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« Reply #260 on: September 14, 2006, 01:13:25 AM »
damn rika soo evilll !!~
100% supports YoMiki !~:D

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« Reply #261 on: September 14, 2006, 09:02:39 PM »
Miki feels good with Aya and Yossi with Rika :D

Erika is the bad of the film, I think she made Rika break with Yossi, telling Rika bad things about Yossi because she wants Rika ù.ú (XD)

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« Reply #262 on: September 15, 2006, 04:34:39 AM »
Oh Gahh! O____O; -wears a hardhat to prepare for another smack of the storyline-

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« Reply #263 on: September 15, 2006, 11:54:16 AM »
Welcome back after the block

and look!!! you brough wonderful chapters!! excellent!!

The earthquake caused a lot of action. I like :D

Geez, Ishikawa is persistant!!

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« Reply #264 on: September 15, 2006, 05:37:22 PM »
Wow Yossie saving Rika like that...very intense *wipes sweat* Had me gripping the edge of my seat.

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« Reply #265 on: September 15, 2006, 09:23:47 PM »
O________O Butbutbut! It wasn't Yossie's fault andandand...I dunno >.< Don't be mad Miki!

I need more!
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« Reply #266 on: September 16, 2006, 03:52:20 PM »
NEWS FLASH

HELL has FROZEN OVER!!

RNDMN IS NOW A YOMIKI SHIPPER!! YAY!!

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« Reply #267 on: September 16, 2006, 06:08:59 PM »
I'm not a shipper! OMG, did you know there's a place called Hell in the Caymans? I haven't been though.

Damn if I'm not gonna have to write a Yomiki fic sometime in the future. Maybe when I lighten my fic load...

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« Reply #268 on: September 16, 2006, 06:29:42 PM »
rndmn is a shipper~~ rndmn is a shipper~~ XDXD

*next chapter coming in..mm.. maybe 10 minutes... :P*

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« Reply #269 on: September 16, 2006, 06:45:14 PM »
Yay!!!^^   (^_^)v

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« Reply #270 on: September 16, 2006, 06:59:20 PM »
well, first, replies to some comments..

Quote from: MyDearYossi
OMG! I will cry if Miki doesn't understand that what happened wasn't Yossi's fault  Don't write YoMiki to break up...


hey, I haven't done that :P

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   Miki feels good with Aya and Yossi with Rika

Erika is the bad of the film, I think she made Rika break with Yossi, telling Rika bad things about Yossi because she wants Rika ù.ú


well.. about Erika.. you really think that she's doing all that just because she wants Rika? XDXD

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   Oh Gahh! O____O; -wears a hardhat to prepare for another smack of the storyline


just read the chapter! :P

And that's for the rest of you guys, here it is, chapter 40!
I have to say that this part was a little difficult (and a little longer too XD) You know I always like to do something special every ten chapters.. ch 10th was the first Yossi&Miki action, ch 20th was THE CHAPTER, in the 30th I revealed Rika's lover... what I could do to surprise you with this part???

READ AND YOU'LL KNOW IT!!


***40***


21:07h

Almost four hours since Miki left.

“You don’t have to explain anything. I know how she is”
“You’re not mad?”


No, she wasn’t mad, it was worst. Fujimoto was deceived. It was something that Yossi could read clearly in her girlfriend’s face. She didn’t blame Miki for feeling that way. Hitomi herself felt the same. She was deceived ‘cause she hadn’t enough willpower to fight against Ishikawa’s attacks.

“You’re leaving?”
“Yeah. I still have things to do and you must rest”


The door closed behind her. There was no kiss, no caring words…

Yossi looked at the watch again. 21:11h

She got up from the bed, took her jacket and left the apartment. It was time to do something.


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Rika place a little box on the table and seated on the couch looking at it. It seemed that an eternity had passed since the last time she opened that box. She leant to the table again and removed the lid slowly.

There were so many memories there. Almost three years of relationship gathered with pics, silly gifts, letters… and a piece of fabric. She took it in her hands and caressed it. It was the last thing she put inside the box as a keepsake of how hurt she was, to remember the humiliation that she felt.

Suddenly, someone knocked at the door. Ishikawa hid the box quickly under the table and went to see who was there. She thought that it could be Shibata. She called before to ask Rika if she want to go out to dinner but Ishikawa denied and maybe she was there to insist.

But she had a big surprise when she opened the door and saw someone totally unexpected.

“Can I come in?”

Ishikawa just nodded and let her come inside the apartment, wondering why she was there, and most important, why she seemed so cordial.

