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« Reply #300 on: September 21, 2006, 07:40:19 AM »
ok ok, then hold your impatience a bit more XD
i have the chapter almost ready but now I have to go to work and i can't post it :P

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« Reply #301 on: September 21, 2006, 03:00:15 PM »
gambare~ len.chan!

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« Reply #302 on: September 21, 2006, 08:40:01 PM »
let's see some comments..

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    You are much better at angst than I am. Everything I write always seems to have a happy ending, whereas here, I'm on the edge of my seat. Keep going!


maybe i'm good at angst... but i'm completly nule with the funny stuff... It's good that things have a happy ending ^^

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poor maki!! yossie only goes to her when she's feeling down... aww mann


yeah.. i know.. but it's the way that it has to be :P

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   I just read through #1-#8 and I totally love your fic, len.chan.
The characters are so vividly outlined.
Gotta keep on reading~!

EDIT : OMG I finished #41 and I'm dying for the next chapters!!!
I'm usually on AyaMiki side but now I guess I have to reconsider.
Keep up the great work!


thank you! I was reading the fic from the start the other day and i thought 'How i've ended writing this?' 'cause it's completly diferent from what i was thinking when i started XDXD

and for that impatient people *puts hardhat from Yuuyami* here's 42! :P


***42***


Hitomi looked at the girl lying next to her who was sleeping peacefully. It looked so different from the woman that she was on the stage. When she fell asleep it was like if she could go back to the Maki that Yossi met years ago, when both were young and innocent.

She couldn’t remember how many times they ended like this, talking until late night in the bed, sharing their worries, their deepest thoughts or just laughing at some funny that happened during the day. Sometimes, they stayed awake until morning; sometimes they were too tired and fell asleep after a few minutes. But, not matter if it was for a second or for hours, Yossi always felt relieved if she could share those moments with Maki.

But now, she wasn’t even sleepy. After what happened with Rika hours ago, the memories was so vivid that, if she tried to close here eyes, she could feel the pain as she felt it the first time she placed her hands on Ishikawa’s body that night.  



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“She doesn’t need you anymore…”


That wasn’t exactly what Yossi was expecting when she called her girlfriend. It wasn’t even Rika-chan who picked up the phone.

After her last fight with Ishikawa, Yossi went to talk with Gocchin looking for some friend’s advice after what happened. The first thing she did after leaving Maki’s apartment was to call Rika ‘cause she wanted to apologize for the way she left and try to talk with her in a civilized way before things went worst.

What she wasn’t expecting it was to hear Erika’s voice at the other side of the line.

And there she was, waiting in Rika’s doorway, with a lot of questions in her mind.

“You’re late, you know? She doesn’t want to see you”

Erika again. She was who opened the door, and the fact that she was half naked it wasn’t something that helped Yossi to relax.

“Let me in” demanded Yossi”
“Give up already, Yoshizawa. She not the innocent Rika-chan anymore”

She’s not… innocent anymore?

What was trying Erika to say? And then, putting two and two together, she realized the truth. She’d lost Rika completely.


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“What’s going on with you today?” asked Makoto “I know Koharu can be annoying but she’s doing her best to like you”
“I’m tired of babysitting…”

The cold answer left Mako-chan even more worried. From three days ago, Yossi had began to act like a dictator, shouting around and scolding the girls for every little mistake they did, specially Koharu, who seemed to have all her attention. She was sure there was something really big bugging her leader.


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“What are you doing here?”

Rika-chan was scared, really scared. She’d never had seen that look on her girlfriend’s face. It was anger, sadness, desperation… But why was Hitomi that way? She was the one hurt. Yossi didn’t have the right to be upset.

“I haven’t seen you in almost one week. I’ve missed you” Yoshizawa’s voice was cold.

The situation turned more awkward when Rika felt Yossi’s arms around her waist, holding her in a suffocating grip.

“You’re drunk?” asked Ishikawa when Yossi’s breathe caressed her lips.

The anticipation of what’s going to happen travelled around Rika’s body in the form of goosebumps. But she was too afraid to do anything.

