlessly towards higher ground, hoping to get a reception for his mobile phone.

******
“Ne Mayu-chan, do you think Ka-San would be mad when they find us?” asked Sayama to his favorite stuffed toy, a humanoid looking toy.

“Ka-San won’t be angry right?”

“Ne! You are right! We just need to pout and look kawai! Ka-San is weak against that! But Oto-San might use the Miyazawa Palm Attack on me…” sighed Sayama as he shivered in memory of the many palm strikes that his father had delivered on the fleshy part of his buttocks as punishment for his mischief.

Distracted by the horrible thoughts of impending doom from his father, Sayama lost his footing, tripping over a pothole, falling flat to the ground…

******

Sayama wasn’t sure how long he was unconscious. He couldn’t have fainted due to the fall. He was the strongest of all, the Gen-King of the class. His rival Sayaka would have laugh at him, calling him weak. But that being said, he had being wandering in the snow for an hour, cold and exhausted and definitely hungry.

“Ah Itai! I must be hungry and fainted! Even Ultraman will faint when he loses energy! Right Mayu-Chan? asked Sayama as he regained consciousness, his hands reaching instinctively for his favorite soft toy only to realized it’s gone.

“Eh! Mayu-chan!?” asked Sayama in panic. Mayu-chan had being his best friend since his memory started. Mayu-Chan won’t abandon him, especially not at this moment.

“Are you looking for him?” asked a female voice.

Sayama struggled to open his eyes against the glaring sun. A dark silhouette stood over him, holding the familiar figure of Mayu-chan with outreached arm.

As the rays of sunlight formed a halo over the figure and his eyes slowly adjusted to the light. Sayama could only say the following as he finally sees the figure that is holding on to his beloved Mayu-chan.

“Kirei…”

*****

“Arrigato Onee-Chan!” thanked Sayama as he bowed formally to the young female.

The young female had not only found his Mayu-chan but also guided him to safety, bringing him 100 meters within the vicinity of his parent’s car.

Remembering his personal code of honor, he offered Mayu-chan to her.

“Take it please! Mayu-Chan is my best friend and now she will be your best friend!”

The young figure cocked her head, clearly amused at such an offering.

“Please! Onee-Chan! You saved Mayu-chan and me! I can’t give myself to you as I belong to my parents but since Mayu-chan belongs to me and you saved her, Mayu-chan will belong to you now!” declared Sayama earnestly.

“Sayama! Sayama!!! Oh God! We finally found you! We were so worried!” cried out his parents running to him anxiously.

“Onee-chan! Once again thank you! Please do take good care of Mayu-chan! Eh!? Onee-chan?” Sayama’s eyes widened as he looked around, trying to find the Oni-chan that had rescued him.

“Oka-san! Otu-san! Had you seen Onee-chan?”

“Onee-chan?? What Onee-chan! You were alone when we saw you!”

“But Otu-san! I wasn’t! I was rescued by Onee-Chan! She’s very tall and pretty! In a white pure kimono! Her eyes were big and black and her hair long and silky!”

“Sayama… You must be confused and having illusions…my poor boy…” cried his mother as she enveloped him in a hug.

“But Ka-san…Oh and I was suppose to give Mayu-chan to her… Wait! Mayu-chan is gone!” wailed Sayama.

Sayama’s mother comforted him as his father looked around for his favorite stuffed toy.

After looking around futilely, his parents had declared that Mayu-chan missing in action and they would buy a new toy for him.

But for Sayama, deep down inside his heart, he believed that the kind and pretty onee-chan must had taken it as her reward for helping him…

« Last Edit: February 06, 2012, 04:53:20 PM by Prataz »

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Prologue
« Reply #1 on: January 07, 2012, 09:34:21 PM »
Why his name is Sayama? and why Mayu is a doll?

