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Re: BEGINNER-game start. AtsuMina n other pairings [UPDATED-game 1]
« Reply #20 on: March 24, 2013, 02:23:32 PM »
Atsuko needs to play a game...?

What kind of game is it... like in 'GANTZ' comic....?!

Isn't it the game like in "Beginner" MV?
Ehh........ you're smart.
Yes, I got the whole idea from the "Beginner" MV.
But I change a little, and....

I made into a story, by adding my ideas while watching that mv.
spoilers;*Acchan's hands will bleed.*

 :D smart smart smart. I like you~

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Re: BEGINNER-game start. AtsuMina n other pairings [UPDATED-game 1]
« Reply #21 on: March 24, 2013, 02:37:52 PM »
This is interesting. There a lot of questions.
Why did Takamina die? Who murdered her?
Why and how did Acchan die?
Who is the white haired girl, who looks like Takamina. Is it Takamina or someone who looks like her?
And the most important question is.... What kind of a game Atsuko has to play. And will she win?
Please update soon!!

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Re: BEGINNER-game start. AtsuMina n other pairings [UPDATED-game 1]
« Reply #22 on: March 24, 2013, 02:44:30 PM »
Thanks for the update!!!! Great first chapter :D

Sad events for both Atsuko and Minami :( Curious about this game now :O Seems interesting. Wondering if there can be more than one winner in this "game" cause if Minami does end up in the game than that'd mean only one of them can live if one were to win.

Looking forward to what happens next! :D

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Re: BEGINNER-game start. AtsuMina n other pairings [UPDATED-game 1]
« Reply #23 on: March 24, 2013, 08:29:50 PM »
Aww what kind of game? sounds interesing

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Re: BEGINNER-game start. AtsuMina n other pairings [UPDATED-game 1]
« Reply #24 on: March 25, 2013, 04:08:09 AM »
Why would you kiss your best friend XD?

Interesting. I wonder what kind of game it will be.

Somehow when I read the part about that white hair girl who looks like Minami I think of this


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Re: BEGINNER-game start. AtsuMina n other pairings [UPDATED-game 1]
« Reply #25 on: March 25, 2013, 05:25:04 AM »
Why would you kiss your best friend XD?

Interesting. I wonder what kind of game it will be.

Somehow when I read the part about that white hair girl who looks like Minami I think of this


Uwah................ Takamina is so kakkoi~
How did you find this photo anyway? I create the character randomly and ...wow....
there really have that photo.

so kakkoi!! takamina is so damn cool~ :twothumbs :twothumbs :heart: :heart:

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Re: BEGINNER-game start. AtsuMina n other pairings [UPDATED-game 1]
« Reply #26 on: March 25, 2013, 05:44:33 AM »
It's photos from No3b's first album :P, except that her eyes aren't orange like you described.

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Re: BEGINNER-game start. AtsuMina n other pairings [UPDATED-game 1]
« Reply #27 on: March 25, 2013, 06:32:14 AM »
It's photos from No3b's first album :P, except that her eyes aren't orange like you described.
Photoshop will do the trick  XD

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Re: BEGINNER-game start. AtsuMina n other pairings [UPDATED-game 1]
« Reply #28 on: March 25, 2013, 07:19:00 AM »
But somehow I think the blue eyes are better matched with that white outfit XD

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Re: BEGINNER-game start. AtsuMina n other pairings [UPDATED-game 1]
« Reply #29 on: March 25, 2013, 07:23:05 AM »
But somehow I think the blue eyes are better matched with that white outfit XD
you'll see  :D :twothumbs

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Re: BEGINNER-game start. AtsuMina n other pairings [UPDATED-game 1]
« Reply #30 on: March 25, 2013, 07:27:15 AM »
I'll be waiting :inlove:

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Re: BEGINNER-game start. AtsuMina n other pairings [UPDATED-game 1]
« Reply #31 on: March 25, 2013, 07:51:12 AM »
interesting.

and i really love the goodbye kiss scene.

omg takamina marry me!!

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Re: BEGINNER-game start. AtsuMina n other pairings [UPDATED-game 1]
« Reply #32 on: March 25, 2013, 08:02:22 AM »
Yesh. I updated it. Game 2
Hope you'll enjoy it.
Comments critics are welcome.
Oh, BTW, thanks for Tanchan for the awesome picture for Ryuu (That white silhouette girl.)  :panic: :panic: :thumbup :deco:



BEGINNER

Game 2-The Rules

Ryuu was standing in front of Atsuko, wearing a big cross with chains on her neck. She wore a white frizzy piece, which match the background.

