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« Reply #80 on: December 07, 2006, 10:50:19 AM »
Aw great new chapter!!
Yay for the Maiha thing and pigs for Saki! yay, lol.

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« Reply #81 on: December 07, 2006, 02:06:27 PM »
Here are some Detonator M fanart made by ChrNo :D



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For an unknown,amateur,part-time writer such myself, knowing that people actually read and like my work motivates me to write better. And to have someone drawing them, it feels like I accomplished something big.:ONfarofflook:

I love reading the comments you guys leave behind. I smile and laugh aloud when I read them. Please don't think that I don't read what you have to say because I don't reply to you. I really appreciate what you guys say because I keep them in mind when I think of what to write next. :)

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« Reply #82 on: December 07, 2006, 04:20:18 PM »
first, O_O

ChrNo, you're so awesome!! love reading your comic strips! btw, have I said how saki's illustrations is really great? :)

wordsworth, i love your new changing siggy, it reminds me to come here and read your fanfic! Keep up the good job making Detonator M and other your fanfics.. i'll keep reading it! And I hope you'll recover from your sick, wordsworth! don't give up!

Both of you really awesome, dudes!!

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« Reply #83 on: December 07, 2006, 07:13:17 PM »
OMG first I get to read awesome chapters then I get incredible drawing!! This day just gets better and better! wordsworth + ChrNo = :yay: :tfr9a7wg:

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« Reply #84 on: December 07, 2006, 09:22:29 PM »
I luv your story it is so good and funny lolz ^.^

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« Reply #85 on: December 08, 2006, 03:47:33 AM »
At the first chapters I didn't like this story, but after finishing the others I'd have to say this is one of the best I've seen.

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« Reply #86 on: December 12, 2006, 01:46:03 AM »


I try, I try, I try
I think I did meh...
it needs color no? I'm no good at coloring haha..

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« Reply #87 on: December 12, 2006, 03:58:45 AM »
Haha, Chrno's art style reminds me of Tite Kubo (The guy who does Bleach).

My style's pretty much one of a kind: realism influenced by anime rather than anime influenced by realism XD.

When I fit more time in, I'll draw your characters too <3

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« Reply #88 on: December 15, 2006, 10:26:21 AM »
The four were in the stadium, watching the Metro Rabbits practice.

Their eyes were on the girls but they had other activities in their minds:
K was playing some online MMORPG.
S was going through forums looking for suspicious stuff.
D was listening to Sayu's radio show. Again.
M. He was watching Risa but his eyes were also set on someone else...

"Who's the Guardian assigned to Okada Yui?" asked M as he watched Yui catch the ball.
"T. He was originally assigned to Ogawa Makoto but since she graduated, he's been reassigned." S answered.
"How about Kusumi Koharu? Who's her Guardian?"
"None. Yet."
"How come? She's like famous now right? She even has an anime show."
"Yeah. That's why the one who should be assigned to her should be prepared. I don't think they found one yet." D said.
"You mean they look for people and turn them into Guardians?"
"Correct. But they don't force them into becoming Guardians.
"How? They hold auditions like the one they do for the girls."
"Nope. Some are survivors of accidents, some with life threatening diseases,etc. Being a Guardian is like having a second chance in life. And if they did auditions, you wouldn't have made the cut."
"So we really had a life before. I can't remember a thing about it though."
"You were probably a weird old wota who mastered the OAD." S said.
"No. I wasn't old. I still remember my classroom, though I can't see the faces of the people inside clearly."
"Maybe you were a perverted teacher who blackmailed his students." K said.
"That could be possible. But I remember wearing a student's uniform."
"You were a cosplayer, perhaps?" D said.
"Right. And you must be a forty year old hooker who's willing to do anything, even animals." M said as he stood up. "I'll be out for a while. I need some air. Please watch over Gaki-san."

M walked outside the stadium and looked around. He was trying to extract any kind of fragments about his past but he didn't have any luck. It's not that he was not happy with what he is today. Of course, who wouldn't be glad to have abilities like a tokusatsu hero or any other character you get to watch on TV. He also gets to rub elbows with some of the most sacred idols, so close he also breathes the same air they do. What bothers him is that he knows he left some people behind. But he doesn't know who these people are. He was ready to go back in but someone called him...

