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« Reply #200 on: October 13, 2006, 04:30:45 PM »
Hey there, everyone has down days so don't worry about it ok? We love reading your stories so you shouldn't be sad. Quoting Rika, "BE HAPPY!!!" And I'll throw in a bonus .... I'll loan you Mr Pookie :P  He and I will both be ya friends :)

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« Reply #201 on: October 13, 2006, 04:35:34 PM »
Massages, encouragment, and a stuffed bear? I should go more insane than usual more often. It'll probably be a day or so until the next chapter is ready, so, you know. Thanks guys.

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« Reply #202 on: October 13, 2006, 04:56:49 PM »
I'm abit late on the action but..
 
It took me a while to read everything, but I love how the relationships developed between the 4th gen. Especially the between Aibon and Nono. Too cute! XD
 
I also loved the POV chapters in the Christmas chapters!!
 
Good work and keep it up! Looking forward to more!

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« Reply #203 on: October 18, 2006, 07:55:18 PM »
yo....rndmnwierd.....just finished reading ALL the chapters.....just dropped in to say "ganbatte"....keep up the gud work my fellow comrade..

p/s: i'm one of those ppl who like to read but rarely post comments, just didn't realize that feedback was so important. ur not selfish, it's ur right as the author afterall. it's ppl like me that should apologise.....so, sunimasen    (_ _)

spreading the usa-chan love....i mean darkness(thanks to JFC)

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« Reply #204 on: October 21, 2006, 06:30:44 AM »
Wait....so your not feeling insane anymore?

Does this mean I cant fuck you side ways in a cornfield?

Read the complete Doki Doki!!

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« Reply #205 on: October 21, 2006, 07:28:58 AM »
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Wait....so your not feeling insane anymore?

Does this mean I cant fuck you side ways in a cornfield?


Insanity is my third minus one name!

And.....no you can... <_< >_> <_<

I swear I'm working on the next chapter, but everythings being overhauled and hopefully I'll be back in my own house soon... With working internet...

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« Reply #206 on: October 21, 2006, 10:01:17 AM »
No need to rush, it's always the quality that counts :)  Of course, I'm sure the next chapter will be worth the wait ^^

Hope you're back in your own house soon, with working internet, then :)

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« Reply #207 on: October 22, 2006, 07:12:05 PM »
I'm back! An here's the first chapter of 2001!



“Happy New Year!!” Nono cried, jumping into the room. Everyone stared at her.

“Tsuji, stop being dumb.” Yaguchi threw a shoe at the girl, narrowly missing her head. Hitomi cringed, knowing that Nono was not going to make it out of the room unscathed.

“Didn’t we already have the new year’s party?” Kaori pointed out, not looking anywhere but at the reflection of her brushing her own hair blankly. Yaguchi reached across her to grab a compact, which she chucked at Nono again. The compact flew by Nono’s ear, making her hair flutter, and clattered against the wall behind her.

Starting to feel slightly alarmed, Yossui stood, intending to shoo the girl out of the room, “Why don’t you go play with Aibon?”

“Aibon’s not here.” Nono sulked. Inside the room, about three relieved cheers went up, while Yaguchi dropped her rolled up magazine.

“Not here? Where is she?” Yossui directed Nono out the door and they started walking down the hall.

“She took a week off to go back to Nara. After all, she didn’t get to see her father this- last year.”  Though she spoke lightly, Nono seemed really down.

“You’re lonely.” Yossui realized, pausing mid step, “Aibon’s the only one your age around here.” A wave of sympathy washed over her, poor Nono.

Nono just nodded, reaching up to take Yossui’s hand. What if it was Rika? Would I feel the same? Yossui patted the girl on the head, “Hey, you can hang with me and Rika until she gets back.”

“Really?” Nono’s eyes lit up and Yossui just knew she would regret saying that, but now what else could she do?

“Sure, it’s no problem.” Nono threw her arms around Yossui’s waist. Aww, that was so cute. Rika was still gonna kill her.

“Thanks Yocchan, I promise to be quiet. I just don’t want to be alone.” Nono’s tiny voice was muffled in Yossui’s sweater.