“I’m Ryuu.” The words were ringing through her ear, as she was kissing the cold floor. Everything was engulfed by the dark, after Ryuu, the white silhouette, bang the ground, forming a deep chasm.

“…The guider of the game, BEGINNER.”

Atsuko was still in her confused state, letting out a low groan because of her head had hit the floor harshly, leaving pain on her mind.

Ryuu stood there, muttering some words. A big screen popped out with a flash video like a cinema.

Atsuko looked up and saw there were some girls sitting there, wearing a collar that connected a small tube to nowhere. Orbs shined as she saw one girl sitting at the throne, her collar was connected with bunch of tubes, expressionless.

Every girl in the screen had no expression, like they had lost their soul.

“Takamina…” The girl that caught Atsuko’s eyes stared at the camera. Her orbs were sky blue, but the ace could recognize her lover everywhere, so that girl was definitely her.

The video focused another angle. This time, the ace gasped in horror. The black hair, blue eyes, those delicate fingers touching the game controller…

…It was her.

“What is the meaning of this, Ryuu? Why am I there but I am here?”

“…You’re confusing me, human.” Said Ryuu with a menacing tone.

“B-but…. I’m here but I could see myself there,” Atsuko pointed at the video, emphatic her words. “What is meaning of this!”

“You’re taking part in the game, and that was one of the rules.” Replied Ryuu with an enigmatic smile.

“Rules…?”

“Oh yes. Your body is there but your soul is here. That’s why you saw yourself on the screen.”

“But I have a body here…” defended Atsuko.

“That’s your temporally body, your real body is there. So, any injuries or wounds that you experience here are not going to effect on that body. That means even you got hurt you would not feel the pain.”

“Really? Nothing at all?” Asked the ace with a suspicious tone.

“Nah… well, a little maybe…”

“…”

“Talking about the collar…” The white silhouette quickly changed the subject, preventing her from asking more of the soul and body question. “Do you see that there was a tube connected to the collar?”

She nodded.

“That will be the qualification of you in the game. Once you are killed, the tube will automatic disconnect. And this means that you are not being able to take place in the game.”

“What if I lose?”

“You’ll die, officially.”

“So I’m half dead?”

“Yes, you have the chance of 50-50 to either lose or win the game.”

“So If I win the game, I get to be reborn and live again?”

“Correct.”

“…”

“But is not easy as you think. You have to fight with other players, as well as enemies.”

“What’ kind of enemies?”

“The one who create this game, of course.”

The screen vanished in the thin air, and everything went blank again. They were back in the same place, only to see that there were some weapons on the floor.

“Choose one, and be ready for the game. The others are waiting for you, last player.” Carefully, she took a box filled with bullets and wore it on her hand. Her clothes immediately change as she touched. The collar appeared on her neck.

“If this collar was destroyed, you’re disqualified, get it?”

Atsuko inhaled deeply, and opened her blue orbs slowly. There was a path, towards a big metallic gate, writing “BEGINNER”.

“I’m ready.” The ace pushed the gate, ready to fight off anything that stood in her way.


xxxxx

On the other part of this void space, a girl with brown hair was staring at Ryuu.

“What’s the meaning of this, Ryuu?” said Yuko with a menacing tone.

“As I said, you’re half dead.”

Yuko dashed forward and pulled down the cress of Ryuu. But, when she almost touched it, the white silhouette disappeared.

The squirrel was furious, she turned around franticly and eyes focusing searching on that midget. Suddenly, the midget appeared at her back, glaring hungrily at her, making Yuko shivered.

“Don’t. Don’t ever touch this cress, or you’ll be in hell in rest of your life.” Anger blazed in Ryuu’s heart, but quickly subsided as she saw Yuko was huddled on the floor.

“I’m sorry…” A soft mutter came out from Yuko’s mouth.

“Nah, I was the one who need to say sorry. I didn’t mean to frighten you.” Ryuu let Yuko buried in her embrace, comforting her.

The silence was ripped by a loud deafening alarm, signaling the game has to start soon. Yuko gathered herself, preceded to the metallic gate. Lips twitched into a smirk, she went through the gate without hesitation.

“Wait for me, nyan-nyan.”


xxxxx

A girl was sitting on a throne, playing with some puppets on her hand. Ryuu came in, greeted the ponytailed girl with manner, and gave the information of each player. She nodded softly, still playing with the puppets, especially the black hair puppet, was her most favorites.