I'm still confused here~

Please update soon~

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Prologue
« Reply #2 on: January 08, 2012, 01:43:32 AM »
What a great fic...it's like Yuki and people think about her (black) character in some way...lol
But I like it can't wait to read what's happening next the Prologue is  :twothumbs





btw, are you gonna write another fic with Yuki as the owner of a creepy mansion and Mayuyu as the Frankenstein Monster / Butler =)  ???
that would be hilarious.... :rofl: :rofl: :rofl:

About anzai48 I just have to comment that is was sure really WHAT THE?! and then I laughed so hard ROFL!
Hahha Mayu as a Frankenstien moster is so wrong and right at the same time! But in my opinion would it be better if she was a cyborg tough XD
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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Prologue
« Reply #3 on: January 08, 2012, 10:49:58 AM »
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@ Megumi,

Someone said that Cyborg and Frankenstein has something in common: they are assembled.......... :rofl: :rofl: :rofl:
Besides, it was prataz himself who come up with the idea of creepy mansion and frankenstein/butler..... :grin:

 :mon spit: OMG Really?! the authour him/herself came up with this?!  :mon lmao:

It would be hilarious tough if prataz actally wrote fic about Frankenstein with AKB members  :mon taichi:
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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Prologue
« Reply #4 on: January 08, 2012, 12:26:48 PM »
False Alarm! No updates for now! At least until I finish editing photos for my clients.

But I'm taking a break so I shall reply a few questions:

@RenaChii
Sae's Kanji is 佐江
Sayam's Kanji is 佐山

I'm chinese so Kanji is easier for me. Sae's 江 means River so if he's a guy, the parents might give him a much more masculine name by changing the River to Mountain 山. Also in chinese, 江山 means empire, so it will be fitting to replace 江 with 山 for Sae's Alter Male ego.

And yes, Mayuyu is now a doll! Mwahahahaha (Evil Laughter) But at least she's good friends with both Sae and Yuki.

@anzai48
Thank you for the support. Yes I know I'm awful x a million. Won't reveal much. The story isn't starting until I post the next Prologue. As for the creepy mansion idea, I shall let it stay in my cold storage for awhile. At least till I finish up with this and my Final Fantasy story. And thank you for helping me answer Megumi

@Megumi
For the record, I'm a guy! Bwahahaha. But that also means I might suck in Sappy Stories or will I?
Actually Frankenstein can be considered a cyborg. It's just slightly ugly. But that being said, who says we must follow the tradition of having Franky ugly?
Considering it's gonna be Mayuyu, I can safely say this Franky will be as cute as a mouse and might be smarter then the average cyborgs / humans and any other things around =P

And now back I go to work... Hope I can finish work in time to write!

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Prologue
« Reply #5 on: January 08, 2012, 12:36:38 PM »
This story sounds interesting..... Please update soon ! :onioncheer:

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Prologue
« Reply #6 on: January 08, 2012, 10:02:45 PM »
Is Mayu alive?

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Prologue
« Reply #7 on: January 09, 2012, 06:58:09 AM »
Soon... I just need to find time to make it happen.

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Prologue
« Reply #8 on: January 09, 2012, 10:44:19 AM »
Hmm intresting first chapter, need to see where this story is going, big question is if Mayu is alive or not......  :panic:

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Prologue
« Reply #9 on: January 09, 2012, 05:15:24 PM »
I'm sure the next chapter will leave the Mayu is alive question answered =P

Chapter 1

<Ring.. Ring…Ring… Crash…>

A scene familiar to every teenager and even maybe some adults, the fight against the monster that threatens to break us away from the solace of our bed, the struggle against light and darkness, the irritable alarm clock!

With a sweep of an arm, Miyazawa Sayama manages to destroy the abdominal alarm clock that threatens his sleep. However, no matter for formidable he is, he’s still unmatchable against the mobile alarm clock, the horrible akuma, the nagging demon from hell, the one that seems to know it all, his Oka-san.

“But Oka-San! I’m sleepy!” whines Sayama as his mother rips the bed sheets forcefully away from him.

“Get up you sleepy head! You don’t want to be late for your first day of school!”

“School? Baka! I’m going to be late…”

*****

“Ride safely and don’t stay too late for club activities…”

“I know Oka-San! Don’t worry!” replies Sayama as he swings onto his bicycle while munching on his sandwich.

“Chew properly!”

“Mwemmmmmm…” was the only reply that Sayama could manage while stuffing his sandwich into his mouth.

“Damnit! I’m not gonna be late! This is the first day of school! I’m the class president! I better set a good example! I’m not going to let Sayaka have any chance to laugh at me…” thoughts Sayama as he pedals on at top speed. He doesn’t like being laugh at, especially when the person belongs to his arch-rival / best friend, Vice President Akimoto Sayaka.

“Ohayo Gozaimasu!!!” greets Sayama as he pedals on through the neighborhood.

“Ah! Sae-chan! Don’t be late!”

“Sae-chan! Gambatte! Don’t lose out to Sayaka!”

