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Offline mayuyuXlyukirinlover13

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Jane Doe
« on: April 26, 2013, 10:04:26 AM »
H-h-how's it goin Bros?   8)
Today since last last week I've been on LSS  mode. and this time it's Takabear's "Jane Doe" and I decided to make a Fanfic out of it
So Here's the Prologue


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Who are you? ...Who am I?

I live in 2 Worlds with 2 Persona...

Red....

Like the heart's desire to love

Black...

The mind's desire to steal...

I'm wearing Red....but In front of a mirror I see myself wearing Black...

'Who are you...?' I asked myself in front of the mirror...

I answered.

"I am Jane Doe..."

I am Takahashi minami...but.... in front of me now....it's not me...

She is Jane Doe.... the thief in black....
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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #1 on: April 26, 2013, 11:43:27 AM »
This is interesting! I did something like this before, so I can't wait to see how you pull it off.
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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #2 on: April 26, 2013, 11:52:25 AM »
Very good prologue...

Minami is going to have 2 personalities...

One is the normal girl... and the other is a thief...

Can't wait to see how the story going to develop

Thank you for the nice Intro...

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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #3 on: April 26, 2013, 12:16:55 PM »
You shoud read my rendition of that PV, story A.L.I.V.E. :-)

Self promoting aside, I wonder how is Minami going to deal with her two sides :-)

I'll be waitin for your next update :-)
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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #4 on: April 26, 2013, 02:50:53 PM »
Looks awesome :D

Alpha, am I right? xD

Takathief xD

I can't wait to see you first chapter :P

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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #5 on: April 26, 2013, 03:30:15 PM »
Oohh! I like the prologue! Surely im goin to like your story.. Update soon :)

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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #6 on: April 26, 2013, 03:40:54 PM »
Hahaha alpha M
Nice prologe
Can't wait for chapter 1
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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #7 on: April 27, 2013, 02:27:14 AM »
@K-popJ-popAWESOMENESS : yup you're right that's me  :lol:

@Gibson : You'll be the first(?) to read it since it's first updated on the Fan Page  :rofl:

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I'll be updating this fic once a month from here on out. so Update you bros On May :thumbsup 
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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #8 on: April 27, 2013, 03:14:11 AM »
^^ oh yeah you're right  :D :D :D

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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #9 on: May 07, 2013, 11:34:07 AM »
Bros!  :w00t:  Chapter 1 Will be updated on May 27th~!  :grin: So I hope you look forward to it! Till then Adios~!   8)2

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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #10 on: May 07, 2013, 12:10:03 PM »
^Can't wait!!! Hope I get to see some more of your fanfics update, too! :heart:
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:heart: l Completed: Fire and Ice l Black Chocolate l My eternal blue rose l Dishonored l The Black Rose l Fruits of a Rose l Remnants l :heart:
:heart: l Dropped: Tentomu chu l REBORN l Bite me l NMB Gakuen l YumeToki l Cafe 48 l :heart: l Hiatus/Indefinite: Samurai l Blood Bonds l Night Wind's Deed l PRISM l Time Travelers l :heart:
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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #11 on: May 07, 2013, 03:32:07 PM »
GO MAMA! The prologue is so interesting! I'll be waiting for the chappy! GO MAMA! GO MAMA! *\o/*

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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #12 on: May 07, 2013, 03:34:22 PM »
@kuchikuchi: sister in law is amazing, nee? :D

@sister in law: are you gonna update this? We are waitin, ya know? :D



P.S. actually, I'm still waitin for the full version of family tree, coz I still don't know if sister-in-law is the right term :D
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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #13 on: May 07, 2013, 11:45:59 PM »
@TTLover :Tokyo dome can't be updated since I don't know what to do anymore :lol:
@Kuchi:D'aaaww thank you sweetie
@Sakura : wait until May 27th

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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #14 on: May 08, 2013, 01:03:42 AM »
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1. You spelled my username wrong! I put the "U" there on purpose!

2. That's fine. My main concern is "Infinity," I've been waiting for SO LONG~!!!
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:heart: l Completed: Fire and Ice l Black Chocolate l My eternal blue rose l Dishonored l The Black Rose l Fruits of a Rose l Remnants l :heart:
:heart: l Dropped: Tentomu chu l REBORN l Bite me l NMB Gakuen l YumeToki l Cafe 48 l :heart: l Hiatus/Indefinite: Samurai l Blood Bonds l Night Wind's Deed l PRISM l Time Travelers l :heart:
:heart: l Collab threads: Sky&Ruka l Ruka&Michael l :heart:
 l Compilation thread: 48G New Gen l :heart:

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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #15 on: May 08, 2013, 03:42:27 PM »
Stalking mode on!!!
Ah, you are the admin from the page ya? oh I see~ stalking success! ^^v :banghead:
Alpha M is it? Glad to me you~
I waiting for this story's update!
 :twothumbs Nice prologue anyway!  :lol: :lol:

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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #16 on: May 08, 2013, 07:24:29 PM »
Stalking mode on!!!
Ah, you are the admin from the page ya? oh I see~ stalking success! ^^v :banghead:
Alpha M is it? Glad to me you~
I waiting for this story's update!
 :twothumbs Nice prologue anyway!  :lol: :lol:

XD  Glad to meet you too buddy, If you want early updates Go to the fanpage if you like  :grin:

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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #17 on: May 08, 2013, 09:08:52 PM »
I suddenly remembered saku's A.L.I.V.E. fan fiction!


hopefully the bounds of your fiction between hers is so different so you can grab many readers through your fiction :DDDD


waiting for the 1st Chapter!  :twothumbs :twothumbs :twothumbs
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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #18 on: May 12, 2013, 05:20:59 AM »
SURPRISE BROS! and early Update!  XD Enjoy this Chapter 1 ~! [I had to update now before they cut off my WiFi Connection in the upcoming weeks]

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Chapter 1



BOOM

BOOM

BOOM


Loud explosions just erupted behind me as I ran, Debris flies to the air as I come out the black smoke......Seems like using hand Grenades are futile. Holding My cane I try to look for an Easy Escape from the roofs. I swear these guys behind me are persistent well why wouldn't they be when I took their Ruby that was I think from Cairo Egypt. Gun Shots. Now their Desperate,Their using Gloc 40 hand guns with 3 magazines on their belts. "GET HER!!  DON'T LET THAT RAT ESCAPE!" Rat? Well that's very rude. As they Shoot bullets at me aimlessly I just spot a Chain Line That connects to the other side of the road to a building. I ran straight for it but...

"Aa!!" I let out a Yelp. I got hit on the left arm it's nothing bad just a deep scratch but nothing too serious, thou it hurts very badly... damn.
I stop on the edge of the building facing towards the  other. I turn around. "This is the end of the line" a man in a black suit said.


"Yeah it is the end of the line" I replied I smirked and Tipped my heel backward making me Fall backwards.

The Hook of the Cane grabs on to the chain line. the Men in black rushed on the edge  to see if I fell bloody flat. their faces were shocked mixed with dumbfoundedness and slight fear but then they looked up and saw me Zip lining on a cane. My right hand holding on to the cane, my Left holding the Ruby. Facing them I waved the ruby. "Bye bye Losers~"  I half shouted as I looked at them with a Cheeky Grin that was on my face.

I placed my weight down as gravity does some of the work and I Pull the cane up & down while using my Weight and I slowly bounce up causing the Chain to make a wave. My Cane and I were Bouncing higher and Higher until we were almost on the other side when the Men in black were zip lining towards me, As I was High enough I swing myself and the cane releases me as I was Bounce up. I did a double back flip accompanied with a Single Summersault.


I skid a bit back but I regain full balance when I spread my legs a bit and placed my Right hand on the floor. I stood up straight and approached the Chain Line.


They're half way here so, I twisted the Handle of the Cane Counter clockwise and on the tip of the cane comes out a Blade that can ACTUALLY cut through Solid steel and Pure Diamonds. I Waved the cane in front and said "Bu bai~" then I sliced the end of the line.

"We won't forget this !! You'll pay for this Jane Doe!!"

The man in black Shouted as his group swings down and hits painfully on both the wall and ground, You can hear a loud Bang or thud when they crashed but at least they're still breathing. I see an ally way on the left side of the building, I jog towards the edge and jump down and land Softly and quietly Like a Cat. My left knee bends touching the Ground, My Right hand holding the cane is also on the ground. I stand up and toss the Ruby up in the air.

The ruby glimmers through the Light of the street lights at night. As it slowly drops I catch it and Stuff it on my Pockets, when an electrifying sensation shot up to my brain I forgot, I Got shot earlier and it hurts like hell...I took out an Ointment from my hat and opened it revealing a green mucky blob that I call ointment I apply it on the would. I wince as I rub it, It burns and smoke comes out until it's good as new again.

I Disappear into the shadows and come out of the light as a different person....Takahashi Minami.

Wearing A Red hoodie jacket, underneath is a simple white shirt, I wore Denim jeans and Nike shoes. And no one knows who Jane Doe is behind this mask I've created.

I pass through people unworried, Nothing threatens me...Everyone's oblivious, uncaring and not afraid.

It's 10pm,I headed to the back door of the restaurant I work for. I opened the door, and quickly headed for the dressing room. After thirty minutes I step out of the room, wearing A Red Gown there's a clip on the Right part of my head that's Clipped on the hair the clip is a Red flower, I wore my Golden colored bracelet and a silver colored necklace, I also wore red 7 Inches high heels.


I heard the Clattering of Table wear... Appetizers must have been served. I also heard Chattering but I ignore what they say. The lights dim a little to catch the attention of the Audience. A spot Light was shone on the stage where on 2 sides of the stage there are 2 Circular mirrors.


The Audience was focused on me, and they would whisper about my performance to newcomers and those newcomers will be curious of my performance. I stepped out into the stage in between The 2 large mirrors. As I reached the Mic I spoke.