"Akito?" a young woman said.
"What did you call me?" M said as he turned around to look at the owner of the voice.
"It's really you!" the woman ran towards him and embraced him and started crying. "I never thought I'd see you again."
"Huh? Who are you ma'am?"
"You don't remember me? That accident must have affected your memories."
"Accident?"
"You were in a car crash, remember?"
"Who are you?"
"Your hair may have changed but I know it's you."
"I really don't know you."
"It's me, Yuka. Don't you remember?"
"Yuka?"
"We were neighbors..."
M imagined what his house looked like. He remembers...
"We grew up together, we went to the same school.."
M saw himself going to school, walking alongside a girl. They were holding hands...
"We were more than friends..."

M looked at her. Yuka was a pretty girl, probably pretty enough to be an idol, an AV idol to be specific. She had nice curves and her long, black hair, was perfect. It was better than Jeon Ji Hyun's hair. And saying that is blasphemous. She had nice teeth too.

"I'm your fiancé." M's eyes widened
"Fiancé? Were you really...I don't remember..."
"Yes. You and me are..."
"You didn't tell me you had a fiancé before, Michii-kun." M turned around and saw Risa and the other girls looking at them.

A part of M tried to free himself from Yuka's grasp while another part of him wanted to hold her longer. Could it be she was the link to the past he was looking for all this time?

"Gaki-san?"
"She's a pretty girl, Michii-kun." Sayu said.
"I never thought you'd get lucky with girls. I was wrong about you." Reina said.
"Yeah. I never envisioned you as a ladies man, Michii-kun, but you two are a cute pair." Ai said.
"Hey, I thought your name was Mitsui?" Eri said.
"Who are these girls, Akito?" Yuka whispered as she slowly loosened her lock on M.
"They're..."
"Come on girls, let's get going. I don't think they'd like to be disturbed." Risa said as she walked passed them. The other girls followed her back inside.
"Gaki-san, wait!" M tried to run after them but Yuka grabbed his hand to stop him.
"Who is this Gaki-san, Akito?"
"She's...she's..."
"Don't tell me your dumping me for that bitch!"
"Don't call her that!"
"What? She looks like one anyway. Are those girls a bunch of enjokosai?"
"Don't talk about them like that!"
"Why? Have they slept with you? Are they really that special?"
"Stop it!"
"What's the matter, Akito? Wait, I know those girls. They're from Morning Musume right?"
"What if they are?"
"You used to hate them before."
"I didn't..."
"Yes you did. But you did buy a lot of their pictures. Maybe you used them as an alternative when we're not together..."
"Stop! You're confusing me!" M said. He closed his eyes but his mind still sees the things Yuka told him earlier, about his home, about his childhood, about them. He wanted to learn about his past and now there's someone who could actually tell him about it. But he had doubts...

"I knew it. I should have gone out with your brother. He was twice the man you are..."
M looked at Yuka. Then he started heading back to the stadium. He stood in front of the door and looked back at her and grinned.
"I almost believed everything you said. But you made a big mistake. I don't have a brother. And thanks for the hug. You have nice bre..."
He then received a message from S.
"We're in pursuit of some wild fans. We could need your help. I think there heading to where they get their supply of Graft."
"No problem. I want to see how you guys fight."
"Better hurry because we might not save some for you."
"Right."
Then he looked back at Yuka.
"Whoever you are, please don't cross my path again. I might use you as an alternative." he smiled then he went off.

Yuka smirked...
Then a mysterious man with a bag of chips approached her and placed one of his hands on her shoulder.
"That was quite convincing." he said.
"Of course. You believed me when I told you I was a virgin, didn't you?" Yuka replied as she caressed his hand.
"Right. Too bad it didn't work on him."
"But he believed some of the stuff I said!"
"That's not what I told you to do."
"You said I just had to seduce and confuse him!"
"Yeah. And you failed. Guess I don't need you anymore." the man said as he tapped the girl’s head, similar to the way Guardians do when they erase memories.

But he wasn't contented with just erasing her memories. He hit her in one the body's fatal spots. You know, the same part where those kung-fu masters hit their enemies and kill them with one blow. There was an episode of the animated Batman series that had this but enough of that. Now it looked like she died because of a heart failure. No scratches. No wounds. No more...