“Ah the power of youth, so full of energy! You are really Genking!”

“So polite and full of energy! Gambatte Sae-chan!” as various neighbors returned his greeting. Having grown up in this little town, the neighbors are familiar with their little genking and his friendly rivalry with Akimoto Sayaka, the manly or perhaps even gorilla like daughter of the High School’s Principal.

Distracted by the hilarious thoughts of Sayaka in a gorilla suit, Sayama managed to pull himself together to react in time as a flash of brown appears before him.

******

“Watch it you brat!” barks a voice, the source of the brown flash, as a fist appears to swing in front of him.

“Eh!?” was the only reaction he could muster before his body took over. Leaning to the side and pressing the brake of the frontal wheel, Sayama managed to drift his bicycle to avoid the fist. However, the centrifugal force was too great for him to control, resulting in a painful slide to the ground as he lost control of the bicycle.

“Ojou-sama, are you alright?” asks the source of his pain.

“Ojou-sama?! When did our neighborhood have any rich lady or royalty?” asks Sayama as he looks up to see who this Ojou-sama could be.

The scene could be perhaps a scene from a drama.

His source of torment was a mischievous looking youth with a toothy grin, his brown dyed hair was tied into a bushy ponytail, his clothes untidy and messy, like a typical ruffian. However, in his eyes, you could see the respect and perhaps reverence he has for the “Ojou-Sama” as he bends on one knee and bow his head down respectfully.

A servant, holding a great white umbrella over her, hiding her from view, accompanied the “Ojou-Sama”. Dressed in a butler suit, the servant seemed to be a young girl of 13, due to her still-developing figure and two long ponytails. Her face was expressionless but when his eyes met with hers, he could feel a glare filled with anger or perhaps hate from her for daring to be disrespectful to her “Ojou-Sama”.

“Come Yuu-chan and Mayu-chan. Let us be off. We shouldn’t be late for our first day, should we?” instructs “Ojou-Sama” to her entourage.

With a respectful “Hai” the trio proceeds to off, leaving Sayama lost in his thoughts of the encounter…

******

“Mayu-chan… The name’s so familiar…”

“And her voice… had I heard it before?”

“And… And… And… OH CRAP! I’m going to be LATE!!!”


My name is Miyazawa Sayama, 16 years old Male, Class 2-C of Akimoto High School. Spring has just began for me…

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Chp 1 ~ The Start of Spring
« Reply #10 on: January 10, 2012, 12:42:42 PM »
hmm interesting, seems as though Mayu is alive!   :twothumbs...... for the moment at least!  :panic:

Interesting, I suppose this “Ojou-Sama” may well be Yukirin and she has her followers, how this is panning out atm, Im not sure of however....

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Chp 1 ~ The Start of Spring
« Reply #11 on: January 10, 2012, 09:31:48 PM »
Yuki ojou-sama~

Please update soon~

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Chp 1 ~ The Start of Spring
« Reply #12 on: January 15, 2012, 07:03:31 AM »
Hi guys! Sorry for the long wait. Was busy with work.

@oddball - Mayu will be more then alive. She's needed for my plot. And yes. You are right. Yukirin is the Ojou-Sama

@RenaChii - Updated! Sorry for the DELAY!

Chapter 2 ~ The new classmates

<Ding Dong Ding Dong>

The first bell of school has rung, indicating the official start of class.

“Crap! This is bad! I can’t be late for the first day!”

Realizing the dire circumstance of being late for the first day of school, Sayama tries to sneaks into his classroom via the back door. Having his seat located next to the door was a little privilege he created as president of the class for emergencies like this.

Snickering to himself in glee at his own intelligence, he slowly pulls open the door to slip in, only to see a familiar looking lady in office wear with a sandy brown short hair, golden rimed spectacles, hawk-like nose, and cold evil eyes staring down at him.

“Well, well, what do we have here? asks Shinodo Mariko, the home teacher of Class 2C.

“Ehmm… My bed and I are deeply in love and the alarm clock failed in breaking us apart…” replies Sayama sheepishly.

The class goes silent at the comment, with majority giving themselves either a face palm or rolling their eyes. Even Sayaka shakes her head in disbelief.

 It isn’t wise to give such smart aleck comments. Mariko-sama doesn’t like people who are too smart for their own good…

******

“Ah Kawai! Sae-Kun should be late more often…” purrs Mariko-sensei as she gives her class president an affectionate pat on his check before heading back to the teacher’s table.