“Yossi…, don’t…”

She tried to say something when she felt one of her girlfriend’s hands leaving her waist and going under the shorts of the pyjama, but Hitomi sealed her lips with a brutal kiss. There was no love in it, just rage.

“Stop it… please…”


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A tear began to roll down Yossi’s face. There wasn’t a single day that she didn’t regret what happened…

“I’m… I’m sorry, Rika-chan. I didn’t want to…”

Ishikawa was too shocked to say anything. She just could look at Yossi and cry asking her why.


“I’m sorry…” repeated Hitomi who began to cry too.
“Get out…” said Rika finally with and almost inaudible voice “Please…”

 
The sunrise illuminated the room and Hitomi turned to look at her friend who was still sleeping.

“Thank you” she whispered removing carefully a lock of hair from Maki’s face “I don’t know what I’d had done without you…”

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« Reply #303 on: September 21, 2006, 09:15:07 PM »
O_O Woa, yet another great chapter! I don't even know what to think. I mean...Feel bad for Yossie, who is being played with? Or Rika, after what Yossie did. Or even Maki, who is just trying to be a good friend but has nobody...Ouch, it's hurting my brain.
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« Reply #304 on: September 21, 2006, 09:16:58 PM »
First post on this fanfic. All I can say is that it's unbelievable. Looks like now we're going back to the past. This is great storytelling!

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« Reply #305 on: September 21, 2006, 09:23:07 PM »
love the chapter!^^

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« Reply #306 on: September 21, 2006, 09:24:59 PM »
Awww! This is great! Now my mind's being screwed with XD Who is the true villain... Rika, or Erika? My abstract mind tells me that it was Erika pulling the strings way at the start :] !

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« Reply #307 on: September 21, 2006, 09:28:18 PM »
everything will be revealed at the right time :P

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« Reply #308 on: September 21, 2006, 11:16:47 PM »
I don't understand why Rika wants to be with Yossi again after that...
and why Yossi "hates" Rika; it was Yossi's fault not Rika's, isn't it?...









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« Reply #309 on: September 22, 2006, 02:24:32 AM »
And the truth comes out. :shocked:

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« Reply #310 on: September 22, 2006, 06:12:00 AM »
Quote from: GeTaWay

and why Yossi "hates" Rika; it was Yossi's fault not Rika's, isn't it?...


I think Yossi hates herself, not Rika... And being with Rika makes her remember that all what happened...
But it's just my opinion...


This was good start to my day!:heart:  Thanks:D

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« Reply #311 on: September 23, 2006, 05:57:22 AM »
I think, erika made yossie think that rika cheated on her, so yossie got angry got drunk then raped rika. then went over to maki's for comfort, then erika showed rika that yossie went to maki's to make her think yossie is cheating on her....?
am I right?
I really admire the way you write your story len... I don't think I can every write as brilliantly as you do...
great job!!

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« Reply #312 on: September 23, 2006, 12:33:45 PM »
you almost have it XD
the real order is: Rika and Yossi have a fight, yossi goes to Maki, Erika shows that to Rika and she thinks that yossi's cheating on her, then Yossi goes to Rika but Erika is there and she thinks you know what.., and blah blah blah... that's what happened.
so... the question is... it was Erika just lying or did really Rika slept with her to release her frustration?

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« Reply #313 on: September 24, 2006, 05:14:04 AM »
Instead of spoiling your beloved readers, why not bless them with a chapter with that? :]

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« Reply #314 on: September 24, 2006, 11:03:03 AM »
yeah yeah... i've been busy with something else until now and i've couldn't write anything, sorry :P
Maybe tomorrow there'll be another chapter

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« Reply #315 on: September 26, 2006, 05:37:58 PM »
I love this story!!

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« Reply #316 on: September 26, 2006, 07:11:54 PM »
42 was a little confusing in the way it was ordered, but your explanation took care of some things.

:o The angst is amazing. Rage!Yossui and Sneaky Bitch!Erika, then that cute ending scene. Ah.

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« Reply #317 on: September 27, 2006, 11:48:01 PM »
This time it wasn't my fault, I swear.
I have a lil' problem with the PC some days ago and I've couldn't write anything until today. Sorry for the wait.