"You were really pretty, Yuka, pretty useless. Looks like I have to do it myself to get it done..."
« Last Edit: December 15, 2006, 04:36:18 PM by wordsworth »

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« Reply #89 on: December 15, 2006, 11:27:28 AM »
Loser87: That's not bad, not bad at all. man where do all of you get talent like that

Yippee first comment for another great chapter. I have never tried ChrNo's way of commenting but for some reason I feel the need to today :p

"Who's the Guardian assigned to Okada Yui?" asked M as he watched Yui catch the ball.
Yui :ON@_@:

"How about Kusumi Koharu? Who's her Guardian?"
Koharu too? Really M.... you have Gaki-san for god's sake :lol:

""You didn't tell me you had a fiancé before, Michii-kun." M turned around and saw Risa and the other girls looking at them.
*Gasp* Risa saw :ONfainted:

"I'm your fiancé." M's eyes widened
He's engaged?!??!!?

"Don't tell me your dumping me for that bitch."
*growls* Risa ain't no bitch :ONfrustrated:

He stood in front of the door and looked back at her and grinned.
Whew so it's not true. There's a conspiracy going on?

"You were really pretty, Yuka, pretty useless. Looks like I have to do it myself to get it done..."
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« Last Edit: December 15, 2006, 11:30:02 AM by lil_hamz »

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« Reply #90 on: December 15, 2006, 06:49:42 PM »
Whoa, this is cool, wordy :D

I wish I'd read this earlier.

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« Reply #91 on: December 15, 2006, 07:12:35 PM »
ooh~ it's getting even more interesting - looks like there's a plot against them.

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« Reply #92 on: December 16, 2006, 01:49:29 AM »
i love their funny conversation lol.

look like our guardian is looking for his identity back, eh? i hope he got lucky.

btw, this mysterious villain really pissing me off.

a nice developing chapter. Keep it flowing! :heart:

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« Reply #93 on: December 16, 2006, 05:21:50 AM »
You just have to hate that chip obsessed bad guy now.

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« Reply #94 on: December 18, 2006, 10:49:23 AM »
M finally arrived to where the three were. It was like the place where the last battle in Ayaya's Sukeban Deka movie took place. It was an old abandoned factory.

"Sorry I'm late guys." M apologized.
"Wank break?" K asked.
"Shut up. Only S does that."
"I beg your pardon? I don't take those kinds of breaks." S said. "I schedule them."
"What took you so long anyway?"
"A pretty girl held me back."
"Come on. Can't you make better excuses?"
"What? There was this girl telling me that she was my fiancé and stuff."
"And you believed her?"
"Of course not. Well, I almost but there were some details that gave her away. But she was a real hot girl."
"And that took you almost an hour to get here?"
"Nah. I got lost again."
"Shh. I can see them." D said as he pointed at a group of men under the influence of Graft looking at them from a higher platform.
"You said that you needed my help. There are only five of them." M complained.
"You're right. There's only five. Like five dozen." S said. He was right. When they looked around, they were surrounded. They had different appearances but it was certain that they were under graft.
"Oh sh*t! Well, at least I get to see your powers. Come on guys, show em to me!"

S raised his hand. A sphere or energy formed. Something materialized and dropped on his hand after a few seconds.
"What's that?" M asked him.
"It's called Mjolnir." S said as he gripped the hammer and tried to swing it, probably to familiarize himself with it's weight.
"Mjolnir..." M said as he searched for it in Wikipedia. "As in Thor's hammer? That's impossible!"
"Anything is possible."
"Can I hold it?"
"No. Only I can hold Mjolnir."
"Dang! So that thing makes you 'God of Thunder' right?"
"Mayb..."
"God of Thunder my ass! Kamei-san's thighs have more thunder than that!"
"If that weren't true, I would have smacked you with this hammer." S said as he removed his glasses.
"What about you K?"