“Yes, each player is ready to proceed.”

“Good. Then, shall we precede the game?” The girl in the throne chuckled lightly. The white silhouette bowed, vanished out from her sight.

She kept on twirling the puppet in her hand, gently kissed it and stared on it. She smiled. A wry smile formed across the ponytailed girl’s face.

“Sa, Acchan, what will you do? Could you win the game?”

A light chuckled.



Ehehe~ the game will start in next chapter, so....
be ready~~
Oh, and the picture that Tanchan found, I photoshoped a bit.
This is Ryuu(Who looks like Takamina but it's not...)
Btw, should I update the next chapter first or side story? :D  :yossi:

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Re: BEGINNER-game start. AtsuMina n other pairings [UPDATED-game 2][25/3]
« Reply #33 on: March 25, 2013, 08:46:30 AM »
It's very interesting please update soon :)

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« Reply #34 on: March 25, 2013, 10:01:36 AM »
I love youuuuuuuuuuu ( not in that way XD) as you update so fast. So Takamina from being Acchan's best friend now has become her lover XD!

I Love beginner, the roles assigned are like how they are in the PV. Many fans have discussed Takamina's roles in the PV and most have come to the conclusion that she's the mastermind behind everything seeing how every one is connected to her. I like how you incorporate that into your story. So Takamina was killed/committed suicide and now she's here controlling the game? But why? Can't she just come back to life again? Or does that have to do with Acchan winning the game or was this all a big plan from the start created by Takamina? So many questions here. And Yuko's there to save Haruna also? The white silhouette seems like a representative form of Takamina and judging from his/her manner, Takamina is the most authoritative here.

But at the end of Beginner it's like Takayuu XD so I wonder how you would deal with that scene?
I don't mind which one you update as long as there's Atsumina :inlove:

P.S.: woa she looks fierce with that orange orbs but somehow I like the blue orbs better because it makes her look cold and mysterious. Plus the players all have blue orbs so :nervous. ACtually there's 1 or 2 more photos of her in that outfit but for some reason I can't find it in my laptop. I'm sure I saved it :banghead:
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« Reply #35 on: March 25, 2013, 10:31:15 AM »
YAY !!

NEW UPDATEEEEE !
Thanks for the update !  :farofflook:
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« Reply #36 on: March 25, 2013, 10:39:03 AM »
Well, Ryuu was actually part of Takamina-( You'll know why when read the side story)
How and Why Takamina died is also included in the side story(which I finish it first before game 2 xD)

Ryuu suppose to be fierce, she's the one who control the enemies( in the beginner pv, those 'stuff' that kept attacking them, I called it 'enemies'.... :sweatdrop:)

Please wait patiently for next update. (maybe the chapter will be longer.)

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« Reply #37 on: March 25, 2013, 01:14:26 PM »
HOLY CRAP!!!!!!!! THAT PICTURE!!!!!!!!!! :shocked

Acchan has started. So has Yuko.

And, she's fighting for Haruna... :deco:

Takamina is Ryuu's servant. And she's controlling everyone with puppets. :shocked:

Let's hope Atsuko will snap her out of it before she hurts her. :cry:

Let's see if she can save her...

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« Reply #38 on: March 25, 2013, 03:23:51 PM »
HOLY CRAP!!!!!!!! THAT PICTURE!!!!!!!!!! :shocked

Acchan has started. So has Yuko.

And, she's fighting for Haruna... :deco:

Takamina is Ryuu's servant. And she's controlling everyone with puppets. :shocked:

Let's hope Atsuko will snap her out of it before she hurts her. :cry:

Let's see if she can save her...

This is the ULTIMATE action/mystery. Can't wait for an update. :twothumbs

Actually, you got Ryuu n Takamina role the other way around. *Spoilers*
tehehe....more characters will come out in the next chapter~
otanoshimini~~ :deco: :deco: :deco:

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« Reply #39 on: March 25, 2013, 05:05:36 PM »
Great update! I love the beginner concept. Nice to see someone's interpretation of it :) like some mentioned, fans speculated Minami was in control, & others said along the lines of it reflecting her role in akb where she is the leader who leads everyone & must stay behind/walk a solitary path, that's why she was last to b awoken & needed help.

Well I loved everything about the beginner pv & wish they'd explain it more but I guess it's more fun for each fan to have their own ideas.

Once against great fic! Can't wait to find out what'll happen to everyone & how things play out!

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