Rika rounded the corner about then and took in the scene in front of her. “Aww, what’s wrong?” She walked over and patted Nono on the head. Yossui quietly explained the situation while steering them all towards her and Rika’s dressing room.

“So I kinda said that we would keep her company.” Yossui rubbed the back of her head, expecting the worst.

“I’m glad you did.” At Yossui’s confused look, Rika went on, “You know I adore Nono, I don’t mind spending large amounts of time with her. Besides, she could use the company.” Rika pointed over to where Nono was quietly playing with a hair brush and some lipstick. She looked lost.

“Yeah, you’re right, but we shouldn’t feel sorry for her. Let’s just play with her.” Yossui walked closer to the young girl, “What are you doing?”

“I’m playing.”

“Playing what?” Yossui couldn’t help grinding her teeth at Nono’s short answer. Behind her, Rika giggled.

“Playing ‘Vanity Fair.’ See, Rika-chan’s hair brush doesn’t know that her lipstick is cheating on him with the compact. And the compact’s kids, the two smallest make-up brushes, don’t like the lipstick at all and they want to find the hair brush and tell him everything.” Yossui was fairly boggled.

“Um, how did you come up with that?” Rika was cracking up somewhere in the background.

Nono looked at Yossui like she was stupid, “TV.”

“…Stop watching soaps…”

“No.”

“Whatever. Have fun.” Yossui joined the still laughing Rika at the low table, “She’ll be fine.”

She didn’t notice Mr. Hair Brush slowly choking Mrs. Lipstick to death behind her.

---That's so messed up....And random.

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« Reply #208 on: October 22, 2006, 10:05:06 PM »
^ Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww....

JPH!P :heart:'s kuro808, Fushigidane, ChrNo, Jab & marimari. Always.

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« Reply #209 on: October 23, 2006, 04:52:34 AM »
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Nono looked at Yossui like she was stupid, “TV.”

“…Stop watching soaps…”

“No.”

“Whatever. Have fun.” Yossui joined the still laughing Rika at the low table, “She’ll be fine.”

She didn’t notice Mr. Hair Brush slowly choking Mrs. Lipstick to death behind her.


That was freakin awesome. I laughed so hard I couldn't stop.

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« Reply #210 on: October 23, 2006, 06:48:02 AM »
Nono playing like that is just too cute:heart:  And funnyXD

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« Reply #211 on: October 27, 2006, 04:02:09 AM »
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“Playing ‘Vanity Fair.’ See, Rika-chan’s hair brush doesn’t know that her lipstick is cheating on him with the compact. And the compact’s kids, the two smallest make-up brushes, don’t like the lipstick at all and they want to find the hair brush and tell him everything.” Yossui was fairly boggled.


So if Aibon was here, they'd be playing this too? XD And I always had the impression that a hair brush would be a girl, but since Ms. Lipstick already got that covered... :P so the compact's kids were the ones he had with the lipstick? But then she gave birth to make-up BRUSHES... THEY'RE REALLY MR. HAIR BRUSH'S KIDS, AREN'T THEY!?

This chapter was really random though,  I could've NEVER guessed this was coming. Great job :D

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« Reply #212 on: October 27, 2006, 07:59:39 PM »
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So if Aibon was here, they'd be playing this too? XD And I always had the impression that a hair brush would be a girl, but since Ms. Lipstick already got that covered... :P so the compact's kids were the ones he had with the lipstick? But then she gave birth to make-up BRUSHES... THEY'RE REALLY MR. HAIR BRUSH'S KIDS, AREN'T THEY!?

This chapter was really random though,  I could've NEVER guessed this was coming. Great job :D


No, see, the compact had two kids by a big make-up brush who died five years ago. The compact then started dating the annoying Ms. Lipstick, who is like the evil stepmother to his kids. His kids found out that Ms. Lipstick was already married and decided to tell Mr. Hairbrush and let him deal with her. And the reason Mr. Hairbrush is a guy is because it's a stately, expensive brush...

Honestly, I think if Nono stated playing like that around Aibon, she would be teased mercilessly for the rest of her life.