K pressed something on his wrist. Then he was covered in light. When the light vanished, he was equipped with some kind of sleek armor, like the ones the girls in Bubblegum Crisis wear, the Knight Sabers, if I recall correctly. But his armor was for guys.
"What the fu..."
"Surprised? I can change even without saying 'henshin' or doing those hand movements."
"Where'd you get that?" M said as he rubbed K's metallic suit.
"Uhh, the lab?"
"You told me before that you have kung-fu moves."
"Yeah. I forgot to tell you about this. Sorry."
"That dyed-hair dude told me that we didn't need to be flashy. How come you two have those neat stuff?"
"Haha. And you believed him? The real reason is that it's expensive making these stuff. They almost went bankrupt because of us."
"So that also explains the low budget PVs..."
"And it's also the reason why they have to graduate some members next year..."
"Miuna's graduating because of you? You bastards! *sigh* There goes another cutie. And Gatas is gonna be shorthanded. Maybe you can try out for the team, S."
"Haha. No thanks." S replied. "They're already good at kicking balls there. If I join,I'd only be giving them new targets."

The wild fans moved closer and encircled them. They were ready to attack. But were they ready to defend themselves? No one from the Guardians and the wild fans dared to make the first move. Except...

"I'm going to start things off guys." D said as he sped off and rushed at a group of wild fans in front of them. The other wild fans behind them started to run towards the three.
"There goes Sonic the Hedgehog." said M as he charged his hands and started punching away. "I want some armor too! Or a Rider belt would be fine! Or even an ordinary motorcycle!!!"
S used Mjolnir to channel electricity and shock multiple targets. "You don't need those stuff, M."
"Yeah. It takes up a lot of energy." K said as he shot laser beams from his hands. Then he pulled out an energy whip from his side holster and hit a group of their enemies.
"Your just saying that to make me feel bette..." replied M who was ganged upon by six wild fans. He got hit a couple of times but then he discharged some his energy which sent the wild fans flying away. D caught them in the air and kicked them back to the ground.
"Show off!" M shouted at D.
"Sourgrape!" D replied.
"Quit it, you two." S said as he threw his hammer into another group of wild fans. The hammer returned to his hand after it hit its last target. K pressed a button and the energy whip turned into a beam saber then he slashed away.

The sheer number of the wild fans was not able to surpass the four Guardians. Imagine the scene in Kung-fu Hustle where the three kung-fu masters decimated the Axe Gang.A few minutes later, the scattered bodies of the fans were lying around the building. But they were not dead. Just unconscious.

"Great! Now we have to erase their memories one by one." M said as he started counting them.
"No need to." S said as he raised Mjolnir in the air for a few seconds. "Done."
"What the? How'd you do it?"
"Mjolnir can emit the same frequency we do when we tap their heads and erase their memories."
"That's really a nice toy. I want something like that."
K pressed something on his wrist again which removed his armor. Now he was wearing his Yankee clothes.
"Where'd it go K?" M asked.
"It went to an alternate dimension where Irie Saaya is an adult and the no picture, no autograph rule for idols doesn't exist."
"Really? There is such a place? I want to go there!" M said. "Finally, the dream of going out with Saaya can be fulfilled..."
"Haha. Actually, it didn't go anywhere. The Yankee clothes I wear is the armor itself. It just changes its appearance. It can be whatever clothes I like." K said as he demonstrated it. He snapped his fingers then his clothes changed to a highschooler's uniform. He snapped it again and it changed into a goth-themed outfit. He snapped again and it went back to Yankee clothes.
"You can change into HG's outfit too, right?"
"Of cour.. Wait, what if I can?"
"Nothing."
"Why do you look so glum, M?" S asked.
"I'm kinda jealous. H has those butterfly thingies he uses to spy on the Berryz girls when they're taking a bath, K has that armor which he can use to pose as a rich salary man to rip off some schoolgirls, you have Mjolnir which is kinda cool, and D has some Clow Cards and Moon Prism Power..."
"Hey...I don't have those!" D complained.
"Shut up! This is my emo-moment, can't you see?"
"Uhhh, you do have that scarf." K pointed.
"Oh yeah..."
"Too bad this wasn't the Graft factory." S said.
"Yeah. I thought that we finally got them." D said.
"But looks like it was a trap." K added.

Then they heard someone clapping. From the shadows, the four looked at the source. It was a tall, good looking man, even better looking than D. He looked a bit older than them. Maybe around Iida's age. He was holding a bag of chips.