“I was thinking…” she began to say before Rika could ask anything “…why I’ve risked my life to save someone that I despise…”
“Yossi…”
“Maybe because I don’t hate you as much as I thought?” she continued

Rika didn’t know what to think. Yocchan should be angry at her. Miki saw them kissing each other and they probably had fought. Then, why she wasn’t shouting and breaking things around her?

“I know what you’re thinking, Rika-chan” said Yossi going near her and smiling “She wasn’t mad. She knew that it was you who kissed me”
“Then, what are you doing here?”

Hitomi stepped even closer and raised a hand to stroke Ishikawa’s hair before to speak again.

“I’m here ‘cause I’ve realized that I don’t care if she’s mad or not” she said while her hand slip down to Rika’s face “Because the only thing that matters to me right now is that you’re not injured”

The younger’s touch made Ishikawa shiver. How long it was since Yossi had touched her that way? Even her body seemed to have forgotten how it felts…

“Yocchan…” she said leaning to find Hitomi’s lips “…I love you…”
“Now tell me…” whispered Yossi “Can you feel it?”

The kiss never arrived and Rika-chan suddenly felt Yoshizawa’s body moving away from her.

“What…?” asked her confused.
“The pain, Ishikawa…”

Then, the truth slapped her right in the face.

“It hurts right?” asked Yossi with a cold voice “…when you realized that someone was playing with your feelings…”
“Why?” demanded Rika fighting the tears that began to form in her eyes.
“Because I’m tired of your little game. I want my life back”
“Then, you must have thought it better before doing what you did to me that night!”

Rika’s words were desperate and she knew it, but it was the only way she could make Yossi stay with her. And for a moment it seemed to work ‘cause the younger hold Ishikawa by the arms and attracted the girl towards her again.

But this time, the touch wasn’t loving. Yoshizawa’s fingers were digging in her skin with anger almost breaking it. They’re faces where inches away, their lips a breath from touching, and they’re breathing began to be rough.

“That’s the way you want me?”
“Yes” answered Rika with a tone more defiant than scared “If that’s the only way I can have you…”
“You’re sick”
“You’re the one who forced me” said Ishikawa caressing Yossi’s lips with her words “Who’s sicker?”

Hitomi had enough of that conversation and throw Rika-chan on the couch careless.

“You’re always saying that I’ll be always yours because of what happened…, wanna know something?” she said leaning over the older “That night is the main reason why I can’t be with you. Every time you touch me I remember how weak I was… It makes me feel dirty”

That was the last that she said before stand up and went to the door.
Rika couldn’t say a single word. She just stayed there, in silence, while Yossi was leaving the apartment. It was the first time that she felt totally defeated.

And then, there was again…, the loneliness.

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« Reply #271 on: September 16, 2006, 07:08:11 PM »
O_o Sugoi!~ great great great^^

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« Reply #272 on: September 16, 2006, 07:19:11 PM »
Omg, a confrontation!! and how steamed it was!!

You had me worried their. No kiss for Miki and then suddenly a late night visit to Ishikawa? I thought the worst as most people probably did. I must say - WELL DONE YOSSUI! What I well planned thing to do. The dialouge was powerful

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“Now tell me…” whispered Yossi “Can you feel it?”

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“What…?” asked her confused.
“The pain, Ishikawa…”


Beautifully said. I totally imagine Yossui in this role. Im happy I came back to check if anything new had popped up

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« Reply #273 on: September 16, 2006, 07:47:40 PM »
I'm glad you like it... it was difficult to write it the right way to make people thing that Yossi really wanted to be with Rika again.
what i wonder is.... you've realized that i told the big secret already? you haven't commented anything about it :P

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« Reply #274 on: September 16, 2006, 08:01:05 PM »
omg... I don't know what to say

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« Reply #275 on: September 17, 2006, 01:35:58 AM »
Great chapter len.chan!!!!!
 
O_o So Yossi raped Rika?

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« Reply #276 on: September 17, 2006, 05:07:18 AM »
Quote from: _Hitomi_
Great chapter len.chan!!!!!
 
O_o So Yossi raped Rika?


I don't think so.

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« Reply #277 on: September 17, 2006, 06:27:23 AM »
no matter how evil rika is.. i still have to say poor rika-chan.... and i'm also very anxious to know what happened between the both of them!
very well written len, i love your fic!

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« Reply #278 on: September 17, 2006, 07:54:10 AM »
Yossie in that chapter simply stunned me. YOU ARE GOD/DESS! -bows-

I REALLY look forward to your future chapters!

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« Reply #279 on: September 17, 2006, 08:05:30 AM »
Quote from: _Hitomi_
Great chapter len.chan!!!!!
 
O_o So Yossi raped Rika?
O_o Where the hell did you get THAT idea from?

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