"Good evening everyone, are enjoying the Dinner tonight?" I say calmly. They Exchanged nods and Whispers. "Well....I'll be singing for you all tonight, Please enjoy"


I sang for the entire 2 hours of my Shift, no one listened much since I don't care about the guest....All I need to do is Entertain them. This is my Life when I'm Simply Takahashi Minami A girl who works Day in and Day out, I have friends but I never really get in touch with them. My Family's scattered all over Japan mainly my Mom's at Osaka and My Dad's in Hokkaido for business so meaning their Supporting me Financially. I am an Only child in the family so I'm supporting them as well.


Although I hate the people eating here in the restaurant I love to sing with my whole heart without caring for the world. Some give me Applause that were meant to say "Amazing" or "Beautiful" some criticizes with claps that says "Not bad, I've seen better". Some wealthy people just sicken me to tell me indirectly that I'm not that good.


My shift is finally over tonight and its 11:30pm. I wore my casual clothes the white T-shirt, the red Jacket, the Denim Pants and the Nike shoes; after I changed I picked up my Backpack And left the place and I walked back to my house which fifteen minutes away. As I walk less people are on the streets, well it's almost midnight so it's obvious why they're less of them here. Lately I've been having this bad ominous growing feeling in me for day now, I thought of trying to set it aside and ignore it but....


I have a sinking feeling that something Horrible will happen soon.  I'll try to ignore it since it might be nothing or just something minor.


I finally Reached home, I looked at my watch and it's already 11:45pm I have got to start getting some sleep tonight, I'm tired and I can't wait to just fall into my soft bed that has a warm Blanket and pillows to put me to sleep. I press the door bell and I pressed the button below it where the intercom is used. As I pressed the button a buzz sound was heard " CG-chan I'm home open the gate will you?" I said lazily. Then a buzz was sounded again "Yeah, sure" CG says with a yawn, the gates open and I went in. Automatically as I reached the Door that leads into the house the gate closed and locked. I opened the door and stepped in.

I let out a slightly loud yawn "I'm home..." I tiredly said. I took of my shoes, placed the cane on the umbrella case, and then I took off my jacket and hung it at the Coat rack. Right beside the Umbrella case there's a counter that has a cabinet. Inside the cabinet were CG and I's shoes and there were house slippers as well. I took the Pink slipper and wore it then I walked in. My back was slightly arched to the front as I sloppily head towards the stairs that will lead me to my room which I love so very dearly.  CG passes by the stairs

"Welcome home Takamidget" she greeted and insulted with a blunt face. I try not be ticked off since I'm too tired to even start yelling. "Yeah...yeah whatever... I'm going to bed CG see you in the morning..." I sleepily said as I opened the door to my room which is Right beside the stairs, CG also went back inside her room after I went in to my own. The first thing I need to do was go to the bathroom, I open the lights of my room after I closed the door behind me. I head to the bathroom and opened the door. I could barely keep my eyes open, I flip the switch on the lights in the bathroom and stepped right in. I took my toothbrush and applied toothpaste and brushed my teeth, soon I rinsed and washed my face after that I stepped out of the bathroom and flip the switch to "Off" I closed the door and head towards my dresser where I took out my Pink PJ's and changed clothes.


My eyelids were getting heavy I can't seem to keep them open for too long, so I headed for the Lights and turned it off. I wobbled towards my bed and just slumped there, I kicked my slippers off and adjusted my body up towards the Pillow and snuggled my head on it. This is bliss. Tomorrow till the next days I'll be on a day off. And I can finally catch on some sleep.... the night's so Quiet, my Window's open so the cool breeze enters my room which makes me sleep more peacefully...

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Author:So~! with chapter 1 ends I'll update you bros on June 30th , why 30 you MIGHT ask? I have classes since JUNE is the start of a new School year. well I hope you enjoy this fanfic! and also! the Fanfic will be written in Takamina's Perspectives

Takamina:You're just doing this type of writing because you've been reading TOO MUCH Hunger Games!

Author:So?

Takamina:and trying to make it obvious doesn't help at all you know and also no one would ask why on June 30th =.=

Author:So? o.o

Takamina:No One cares about it [⌐ o ⌐"]

Author: I'm just a lonely person, give me a break Takabear! *sulking in the corner* Q~Q

Takamina:I can't believe I have to put up with you in this fic *face palming*

Author:At least I make you LOOK cool!!

Takamina:HEY! I AM cool!

CG:No you're not, you're a Fail man remember? *blunt face*

Takamina: Acchan!! Mayuyu's being mean to me again!! T^T

Acchan:I'm not in the story so I can't help you Takamina *sweatdrop* ^^"

Mariko: I don't Know these people, Never seen them in my life ..... (⌐ ⌐"...)*leaves*

Yukirin:Well! see you guys in the next Chapter of "Jane doe" ! *sweatdrop**waves good bye* (^_^") //
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Re: Jane Doe
« Reply #19 on: May 12, 2013, 07:20:51 AM »
AH... Jane is so great out there...

I like the way she escape.... so cool...

Ah.. Minami is just a singer in a restaurant...

Minami's sense something is not right... but don't know what?

What will happen next.... to Minami?

CG... who is it? Mayu...?

Minami is living in a house with someone else?

Why did Minami become jane doe?

Can't wait to find out more

Thank you for the story

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