"Bravo. You guys did great. Maybe I should have gotten more of these crazy wotas for you to beat up."
"It can't be..." S couldn't believe it.
"You're the one behind all of this?" K asked him.
"What if I am? Are you going to do anything about it?"
"Why?" D asked.
"I'm just doing what's right." the man answered.
"Using these people as pawns is wrong." M said.
"The new one has quite an attitude. I wonder how long Gaki-san can keep up with him."
"Gaki-san has nothing to do with this."
"Ooh, defensive eh. I'll tell you something about your beloved Gaki-san. She's nothing but an overreacting camwhore who has absolutely no talen..."

M leapt towards the man. His hands were fully charged with electricity. He aimed for the man's face. It was and inch away from it but the man caught his fist with one hand. He charged his own hand, which discharged M's. Then he broke M's hand and punched him in the face, which sent M crashing through the wall.

"M!!!" D said as he and K went to get him."
M was unconscious and blood was coming out of his mouth and nose. Blood also flowed from his forehead.
"Don't worry, I didn't kill him. It's your fault anyway. You didn't tell him about me. Tell that newbie that he should respect his senpai." the man said as he continued eating his chips.
"What happened to you?" S asked.
"Long story. Alright. Just think of me as the bad guy. And don't bother looking for Kago's Guardian."
"What about A?"
"Well, let's just say he's been liquidated."
"You killed him?"
"I didn't. A bunch of wotas did. But what's important is that he's dead."
"That's why those Friday pictures came out."
"Haha. No. He was alive back then but he was, how should I say it, incarcerated."
"Damn you!"
"I'm getting sleepy. See you around, kiddies." the man said as he threw the empty bag of chips at S's face. His sick laughter filled the place and started walking away.His laughter was so sick it was able to send chills to S's complex circuitry.

"I. Why did it have to be you..."
« Last Edit: December 19, 2006, 12:14:13 PM by wordsworth »

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« Reply #95 on: December 18, 2006, 11:36:31 AM »
o_o

Man, this is a great chapter!. I feel like I'm watching the X-Men movie at the theater. You really got the talent dude. As I always says, I really enjoy your humour style and I really absorbed into it!

Various hilarious reference to HP! fan facts (such as cheap PV and more) really funny. You can't get enough with it. lol. Kamei must be proud because her thigh is featured. XD

You even insert the line that every gaki-san hater use as excuse. I know you're not the one. But that really a nice excuse to lay that electro-powered-fist at the villain face. Damn you ebil, just die!

I think this is the most intense and packed with hot moves and actions you have write. Keep up entertaining us wordsworth-sama!

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« Reply #96 on: December 18, 2006, 05:32:07 PM »
oh my that was funny, the kamei reference, and the gatas oh that one got me.

 this is going great, I missed reading your updates.

   Keep up the great writing wordsworth

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« Reply #97 on: December 19, 2006, 02:36:03 AM »
Risa was running towards the building's clinic. She saw some familiar faces when she was nearing it. She didn't like the atmosphere and the look on their faces...

"I heard that something happened to Michii-kun. Is he alright?" Risa asked the three Guardians who were standing in front of the clinic's door.
"He's..." D said as he bowed his head down.
"You wouldn't want to see what's inside Niigaki-san." K added.
"Don't scare me like that guys."
"We're not scaring you."
"Let me in!" Risa forced herself inside and slammed the door open. Once inside, the stuff she was carrying fell down the same time as her tears when she saw something she was afraid of.
 
There was someone on the bed,covered with a white sheet. The person underneath wasn't moving. And there was something on top. A red scarf.

"Michii-kun?" Risa couldn't move from where she was standing. But she finally did. "Michii-kun? You're just asleep aren't you?" There was no answer.
She was now in front of it. She started to poke it. No reaction. Then she started to shake it. Still no reaction.
"MICHII-KUN!!!" Risa shouted as she shook the person under the sheets wildly.

Suddenly, M sat up.