Made to balance a small pail of water while maintaining the difficult horse-stance, Sayama was also decorated with a billboard with the words of biggest idiot written in loud bold fonts. His handsome face wasn’t spared too with a big tortoise and words of “Baka” written on it with an eyeliner pen.

Sayama could only resign himself to his fate by giving a soft sigh as the class struggles to hold in their laughter.  Knowing their teacher’s temperament, a slip of laughter could be their ticket to join Sayama too.

“By the way, I have an announcement to make! After Takahashi Kai, Minegishi Kuu and Kojima Riku has being transferred out to Class 2A due to their artist privileges, Principal Akimoto has being kind enough to grace our class with 3 new transfer students. As they are not locals, please do your best to make them feel welcome! Or else…” requests or rather commands Mariko-sensei as she stares down at her class.

A resounding “Hai!” echoes out in unison as a confirmation.

“Good. I’m glad that you see things my way. Sayaka-san, since the class president is busy being punished, would you do me the honor of fetching them from your Otu-san’s office? I believe they had just arrived…”

******

The class tenses up in anticipation as the door slowly slides open, only to reveal the familiar head of Akimoto Sayaka.

“Did anybody miss me?” she asks cheekily.

The class replied her with a barrage of pencils, pens, erasers and whatever projectiles they could throw.

Anticipating this, Sayaka quickly pulls the door shut, shielding her from the onslaught.

“Baka! Are you guys trying to kill me!”

“Stop clowning around. We don’t want to give our new classmates a bad impression don’t you? Sayaka-san, please show them in…”

******

A doll-like petite looking girl with 2 ponytails walks in first. Her face was expressionless as she greets the class with her slight nod.

“My name is Watanabe Mayu. Please take care of me…”

The next classmate walks in, only to have the class hear the sound of splashing water and a wet and angry Sayama pointing at him.

“You…”

“Ha! Baka yarou…” laughs the new classmate, flashing a toothy grin.

“My name is Oshima Yuu. There’s no need to take care of me. You guys better take care of loser boy there…”

“Yuu-chan… Don’t be rude…”

“Hai! Oju-Sama…” replies Yuu respectfully towards the last and final classmate as she walks in.

Tall and regal looking with an air of cold seriousness, her long black hair reaches to her waist, amplifying her aura of dignity.

Her big round eyes seems to a closed windows to her soul, guarding her with aloofness that comes naturally to one that is of noble birth.

Completing the package is a face with perfect jawline and sweet lips, capable of even charming you without smiling.

“Kirei…” whispers Sayama as he temporary forgets all about his current predicament.

“My name is Kashiwagi Yuki. Please take good care of me…”

* Footnotes
Sayama is wet because he stood up when he saw Yuu, which caused him to be late.

The 3 guys of Persona will be in this fic in camo positions. But don't worry. There will be a Kojima Haruna for Oshima. Kojima Riku is just the twin brother.

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Chp 2 ~ The new classmates
« Reply #13 on: January 15, 2012, 08:17:29 AM »
I want next update soon ~

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Chp 2 ~ The new classmates
« Reply #14 on: January 15, 2012, 10:57:18 AM »
Please update~ update soon~ 

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Chp 2 ~ The new classmates
« Reply #15 on: January 15, 2012, 02:07:41 PM »
Yuuchan~ <333333333

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Chp 2 ~ The new classmates
« Reply #16 on: January 15, 2012, 03:25:00 PM »
Gosh!  :wigglypanda:
Yuki appaears! And description was just  :luvluv2:

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Kojima Haruna for Oshima. Kojima Riku is just the twin brother.

Ohh  :on asmo: Riku is twin-brother of Haruna very interesting!

Can't wait for your next update!

Arígatou!  :kneelbow:
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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Chp 2 ~ The new classmates
« Reply #17 on: January 15, 2012, 07:42:22 PM »
Oh Mayuyu is alive and lol the class is fool

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Chp 2 ~ The new classmates
« Reply #18 on: January 16, 2012, 03:12:22 AM »
Yuki ojou-sama.   :love: :love: :love:

Btw, why is Sae name becomes "Sayama" and "Sae"?

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Re: Winter Sonata [Sae+Yuki+Mayu] Chp 2 ~ The new classmates
« Reply #19 on: January 16, 2012, 04:05:40 PM »
Wow Yuki makes her entrance, things are going to get more interesting for Sae from this point on I feel, and that's without Yuu-chan

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