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« Reply #20 on: August 25, 2006, 08:59:06 AM »
I'm back!! Officially in my state again, I will begin more writing immediately and try to make them longer. Be patient guys!!

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« Reply #21 on: August 25, 2006, 09:09:33 AM »
I can try to be patientXD

Aibon+Nono=so cute:)
Rika+Yossi=well... Ishiyoshi:D

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« Reply #22 on: August 25, 2006, 09:49:58 AM »
Kago can be strong... when she wants to XD :P

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« Reply #23 on: August 26, 2006, 01:38:35 AM »
Chapter five! You know, if I don't start labeling these, I'm gonna lose count....







   Hitomi sat quietly as the other girls filed out. She had passed. She almost couldn’t believe it. She pinched herself on the arm.

   Okay, ow. She wasn’t dreaming. She looked around the room, anywhere but at Tsunku, and caught Tsuji’s eye. The younger girl look as scared as she felt, so she gave her what she hoped was a reassuring smile. Looking at the other two girls in the room, they seemed ecstatic. If quiet. But they were all quiet.

   Tsunku was speaking, saying that some cameramen would follow them back to where they were staying and film them telling their parents. And then they would help them find their way to the studio bright and early the next morning.

   They were dismissed and Hitomi stood, a little dazedly, walking faster to catch up to Rika as they exited. “Hey.” She called to the older girl, making her spin around in surprise, “Congrats.” She smiled, falling into step beside her.

   Rika smiled back, and Hitomi melted inside, “You too.” The older girl brushed against her side as they walked, “I’m glad you made it, most of all.” She whispered quietly, and then went her own way, leaving Hitomi blushing, frozen in the hallway.





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« Reply #24 on: August 26, 2006, 10:04:56 AM »
I love you :heart:

Sorry I haven't gotten around to commenting so far, but my life's pretty busy right now.

Anyway, I really love this fic. It oozes innocence and it's so nice to actually read about the beginnings, both Ishiyoshi and Tsujikago.

So, all thumbs up!!!

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« Reply #25 on: August 26, 2006, 10:31:35 AM »
I love your fic:heart:  And you too;) XD

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« Reply #26 on: August 26, 2006, 12:50:12 PM »
I love you three

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« Reply #27 on: August 26, 2006, 01:02:12 PM »
*Kisses rndmnwierd, freya, erink, katatsumuri and bluekinoko*

Spreading the love Miki style~~

Sorry about spamming you here but yes, Im enjoying this. Im going with the previous tartar comment. Small portions - I want more!!!

to answer your question - yes I love you

oooooooooooooooh the atmosphere between Rika and Yossui is getting stronger and thicker. I know when it pops its gonna be great :D

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« Reply #28 on: August 26, 2006, 04:43:56 PM »
Since you all requested more, behold! A double dose! Chapters six and seven up!




   Standing in awe of the women in front of her, Tsuji almost missed her cue to introduce herself. Bowing deeply, she heard some whispers about her age, then more after Kago’s little speech. Aibon, she thought, glancing at the younger girl, seemed to be adjusting better than any of them. She probably thought of this as being no different than meeting new people.

   Turning her attention back to Nakazawa-san, Tsuji listened to the rules and expected behavior. Nakazawa seemed kinda scary, so she nodded, trying her best to remember everything that was being said. Then they started assigning mentors.

   “Kaori will be your mentor, Tsuji-chan.” Yuko said, directing her attention to the tallest girl, “Go to her with any questions you have. She’ll also show you around the building.”

   She knew her eyes must have been the size of plates, because she heard Aibon giggle beside her. Vowing to kill her friend later, she listened intently to Nakazawa’s ending speech, and then her orders to chill out.

   She turned to the younger girl, poking her in the side discreetly, “What’s so funny?”

   “You.” was the reply. At the older girl’s glare, Kago elaborated, “You looked like you were gonna pass out. Relax. Though she is taller in person, huh?”

   Tsuji rolled her eyes, “Relax, she says. I’m freaking out.”

   Reaching out to grasp her hand, Aibon smiled, “Relax, Nono.” She whispered, sending shivers down the older girl’s spine, “I’m right here beside you.”

   Suddenly, Tsuji wasn’t afraid anymore. In fact, she wasn’t much of anything, except very warm, “How,” her voice cracked slightly, “How about that tour?” Her response was a giggle.



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Struggling slightly with the stubborn zipper, Rika blew out a stream of air in frustration. They had just finished filming their debut song PV and she couldn’t get the stupid costume off. A knock at the door was a welcome distraction.

   Unlocking the door let Hitomi inside. She raised an eyebrow at the older girl. “Need some help?” she asked, watching her losing battle.

   “Actually, yeah. I really do.” Rika turned and gestured helplessly to the zipper, “It’s stuck.”

   Laughing lightly at the older girl’s expense, and harder at her glare, Hitomi moved up behind Rika, taking hold of her zipper firmly.

   Bracing herself against the wall, Rika turned away, trying to ignore how the younger girl was pressed to her side. Hitomi bit her lip in concentration, tugging gently on the offending fastening. It sure was stuck good. She leaned closer to the older girl, pressing their hips together.

   The close vicinity was almost too much for Rika to take, “Just get it off.” She said quietly, “Even if you have to rip it.” If they were like this much longer, the older girl was sure she’d say something stupid. Probably something about how pretty she thought Hitomi was. Or maybe about how much she liked being around the younger girl.