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« Reply #213 on: October 31, 2006, 01:49:08 AM »
Yay, 13 people like my story! It says 14 but I voted on my own poll, lol. Guess what I chose?



Nono sighed, tossing a broken candle behind her. That was the third one today; she had to find a new way to amuse herself. Aibon had only been gone four days and she just felt so down. She really wished that her girlfriend would hurry home.

‘She is home.’ Nono thought miserably. She didn’t understand why she felt so awful, though. She’d lived twelve years without that girl, why couldn’t she go seven days? It was kinda like what Nono thought drugs might be like.

Yossui and Rika had been nice enough to let her play with them, but they needed to be alone together too, so Nono had gone to her and Aibon’s dressing room and started using the table like a drum. Hence the broken candles.

Now officially out of things to do, Nono just sat at the vanity, staring blankly at her reflection. Her eyes began to blur, but she didn’t bother to blink, so focused was she on her boredom. Nono didn’t even notice when the door opened and a certain someone entered the room quietly.

Nono did, however, notice when small hands covered her eyes and a familiar voice whispered against her ear, “Guess who?”

“Aibon!” In one smooth motion, Nono turned her chair, leapt out of it, and tackled Aibon to the table top behind her. “What are you doing here? You’re not supposed to be back for three more days!”

Struggling to regain her breath, Aibon just patted Nono on the head, “Well, I missed you, so I decided to come back early. I see that you felt the same.”

Nono nodded, face buried in Aibon’s shoulder and tear welling up in her eyes. She was so happy that she just wanted to cry, so she did.

“Aww, don’t do that, you’ll get me started.” But it was too late for Aibon and they both just cried together happily for a while. When the tears subsided, the giggles started, “You need to relax more.”

“Relax? I was freaking out.” The two shared a quick kiss, now in much higher spirits.

“Ah.” Aibon sighed, “It’s good to be home. Home is where the heart is, you know, and mine is always with you.”

The sweet words almost sent Nono into tears again, but instead, she kissed Aibon again. It was slow this time, gentle and deep, their tongues caressing each other. When it was over, both girls were blushing and panting for breath.

“Welcome home.”

---I originally couln't think of something for Nono to break so I asked my friend for an object. The first thing he said was broadsword (W.O.W. freak) XD The images that brought to my mind had me rolling for days afterward.

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« Reply #214 on: November 01, 2006, 05:53:28 AM »
Today I took da bus down to da mahket, and I set down next to dis guy and I looked over and I was setting next ta JESUS! And I said 'Hey Midder JESUS! let me braid dat dere hair ob youse, cuz I's really good at braiding dat dere hair.' And JESUS! said 'Sho my child, does you know da way ta da liquor store?' And I said, 'Cose I do Midder JESUS! Just get off at dat dere next stop dere.' And den he told me da meaning ob da life we be libbin, but I dun gone an forgotted it.


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« Reply #215 on: November 01, 2006, 06:16:43 PM »
Hmmmmmmmmm, no offense dude, but are you sure it wasn't you the one who went to the liquor store?

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« Reply #216 on: November 01, 2006, 06:30:11 PM »
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Hmmmmmmmmm, no offense dude, but are you sure it wasn't you the one who went to the liquor store?

Lol, I can't remember!!

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« Reply #217 on: November 02, 2006, 08:28:20 AM »
Oops, a little late again.. :evil:  wow, didn't expect a complicated story behind the hairbrush, lipstick, and the compact :o

Yay, Aibon is back, Vanity Fair (I remembered the name!?) won't have to continue anymore :D

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“Ah.” Aibon sighed, “It’s good to be home. Home is where the heart is, you know, and mine is always with you.”


^ Cute :heart: :heart: It's amazing that someone her age can think of something like this though, makes it cuter :heart:

And yeah, you were probably the one that went to the liquor store instead :doh:

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« Reply #218 on: November 03, 2006, 12:39:02 AM »
Get dem applums at da WAAAA MAAAA!

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« Reply #219 on: November 03, 2006, 07:38:53 AM »
Why I didn't comment this earlier...?

Yay! Aibon is back! Those two are too cute together XD

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