"Why can't people get some decent sleep here, huh? And just when I was having this hot dream about...Oh. It's you Gaki-san."
"Michii-kun? You're alive." Risa said as she embraced him.
"Of course. Why?"
"Those three at the door scared me." Risa pointed at the three who were peeking then ran away when M saw them. "They said you were..."
"And you believed them?"
"I...really got scared. I thought that you were...dead."
"Me? Dead? I'm healthier than that nude, big headed guy who appears with you in those commercials."
Risa noticed that his head was heavily bandaged and so was his hand.
"What happened to you?"
"Well, I think it was an accident."
"You don't remember?"
"Yeah.Why are you here, Gaki-san?"
"Is it wrong if I wanted to pay you a visit?"
"Of course not. But what about your schedules?"
"Rehearsals and shootings are over."
"If you say so."

Risa picked up her things, grabbed a chair and sat next to M.

"I brought you some apples. Do you want me to peel some for you?"
"You would?"
"Of course." Risa said as she took an apple out of the bag she was carrying.
"Be careful. You might cut yourself."
"I know how to peel apples, Michii-kun." Risa answered as she started peeling one with a knife.
"I guess you know your fruits."
"Huh?"
"I was afraid that you'd call that a 'mango' or something."
"Haha. I'm going to tell that to Eririn."
"Haha."
"Here. Open your mouth, Michii-kun." Risa said as he picked up a slice.
"No need to do that, Gaki-san."
"I insist"
"Okay." M said as he opened his mouth. Risa put one of her hands under his jaw and then carefully put the slice inside.
"Looks like you've done this a couple of times before, Gaki-san." M said as he chewed on it.
"Yeah."
"You could be a good nurse someday. Or a mom."
"Haha. That's what he told me before."
"Who told you that?"
"A friend of mine when I was younger. He was my neighbor. We went to the same school together. But he would always get sick so I had to go to their house and help him out. But I haven't heard from him since I became part of Morning Musume."
"Where is he now?"
"I don't know. I tried to visit him one day but it seems that they moved already."
"Does he have a brother or sister?"
"Nope. He was the only child."
"I see. What was his name?"
"Masato."
"Masato huh. That's a nice name. It sounds familiar too..."

Suddenly, some of the things he was seeing in his mind when Yuka was talking to him flashed again. However, some parts of it were a bit clear this time. He could see the silhouette of the girl who was holding his hand as he went to school. The girl had pigtails...

"You know someone by that name?"
"I think that was my name..."
"Huh?"
"I mean yeah, maybe I knew someone by that name."
"You're being silly again."
"Gaki-san, that girl the other day..."
"Your fiancé?"
"She mistook me for another person. I don't know her."
"Okay. That's great."
"You weren't jealous, were you?"
"Why should I?"
"Because she had a hot body?"
"But she looked rather a bit old. I'd rather have my youth than look like her. And her boobs looked fake."
"Haha. They weren't. Believe me."
"Haha. Yeah right. But I have to admit, she was really pretty."
"But in my eyes, you look a lot better than anyone else, Gaki-san."
"Then you must be blind or something."
"Yeah. I must be blind. You had pigtails before right?"
"Why?"
"I'm sure they'd still look good on you today." M said as brushed away her hair that covered her eyes.
"I don't know about that…"
"This time, you have to believe me…"

***
In the office of the dyed hair man...

"So it's confirmed that he is behind all this."
"Yes."
"And A is already gone."
"That's what S told us."
"We have to take extra precautions then."
"Affirmative."
"Tell the boys at the lab to prepare upgrades."
"Yes."
"And please provide extra security for Ayaya."
"Why is that sir?"
"You know what they say. Some people don't forgive. Some never forget. And some come back for their firsts..."
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« Reply #98 on: December 19, 2006, 02:40:50 AM »
Guess that wraps up Detonator M...









The first half, that is. The next half will answer some of the questions like why that chip-nibbling Guardian became a renegade and what his master plan is, the origin of Graft, who will M bump into the vending machine area next, will M get even with Miki, will M find out more about his past, etc.

Thanks again for reading guys!!! :)
« Last Edit: December 19, 2006, 02:46:41 AM by wordsworth »

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« Reply #99 on: December 19, 2006, 03:06:59 AM »
dammit, you throw two deadly jokes! lol. I really want to say, wtf! M died? He only broke his hand last time.

And the announcement make me wanna kill you!!! at first. lol.

So, this is the first part. Pheww.. Thank you for writing it!! Man, I love all of them.

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