***43***


Fujimoto was running through the corridors towards the set where they were recording the next Hello! Morning. She was late and almost breathless. And it was all fault of the taxi driver. Days like that made Miki wish to have her own drive license.

“Sorry” she excused herself when she came inside the set “I’ve had a problem coming… ¿Where’s everybody?”

She looked around. Just some of the girls were there with two or three staff guys.

“We have the day free” answered Eri “It seems that part of the set and some cameras were damaged with yesterday earthquake”
“And nobody could inform us? It’s a waste of time to come here for nothing” said Fujimoto a little pissed of.
“Yeah. Almost all the girls went home and Sayu and I were leaving already”

The younger was going to leave but Miki still had another question.

“Eh…, Eri, you’ve seen Yossi?”

Kamei denied with her head.

“I thought she was going to stay at home today because of her injury”
“Yeah, I think so…”
“Why don’t you call her?” sugested Eri “And tell her to recover soon. I can’t stand seeing Sayu crying in the corners all day because her prince is hurt”
“I’ll do it” replied Miki smiling.

After Kamei left, she took her phone. But, instead of calling Yossi, she just checked the mailbox for some message. She didn’t tell Eri but, actually, Miki was trying to talk with her girlfriend since she woke up. After all her attempts, nobody answered at her home and she seemed to have her cell-phone turned off. There was no signal of Yocchan.

Miki began to walk still with the cell-phone in her hand. She could go to her girlfriend’s apartment. Maybe Yossi was still sleeping and she didn’t hear the phone at all.

“Fujimoto!”

A voice behind her made Miki shiver.

“Could you please tell me what have you done to your girlfriend? She looks like a zombie”
“I haven’t done any… Wait, you’ve seen Yossi? She’s here?”

Nakazawa seemed surprised by Miki’s question.

“Yeah… She’s here since early morning. She shut herself up on the music room and hasn’t talked with anyone. I thought that you…”

She couldn’t finish the sentence ‘cause Miki had already disappeared.

“That kid… She even hadn’t said thank you….”


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“You left early this morning”

Maki placed a hand on her friend’s shoulder who was too concentrated on what she was doing to notice the other girl’s presence.

“Eh?”
“You didn’t sleep last night, don’t you?
“I have such an awful face today?” asked Yossi leaving the piece of paper that she had upon the piano.
“Oh yeah” said Gocchin. Then, she took the paper and a smile appeared in her face “Well, whatever that’s bothering you it seems to wake up your creative side. That’s…”
“That’s nothing” cut Yoshizawa taking the paper from the hands of her friend and crumpling it “Just rubbish”

Maki was going to say something to protest but then Fujimoto rushed into the room and there was a big silence.

“Mm… maybe I should leave you alone” said Maki going to the door and closing it behind her.

By the look on her girlfriend’s face Yossi could see that she was worried, or maybe she was still feeling awkward because of what happened the day before.

“I’m sorry” said Fujimoto going next to Hitomi “I’d shouldn’t left you alone yesterday…”
“Don’t worry” Yossi took the other girl’s hands on hers “I understand”
“You know I trust you, right?”
“I know”
“Then, let’s forget about yesterday”

Miki sit next to Yossi in the piano’s bench and her girlfriend looked at her confused.

“What are you doing?” asked Hitomi when she saw Miki pressing some keys without any order.
“I want to play the piano with you. So…” A big smile appeared on Miki’s face “…teach me, pleeease~”


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Gottsan took the last look through the glass of the door and then at her right hand, where she had something that she’d taken from the room before Yossi noticed about it. Then, she smiled, put it away in her pocket and left with an idea in her mind.

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« Reply #318 on: September 28, 2006, 01:31:03 AM »
first poster here! looks like we're oing to get a reprise of the piano scene from long ago. Also, what was that letter Gocchin had?

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« Reply #319 on: September 28, 2006, 01:57:48 AM »
Yet another amazing chapter. :D And the wait is fine, we all have PC issues one day or another. :] Anyway, is that paper that Maki took what Yossie crumpled? Most likely a song, I'm guessing. :D
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