   With a great tug, the zipper was suddenly opened and Rika caught the dress before it fell off her arms. Hitomi was treated to the sight of Rika’s flawless skin, almost to her butt, and her sexy shoulders.

The older girl turned to look over her shoulder and gave a dazzling smile, making Hitomi’s breath catch. “Thanks Hitomi-chan. I owe you.”

The younger girl blushed, “No problem Rika. I’ll see you around.” and proceeded to flee to her own dressing room. Rika giggled at her retreating back.


----- And you guys are sweet. I love you all!

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« Reply #29 on: August 26, 2006, 04:48:47 PM »
you have a talent for putting words together. Its good. It makes your writing so enjoyable to read.

I thought having your hips against someone, trying to geth the dress off is a bit...hard :P  I would do something stupid or just run back to my room like Yossui did, just more quickly.

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« Reply #30 on: August 26, 2006, 04:54:57 PM »
Quote from: Mikan
you have a talent for putting words together. Its good. It makes your writing so enjoyable to read.

I thought having your hips against someone, trying to geth the dress off is a bit...hard :P  I would do something stupid or just run back to my room like Yossui did, just more quickly.


I'm trying to make their relationship full of tension so that when it explodes, well, it explodes! They're just teenagers, not sure how to react around each other whereas Tsuji and Kago are kids, so everythings simpler. For now.

Am I making sense? I can't tell anymore.

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« Reply #31 on: August 26, 2006, 07:18:54 PM »
Whoa, i really really liked these last 3 chapters. Actually i love the direction this fic is taking ^^

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« Reply #32 on: August 26, 2006, 07:28:54 PM »
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Whoa, i really really liked these last 3 chapters. Actually i love the direction this fic is taking ^^


 Thank you very much! :D :D :D I'm trying my best, although I'm going to start taking liberties with the timeline.

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« Reply #33 on: August 26, 2006, 07:41:25 PM »
well.. i've never paid attention to the timelines so... no problem for me XDXD

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« Reply #34 on: August 26, 2006, 09:01:35 PM »
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhh...young love.

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« Reply #35 on: August 26, 2006, 10:13:00 PM »
I want to try and be as accurate as possible. Or that could just be my OCD streak. Since I'm here, I might as well post another chapter. Just don't get used to it...





   “You shouldn’t do things like that.” Kaori reprimanded the two youngest members of the group. She had just seen the little clip of the two sharing a kiss for the camera and had been slightly aghast at their audacity. “There isn’t supposed to be dating. Outside the group or in it.”

   “But we aren’t dating, Kaorin.” Tsuji was quick to point out. Kago was amazed at how familiar she was with her mentor. Even with how approachable Maki was, she still didn’t feel right calling her by a nickname.

   “I’d hope that you’d only do things like that with someone you were dating!” The tactic to smooth things over had backfired. Who knew quiet Kaori had such views on things?

   After scolding them for a few more minutes- and advising them on how to hide relationships from the cameras- Kaori left the girls in their hotel room.

   “Well.” Tsuji said, slightly in awe, “What’s so wrong with kissing your best friend?”

   “Maybe ‘cause we’re both girls.” Kago said thoughtfully, flopping onto her bed.

   “But your kisses are nice.” The older girl blurted, blushing when she realized how that sounded. She started pushing her bed closer to Kago’s, lifting one side of the covers so that it wouldn’t be caught between the beds. The younger girl absently did the same.

   “You like kissing me. And I like kissing you. And Kaori said that you should only do that with people that you date. So we should date!” Aibon grinned, proud of her logic.

   Nono finished rearranging the furniture and crawled beside her friend, “But Kaorin also said not to date within the group.”

   The younger girl waved the point away with a motion of her hand, “Rules were meant to be broken. Besides, we were just gonna keep kissing anyway. Isn’t it better to break only one rule, than two?”

   Tsuji ‘hmm’ed over this for a moment, it seemed sound. Oh, why not? The older girl rolled onto her stomach, and placed an arm around her younger companion, “Shall we seal the deal with a kiss?” she asked in as low a tone as she could go, trying to hide her nervousness.

   Aibon giggled, snuggling closer to her girlfriend and planting a gentle kiss on her lips. Then another and another, each one growing deeper. They had never kissed like this before and Tsuji couldn’t get enough, rolling over and pulling her girlfriend to lie on top of her. The younger girl giggled and squealed uncontrollably and their make-out session turned into a tickle fight.


Hey, c’mon! They are just twelve! Pervs….





---And this is the timeline thing talking. The little video I'm talking about was shot when Tsuji was 13, even though they're both twelve here... Does it even matter?

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« Reply #36 on: August 26, 2006, 10:19:04 PM »
doesnt really matter much I suppose but your doing a good job on keeping it accurate. Its so early in the morning...what the hell are we all doing here?!

Ah, the moment between those two was beyond sweet. No candy could come close to it.

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« Reply #37 on: August 26, 2006, 10:23:29 PM »
well, for me, it doesn't really matter a year more or less.. XD

hey, here it's 22.00 pm so there's no problem for me :P

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« Reply #38 on: August 26, 2006, 10:25:47 PM »
I got almost 4:30 PM.

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« Reply #39 on: August 26, 2006, 10:27:32 PM »
hitting 6 and I havent slept yet  -_-

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